Hero Critique Thread (Because it's about damn time for this too!):
- Name: Matthew Streika
- Age: 16, 17-18 in later books.
- Personality: Matthew is definitely one of the kindest and most forgiving guys you could know. If he sees that you're in any kind of pain, he sympathizes, and offers help. He's all smiles, all the time...well, when not on the job. He is, despite his appearance, a big nerd, and a fan of many visual novels, anima / manga and TV Shows. To a degree, this also lets him get a bit of Genre Savvy in, though his accuracy could do with some work. He prefers acting dull and not really expressing his intelligence, because to him, being dumb might make him a bit more reachable. Inside, though, he's a Guile Hero, through and through. He is a determined and resourceful individual who doesn't really know the meaning of "give up". This, though, can manifest in very unhealthy ways. He really wants his dad's approval, and to become the man that dad could be proud of. He's not exactly knowledgeable in terms of romance, which is funny, given his luck with the female gender. He wants to protect those that he cares for, and those that he knows care for him, ultimately. And you had best make sure to Beware the Nice Ones, because the minute you hurt Matthew's friends or make light of your own, he'll unleash a world of hurt on you. But he will try his best not to kill unless its absolutely, one hundred percent necessary.
- Abilities: Matthew can craft and create swords, making them quickly and with any sort of special built in functionality, anything from a rune-carved sword with magic abilities, to creating a manifestation of a sword of legend. Any kind of sword will do. He has received training in his younger years, some he remembers, some he doesn't. But with this, he can effectively wield anything in his arsenal at a very skilled level. Another thing that makes Matthew dangerous is his ability to use Mana. While most Mages are stuck using their Internal Mana supplies, Matthew has the Lance of Longinus implanted in him, which results in him being able to channel External Mana, which most other Magic Users cannot use. It also raises his attributes such as speed, toughness, reflexes and strength above the level of normal humans. Using Mana, he can amplify these attributes further.
- Mage Killer Matthew: His Superpowered Evil Side, this is a manifestation of his suppressed memories of training as a Mage Killer. In this mode, he is no nonsense, and is a bit more free about the whole "murder" thing. He is also trained to kill Magic Users, as his title says. And boy is he ruthless about this. He has a better handle on his Magic than normal Matthew does, being able to array floating swords to block attacks or swirl them around him to deflect even a rain of bullets, and summon better weapons than Matthew.
- Weaknesses: Matthew is a deconstruction of Chronic Hero Syndrome, being often worn out and wounded due to always saving someone. In combat, he is one of the very few Magic Users unable to cast any spell, beyond his ability to make sharp things. He also seems to have a much more difficult time about piercing attacks, because they interrupt his healing ability.
- Goals: Matthew seems to lack a goal beyond simply fighting everyone that shows up with bad intentions, though he quickly manages to make one for himself, outside what was decided for him, and what personality he was basically forced to put together. This being that he wants to be the hero that he, Matthew, can be proud of, and save innocents from people in the Magic World who would victimize them. And he wants to prove his father wrong, that his ideals are applicable.
- Motivation: First and foremost, it was his father that pushed him into heroism, mainly to groom him for Phantom Claw, eventually. But due to his absence, Matthew saw how bad everyone's lives really were, and he decided to save Shuuji, Katherine, and numerous others. He eventually motivated himself by deciding to prove Kyrio wrong, that he really can save a large amount of people without sacrifices, without victims.
- Role in the story: Main Protagonist
- Backstory: Matthew has a truly troubled backstory. He was actually adopted by Kyrio, and had his fake memories added in to protect him, ultimately, from his old father's life following him out to Sanfield, which was chosen due to how out of the way it was. His true father is repentant Nazi Dolph Gradich, though he doesn't know this. Kyrio then trained him to eventually take him in as a Phantom Claw Trainee, in order to change the world. However, when Kyrio "died", Matthew was cut loose before the training got to more critical stages. However, the day prior to his father "dying", Matthew was implanted with the Lance of Longinus, to protect it, and have it protect Matthew, and to try to create a powerful individual Kyrio had hoped to work with at one point to "change the world". He trained basically nonstop in martial arts, to fulfill his father's "wishes" or so he thought. He often trained to the brink of exhaustion, not seeming to care about his own body's limitations. It was during the backstory that he met Katherine Daille, Shane McCalston, and others involved in the main plot.
