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• Cool Crown: Wears a large crown which, while it would normally be fitting for a ruler, is actually out of place for a Shogun, reflecting how he wants the others to notice his status.
• Dastardly Whiplash: He's a corrupted ruler who brought most of Wano to the brink of poverty and he's drawn in a very caricaturish evil way, with large teeth and a pointy mustache.

[The shogun is a title, and I checked it's not capitalized

for Kin'emon

• Paper-Thin Disguise: Subverted for laughs. He infiltrates the royal palace of Dressrosa in a very conspicuous Doflamingo disguise and runs into Gladius, who, despite being ironically the most devoted officer, doesn't see through the disguise.

Edited by fishysaur on Feb 11th 2019 at 10:45:52 AM

@Rippingtons 60

Ayako. <- period Her long blue hair reaches almost to her ankles. <- period It would probably touch the ground if it wasn't styled into twintails. <- no space

This is a run-on sentence connected together with a comma splice.

@fishysaur

Wears a large crown which, while it would normally be fitting for a ruler, is actually out of place for a Shogun, reflecting how he wants the others to notice his status.

^ Is Shogun the title of a specific person (i.e. The Shogun, a proper noun) or is it a generic term that many people could have (i.e. shogun, a common noun)? This determines whether it's capitalized or not.

He's a corrupted ruler who brought most of Wano to the brink of poverty and he's drawn in a very caricaturish evil way, with large teeth and a pointy mustache.

He infiltrates the royal palace of Dressrosa in a very conspicuous Doflamingo disguise and runs into Gladius, <- comma who, despite being ironically the most devoted officer, doesn't see through the disguise.

Edited by Arivne on Feb 12th 2019 at 1:57:23 AM

• Dynamo5
• Bitch in Sheep's Clothing: In public Captain Dynamo/William Warner boasted a public image as the greatest superhero in the world, in private, he was a habitual womanizer who cheated on his wife Maddie Warner, and fathered numerous children, even when it compromised his crime-fighting duties.
• Evil Power Vacuum: Inverted. With Captain Dynamo/William Warner death, his numerous enemies now take advantage of Tower City in his absence. Causing his wife Maddie Warner located five young people she believed could be his illegitimate children to form a team to protect Tower City as a permanent protector.
• Opportunistic Bastard:
  • With Captain Dynamo/William Warner death, a numerous amount of villains now take advantage of his death by targeted Tower City for their crimes.
  • It is implied that mother and daughter supervillains team Chrysalis and Synergy are taking advantage of Captain Dynamo/William Warner death (Chrysalis former lover and Synergy father) by having Synergy impersonate Captain Dynamo/William Warner to increase their power base.

• Recess
• Friendship Favoritism: Defied. In Season 2 episode "The Breakup" Ms. Grotke asks the class to write about their best friends. This causes problems for T.J., however: he can't choose a best friend. And while this strained his friendship with his friends and cause the gang to break up he still can't choose a friend. In the end T.J. write a report about how all five of his friends are his bests friends, and how special they all are. This ends up reconciling the group.
• Unwitting Instigator of Doom: In Season 2 episode Bad Hair Day TJ bribe Randall to say the haircut he give Mikey was good with a Señor Fusion issue #8 comic. Randall compliment Mikey haircut by saying the famous rock band called Dog's Pajamas got the same hair cut. Causing all the kids on the playground want the same hair cut. When they learn the truth, that this hair cut was bad and the members of the group have hair that goes all the way down to their butts. Causing all the kids to be angry at Gus, T.J. and Vince. Gus manages to quickly escape, but T.J. and Vince are chased away by an angry mob of their clientele.

• Spider-Man:
• Freudian Excuse Is No Excuse: Flash Thompson wasn't truly a villain, but this was the reason he was such a jerk in high school. His dad was an angry alcoholic who abused both him and his mom. In a story arc in the 90's involved Flash succumbing to alcoholism himself. Directionless, lonely and increasingly bitter, Flash developed a drinking problem like his father before him, leading to a car crash that got Flash arrested again and cost him his job as a school gym teacher. By this time, Flash had begun blaming much of his troubles on his family in general and his father in particular, but a violent confrontation with his father finally forced Flash to realize that he had become the same sort of self-deluded wreck his father was, and that only he could take responsibility for fixing his life. Flash sobered up and started trying to turn his life around.

• Hooligan Tribe
• Earn Your Happy Ending: At the start of the movie Hiccup village pariah because he's scrawny and usually messes everything up. His father being openly ashamed of him. His peers constantly mocking him (except Astrid and Fishlegs). All resulting in him having poor self-esteem. He finally finds a friend in Toothless and demonstrate that humans and dragons can co-exist. Get together with his crush Astrid. By the third movie he has become chief and after defeating the main villain marry Astrid. The epilogue show they had two children.

• Danny Phantom
• Fair-Weather Friend: The A-Listers are show to be willing to cut off each other from there group without remorse.
• * In season 1 episode 10 Shades of Gray when Valerie Gray father lost his job and her family become poor. Dash, Kwan, and Paulina are completely unfazed by the misfortune that befalls their friend and do not even pretend to care about what happen to her and just cut her out for being poor when she need her friends support.
  Valerie: Things are kinda tight now, ya' know?
  Dash: No.
  Paulina: Nuh-uh.
  Kwan: Not really.
• * In season 1 episode 16 when Danny temporary become popular when he started to date Paulina who at the time was possessed by Kitty, who's using Danny to make Johnny jealous. Danny took Kwan place in the group and Dash was the one who kick Kwan out despite it appearing they are close friends.
• Misery Builds Character: Early in the series, Valerie Gray was cruel, selfish, and mean-spirited like her popular friends. In "Reign Storm," she's confused for a while about why Sam and Tucker treat her uneasily, but then they remind her that she used to treat them terribly. However, her descent into unpopularity begins to change her into a nicer, less egotistical person to the people around her, making new, better friends while looking upon her former "friends" with disdain and disgust. She also becomes more compassionate and caring, going from just wanting to get revenge on ghosts like Danny Phantom to endangering herself to protect Amity Park from ghost attacks.
• With Friends Like These...: The A-Listers, they appear to be close friends but it been show that they are quick to turn on each other and are unsympathetic to each other when they have a problem.

