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From page 377 @Melinda

The court-appointed defense lawyer is drunk and isn't given any time to sober up or search for witnesses among the nearby townspeople, <- comma the Dirty Cop who arrested Matt serves as the judge and the jurors all owe favors to the judge.

Ivan and Leonid barely show any emotion, <- comma whether they're conducting business or being held at gunpoint.

Did Stromberg's secretary betray him because of greed or because she wanted to thwart his plan to wipe out most of the human race? <- question mark

There are a few more tropes for this story <- no comma that I didn't have room for in this post.

A comedic Christmas short story with mystery themes, <- comma written by...

Chris McCoy, <- comma the editor of DVD Now!

...causing Erik to retaliate <- no comma against the person she's tricked him into thinking...

...but the staff of Muscles Now! wraps up early and leaves for the holidays...

Edited by Arivne on Jan 17th 2021 at 10:39:43 AM

• Accel World: White Cosmos—older sister of Black Lotus—is the beloved King of Oscillatory Universe and the real leader of the Acceleration Research Society. One of the first Burst Linkers, Cosmos is determined to survive the eventual destruction of Brain Burst to discover its secrets. For this goal, Cosmos convinces many powerful players to her cause, using the White Legion as a cover while the Society realizes experiments to become more powerful, murdering other players like Saphron Blosson to obtain unique items. When Red Rider started to create a lasting peace that Cosmos saw as stagnation, Cosmos manipulates Lotus to murder Rider, causing Lotus' exile in both the virtual and real world. In the present, Cosmos prepares to tame the unbeatable Tezcatiploca and thanks her enemies for their unwilling help after her success, before kidnapping Silver Crow—Lotus' boyfriend—to confuse him with her affable behaviour before blackmailing him into becoming her spy.

For Magnificent Bastard. I put a emphasis on her traits like she earning the loyalty of strong Burst Linkers and how her Affably Evil attitude makes The Hero himself feel mixed feelings towards her.

Edited by KazuyaProta on Jan 17th 2021 at 1:46:32 PM

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From page 377 @ElJuaco

In the third season finale, John Kreese agrees to leave if the Miyagi Do...So why doesn't the board oppose Cobra Kai joining the dojo if Kreese is back running it? Shouldn't they wonder why Johnny was the dojo's sensei months ago but Kreese is now?

If the Jedi Council had continued to deny training to Anakin after Qui-Gon's death, then what would have happened to the young kid? Qui-Gon had freed him from his life as a slave on Tatooine, <- comma only...

From page 377 @Stardust 120

Vil's Unique Magic "Fairest One of All". <- period Not only he can cast curses, but he can create a poisonous liquid that evaporates into a mist. <- period If anyone inhales it, their bodies are paralyzed in a second. The poison can also be used to kill people, <- comma such as overblot Vil's failed attempt to use it on Rook...

^ In order for this to fit the trope, it has to be corrosive as well as poisonous. Since it doesn't say that it is corrosive, it's either a Zero-Context Example or Not an Example.

In Lilia's Birthday Suit SSR personal story. <- period Silver and Sebek once underwent harsh training by Lilia during their early childhood, <- comma such as swimming up against the rapids and climbing up a mountain...

Edited by Arivne on Jan 17th 2021 at 10:53:44 AM

So I was planning of adding a new example of Horrible Anime And Manga page about a new anime adaptation of Ex-Arm. But first I you check my example if there's anything to fix on my grammar. Here's my example:

• The all-CGI anime adaptation of Ex-Arm, a manga about a boy named Akira got his brain transfer to a superweapon by a policewoman. The story and the fight scene looks interesting but the animation looks incredibly janky that it looks like it was an ad for a mobile game. The facial expressions of characters looks unsettling and tedious. Not to mention that none of the staff members have any experience of making an anime.. The trailer on Website/Youtube got 32k dislikes and the show itself got 2.32 rating (Which is even lower then Pupa) on My Anime List. Watch Lost Pause tear it down here.

I was planning to add more details but I want you to check it first.