- Relevant Tropes:
- Bad Ass: indeed. He is one of the toughest fighters there, takes an absurd amount of punishment, and keeps on fighting. He took on twenty five zombies at once at one time. Those things didn't stand a chance.
- Berserk Button: Treating life lightly, making light of your friends, or show hatred for someone based on a sweeping generalization or negative "ism".
- Beware the Nice Ones: Matthew is amongst the nicest guys in the book, but hoo boy...set him off at your own risk.
- Bi Shonen: Oh yes. Most people comment on Matthew having a pretty, almost androgynous face. The rest of him isn't so androgynous.
- Emotional Bruiser: He does have some Hot-Blooded tendencies, and gets angry at people who treat life lightly, but he's also very pure hearted, sensitive, and empathic.
- First-Person Smartass: Speaking, he is always very polite and even somewhat reserved. First person? He stopped treating the Heavenly Blades like serious enemies after the second encounter. As he put it, I suppose I should be glad we're not in more serious trouble. All we're dealing with are offensive gay stereotypes that seemed to have crawled out of Jack Chick's tasteless propaganda, or A progressively worsening infestation of monsters that breed at an explosive rate...never knew the Duggars were in town.
- Hair of Gold
- Heterosexual Life-Partners: With Shuuji. Though not so heterosexual on Shuuji's end.
- Mr. Fanservice: Most women in series agree. Even his married teacher wants to jump his bones. Funny thing about this is, he's very sexually immature and awkward in romantic situations.
- Stepford Smiler: Shuuji hangs a lampshade on it for us, "Meet Matthew, the Teen from Stepford."
edited 4th Nov '12 8:16:10 PM by NickTheSwing
Name: Heavy Metal species: robot a.k.a. Thamee Age: 30 - 60 depending where you are in the story line Personality: defiant, supportive, vicious and ruthless, loving, Abilities: jet pack, super strength, grappling hooks (Hurts when they go under the jaw), carries around a plasma gun, and an assault rifle Weaknesses: anything that can tear up steel Goals: Survive, kill slasher 2, collect as many survivors with minimum casualties Motivation: Might die if he doesn't help, has to save his friends and family from death Role in the story: Big guy, one of 8 man band Backstory: Found as a basic android that fought for the communist that was left to rot. He was recovered and given a human personality with six other communist androids. He journeyed the universe with his generous benefactor. Then war broke out in the universe and he found himself running through zombie infested cities and other areas looking for human or alien survivors. Relevant Tropes: robot buddy, big guy, badass automaton, eating machine (drinks oil), improbable aiming skills, heroic sacrifice, true companions
edited 4th Nov '12 8:19:47 PM by NickTheSwing
- Ace Pilot: One of the best in this world.
- Adventurer Outfit: Dresses like a WWI pilot◊.
- Aristocrats Are Evil: Fully Adverted.
- Badass Grandpa
- Badass Mustache: A Nieztche-esque one.
- Berserk Button: Harming his daughter will bring a world of pain on your ass.
- Bunny Years Lawyer: He's a tea-drinking, joke-cracking over-the-top british man who mostly makes no sense at all. He's also the most competent character in the story.
- The Captain
- Catchphrase: "Mongrel(s)!" is his multi-use offense. He uses as both "Damn!" and "You Idiot!" ("You Mongrel!"). Meant as a slang for idiot, not a racial slur, in case anyone is wondering.