• Killer Bass Harold, the Dweeb
• Throw the Dog a Bone:
  • In Season 2 Special Celebrity Manhunt's TDA Reunion Show. Harold join a successful boy band with Trent, Cody, and Justin. And it appear they enjoy the success and fame as a band. While the band break up they were going to get back together.
  • Though it was subtle, Leshawna and Harold's upgraded relationship in Total Drama World Tour. She seemed to be touched that she was given Harold's Num-Yos to remember him by while she was in the competition, her excitement on seeing her friends AND Harold (complete with him clapping excitedly when she returns), and in the exclusive clip for "Hawaiian Style", they're seen cuddling on a beach, implying that they are now dating.

• Fire Nation Fire Lord Ozai
• Irony: Despite it being implied he was The Unfavorite to his father Azulon. Ozai is the son being the most like his father, both being Abusive Dad and the most powerful benders in the world. And both despite being strong leaders don't care for the people of there nation, being more interested in taking over the world.
• Like Father, Like Son: Ozai is exactly like his father Azulon. Both of them are Abusive Dad who use there son. Both are tyrants who ruled the Fire Nation with an iron grip. Both despite being strong leader, cared very little for the people of his nation and was more interested in world domination, that quality Azulon passed down to Ozai.

• Polly Pocket
• Pet the Dog: Griselle Grande to her granddaughter Gwen Grande.
  • In season 1 episode Gwen the Great when Gwen was in a same dance troupe as Polly, Lila and Shani. Gwen try to steal the locket for herself, chasing the shrunken trio across the stage, it ultimately ending with her getting praise from the audience and Griselle, who all thought she was doing an abstract dance. Considering how obsessed Griselle is with getting the locket and how annoyed she can be with Gwen, it nice to see her be proud of Gwen.
  • In season 1 episode Unlocketing the Past: Part 1 Griselle aloud Gwen to get a pet rat at the the Resuce Farm Adopt-A- Thon despite just failing to steal the locket.

• Ok Ko Lets Be Heroes
• Fantastic Racism: Implied. It appear that Foxtail is considers people without powers useless. She thinks taking away a hero's power like that makes them useless. And look how she treats Greyman and Carol. She fires Greyman on the spot when he calls her out on her actions, remarking that Greyman's powerlessness means he has no place in POINT anymore. However it appear she still respectful to Carol, when Carol goes on her mission and has to bring K.O. with her, Foxtail goes along with Carol in pretending it's a scavenger hunt.
• Pet the Dog: Lord Boxman at the end of season 2 episode Lord Cowboy Darrell accept that he lost Boxmore and told tells Darrell that he's proud of him, and praising how he's been running the company.

• Nightmare in Arkham (Batman, A Nightmare on Elm Street ).
• Defeating the Undefeatable: The Joker did what so many try and failed to do and permanently killed Freddy Krueger's. When the Joker battle Freddy Krueger dream world, Krueger powers could not work on him, as the Joker explain he is the complete embodiment of pure insanity, which is actually way worse than the embodiment of fear/evil like Freddy. With absolutely nothing to exploit from the Joker, Freddy's power of fear and evil is rendered completely useless against the Joker's chaotic, twisted mind. The Joker summon three most sadistic, vile, and terrifying clown creatures ever conceived by the human imagination: Jeff the Killer, Laughing Jack, and Jason the Toymaker. The three monster clowns rip out the souls of all of Krueger victims. When the Joker pulled Freddy into the real world, they both was in "Double Grave" cell at Arkham. They call it that because it's buried twelve feet underground. When the Joker told Freddy this was going to be his tomb, Freddy point out this was not the first time he die and he alway comes back. The Joker told him this time it going to be impossible and show him a mirror which revealed when those three clown monsters tore the souls out of Freddy's body, they didn't' just rob him of all of his kills, they stripped him of his powers and reduced him back to the same pathetic mortal that he was when he entered the courtroom to stand trial all those years ago. His flesh wasn't even burned anymore. He might as well have just been found guilty and sentenced to all twenty of his life sentences plus his death sentence. Using a bomb The Joker destroy both Freddy Krueger and Arkham Asylum, finally killing Freddy Krueger once and for all.

• Earth Alfonzo Dolittle & Ferguson O'durguson
• We Used to Be Friends: The Deep Trouble comics show that a falling out with Star was the in-universe reason for them being Demoted to Extra in Season 2. Star stopped taking them with her and Marco on adventures because of their immature behavior. She gets even more reason to distance herself from them when she finds out that they've been breaking into her room and screwing around with her stuff, and she speaks of them rather disdainfully even before learning about that. Star's offhand line about how Marco would still be hanging out with them if she were never born implies that Marco might spends much less time with them. He doesn't look too happy to see that they've been breaking into his house to raid Star's room either. Finally Subverted in episode Sophomore Slump revealed that Marco is still friends with them and hang around them. Those they did get annoy at Marco when he keep talking about Mewni, they accept Marco apology for his behavior and they present him with their lucky dice as he leave for Mewni.