Edited by Bubblepig on Jan 17th 2021 at 11:38:46 AM

“What is that? It's The Unknown!”

Le Chat

• Look-Alike Lovers: When The Cat's wife appears in early comics, she tends to be drawn as a female clone of himself. She as a more distinct appearence in later comics.
• Losing Your Head: One strip is about The Cat's nephews casually removing The Cat's head from his body during his sleep and playing basketball with it. In the end, they put the head back on The Cat's body and he doesn't seem to have noticed anything weird after he wakes up.
• Medium Awareness: The Cat and sometime other characters are clearly aware that they are comic book characters.
• Protagonist Title: The Cat's name appears in the titles of every comics.
• Shout-Out: Characters and references from other comic books tends to often appear, especially from francophone comics.
• Smart Animal, Inconvenient Instincts: By default, The Cat acts in a very human manner, but there's a strip where he interupts himself to chase after a mouse and apologize for his instinct to the viewers after catching it.
• The Yellow M Shout Out: The cover title of La Marque du Chat ( Meaning The Cat's mark, taken from "The Yellow Mark", the French title of The Yellow M) is a parody of The Yellow M's cover

Blacksad - Characters (Neal Beato)

• Everyone Has Standards: While he laughs easily, he does not find racist jokes funny and they just make him uncomfortable.

Canardo

• Above Good and Evil: When Rasputin orders his men to burn a village, Canardo asks him to stop because it's bad, Rasputin simply kicks him in the head from his horse and tells him that he is above good and evil.

From page 377 @owlcyclops

From the episode of "Giving Criticism": <- colon

While J.P is explaining that you must never stop an obsession with bashing a creator's work, you can see him writing "or do anything, just do anything else" as he finishes off the listing. <- period

When J.P describes feedback about how a bulldozer demolishes a house, there is text that reads "I think this image pretty much summarizes the channel". <- period

From the episode "Intrigue plots": <- colon

As J.P. is explaining on the overly complex plot on a board, the senator who was framed <- no comma is seen saying: <- colon

"Jokes on you, Conspiracy! My approval rating can't get any lower!"

From page 377 @jahman

Ash has just as much of a right...considering how much of a Jerkass she is to him...

When Misty and Ash...he's full of himself when, <- comma during the Kanto arc, she...

Before: In the Indigo League Championships, on the day of his match with Ritchie, he is kidnapped...

^ Changed verbs from past to present tense as per How to Write an Example - Write in Historical Present Tense.

All of the stunts Luffy pulled back in Totto land come calling...and then teamed up with Kaido...Big Mom's Road Ponelglyph, until...the moment he set foot...

Edited by Arivne on Jan 17th 2021 at 11:14:05 AM

From page 376 @Minorica

In the crossover event with Steins;Gate, Daru, one of the protagonists of said game, says in his first comment (that coincidentally fits well, as MGCM is generally labeled as an eroge in both all-ages and DX versions): <- colon

The Idolmaster Cinderella Girls Starlight Stage gains a popularity and...from said game on his Twitter account.

x 5 @Bubblepig

So I was planning on adding a new example to the Horrible Anime And Manga page about a new anime adaptation of Ex-Arm. But first I want you to check my example to see if there's...

...boy named Akira who got his brain transferred to a superweapon...The story and the fight scene look interesting but the animation looks incredibly janky, <- comma that it looks like it...The facial expressions of characters are unsettling and tedious, <- comma not to mention...have any experience with making an anime. <- Only one period ...got a 2.32 rating (which is even...

Edited by Arivne on Jan 17th 2021 at 11:23:40 AM

Thank you. But I have a question. Why did you have to check my words that is not an upcoming example?

“What is that? It's The Unknown!”

For Unreal:

Video Game Cruelty Potential:

• There's nothing stopping the player from killing the friendly Nali if they want to. Doing so is usually a bad idea, however, as they will often open secret passages and the like to help you.
• You'll sometimes find trios of Krall huddled together playing some kind of dice game. Shooting six eightball launcher rockets or grenades into the group is a good idea as they can all be taken out at once.

