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Thanks Arivne. You're editing awfully early today. Here is a slight revision to one of my Woobie entires and two new awesome moments I just added while you were editing.

@ The Tomb of Dracula

• Rachel spends almost her entire life being menaced by Dracula, who kills her biological family. She outlives many friends and her efforts to kill Dracula constantly come to naught. And if you acknowledge the X-Men crossover after the original run, after she retires to live in peace she's turned into a vampire, forced to be Dracula's consort, and is left begging for a Mercy Kill due to the absence of a known cure.

• The 2004 miniseries has two scenes that stand out.
  • The samurai Michiyo Watanabe fighting the vampire that killed her mother.
  • In the last issue, a group of hooded archers arrive as The Cavalry. They belong to the Mortuus Invitus, a group of vampires who shun their nature and want to kill Dracula. The American branch of the group had earlier aided the heroes, but declined to join their assassination mission against Dracula due to fear that he could compel them to turn on their allies.
  Groza: [H]ere in the enemy's backyard, we are made of sterner stuff.

Edited by Melinda on Jan 11th 2022 at 8:34:22 AM

From page 667 @Bullman

Since Elsa was introduced in Season 4, Elsa/Emma/Hook has become very popular ...also became close friends...

^ You could also write the first part as "When Elsa was introduced in Season 4, Elsa/Emma/Hook became very popular...". In this case, you could also substitute "After" for "When".

...quickly became popular in later seasons at the same time.

It helps that while Robin Hood is Regina's canonical soulmate...

Edited by Arivne on Jan 11th 2022 at 7:10:41 AM

From page 667 @jasonred79

The English is fine, but both Mirai Robo Daltanious and Beast King GoLion should be in italics like this: Mirai Robo Daltanious and Beast King GoLion.

Edited by Arivne on Jan 11th 2022 at 7:15:28 AM

@Melinda

...aided the heroes, <- comma but declined...compel them to turn on their allies.

@ Batman (1966): Rogues Gallery

Edited by Melinda on Jan 11th 2022 at 12:08:23 PM

Thanks Arivne.

~Melinda

• ...almost all of her screen time (seems the character is female)
• ...secretly in league with the Archer. <— period

Thanks.

@ Batman (1966): Rogues Gallery

@ Arab Oil Sheikh

• The Who Is Bugs Potter? by Gordon Korman features a notoriously unlucky emerald. One of its latest owners (and one of the few to survive owning it), Sheikh Muley Hassan, had one of his oil wells run dry shortly after he purchased the gem. At the advice of his astrologer, he gave the emerald away to a visiting movie star, who has since found herself plagued by constant (albeit nonfatal) bad luck.

@ The Colony (2021)

The Colony, or Tides is a dystopian film about an astronaut, Blake (Nora Arnezeder), returning to Earth after a The Elites Jump Ship scenario, and discovering that a survivor of a past expedition (Iain Glen) has become an Evil Colonialist toward the descendants of the people who were left behind and is hiding secrets about Blake's late father (Sebastian Roché).

Tropes:

• Doomed Hurt Guy: Blake's companion Tucker is injured when their ship crash lands and doesn't make it to the halfway point.
• The Elites Jump Ship: Earth's wealthy fled to a new planet as cataclysms ravaged Earth but are forced to contemplate returning to Earth due to women being unable to get pregnant on their new homeworld.
• Fantastic Slur: The people who've been surviving on Earth since the cataclysm are called "Muds" by the people who fled to Kepler-209.
• Wasteland Warlord: Gibson, the last survivor of the first expedition back to Earth, rules over the "Muds" as a benevolent dictator, but it doesn't take much to make him violent, and he views his people as little more than breeding stock for when his fellow residents of Kepler-209 arrive.

@ Murdoch Mysteries S 2 E 3 Dinosaur Fever

• Blackmail Backfire: The episode's blackmailer survives, but faces accessory to murder charges for covering up the crime.
• Technician vs. Performer: Blake and Sutton, the feuding paleontologists. Blake is a flashy showman with a large staff but has little talent (he's a geologist by training and found his first dinosaur by accident). Sutton is irritable, a poor speaker, and underfunded, but has more skill.