• Batman
• The brotherly relationship between Richard John "Dick" Grayson and Damian Wayne. As noted Grayson had a dislike for Damian, but following the events of Batman's apparent death during the Final Crisis, Nightwing has closed down shop in New York so as to return to Gotham, where after the events of "Battle for the Cowl", he assumes the identity of Batman, and took in Damian Wayne, as the new Robin. After a rough start they not only become a effective Batman and Robin team but develop a strong brotherly bond with Dick Grayson being one of the very few people that genuinely supports and believes in Damian, which eventually pays off when Damian actually grows to respect and care for Dick, which begins to shape him in a much more heroic person then he was when introduced. This was best show in ending of Teen Titans issue #92.
  Richard Nice Work, Robin. It's Good to have you back. I'm only sorry that your time with the titans was such a bust.
  Damian Not your fault. You had great memories there, and you think they're all so appealing. But what they are—is annoying. Like little children.
  Damian I know you wanted me to find some friends. But I've already got one here in gotham. And one is more than enough.

Edited by AmazingCartoonHero on Feb 12th 2019 at 11:34:14 AM

In General

• Kogarashi and his relationship with the Inn members. Before he was a lonely orphan boy who was abandon and haunted by ghosts ever since he was a kid. Before he never had a family, friends, or even a place to live. While his relationship with the Inn members was rocky due to being the only male (Sagiri), padding too hard (Yaya) and seeing them naked during bath time by accident several times, it soon turns into a True Companions kind of friendship where they respect and love Kogarashi. After so many years, Kogarashi has finally found himself a place to call home.
• Despite giving up the chance for free rents forever, Kogarashi was willing to give it up to save Yuuna and clearing her regret in a peaceful route rather than punching her.
• In Chapter 25, after getting to know the real Kogarashi over the series, Chisaki wanted to prove to everyone in her class that Kogarashi is a real psychic and wanted to make up for all the kind things he did for her. This shows a lot of development between the two ever since the duo first met. Extra points for Yuuna and Sagiri willingly to help out as well.
  • Instead of punching out the angry spirit that was caused by accident from the two students, Kogarashi apoloize to the angry spirit for awaken it and beg it to go back to sleep. The angry spirit understood and return, gaining respect from the two students
• In Chapter 26, despite the fact he wants and normal school life and that he will look like a crazy lonely person, Kogarashi took Yuuna hand and dance with her during the Bon Fire, since it is something she wanted to do. Extra points for not caring what the others said and only caring if Yuuna was happy.
  • Instead of ruining his reputation like the lifting skirt incident, the male students respected Kogarashi for seemingly dancing alone since a lot of the males were too afraid to dance at all.
• In Chapter 40, the sheer effort Kogarashi put into making enough money to buy Yuuna birthday gift to the point of making himself sick.
  • Yuuna putting a lot of her time to treat the sick Kogarashi and was more worried over his illness than seeing her bare breast again after wandering to his bed again.
• In Chapter 49, after the three girls (Yuuna, Hibari, and Chisaki) confess they are in love with Kogarashi, they were in silence. Until Yuuna revealed that she was happy to be considered as a love rival despite being a ghost and Hibari vowing that despite them being love rival, she still values her friendship with the three and wish to remain that way even if one of them ended up with Kogarashi. This brings Chisaki to tears of joy.
  • Sagiri doing everything she can to stop Kogarashi from overhearing the girls confession over their love for him.
• In Chapter 57, the Inn members were coming up with varies of ideas on how to celebrate Kogarashi birthday and came up with the best idea; having a mixed bath (with swimsuits) so he would not feel lonely while bathing.
  • After saving him from a forced marriage with Karuna, the Inn girls did the bath party again to make up for Kogarashi ruined surprise.
• In Chapter 73, Kogarashi, in order to repay everyone kind Valentine Chocolate gifts, went up and beyond to present them the perfect gifts. Each giving them the kind of things they want and not just making chocolates, but cookies, book, pudding, scarf, and many more.
  • While everyone had lewd imagination when trying out the gifts Kogarashi gave them, Yuuna had a purely innocent one where she imagines Kogarashi gently hugging her (even though both were naked.)
• In Chapter 92, after over doing herself to be closer to Kogarashi, Yuuna passed out from heat stroke due to overstaying in a bath with Kogarashi. After waking up, Kogarashi was treating her and revealed he knew what she was doing and told her that he was fine with Yuuna welcoming him home after every work.
• In Chapter 100, Yuuna tried to stay up for Kogarashi to return from his job as usual. After believing he’s gonna be late due to helping Sagiri and Hibari with their mission, Yuuna was gonna turn it in until Kogarashi return home all sweaty. Kogarashi revealed he ran as fast as he could to make sure Yuuna doesn’t wait for him and he was excited for her cooking, bringing a great smile on her face.
• In Chapter 102, while it was Heartbreaking for Hibari, it was still gentlemen like of Kogarashi to turn her down gently instead of delaying her answer.
• In Chapter 103, after realizing that she can’t forget Kogarashi and her feelings for him, Hibari asked Kogarashi if it is okay if she can continue to love him even though he doesn’t which he agrees to if this make her happy, allowing her resolve her will to gain Kogarashi love.
• In Chapter 132, after dealing with an evil perverted spirit, Chisaki revealed that the greatest, kindest ghost she ever met is Yuuna, which made the latter smile as the two held hands.
• In Chapter 136, Kogarashi reveal the reason why he didn't help Sagiri with her arranged marriage, because he believed that Sagiri is a strong enough woman to handle her scumbag of a fiance.
  • After a long time of denial Sagiri finally accept the fact that she is in love with Kogarashi and this allows her to gain a new stronger spiritual armor.
  • After getting a warning bacon from Urara, the Yuragi Inn members (Kogarashi, Yuuna, Nonko, and Oboro,) quickly rush in to help Sagiri. What's more is that they were on standby, awaiting the moment Sagiri was in trouble.
  • Shigure and Sagiri quickly defending Hibari when the fiance father tried to strike harm to her. Family comes before duty indeed.
• While it did turn for the worse, in Chapter 141, the fact that the girls were perfectly okay with Kogarashi bathing with them for Christmas party. And this time without swimsuits. This greatly shows how much they care about Kogarashi and no longer bothered by his pressure.

