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It's the second one, I think. It is a position that can be held by more than one person, but I meant her specific job as deputy to the Sherrif. So like this:

• In "Desperate Souls", there is a scene where Emma, after having been fired as the town deputy, confides her frustrations to Gold. This eventually leads Emma to say "I don't know what chance I have. She's mayor, and I'm... well... me." when describing her rivalry with Regina, which raised more than a few eyebrows in the fandom.

or this:

• In "Desperate Souls", there is a scene where Emma, after having been fired as the town Deputy, confides her frustrations to Gold. This eventually leads Emma to say "I don't know what chance I have. She's mayor, and I'm... well... me." when describing her rivalry with Regina, which raised more than a few eyebrows in the fandom.

Edited by Bullman on Jan 12th 2022 at 1:46:37 PM

Something I want to add to the Birthday Party Goes Wrong page, under Western Animation...

• The Pingu episode "Pingu's Birthday" had a mild case. At Pingu's birthday party, the kids play "Blind Man's Bluff", with Pingu being the blindfolded one trying to find the other guests. But as he keeps playing, the others keep getting out of his way or redirecting him to something else, and after a while Pingu feels unhappy that he's not winning the game. Fortunately, when his mother comes out with the birthday cake, Pingu instantly cheers up and enjoys the rest of his birthday.

Thanks. @ John Putnam Thatcher

• Suicide by Sea: The killer in By Hook or by Crook commits suicide by taking a small boat out to sea in the middle of a hurricane.

• Daylight's End: An aging cop (Lance Henriksen) finds himself leading the last few dozen survivors in his city as they hole up during a zombie infestation.

Edited by Melinda on Jan 18th 2022 at 9:40:27 AM

Hi fellas. It's me again. Let's have another try.

Two Headscratchers for Cobra Kai:

• Back in season 2, Moon broke up with Hawk due to becoming a bully under Cobra Kai's influence. She was seen shortly thereafter dating a girl, whose name is revealed in this season to be Piper. While looking for potential Eagle Fang students, Johnny and Miguel try to recruit her, but she ends up joining Cobra Kai thanks to Silver's merchandise. The thing is, however, that when she fights Samantha, Piper assures her that Cobra Kai has taught her no mercy, proving that she will do anything to defeat her. Then why did Moon fall for Piper in the first place? She explicitly told Hawk that she didn't date bullies...
• How did Silver know exactly the moment Stingray was going to wake up at the hospital and tell the detective that Kreese was the one who beat him up? Somehow, despite Stingray clearly telling the detective in the morning, the police waits until Silver and Kreese are alone at the former's house to arrest the latter. Couldn't the police have interrupted the All-Valley Tournament to arrest Kreese then and there, in front of all their Cobra Kai students?

Edited by ElJuaco on Jan 12th 2022 at 9:11:32 AM

While I can't make any English suggestions, I do question whether the one about Piper belongs in Headscratchers since 1) most fans find her Obliviously Evil and don't consider her comment about Sam bullying and 2) Cobra Kai is a show where lots of sympathetic characters get negative Character Development, although it doesn't always last.

@Bullman

If it's an official title, then it's capitalized (e.g. "She is the Town Deputy"), like "Chief of Police".

If it's a common term, it isn't capitalized (i.e. "She is a town deputy").

Edited by Arivne on Jan 13th 2022 at 10:29:21 AM

@Wile K 209

I can't find any mistakes in the English of that example.

However, the "The Pingu episode "Pingu's Birthday" had a mild case." sentence should be "...has a mild case." as per How to Write an Example - Write in Historical Present Tense.

@Melinda

...delusions as King Tut after the three of them are hit on the head by falling flowerpots.

...but after Batgirl defeats Tut's male goons, Shirley sneaks up behind her and whacks her...

^ Again, this makes the sentence more clear.

She contacts Joker by using a phone disguised as a hot dog.

Her father and aunt always call her...

Basil's first reaction to hearing that Batman is visiting the family...

He and Tut's Moll Florence get into a competition trying to...

Edited by Arivne on Jan 13th 2022 at 10:43:36 AM

@ElJuaco

Back in season 2, Moon broke up with Hawk due to his becoming a bully under Cobra Kai's influence.

^ As originally written ("Moon broke up with Hawk due to becoming a bully under Cobra Kai's influence."), this said that Moon became a bully.

...the police wait until Silver and Kreese are alone...

Edited by Arivne on Jan 13th 2022 at 10:49:18 AM

Hi fellas. It's me again. Let's have another try.