Edited by Melinda on Jan 12th 2022 at 11:18:36 AM

• The Visitor: Copellius is a enigmatic man who travels across the world throughout the centuries to perform delicate surgeries on particularly vile people to extract their eyes and eat them, considering their eyes to be delicious. Fascinated by the moral depravity of Peruvian criminals during a dictatorship, Copellius targets the inmates of the most heavily protected prison of the country. Evading all security measures, Coppelius extracts the eyes of three inmates and spares their lives, making a dreaded criminal boss admit that he considers Coppelius to be merciful. When the Peruvian police manage to capture Coppelius thanks to a elaborate trap, Copellius congratulates the cops and berates himself for having underestimated them. During the interrogation, Coppelius escapes using a special device. Later, Coppelius targets The Asesor of the President, causing a political crisis that ends the dictatorship. Finally, Coppelius asks Detective Gandara for more criminals, making Gandara reveal the hidden location of the former President and telling Coppelius that his evil would make his eyes to be a banquet.

For Magnificent Bastard

Edited by KazuyaProta on Jan 13th 2022 at 6:44:06 AM

For Once Upon a Time:

• In "Desperate Souls" there is a scene where Emma, after having been fired as Deputy, confides her frustrations to Gold. This eventually leads Emma saying "I don't know what chance I have. She's mayor, and I'm... Well... Me." when describing her rivalry with Regina, which raised more than a few eyebrows in the fandom.

Any corrections?

Fury Unleashed

• Guest Fighter: They're called "Guest Appearances" in-game, allowing players to play as Cadence from Crypt Of The Necrodancer and a Red Guy from Superhot, coming with the mechanics from their games. Cadence plays like her game, moving and attacking to the rhythm of the music. Red Guy has Bullet Time while standing still, but it resumes once he moves, and true to his game, is a One-Hit-Point Wonder. They can only be used in levels that the player has completed at least once.

GoLion

• Serendipity Writes the Plot: World Event Productions, the people behind Voltron, originally wanted to make an adaptation of Mirai Robo Daltanious. Through a poorly worded request for a mecha anime, "the one with lions", Toei Animation mistakenly sent over Beast King GoLion instead. They ended up liking GoLion more than Daltanious, so they just kept going with GoLion. It ended up successful beyond their expectations.

Edited by jasonred79 on Jan 11th 2022 at 8:03:13 AM

For Dexter: New Blood

• Call-Back: When Harrison confronts his father Dexter, He said the line, "Open your eyes and look at what you've done!" which is a call back to the line from the series premiere of the original series when Dexter confronts Mike Donovan and said "Open your eyes and look at what you did!"

• My God, What Have I Done?: Dexter realized that he crossed the line and broke the code after his son Harrison confronts him and reminds him of the terrible things he had done and many innocent lives lost because of him, So he allowed Harrison to kill him.

Edited by Mauserhawkefd3435 on Jan 12th 2022 at 4:28:12 AM

What do you think of these? BTW, I use a grammar-checker to try and avoid any big mistakes before posting, so I add things like quotations and the marks to italicize stuff when I actually make the pages, same as the links.

Dancing on Shadow Strings is a Worm and Yu-Gi-Oh GX crossover story by Elia 41, in which Taylor and Jaden become students together at Duel Academy.

• Adaptational Sexuality: Jaden is explicitly gay in this story.
• Blessed with Suck: Jaden has a trigger event after being heavily beaten by some jocks, angry that he'd confessed to their friend. Unfortunately, his power can only hide him from others if they look down on him.
• Gayngst: Jaden manages to work up the nerve to confess to his crush after Legend comes out. Unfortunately, said crush's friends take offense to his confession and beat him so hard that he triggers.
• The Magic Poker Equation: Inverted with Taylor after Emma's betrayal. Her Ritual Beast deck no longer works properly in duels, with results like it giving her all Spell card hands.
• Obfuscating Stupidity: Jaden's class clown act is in part because his power only works on someone if they look down on him.
• Perception Filter: Jaden's parahuman power allows him to hide from others this way, but only if they look down on him.

A Colorful Symphony is a Worm and the World Ends With You crossover story by Elia 41, based on Synesthesia. The crux of the story is Taylor triggering with powers like the Composer due to discovering Sophia's cape identity by accident, with Sophia promptly trying to kill her to keep it a secret.

• Animal Motifs: Wolves for Danny. He gains a wolf tattoo from Taylor's powers that allows him to transform into a wolf form, and his temporary code-name is Papa Wolf.
• For Want Of A Nail: The main divergence between Synesthesia and this story is that Sophia hears Taylor when Taylor discovers that Sophia is Shadow Stalker and plans to kill her to keep the secret.
• Murder Is the Best Solution: Sophia immediately tries to kill Taylor when the latter accidentally discovers her cape identity.
• Revealing Cover-Up: Sophia's attempts to keep her secret identity by killing Taylor end up ensuring that the PRT learns who she is. For added irony, Taylor is too intimidated by Sophia to tell anyone, so if Sophia had tried to threaten her into silence instead, she would never have had her identity exposed.
• Sensory Overload: Taylor's powers mean that she can constantly hear noise around her, which is overwhelming at first. She eventually gets a music player to help her drown it out.
• Super-Empowering: Taylor can imbue those with strong Melodies with powers based on her own. Danny's abilities are easily powerful enough to allow him to join the Protectorate despite not technically being a parahuman.