• Sword Art Online: This duo of programmers show that programming isn't their only skill.
  • Akihiko Kayaba is a genius that desires a complete virtual reality. Becoming the creator of SAO, the first VRMMORPG in existence, Kayaba traps 10,000 players inside it, killing them in the real world if they die in the game while ensuring that the authorities in the real world couldn't do anything to intervene. Disguising himself as Heathcliff, the charismatic leader of the Knights of Blood, and guiding the players through Aincrad, Kayaba intends to betray them in the last dungeon, acting as the Final Boss of his own game. When Kirito is able to deduce "Heathcliff's" true identity, Kayaba praises him for his observance before challenging him to a duel, promising to end the game if Kirito wins. Keeping his word, Kayaba free the players before seemingly commiting suicide, though actually copying his Fluctlight onto the internet to continue existing. Reappearing in Fairy Dance, Kayaba helps Kirito defeat the despicable Sugou and entrust Kirito with his last invention, encouraging him to share it with the world, leading to the creation of many innovative VR games. In Alicization, Kayaba secretly helps to save the virtual world of Underworld and takes control of a robot to save his former companions.
  • Initially presented as Kirito's eccentric and annoying ally and sponsor, Seijirou Kikuoka reveals to be much more. Actually a Liutenant in the JSDF, Kikuoka leads RATH, creators of the virtual world Underworld, inhabited for highly developed A.I.s know as "Artificial Fluctlights". Convincing Kirito to work in the Project Alicization while hiding its morally dubious aspects from him, Kikuoka intends to use "complete Fluctlights" as combatants, hoping to avoid human casualties in warfare and showing Japan's potential to the world. After Kirito is hospitalized and suffer from brain damage, Kikuoka broughts him from the hospital to the Ocean Turtle and connects him in the Underworld, hoping to save his mind out of genuine concern and affection. After the Ocean Turtle is attacked from Glowgen Defense Systems, Kikuoka helps to defend it, sends Asuna to the Underworld to save Kirito and stop the sociopathic Gabriel Miller and is injured while trying to protect his companions. Initially willing to sacrifice infinite A.I.s for one single human, Kikuoka learns to value the Underworld and promises to protect it. Having helped Kirito and Asuna a last time, Kikuoka successfully fakes his death after showing Japan's potential, completely avoiding any punsishment.

Edited by KazuyaProta on Feb 15th 2019 at 5:42:00 AM

@Saru 2019

Changed verbs from past to present tense as per How to Write an Example - Write in Historical Present Tense.

Kogarashi and his relationship with the Inn members. Before He was a lonely orphan boy who was abandoned and haunted by ghosts ever since he was a kid. Before He never had a family, friends, or even a place to live. While his relationship with the Inn members was rocky due to being the only male (Sagiri), padding (???) too hard (Yaya) and seeing them naked during bath time by accident several times, it soon turns into a True Companions kind of friendship where they respect and love Kogarashi. After so many years, Kogarashi has finally found himself a place to call home.

I know that "padding" is incorrect, but I don't know what it should be.

Despite giving up the chance for free rent forever, Kogarashi is willing to give it up to save Yuuna and relieve (???) her regret in a peaceful way rather than punching her.

• In Chapter 25, after getting to know the real Kogarashi over the course of the series, Chisaki wants to prove to everyone in her class that Kogarashi is a real psychic and wants to reward him for all the kind things he did for her. This shows a lot of development between the two ever since they first met. Extra points for Yuuna and Sagiri willingly helping out as well.
  • Instead of punching out the angry spirit that was created by accident by the two students, Kogarashi apologizes to the angry spirit for awakening it and begs it to go back to sleep. The angry spirit understands and returns, gaining respect from the two students. <- period

The second example above violates Example Indentation, which is a suspension-worthy offense. Several more examples below do as well.

• In Chapter 26, despite the fact he wants a normal school life and that he will look like a crazy lonely person, Kogarashi takes Yuuna's hand and dances with her during the Bon Fire, since it is something she wants to do. Extra points for not caring what the others say and only caring if Yuuna is happy.
  • Instead of ruining his reputation like the lifting skirt incident, the male students respect Kogarashi for seemingly dancing alone, <- comma since a lot of them were too afraid to dance at all.

• In Chapter 40, the sheer effort Kogarashi puts into making enough money to buy Yuuna a birthday gift, <- comma to the point of making himself sick.
  • Yuuna putting a lot of her time into treating the sick Kogarashi and being more worried about his illness than him (???) seeing her bare breast again after wandering to his bed again.

• In Chapter 49, after the three girls (Yuuna, Hibari, and Chisaki) confess they are in love with Kogarashi. <- period They go silent until Yuuna reveals that she is happy to be considered as a love rival despite being a ghost, <- comma and Hibari vows that despite them being love rivals, she still values her friendship with the three and wishes to remain that way even if one of them ends up with Kogarashi. This brings Chisaki to Tears of Joy.
  • Sagiri doing everything she can to stop Kogarashi from overhearing the girls ' confession of their love for him.