Two other Headscratchers for Cobra Kai:

• When Hawk's former Cobra Kai classmates assault him at the tattoo parlor, where did tattoo artist go? It seems a bit strange that he/she left a client alone at the ship.
• After weeks of bullying, the school's staff suspend Anthony and his friends for bullying Kenny. When did they become so useful? If they could track down bullies by doing research and asking witnesses, then how the school finds out when Anthony and his friends bullied Kenny but didn't find out about the bullying some students were forced to endure at the hands of Kyler and his friends back in season 1?

Some character tropes for Despair Island:

• Adaptational Relationship Overhaul:
  • Trent was Gwen's first boyfriend in canon, falling in love with him upon his arrival at the island. Here, Gwen and Trent don't get along at all, with Trent disliking Gwen's moody attitude and pesimism. Trent even votes her off after Justin sets Gwen up. Justified given the situation in the story, though.
  • Cody was good friends with Gwen in canon. Here, Gwen immediately takes a dislike for Cody due to Cody's perverted tendencies and obsessions with sex, calling him out for saying things like "whore" and getting angry at her teammates for sparing him from elimination. However, she does forgive him for all his wrongdoings when Zolkoff executes her.
• Adaptational Relationship Overhaul:
  • Gwen was Trent's girlfriend in canon, taking a liking for her upon his arrival at the island. Here, Trent doesn't tolerate Gwen because of her moody attitude and pesimism, calling her out for not caring when Katie gets lost in the woods and even voting Gwen off after Justin sets her up, remarking that Gwen proved to be a "one twisted bitch".
  • Cody was Trent's best friend in the Screaming Gophers in canon. Here, Trent dislikes Cody for his perverted tendencies and obsessions with sex. He does warm up to him when Cody tries to tone down his behaviour a bit, but ultimately votes him off after Justin sets Cody up.

And some Fridge Horror for Legacy (Total Drama) and Despair Island:

• It's mentioned by the show's All There in the Manual that Gwen auditioned for Total Drama Island as part of a bet with her brother. Considering how much they are indicated to get along, imagine how he must have reacted Gwen's brother upon learning about Gwen's death at the Psycho Killer's hands. He surely felt that if he hadn't dare his sister to join the show, she would still be alive.
• During their last meeting through a screen call, Trent's father assures his son that he is the best thing that has ever happened to him and that he doesn't know what he would do if something happened to him, as his wife left him. Four challenges later, Trent is killed thanks to Alejandro's sabotage. Without his son and wife, what if Trent's father resorted to the worst outcome when he found himself unable to live with his son's death?
  • It becomes much worse given that Trent mentions having three sisters. Is Trent's father going to keep himself alive for the sake of his daughters or he will left them alone?

Edited by ElJuaco on Jan 14th 2022 at 5:39:14 AM

@ White God

• Bitch in Sheep's Clothing: The homeless man who hides Hagen from animal control, then turns around and sells him to the middleman for a dog fighting ring.
• These Hands Have Killed: In a rare animal version, Hagen is clearly distraught after being forced to kill his opponent in a dog fight.
• Villains Want Mercy: The trainer at the dog fights recognizes Hagen/Max as he's being attacked by the pack, and calls out his name in a pleading tone. All he gets back from the dog he abused so horribly is a growl.

• Quincy and Rachel's entire relationship brings a lot of light and comfort to such a dark series. He raises her as a second daughter after Dracula kills her parents and shows a lot of emotion whenever he needs to save her life. He cares more about protecting her than getting revenge on his archenemy Dracula. When he's in poor health during the second half of the series, he shows concern about Rachel being taken care of and on a path to happiness after he's gone.
• Dracula and Lilith's rare Pet the Dog moments (Dracula protecting the occasional kid, Lilith trying to let the woman whose body she's possessing live her own life, etc.) invariably make a good impression on fans.

• Hero of Another Story: Dr. Mortte from the eighth issue has spent several years as a vampire, living off blood donations while clinging to his humanity and genuinely working for the welfare of his patients.

• One-Scene Wonder: The two cruise ship passengers who resist Dracula in the tenth issue (one with a gun, one with a crucifix). While that issue is mainly remembered for being the debut of Blade, they make a decent impression even though one of them dies and neither has much dialogue.

• The same episode features a woman at the fair who breaks a coconut by throwing a baseball at it. This inspires Bertie to bet on her to win the "Test Your Strength" Game. Unfortunately, she does too well, breaking off the bell at the top, causing the event to be cancelled.

• Fleming hires two assassins, Goggles and Hicks, to kill the Cape. When they ask who he wants killed, Fleming shows them a copy of the comic book that inspired the Cape's identity. Goggles initially thinks Fleming is hiring them to kill the comic's author.