- The Determinator
- The Dreaded
- Gentleman and a Scholar
- Love Makes You Dumb: Not dumb per see, it's more that when he loses his cool he tends to do rash things.
- Meaningful Name: Of an unusual sort: "Tremble" is what he triggers on his foes whe he appears in the battlefield.
- Nice Guy
- Overprotective Dad: To very ridiculous level [like challenging everyone who looks funny at his daughter to a sword duel].
- Papa Wolf
- Quintessential British Gentleman
- Red Baron: "The Sky Terror".
- Riches to Rags: In his backstory.
- Stiff Upper Lip: Very much so. This tends to crumble when his daughter is in danger, however.
- Terror Hero: Type Five.
- Throwing Down the Gauntlet: Often [see Overprotective Dad]. And almost always refused [people are either too afraid of him or don't want to beat an old man].
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edited 11th Nov '12 2:14:38 AM by Minister
Name: Stella Blaze Age: 200+. Physically, she looks like someone in her twenties Personality: Brash, sardonic, sarcastic, incredibly tomboyish and somewhat eccentric. Has a vengeful side. Loves a good fight. Has a fondness for music (mostly Rock and Metal, but "anything that sounds good" works for her too), comics, and video games (prefer's more arcadey games due to her constant traveling). While far from heroic, Stella will help others whenever she can, and is very protective of the people she cares about. She also has an affinity to cute things. Abilities: Being a Demon, Stella has enhanced strength, speed, durability, agility, high-level regeneration etc. Can create and control fire/hellfire and darkness (usually combines the two). Is a very skilled swordswoman and marksman Her equipment includes a giant chainsaw sword called Bloodedge, twin handguns Skoll and Hati, and her revolver Fenrir. She also has a pair of goggles, because "goggles are cool!". Weaknesses: Is somewhat lazy, holds back a tremendous amount of power, usually keeps to herself and has trouble giving out proper information to certain people (mainly her rival). Goal: Currently, her goal is to find her former friend, Nera, and kill her. The feeling is very mutual. Motivation: Her motivation for wanting to kill her former best friend is mostly out of an odd sense of sisterly love, respect, and something of a moral code. Because she and Nera were once so close and understand each other so well, she feels that she's the only one that can "properly" kill her, preferably in a Duel to the Death. Her motivation for becoming a Demon in the first place was because it was the only way she could feel that she was truly "alive". Role in the story: Main Protagonist Background: After some unspecified incident when she was still a human, Stella made a Deal with the Devil to become a Demon for power. In exchange she was to work as Hell's bounty hunter and hunt down the wicked souls of the world, either sending them directly to Hell, or by absorbing said souls into her self, something Stella was all to happy to oblige. Relevant tropes: Ax-Crazy, Blood Knight, The Berserker, Badass Longcoat, Badass Biker Butch Lesbian, Deal with the Devil (subverted, for the most part), Deadpan Snarker, Dark Is Not Evil, Good Is Not Nice, Noble Demon —-> Jerk with a Heart of Gold, Tsundere Psycho for Hire, Anti-Hero, Byronic Hero, Nineties Anti-Hero, Too Many Belts, Spikes of Villainy, Sociopathic Hero / Heroic Comedic Sociopath, The Musketeer, The Dreaded, Walking the Earth, Hired Guns, Rock Me, Asmodeus! (sort of, in contrast with Nera and Satan, Stella has more of a "metal" theme going on, hence the abundance of belts and spikes on her clothing).
edited 12th Nov '12 1:08:51 AM by CrimsonFlameKnight
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edited 13th Nov '12 8:07:20 PM by Frogger5
- Bash Brothers - With his Robot Buddy and eventually Joshua
- Berserk Button - Harming his sisters. Unfortunately one of them ends up against him.
- Butt Monkey - Happens when you have two Deadpan Snarkers alongside you and you're such an easy target for them.
- Curb-Stomp Battle - Suffers a few of these in the beggining, he learns from them, ironically he doesn't stop being arrogant even after being beaten down mercilessly.