Edited by Donquill on Jan 12th 2022 at 11:05:50 AM

For Kick The Son Of A Bitch page:

Tails of the Bounty Hunter: Done twice in the final chapter.

• While he's in prison, Gobor Grizzer is forced to eat excrement, and is raped immediately afterwards, by a convict named Larry Wentworth. Considering that Gobor was a serial rapist responsible for the deaths of thousands, he absolutely deserved it.
• Douglas Kevro, a pragmatic, sociopathic-mob boss, infiltrates the Baron's prison cell just so he can give him "The Reason You Suck" Speech, and then cut his throat open. Given that the Baron was a sociopath who had his own minions murdered and tried to orchestrate the deaths of hundreds of millions, it's hard to feel upset for him.

@Melinda

She wears form-fitting tops and bends over while bringing Gordon his medication tray.

After the gang is arrested, she's neither frightened nor remorseful when Batman confronts her about helping Egghead.

^ The reason I moved that part of the sentence is that, as originally written, you were saying that she helped Egghead after the gang was arrested, when you meant that's when Batman confronted her. Moving it to the beginning of the sentence avoids that problem.

...they think Chandell is "going soft"...they drug him and...convenience, <- comma though...

A vain woman who assists Joker in his plot...

Screw This, I'm Outta Here: In the climax of her two-part episode, Cornelia ducks...

...by shooting the rope holding up a chandelier (they're standing under it)...

Annie is an efficient criminal, <- comma but is more upbeat than Shame.

...of Good Old Fisticuffs is... To make them give up, she settles for taking Chief O'Hara hostage when he wanders in.

^ I changed the position of "To make them give up" for the same reason as in the Egghead example above. As written, you said that Chief O'Hara wandered in to make them give up.

Her outfit shows off all of her stockinged legs.

...in the series (by Aunt Harriet), <- comma but is shown...

Please delete the extra "]" in the Poly example.

...about Blake's late father (Sebastian Roché).

...called "Muds" by the people who fled to Kepler-209.

The episode's blackmailer survives, <- comma but faces...

Sutton is irritable, a poor speaker, and underfunded, <- comma but has more skill.

Edited by Arivne on Jan 12th 2022 at 9:17:28 AM

@KazuyaProta

Copellius is a enigmatic man who travels...world throughout the centuries...considering their eyes to be the more delicious. Fascinated by the...protected prison of...boss admit that...police manage to...using an elaborate trap...having underestimated them. ...hidden abdication' of...eyes to be a banquet.

^ "considering their eyes to be the more delicious." More delicious than what?

Thanks Arivne. I've got to remember to double check the stuff inside my folders more.

@ The Tomb of Dracula

• Kick the Dog: Dracula's moments of compassion are outnumbered by moments of cruelty that Angelus would admire. He's willing to stalk, taunt, kill or turn innocent children (even if he'll show others compassion), he torments and kills members of the Harker and Van Helsing families even before they resume hunting for him, abandons his infant daughter and later kills her foster family, and even smashes the urn with Edith Harker's ashes inside just to spite her father minutes after the man reluctantly saves his life.

Written by Harold L. Goodwin and Peter J. Harkness (who use the pen name John Blaine), Rick Brant is a science fiction series that lasted from 1947 to 1968 (with one unpublished book finally being released in 1990). The series shares many similarities with the Tom Swift books (especially the second series), but the science and the stakes of the adventures are more realistic. Teenaged Rick Brant is the adventurous son of the founder of the Spindrift Foundation, a benevolent scientific organization based on an island off the coast of New Jersey. Many of the books are set in exotic locales the protagonists travel to for foundation business.

Books

1. The Rocket's Shadow (1947)
2. The Lost City (1947)
3. Sea Gold (1947)
4. 100 Fathoms Under (1947)
5. The Whispering Box Mystery (1948)
6. The Phantom Shark (1949)
7. Smugglers' Reef (1950)
8. The Caves of Fear (1951)
9. Stairway to Danger (1952)
10. The Golden Skull (1954)
11. The Wailing Octopus (1956)
12. The Electronic Mind Reader (1957)
13. The Scarlet Lake Mystery (1958)
14. The Pirates of Shan (1958)
15. The Blue Ghost Mystery (1960)
16. The Egyptian Cat Mystery (1961)
17. The Flaming Mountain (1962)
18. The Flying Stingaree (1963)
19. The Ruby Ray Mystery (1964)
20. The Veiled Raiders (1965)
21. Rocket Jumper (1966)
22. The Deadly Dutchman (1967)
23. Danger Below! (1968)
24. The Magic Talisman (1990)