• In Chapter 57, the Inn members come up with a variety of ideas on how to celebrate Kogarashi's birthday. <- period The best idea: <- colon having a mixed bath (with swimsuits) so he will not feel lonely while bathing.
  • After saving him from a forced marriage to Karuna, the Inn girls do the bath party again to make up for Kogarashi's ruined surprise.

• In Chapter 73, Kogarashi, in order to repay everyone's kind Valentine Chocolate gifts, goes above and beyond to present them the perfect gifts. He gives each of them the kind of things they want: <- colon and not just making chocolates, but cookies, books, pudding, a scarf, and much more.
  • While everyone had lewd imaginings when trying out the gifts Kogarashi gave them, Yuuna had a purely innocent one where she imagines Kogarashi gently hugging her (even though both were naked).

In Chapter 92, after overdoing her efforts to be closer to Kogarashi, Yuuna passes out from heat stroke due to overstaying in a bath with him. After she wakes up, Kogarashi treats her, <- comma reveals that he knows what she was doing and tells her that he is fine with Yuuna welcoming him home every day after work.

In Chapter 100, Yuuna tries to stay up to wait for Kogarashi to return from his job as usual. After believing he’s gonna be late due to helping Sagiri and Hibari with their mission, she is gonna turn it in until Kogarashi returns home all sweaty. Kogarashi reveals he ran as fast as he could to make sure Yuuna didn’t wait up for him and he was excited for her cooking, bringing a great smile to her face.

In Chapter 102, while it was heartbreaking for Hibari, it was still gentlemanly of Kogarashi to turn her down gently instead of delaying his (???) answer.

In Chapter 103, after realizing that she can’t forget Kogarashi and her feelings for him, Hibari asks Kogarashi if it is okay if she can continue to love him even though he doesn’t love her, <- comma which he agrees to if it makes her happy, allowing her to resolve her will to gain his love.

In Chapter 132, after dealing with an evil perverted spirit, Chisaki reveals that the greatest, kindest ghost she ever met is Yuuna, which made the latter smile as the two held hands.

• In Chapter 136, Kogarashi reveals that the reason why he didn't help Sagiri with her arranged marriage <- no comma is because he believed that Sagiri is a strong enough woman to handle her scumbag of a fiance.
  • After a long period of denial, <- comma Sagiri finally accepts the fact that she is in love with Kogarashi, <- comma and this allows her to gain a new stronger spiritual armor.
  • After getting a warning beacon (???) from Urara, the Yuragi Inn members (Kogarashi, Yuuna, Nonko, and Oboro <- no comma) quickly rush in to help Sagiri.
  • Shigure and Sagiri quickly defending Hibari when the fiancee's father tried to strike harm to her. Family comes before duty indeed.

While it did take a turn for the worse, in Chapter 141, the fact that the girls were perfectly okay with Kogarashi bathing with them for the Christmas party, <- comma and this time without swimsuits. This greatly shows how much they care about Kogarashi and are no longer bothered by his pressure.

Edited by Arivne on Feb 15th 2019 at 4:58:48 AM

@Kazuya Prota

Changed verbs from past to present tense as per How to Write an Example - Write in Historical Present Tense.

Akihiko Kayaba is a genius that desires a complete virtual reality. Becoming the creator of SAO, the first VRMMORPG in existence, Kayaba traps 10,000 players inside it, killing them in the real world if they die in the game while ensuring that the authorities in the real world can't do anything to intervene...When Kirito is able to deduce "Heathcliff's" true identity, Kayaba praises him for his powers of observation before challenging him to a duel, promising to end the game if Kirito wins. Keeping his word, Kayaba frees the players before seemingly committing suicide, though actually copying his Fluctlight onto the internet to continue existing. Reappearing in Fairy Dance, Kayaba helps Kirito defeat the despicable Sugou and entrusts Kirito with his last invention, encouraging him to share it with the world, leading to the creation of many innovative VR games...

Initially presented as Kirito's eccentric and annoying ally and sponsor, Seijirou Kikuoka is revealed to be much more. Actually a lieutenant in the JSDF, Kikuoka leads RATH, creators of the virtual world Underworld, which is inhabited by highly developed A.I.s known as "Artificial Fluctlights". Convincing Kirito to work in the Project Alicization while hiding its morally dubious aspects from him, Kikuoka intends to use "complete Fluctlights" as combatants, hoping to avoid human casualties in warfare and showing Japan's potential to the world. After Kirito is hospitalized and suffers from brain damage, Kikuoka takes him from the hospital to the Ocean Turtle and connects him in the Underworld, hoping to save his mind out of genuine concern and affection. After the Ocean Turtle is attacked by Glowgen Defense Systems, Kikuoka helps to defend it, sends Asuna to the Underworld to save Kirito and stop the sociopathic Gabriel Miller, <- comma and is injured while trying to protect his companions. Initially willing to sacrifice infinite A.I.s for one single human, Kikuoka learns to value the Underworld and promises to protect it. Having helped Kirito and Asuna one last time, Kikuoka successfully fakes his death after showing Japan's potential, completely avoiding any punishment.

Edited by Arivne on Feb 15th 2019 at 5:10:37 AM

Game: Deus Ex: Mankind Divided

• Prison Riot: In the Criminal Past DLC, Jensen goes undercover as an inmate into a high-security prison for augmented people to contact a fellow undercover agent. However, it quickly becomes obvious that some shady business is going on inside the facility, something that the prisoners themselves had enough of. Not much after Jensen's arrival, the situation escalates into a full-blown prison riot.