- Hero-Worshipper - To Dan resulting in a...
- Heroic BSOD - When he realizes Dan's true intentions, he still respects him even after that, but that changes once Dan crosses the Moral Event Horizon which results in another BSOD
- Idiot Hero - Sometimes, he normally subverts it though.
- No Social Skills - Due to being sheltered in the castle most of the time.
- Rebel Prince
- Red Oni, Blue Oni - The Red to Joshua's blue.
- Unwitting Pawn - Manipulated since the very beggining.
- The Worf Effect - Is said to be very skilled in battle, yet is Curb-stomped in his first battles, justified by the opponents in those battles being magicians and he never had experience fighting those.
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edited 14th Nov '12 1:35:25 PM by Dimanagul
This is the protagonist in the two detective novels I've been working on. Name: Eckart, Amber Jane Age: 33 (born September 5th 1979) Personality: A gentle but sharp-witted cynic. Eccentric, but stable and practical. Quick to believe the worst in human nature (her job exposes her to a good deal of it), especially where relationships are concerned. A compulsive snarker; the more stressed she is, the more her mouth runs. Does not like bullies. Does not join causes. Skills: Jack of all trades, from living alone and growing up in a do-it-yourself household. Tech-savvy but not a “hacker” in the popular sense of the term. Knows how to shoot a gun. Knows police procedure and politics. Is capable of quick thinking when pressed. Weaknesses: Does not do well in relationships...she tends to pick the wrong guys, a blind spot she constantly finds black amusement in. Is made uncomfortable when people mention her failed ambition to be a police officer, sometimes to an irrational degree. Goals: Run a business. Keep the doors open, the lights on and the paychecks going out to her employees. Find the truth. Stay alive. Motivation: Use her talents and knowledge in a practical way, and again...keep her business open. Role In The Story: Amber provides the narration. She is also the one who generally cracks open the mysteries, but she has help from her staff. Back Story: Amber was raised in small town with conservative values, by a family with three generations of law enforcement in its history (father and grandfather were city police, two of her uncles were FBI, etc.). Had aspirations to be a cop until a small youthful indiscretion ruined her chances *. Halfheartedly pursued an art degree and drifted for a few years before an old professor of her encouraged her to start her own PI practice. Relevant Tropes:
- Action Girl: Played with; she is not great with fighting but gets through it when it happens.
- Indy Ploy: She is fond of this.
- Batman Gambit: Uses this against the bad guys in a couple of crucial instances.
- Crazy-Prepared: She is edging towards this in the second book, always having a gun on her person whenever the law allows it.
- Noodle Incident: Makes reference to one when she gets soaked and near-hypothermia and another character has to strip her.
- "Less than two days in my apartment and you've already got my clothes off. I haven't been that easy since that party sophomore year."
- Heroic BSOD: Has one after a particularly hairy gunfight.
- Mama Wolf: Gets this way over the people who work for her.
- Hard Work Hardly Works: Averted. There are many references to her practicing with pistols, watching what she eats and working out in both books
- Caffeine Addict: Practically lives off coffee.
- Discussed Trope: Both Eating the Eye Candy and Victoria's Secret Compartment are mentioned by name, and discussed by the characters.
- Drink Order: Prefers wine. If she cannot get that, vodka tonics.
- Drowning My Sorrows: In her case its more like "drowning my fears", but the same principle applies.
- Beauty Is Never Tarnished: Averted hard. The two times she gets dressed up, it does not end well for either her or her finery. Spends half of one book with an ugly bruise on the side of her head.
- Private Eye Monologue: Played straight, with occasional dips into First-Person Smartass territory.
- Deadpan Snarker: Does this often, sometimes to her detriment.
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- Fish out of Water: fighting shadow demons and political intrigue are a little out of his league.