Tropes in the series:

• Abnormal Ammo: In The Pirates of Shan, Zircon fires tacks out of a cannon at the eponymous villains. Later, Chahda sprinkles the leftover tacks on the deck of their ship to injure any pirates who try to sneak aboard at night.
• Amusement Park of Doom: Most of the action in Stairway to Danger takes place in a run-down amusement park that was closed after the rollercoaster proved to be dangerous.
• Big Brother Instinct: The villain of Stairway to Danger causes a car accident that injures Rick's younger sister Barby while fleeing the police. Rick has a personal beef with the guy for the rest of the book.
• Big Guy, Little Guy: Spindrift scientists Hobart Zircon (a towering Genius Bruiser physicist) and Julius Weiss (a short mathematician) frequently appear together.
• Evil Poacher: Cunner, a henchman from Sea Gold, is locally despised for his illegal and unethical fishing methods.
• Faking the Dead: The villain of the first book leaps off a cliff to his apparent death, but its later revealed that he swam back to shore, as he reappears as the villain two books later.
• Friendly Sniper: Rick's good-natured sidekick Scotty is a World War II veteran who is very attached to his rifle and uses it to injure or intimidate villains in several books.
• Harpoon Gun: Rick, Scotty, and a trio of villainous divers shoot at each other with spear guns in The Wailing Octopus.
• Hidden Elf Village: The Lost City feature a valley inhabited by the descendants of Genghis Khan's subjects, who have had almost no contact with the modern world since Khan's death.
• I Ate WHAT?!: In The Phantom Shark, Barty is appalled when her dinner turns out to be a kind of bat.
• Massive Numbered Siblings: Tag Along Kid Chahda is the fourteenth child of his parents.
• Precious Puppy: The Brant family's puppy Dismal is a bright and adorable dog who shows even fewer signs of aging than the human characters.
• Really 17 Years Old: Scotty lied about his age to join the army in his early teens.
• Ruthless Modern Pirates: The villains of The Pirates of Shan are a massive gang of heavily-armed South Pacific pirates who kidnap and threaten people at will, although they also have enough Pragmatic Villainy not to commit needless murders that will attract the authorities.
• "Scooby-Doo" Hoax: 'The Blue Ghost Mystery'' features an apparent ghost from The American Civil War as part of a real estate scam.

@ Batman (1966): Rogues Gallery

Edited by Melinda on Jan 12th 2022 at 7:32:14 AM

@Bullman

In "Desperate Souls", <- comma there...fired as Deputy, confides...Emma to say "I...well... me." when...

^ Is "Deputy" a proper name/noun (i.e. a special, specific title for a position) or just the common noun "deputy", a position which can be held by multiple people at one time?

@kawaiineko333

...standing still, but regular movement resumes once he moves, and, <- comma true...

@Mauserhawkefd3435

Changed verbs to present tense as per How to Write an Example - Write in Historical Present Tense.

...Dexter, he says the line <- no comma "Open...done!", <- comma which is a Call-Back to...and says "Open...

^ The Call-Back change is not an English correction, it just allows the reader to realize that Call-Back is a TV Tropes page and look it up more easily.

Dexter realizes that...him, so he allows Harrison to kill him.

@Donquill

Changed verbs to present tense as per How to Write an Example - Write in Historical Present Tense.

Jaden has a trigger event after being heavily beaten by some jocks...

Jaden manages to...Legend comes out...friends take offense...he triggers.

For added irony, Taylor is too intimidated...

@DrScavenge27

While he's in prison, Gobor Grizzer is forced to eat excrement<- no comma and is raped immediately afterwards<- no comma by a convict named Larry Wentworth.

^ If Gobor Grizzer was forced to eat excrement by someone other than Larry Wentworth, then the comma after "excrement" was correct. However, to make it clear, you should say who it was.

...give him "The Reason You Suck" Speech <- no comma and then cut his throat open.

@Melinda

...he torments and kills...him, abandons his infant daughter and later kills her...

...Rick Brant is a science fiction series...books (especially the second series), <- comma but...

The villain of the first book leaps off a cliff to his apparent death, but it's later revealed...

In The Phantom Shark, <- comma Barty is appalled...

...who shows even fewer signs of aging than the human characters.

She goes along with Catwoman's schemes, <- comma but occasionally...

Most of her clothing and accessories are pink, <- comma and she's...