Is this where I get grammar help, because I got a message this isn't the location despite what I was told

Some tropes for

Cavendish

• Cool Sword: His sword is among the finest ones in One Piece's world and is named Durandal, like the sword of Roland, a Frankish soldier under Charlemagne and a famous figure in the European literature.
• Meaningful Name: He's named after Cavendish square, which is where Jack the ripper (supposedly) used to kill his victims. and his character partially takes inspiration from Jack the ripper.

the new giants pirates in general

• Badass Cape: All of them are badass giant warriors and wears a large cape.
• Our Giants Are Bigger: As the name of the crew says, they're all giants form Elbaf.
• Hired Guns: They used to be mercenaries working in the Buggy's delivery until Hajrudin has become an ally of the Straw Hats and they've defected.
• Horny Vikings: Like most giants from Elbaf, their appearance and clothing style is based off stereotypical vikings, complete with names that reference Norse Mytology.

Hajrudin

• Calling Your Attacks: His strongest punch, which he uses to send Machvise up against the birdcage, is called Gungnir, like Odin's spear.

for Goldberg

• Face-Design Shield: Has a shield with a smiling face.

For Hanzo

One of Orochi's Oniwabanshu. He's able to crawl on the ceiling and uses rope to catch the intruders.

• Acrofatic: He's a large and fat ninja, but that doesn't make him any less stealthy or agile.
• Groin Attack: Shinobu is not amused to see that Hanzo doesn't consider her beautiful anymore.
• Knows the Ropes: Uses some rope to catch Robin, which is actually revealed to be one a fake body.
• Named After Somebody Famous: His name comes obviously from the famous samurai Hattori Hanzo, although the two have almost nothing else in common.
• Wall Crawl: Despite his size, he's constantly seen crawling on the ceiling, allowing him to sneak in Orochi's mansion unnoticed.

for Daikoku

One of Orochi's Oniwabanshu.

• Rapunzel Hair: Has a very long mane of wild hair.
• Religious and Mythological Theme Naming: He's named after Daikokuten, one of the Seven Lucky Gods.

for Nami

• Ninja: To blend into Wano, Kin'emon gives her a ninja outfit and Nami calls him out for having made it too fanservicey. During the arc, she infiltrates with Shinobu, a real kunoichi, in Orochi's castle to gather informations.

Edited by fishysaur on Feb 16th 2019 at 1:36:38 AM

@Ruben Ferro

In the Criminal Past DLC, Jensen goes undercover as an inmate in a high-security prison for augmented people to contact a fellow undercover agent. However, it quickly becomes obvious that some shady business is going on inside the facility, something that the prisoners themselves have had enough of. Not long after Jensen's arrival, the situation escalates into a full-blown prison riot.

@Saru 2019

Yes, this is the place to get help with your grammar. The message you received was incorrect.

If you look up above, you'll see that I corrected the English in your earlier post.

@fishysaur

He's named after Cavendish Square, which is where Jack the Ripper (supposedly) used to kill his victims. and His character partially takes inspiration from Jack the Ripper.

^ I replaced "Jack the ripper" with a Pot Hole to the Useful Note for him.

All of them are badass giant warriors and wear large capes.

As the name of the crew says, they're all giants from Elbaf.

They used to be mercenaries working in the Buggy's delivery until Hajrudin has became an ally of the Straw Hats and they defected.

^ "working in the Buggy's delivery..." what?

Like most giants from Elbaf, their appearance and clothing style are based off stereotypical Vikings, complete with names that reference Norse Mythology.

Uses some rope to catch Robin, who is actually revealed to be one a fake body.

His name obviously comes from the famous samurai Hattori Hanzo, although the two have almost nothing else in common.

Despite his size, he's constantly seen crawling on the ceiling, allowing him to sneak into Orochi's mansion unnoticed.

During the arc, she infiltrates with Shinobu, a real kunoichi, in Orochi's castle to gather information.

Edited by Arivne on Feb 16th 2019 at 10:29:51 AM

From Yuuna Hot Spring

• World's Strongest Man: With years of training by his master, Ouga, and inheriting the Yatahagane martial art style, Kogarashi effectively became the world most powerful man by pure strength alone. And this all happen when Kogarashi was merely a middle schooler. However, by the time of the first chapter, Kogarashi grew weaker because he hasn’t been training after defeating Garandou and world-hopping. But after being fully restored by using spirit crystals from the Ameno ninjas and Yuuna giving him some spirit energy back, his spirit power is over 1 billion.

Edited by Saru2019 on Feb 19th 2019 at 9:24:36 AM

Kingdom Hearts 3/ Heartwarming:

• Even though it's bittersweet with Sora suddenly and mysteriously just vanished to thin air thanks to abusing his Power of Waking, the scene of Sora and Kairi sitting together watching a warm sunset, clutching each other's hands tightly as they share a loving gaze is very, very sweet. Though they remain apart once again, a photo of them appears in the credits of them together, bringing hope that the two may be reunited once again.
  • And at least the secret ending seems to imply Riku's going to get Sora back for the umpteenth time.
  • The secret ending itself. The fact that Sora wakes up in Shibuya offers solace in the fact that his reunion with Kairi and his loved ones is once again possible.
    • Sora and Kairi are sitting together, hand in hand - it seems they've made their relationship official.

Edited by jahman on Feb 16th 2019 at 4:11:34 AM

The third-level indent should be reduced to a second-level indent.

"just vanished" should be "vanishing".

Otherwise it's pretty good.