• Jerk with a Heart of Gold: Chief Trombly comes across as rude and untrustworthy at first, but he's shown giving an educational presentation for a bunch of kids. Also, his suspicious behavior is because he suspects that a close friend and colleague of his may be setting the fires. When he walks in on his friend setting a fire, a horrified Trombly asks what he's doing, and bravely tries to beat out the fire with his jacket.

• Tomboy with a Girly Streak: Tammy is a varsity soccer player and track runner, the president of a gun club, smokes, and enjoys driving her father's thresher. She's also competing in a beauty pageant and is a favorite to win.

• Anti-Villain: Byrd the Bounty Hunter is a thug and a jerk, but Shawn and Gus aren't exactly giving him much reason to treat them well due to how they're trying to muscle in on the job that's meant to pay for his retirement just so they can live out a childhood fantasy.
• Let No Crisis Go to Waste: When Cole's home is burglarized, he takes advantage of this to kill his wife and blame it on the burglar.
• Liar Revealed: Henry realizes that Dwayne is lying about knowing his son from camp when he talks about what a stickler for the rules the notoriously rambunctious Shawn was.
• The Un-Reveal: It's never revealed why Cole killed his wife.

• Fanon Discontinuity:
  • Some fans prefer to see the original movie as a standalone story and ignore the killing sprees from the sequels.
  • The 2022 film can inspire a little of this due to the absence of the late Wes Craven.

• Ensemble Dark Horse:
  • The main cast spends most of their time actively avoiding Kerensky until the third act. Nonetheless, fans like him quite a bit for being a humorous Handsome Lech who at least tries to befriend the main characters and has a surprisingly emotional drunken speech about how messed up his life is due to factors he can't begin to understand.
  • Dahl's lab mate Mbeke is no less of a Dirty Coward and Cargo Cult member than the rest of the veteran crew members, but she still has some fans due to having some good lines and not being as bad as some of the others.

Edited by Melinda on Jan 14th 2022 at 5:51:56 AM

Dragalia Lost Celestial Showdown

• Swapped Roles: During the Epilogue, Euden decides to be the one giving the traditional New Year's Greetings to Shingen after the battle with Tsukuyomi. Since Euden figures Hinomoto's done so much for New Alberia over the years, he should pay it forward.

Edited by kawaiineko333 on Jan 14th 2022 at 8:01:11 AM

@ElJuaco

...where did the tattoo artist go?...alone at the shop.

...then how did the school find out when Anthony and his friends...

Gwen's first boyfriend in canon is Trent. <- period She falls in love...and pessimism. Trent...Justin sets her up.

Here, Gwen immediately takes a dislike to Cody due to his perverted...

Gwen was Trent's girlfriend in canon. <- period He takes a liking to her...and pessimism, calling...voting her off...be a "one twisted bitch".

Considering how well they...reacted Gwen's brother upon...hadn't dared his...

It becomes much worse, <- comma given...will he leave them alone?

^ This example violates Example Indentation in Trope Lists because it's only one example at the 2nd level of indentation.

@Melinda

The homeless man who hides Hagen from animal control, <- comma then turns around...

All he gets back from the dog he abused so horribly is a growl.

...due to how they're trying to muscle in...

Nonetheless, fans like him quite a bit for being a humorous Handsome Lech who...

@kawaiineko333

During the epilogue, Euden...Tsukuyomi. Since Euden figures...

Thanks.

@ Crossed

• Lesbian Jock: Upon hearing that Miranda is a rugby player, Shaky comments that based on every pub anecdote he's heard, that means she's a guaranteed lesbian. Shaky's First-Person Smartass narration may not have meant that seriously, although Miranda does seem to get along with Camp Gay man Jamie.

• Second Place Is for Winners: The contest is so blatantly rigged in Becky's favor that even Dumb Blond Leslie seems to grasp this. Consequently, when Leslie thinks that she came in second (she's actually the second runner-up, aka third) she's perfectly happy to have placed that high.

• Simon complains about how letters from his listeners are complaining about how unconvincing his sound effects are. His sound man says that it's just one letter, written by a nine-year-old girl.

• Armor-Piercing Question: When Jenkins and Dahl argue about how the warning system favors veteran crew members over rookies, Dahl suggests to Jenkins that his wife may have died because veteran crew members let her go on a dangerous mission in their stead.
  Dahl: Jenkins, how long were you and your wife stationed on the Intrepid before she died?

• Chandell's prison concert, which hints that he might redeemed, while several of the people who betrayed and tried to kill him are shown being moved by his music.