- Gentleman and a Scholar
- Supporting Protagonist
edited 22nd Nov '12 8:59:25 AM by Ninjaxenomorph
- Cynical Mentor: He makes no bones about the fact that he's a pessimist until proven otherwise, and often heckles his proteges, Promethean and pony, in order to get them mad enough to prove him wrong.
- Deadpan Snarker: "It appears the Prince is making his power play. By setting fire to his herd area. Which vampires are vulnerable to. He twice over, being a Mekhet. Remind me why he's the Prince again? Oh yes, because the Sheriff doesn't want to be assassinated."
- Do Not Call Me Paul: His former name brings back too many bad memories, so he asks you to call him by his new one.
- Information Broker: His drones have picked up a lot of info over the years, and he wants recompense for doling it out,
- Jerk with a Heart of Gold: He's angry, bitter, and selfish...yet he still wants to help people out, simply because that's what he does. He can also be really kind at times when he senses he's really upset somebody.
- Knight in Sour Armor: See above.
- Meaningful Name: Besides the Mythological Theme Naming, D is the fourth letter of the alphabet while 39 is 13 multiplied by three. His name is literally a testament to how much being a Promethean sucks.
- Mysterious Watcher: Through his drones.
- Necessarily Evil: At some point, he realized a perfect security system would prevent internal threats as well, hence why there's an Urban Legend about a Vigilante Man made of metal and mechanical spiders running about the Internet. He's fully aware this is rather draconian and is actually divided about what is too much and what is too little.
- Sour Outside, Sad Inside
- Straw Nihilist: Deconstructed and subverted. His general bitterness towards the universe and meaning is caused by a general sense it is out to get him (because, frankly, it is), and he really just uses the nihilistic ranting to vent.
- Woobie, Destroyer of Worlds: Subverted. He's about the only Centimaus who doesn't have the "Destroyer of Worlds" part rather than dropping the Woobie part.
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- Always Someone Better: As good as he is, Seth is still better.
- Anti-Hero: Type III. Yes, he can be a bit of a bastard, but he has an extremely strong sense of right and wrong.
- Arms Dealer
- The Atoner
- Badass Beard
- Berserk Button: Seth.
- The Butcher
- Chaotic Good: Has a very low opinion of authority, which is fairly justified given his past with Seth and the government.
- Covered In Scars: Many are fresh, but a fair few are from his time in the Butchers.
- Do-Anything Soldier: This is the entire point of Butcher training.
- Good Counterpart: To Gus. It's gotten to the point where I write Gus as though he were Ryan, pre-disillusionment.
- Good Is Not Nice
- Good Is Not Soft
- La Résistance: Is a member.
- Meaningful Name: Wasn't supposed to have one - the rest of the team is built around Religious and Mythological Theme Naming, and his lack of this was supposed to set him apart. Then I realized I'd made a possible allusion to Solomon, and the fact that things he was convinced to do by someone he cared about helped tear his country apart means that this fits.
- Mook Horror Show: Causes them on a regular basis.
- No Place for Me There: Has a few shades of this. He kills for his belief that people don't have the right to kill for their beliefs, and is entirely aware of the contradiction. He reasons that forcing the government to drop its Knight Templar policies on The Evils of Free Will is more important than his ability to sleep at night, and that he'll deal with the moral consequences after he's accomplished his goal.
- One-Man Army: Has a body count that's easily in the triple digits. That said, he's gotten a little slower over the years.
- Shell-Shocked Veteran
- Technician vs. Performer: The performer to Seth's technician.
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- But Not Too Black: Looks just like Che Guevara, except black.
- Cloning Blues: Is a clone in a world where clones and artificial humans are slaves
- Deadpan Snarker: Is this due to the source material being Evita.
- Greek Chorus: Serves as a commentator on the actions of Eva, the heroine.
- Jerk with a Heart of Gold: Can be very tactless.
- La Résistance: Is a member of the resistance against the military dictator ruling the country.
- Mister Muffykins: Treated as a lapdog by Evita.
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