Edited by Albert3105 on Feb 16th 2019 at 7:16:52 AM

In General

• In Chapter 46, Yuuna woke up in Kogharashi bed again, she did not poltergeist him like every morning. Yuuna thought about it and wonder if he will hug her like last time on the school trip, causing her to freak out and blush. When Kogarashi awake he finds Yuuna tied herself up like a fruitcake, believing it was the only way.
  • Despite having a solid body from Koyuzu leaf, nobody besides Kogarashi, notice the difference, causing her to be depressed.
• In Chapter 55, all the girls (Yuuna, Hibari, and Chisaki) we’re getting tense and excited over who would get Kogarashi secret Santa Gift...only to be revealed that Chitose got the gift instead
  • When Koyuzu got the Landlady magical Christmas Card gift that makes any wish come to true for one day, Koyuzu put it to good use before a warning from Chitose. That wish being, to bathe with everyone naked in a giant cake and sweets
• In Chapter 73, the fact that Kogarashi White Day sweet gift can mimic the scenes from Shokugeki no Soma is plain insane.
  • The fact that the lewdest thing Yuuna could come up with her mind when trying the blanket is an image of Kogarashi holding her naked.
  • Despite not eating it like the other girls, Chisaki still somehow had a lewd fantasy.
• In Chapter 85, Chisaki had a lewd dream where she was Kogarashi girlfriend and beg him to go all out...which she screamed as she woke up.
  • Wanting to control her dream better, Chisaki asked Harumu to make her dream feel real like world trip. And so far it works...until in real life, she imagined herself naked in school and it feels real.
  • Things turn for the worse when she started to see everyone naked, including a full view of Kogarashi body.

• Ensemble Dark Horse:
  • Yuuna is currently the most popular main character in the series, both male and female. In two popularity poll in Japan, she won twice amount of votes compared to the other characters in the series. This can be greatly related to her adorable nature and her effort to make Kogarashi life easier.
  • Oddly enough, Chisaki, a normal high school girl with no powers until she gains spirit vision, was named second popular character twice in a row. Many fans claim the reason being for her adorable nature, but yet hidden lewd mind that even she is ashamed of at times.
  • The third most popular female character would be Sagiri for her awesome ninja ability, her Tsundere nature and shy feeling over her not being feminine enough. It also helps that unlike other Tsundere, she was sooner to learn that Kogarashi isn't a bad person and the accidents were mere accidents.
  • Nonko is also quite popular despite not being a major character due to her party-loving, Cool Big Sister personality. It also helps that she is a Ms. Fanservice Buxom Is Better.

• Fan-Preferred Couple: While there are many strong support over who should Kogarashi end up with, many fans do agree that Kogarashi should Marry Them All to the girls who showed interest in him (Yuuna, Chisaki, Sagiri, Hibari, Oboro, and Karuna) due to how supportive they can be to each other and how Kogarashi treat each of them with kindess and making effort to make them happy.

• Growing the Beard: When the series first started, many fans complain over how many cliches there were during the first few chapters. However, Chapter 49 and onward, many fans agreed that it had improved when Yuuna, Hibari, and Chiskai confess they have feelings for Kogarashi to each other and become love rivals. And the event surrounding Hibari confessing her feelings to Kogarashi and being rejected around Chapter 101.

• Above the Influence: Kogarashi refuses to have sex with anyone without love, which is the reason why he rejects Oboro proposal since she just wanted to have strong babies.
• Due to his intense training and strong moral nature, Kogarashi has a powerful mental state where he can resist powerful spells like a Succubus eye glare that make men go crazy with lust. When Haruma accidentally used her charm power on him, Kogarashi was affected, but instead ended up like a gentleman to Haruma.
  • When Kogarashi was affected by the aphrodisiac hot spring, Kogarashi, unlike the girls, ended up having a somewhat control over it and manage to not sleep with anyone.
• Chick Magnet: While he isn't the most popular guy in the school due to his talks about ghosts, Kogarashi draw in a strong amount of women who are so gorgeous that random bystanders blush when they walk by. Most of those girls are in love with him to varying degrees ranging from obviously interested to Stalker with a Crush. The kind of girls he drew in are; a beautiful ghost girl, the most popular girl in his school, a powerful ninja and her cousin, servant of the Ryuuga family, and the Tengu daughter leader who is head over heel for him.
• Lust Object: While the girls do genuinely love Kogarashi for his kind nature and strong characteristic, a lot of the girls want Kogarashi bad. Chisaki, who was a strong moral girl who was afraid of males, start having sexual fantasy over him. Oboro still wants to bed him despite wanting a genuine relationship now instead of strong babies. Karuna has a collection of every picture of him and keeps them in her room as a Stalker Shrine. Even Yuuna, who is arguably innocent, has a subconscious mind to always be next to Kogarashi whenever sleeping and nearly always getting naked for it.
• Took a Level in Badass: While Hibari was no mean weak, she was least skilled than Sagiri in ninjutsu and wanted to be better than her. When a monster threatening to remove all memories of Kogarashi, Hibari developed a new spiritual armor that proves to be far stronger than Sagiri and easily took out the monster that was proven too difficult for Sagiri.
• Took a Level in Badass: After finally coming to term with her feelings for Kogarashi, Sagiri develop a new spiritual armor and was able to take out her ex-fiance who was the second strongest fighter in the moment as Kogarashi was still weak

Edited by Saru2019 on Feb 16th 2019 at 10:57:17 AM

• Girl Next Door: While they were never neighbor or childhood friend with Kogarashi, Chisaki has the personality of one as she is a Nice Girl and after getting to know Kogarashi, tried everything she can to be supportive of him.
• Sharing a Body: Temporarily, but Chisaki let Koyuzu share her body for a while as they were on the run from Ouga.
  • Must shorter, but Chisaki let Yuuna share her body to stop an evil perverted spirit in Chapter 132, increasing her powers.