• Penguin's Get into Jail Free efforts in "The Penguin's Nest/The Bird's Last Jest." The heroes pick up on it and are positively oozing with satisfaction as they talk about how they'll overlook his crimes and give him a second chance while he seethes in fury. Then, when he finally gets arrested, it's only for a health code violation, and he only gets into the city jail for the night rather than the state penitentiary like he wants. Then, when he's put on trial, he launches into an intentionally absurd Insane Troll Logic argument, only for the judges to buy it and let Penguin go.

• Affectionate Nickname: Many of Penguin's Molls and admirers call him "Pengy."
• Of Corsets Sexy: Chickadee's outfit is a corset with sleeves for her arms, and the Fanservice is played straight.

@ Westworld

• He's Just Hiding: Following season 2, some fans believed that, despite all indications, Emily is still alive and it really was a host replica of her that died. Even after season 3 made this seem less likely, some people still believe it.

• They Wasted a Perfectly Good Character: Hooker with a Heart of Gold resistance members Mary and Thumbelina are pretty colorful and interesting, which makes it a shame that Mary only has one scene and Thumblina doesn't have any dialogue when she shows up later on.

• Disqualification-Induced Victory: A rare undesired instance of this trope happens to Platinum as the seventh-ranked District 1 female tribute for the 44th Hunger Games, and she only ranks that high because thirteen girls ahead of her dropped out due to being disgusted by the events of the 43rd Hunger Games. All of the ten highest-ranking tributes are considered to be volunteers and Platinum has no desire to actually compete in the Hunger Games, but she's forced to when the six higher-ranking girls are all hospitalized, arrested, or get pregnant during the weeks leading up to the 44th Hunger Games (which Platinum only wins by a fluke).

• They Wasted a Perfectly Good Character: Garner, the Closest Thing We Got Unexpected Successor to the captaincy of the Pegasus, and a man who is better at working with machines than people could have become an interesting recurring character, but only appears in one episode.

• Vanilla Protagonist: Charles and Carrie, the main couple, aren't quite as endearing as a lot of the supporting cast, such as Disabled Snarker David, the bumbling but gentle Tom, former punk girl Scarlet, Fiona (with her Defrosting the Ice Queen moments and unrequited feelings for Charles), Henrietta (given her on-off relationship with Charles), Bernard and Lydia with their Friendship as Courtship relationship, and Life of the Party gay man Gareth.

• He's Just Hiding: Some people are still holding out hope that Laura Lee will return after the plane she was in exploded.

Edited by Melinda on Jan 16th 2022 at 8:18:47 AM

@Arivne

How is this one

For Dexter: New Blood

• Call-Back: When Harrison confronts his father Dexter, he says the line, "Open your eyes and look at what you've done!", which is similar to the line from the original series premiere when Dexter confronts Mike Donovan and says "Open your eyes and look at what you did!"

• My God, What Have I Done?: Dexter realizes that he crossed the line and broke the code after his son Harrison confronts him and reminds him of the terrible things he had done and many innocent lives lost because of him, so he allows Harrison to kill him.

Edited by Mauserhawkefd3435 on Jan 15th 2022 at 6:26:15 AM

Progressive Instrumentation->Other Media->Video Games

• Final Fantasy XIV: Endwalker has the theme of Ultima Thule start off as a distorted instrumental "Echoes in the Distance," showing you're in this hellish alien world born of the despair of untold worlds at the end of the universe. After Estinien sacrifices himself to allow the Scions and the Warrior of Light to cross over to the next island, the music changes to the instrumental version of "Close in the Distance." This lasts until the sacrifice of G'raha Tia, when the lyrics finally kick in. The Warrior of Light has to watch their two closest friends, Alphinaud and Alisaie sacrifice themselves to Meteion, leaving them utterly alone, yet still marching towards the end against their strongest battle yet.

Video Games

• Final Fantasy XIV: Endwalker's final story related 4-man instance, "The Dead Ends," has the Plenty, a race who were able to achieve immortality and achieve societal perfection. After Meteion asked them what was there left to do, it drove them to despair, summoning a Primal-like being called Ra-La. Those that it killed consider it to be a mercy while those who are spared still beg for death.

@Melinda

...Shaky comments that based on every pub anecdote they've heard, that...

Consequently, when Leslie thinks that she came in second...

^ You could also write this as "thinks that she's come in second".

...complaining about how unconvincing his sound effects are.

...because veteran crew members let her go on a dangerous mission in their stead.

and he only gets into the city jail...wants. Then, when he's put on trial...

To rats, unsurprisingly. They love eating cheese, have animal names, live underground,

^ This is incomplete.

He's nationally famous and the Caped Crusaders ask for his help on a case, but...

Hooker with a Heart of Gold resistance members Mary and Thumbelina...

...Platinum as the...Games, <- comma and she only...Hunger Games, <- comma but...weeks leading up...

...a man who is better at working with machines than pool could have become an interesting...

^ "better at working with machines than pool" is not correct.

Some people are still holding out hope that Laura Lee will return after the plane she was in exploded.

@Mauserhawkefd3435

...confronts his father Dexter, he says...line from the original series premiere when...

Edited by Arivne on Jan 15th 2022 at 8:28:45 AM

@kawaiineko333

The Warrior of Light has to watch their two closest friends, Alphinaud and Alisaie, <- comma sacrifice...

...to achieve immortality and achieve societal perfection...Those that it killed consider their deaths to be a mercy while those who were spared...

For Wrestle Angels:

• Mythology Gag: While the V series remakes can be considered as a Negative Continuity to the original ones (with the Survivor series and Ai being the Negative Continuity to the status quo-breaking events in previous installments) for the sake of Status Quo Is God, there are always some general (but dubiously canon) references to the earlier games:
  • In an episode in the official Yonkoma series Harikiri Kiriko-San in the Wrestle Angels Ai website, both Megumi and Chigusa see a beautiful wedding dress. Chigusa compliments the dress and Megumi quickly makes a negative assumption that her best friend will leave her behind if she gets married. Due to her jealousy and negative assumption, Megumi says that the wedding dress isn't suitable for Chigusa. However, Chigusa says that dress is beautiful and thinks that it suits Megumi, resulting in a hilarious misunderstanding where Megumi blushes and asks if Chigusa still wants to wear a tuxedo instead (much to Chigusa's confusion). This is actually a reference to Wrestle Angels 3's in-game plotline event, where Chigusa decides to get married when she wants to retire from wrestling.
  • Another one in Harikiri Kiriko-San, where Succubus Manabe finds Panther Risako's swimsuit in a cardboard box when settling the cardboard boxes full of wrestlers' old stuff and selecting which stuff should be gotten rid off. That swimsuit looks slightly similar to Panther Risako's wrestling costume in the first game.

Edited by Minorica on Jan 20th 2022 at 3:23:17 AM

@Arivne

Will this do

For Dexter: New Blood

• Call-Back: When Harrison confronts his father Dexter, he says the line, "Open your eyes and look at what you've done!", which is similar to the line from the original series premiere when Dexter confronts Mike Donovan and says "Open your eyes and look at what you did!"

• My God, What Have I Done?: Dexter realizes that he crossed the line and broke the code after his son Harrison confronts him and reminds him of the terrible things he had done and many innocent lives lost because of him, so he allows Harrison to kill him.

Thanks Arivne.

I can guarantee that my next post will hav fewer mistakes, although that's only because of how short it is (I don't even have time to edit yesterday's stuff until tomorrow).

@ The Ashes Series

• Small Role, Big Impact: Carl Adams, a right-wing fanatic who even the main characters view as a madman, engineers the nuclear war that causes The End of the World as We Know It and the subsequent rise of new governments such as Ben's secessionist movement, kicking off a forty book series. However, Adams is killed in the fifth chapter of the first book, making way for more (mostly liberal) antagonists.

• The Woobie: Caesar/Charlie's father is murdered when he's nine, his mother commits suicide, and he's emotionally bullied by both adults and children in the community home due to being perceived as an anti-Rebellion defeatist. When he comes around to their way of thinking, they still vote him into the first Quarter Quell and taunt him about it. He loses several allies he is close to before winning and is too traumatized to return to the district that voted him into the quell. He becomes the new host of the Hunger Games to try and protect and comfort the kids, but feels their grief, fear, and deaths keenly. He isn't allowed to take time off from hosting the games to be with his wife on her death bed. His daughter and son-in-law are killed for plotting against Snow, and he isn't allowed to adopt his granddaughter. Finally, he's executed in Coin's Reign of Terror, and an edited video tape is used to make him think that Peeta (who Caesar has been kind and supportive to throughout the story) is reveling in his execution, which causes Caesar's last moments to be sad ones.

• Break the Cutie: Falco's girlfriend Rita, after he prostitutes her out to another columnist without telling her in advance to further one of Sidney's schemes.
• Death by Adaptation: Sidney's beating at Kello's hands is fatal in the musical adaptation, but not in the film.

• Awesome Ego: While Jack can barely go a chapter without referring to himself as a "master thief," it's a boast that he's fully capable of living up to.

Edited by Melinda on Jan 16th 2022 at 9:17:34 AM