Edited by Saru2019 on Feb 19th 2019 at 9:58:50 AM

• If It's You, It's Okay: Zig-Zagged. Yuuna did state that she does not mind Kogarashi seeing her half-naked whenever she wakes up due to her bad sleeping habits...however, she is still greatly embarrassed by it and freak out whenever it happens and admit this is mainly her fault
• Single-Target Sexuality: Yuuna does show varies interest in romance and dating like a high schooler in the past, but so far had only showed interested in dating in Kogarashi than any other males.
• Single-Target Sexuality: Sagiri never showed much interest in males because they are usually are afraid of her and used marriage as a means for a mission. But as soon as she fell for Kogarashi, she does not show any other males
• Single-Target Sexuality: Oboro never cared for males and only seducing Kogarashi for strong child. After falling for him, she does not want any other males but Kogarashi.
• Single-Target Sexuality: As far as many people could, Hibari only showed interest in Kogarashi. Even when Kogarashi reject her feelings, Hibari could not get over it and still in love with him.
• Single-Target Sexuality: Despite having many males showing interest in her and confessing their feelings, Chisaki only has eyes for Kogarashi.
• Single-Target Sexuality: Karura is purely Kogarashi-sexually and obsessed with him to the point of Stalker with a Crush

^ x 7 @jahman

• Even though it's bittersweet, <- comma with Sora suddenly and mysteriously just vanishing into thin air thanks to abusing his Power of Waking, the scene of Sora and Kairi sitting together watching a warm sunset, clutching each other's hands tightly as they share a loving gaze, <- comma is very, very sweet. Though they remain apart once again, a photo of them together appears in the credits of them together, bringing hope that the two may be reunited once again.
  • And The secret ending, at least, seems to imply Riku's going to get Sora back for the umpteenth time.

Edited by Arivne on Feb 17th 2019 at 3:42:04 AM

• Knights of the Old Republic
• Doesn't Know Their Own Child: Played for Drama Krynda Draay had a vision of her vision in which the First Watch Circle executed their Padawans. She suffered a stroke, rendering her unable to move. Subsequently, Haazen imprisoned her in a crystal oubliette to keep her alive in stasis, where she experience the Padawan massacre repeatedly. Krynda barely endured the torment with the desperate hope that her son [[Lucien Draay Knight Templar]] would never commit murder. When she was removed from the stasis pod and Lucien told her the truth, he did not kill any Padawan, he order there murder. Outrage and horrifying she tell him no mission is worth the lives of younglings, and asked Lucien who had led him to believe that murdering the Padawans was the right thing to do. She was horrified when Lucien said she had, and that he had done it to carry out her mission—by any means necessary. Realizing that her teachings had led her son to murder his students, Krynda claimed that she had been wrong the entire time. In her last moments, she told Lucien to accept his mistakes and face the future with humility.
• Fair-Weather Mentor: The First Watch Circle Jedi Masters were this to there Padawans. While is true that Lucien was the worse of them and the other masters at least the four other masters actually put effort into the training of their Padawans, it clear they only took Padawans in because they had no choose as they need a cover-up for their secret activities in the Jedi Covenant. When they got a vision they believe show them one of there students turning to the Dark Side, they decide to kill there students. How they react to the thought of killings there students varies. Raana Tey was the first to say kill there students, those later she would suffer from guilt. Lucien Draay and Feln were indifferent to the thought of killing there students, and show no remorse. Q'Anilia and Xamar were the ones most horribly of the thought of killing there students but reluctantly agree to kill them. Both Q'Anilia and Xamar suffer a tremendous amount of guilt for the muder there student, but only Xamar question if they did the right thing and finally confess to there crimes.

Changed verbs from past to present tense as per How to Write an Example - Write in Historical Present Tense.

Krynda Draay has a vision of her vision in which the First Watch Circle execute their Padawans. She suffers a stroke, rendering her unable to move. Subsequently, Haazen imprisons her in a crystal oubliette to keep her alive in stasis, where she experiences the Padawan massacre repeatedly. Krynda barely endures the torment because of her desperate hope that her son Lucien Draay will never commit murder. When she is removed from the stasis pod and Lucien tells her the truth, that he did not kill any Padawans, he ordered their murders. Outraged and horrified, <- comma she tells him no mission is worth the lives of younglings, and asked Lucien who had led him to believe that murdering the Padawans was the right thing to do. She is horrified when Lucien says she had, and that he had done it to carry out her mission—by any means necessary.

The First Watch Circle Jedi Masters are this to their Padawans. While it's true that Lucien was the worst of them and the other masters at least the four other masters actually put effort into the training of their Padawans, it is clear they only took Padawans in because they had no choice, <- comma as they needed a cover-up for their secret activities in the Jedi Covenant. When they get a vision they believe shows them one of their students turning to the Dark Side, they decide to kill their students. How they react to the thought of killing their students varies. Raana Tey was the first to say they should kill their students, though later she would suffer from guilt. Lucien Draay and Feln are indifferent to the thought of killing their students <- no comma and show no remorse. Q'Anilia and Xamar are the ones most horrified at the thought of killing their students, <- comma but reluctantly agree to kill them. Both Q'Anilia and Xamar suffer a tremendous amount of guilt for the murder of their students, but only Xamar questions if they did the right thing and finally confesses to their crimes.

Edited by Arivne on Feb 19th 2019 at 12:57:46 PM