For Rage 2:

• Mêlée à Trois: The Authority are the main villains, but the game includes several other villainous factions, such as various bandit clans, the Shrouded, and some "independent" mutants who have escaped from Authority control.
• Too Awesome to Use: The BFG in the Deluxe Edition is just as powerful as one would expect, but only holds a maximum of 7 cells, and cells cost $1000 each. As such, a smart player will save it for things like bosses and Authority Sentries.

For Anarchy Online:

• Scrappy Mechanic: No vehicles of any type can be used in the Shadowlands. Even worse, there is no In-Universe explanation for why this is the case. The game just tells you that "vehicles do not function here."

Edited by Bootlebat on Jan 17th 2021 at 9:15:43 AM

Avatar: The Last Airbender - Team Avatar:

Sokka:

• Innocently Insensitive: To put it bluntly, Sokka often sucks at being sensitive. This is something that frequently annoys others, particularly Katara. One of the biggest examples is when he tells Aang, a little bit after he awakens from a coma that lasted weeks, that the entire world thinks he's dead.

Thanks Arivne. Well that was more mistakes than I would have liked, but it's nice to see that none of them were spelling errors. Hopefully that's a good sign, and means that I'll be able to master commas soon.

@ Secret Santa

The story was previously published in an edition of Ellery Queen's Mystery Magazine.

• Sheep in Sheep's Clothing: Alex Sandberg is Erik Bigelow's one-sided rival and main Secret Santa suspect. To quote Erik, "His image was squeaky clean - never gossiped, worked hard, took care of his staff, blah, blah, blah." Sandberg is innocent of sending Erik malicious Secret Santa gifts. The real Secret Santa is trying to get Erik to self-destruct at least partially to make sure that he won't get Sandberg unjustly fired.
• Stink Snub: Among the insulting Secret Santa gifts Erik gets are a book about overcoming halitosis and extra-strength deodorant.
• Villain Protagonist: Erik Bigelow is the POV character and focus of the story. He's also a bullying slacker and thief who gets anyone who might be promoted over him fired and sexually harasses his executive assistant Marcy and the associate editor of Antiques Now!

@ ''Loving

• Bait-and-Switch: In one scene, Raymond comes wildly speeding down the Lovings’ driveway as if he has urgent news to deliver. It turns out Raymond just always drives that way.
• Big Damn Heroes: Richard and Mildred are seconds away from being sent to jail for violating their probation when their lawyer arrives and claims that they only returned to Virginia because a clerical error made them think they had permission. This is hinted to be a lie, but the judge believes it and lets them go.

@ Dan Shamble, Zombie P.I. Are we allowed to use the future tense I have for the Not Growing Up Sucks entry?

• Abusive Parents: McGoo's ex-wife Rhonda makes her daughter Alvina sleep on the couch and feed herself. When Alvina is injured in a skateboarding accident, Rhonda insists on taking her to the cheapest clinic possible, causing Alvina to be turned into a vampire thanks to a sketchy blood transfusion. Rhonda then calls her daughter a freak and sends her to the Big Uneasy to live with her two potential fathers.
• Not Growing Up Sucks: In Tastes Like Chicken, Alvina becoming a vampire at the age of ten is portrayed as sad and serious. She'll spend the rest of her potentially eternal life going through puberty without being able to get older and have kids one day. Also, she'll never have a chance to try out for cheerleading.

@ Beetlejuice

• The second half of "Say My Name" is an awesome moment for Lydia. At first, it seems like she'll agree to a Deal with the Devil, then she taunts Beetlejuice by repeatedly saying his name twice, then saying a different word that begins with "be." Lydia points out that if any ghost can possess a human, then "What do I need you for?" Instead, Lydia uses the more trustworthy Maitlands to ruin her parents' party and leaves Beetlejuice trapped.
  Lydia: Being young and female doesn't mean that I'm an easy mark.
  I've been swimming with piranhas
  I don't need a shark.

Edited by Melinda on Jan 18th 2021 at 12:47:09 PM

There are no serious grammar issues with that example, but it's wrong. Sokka is not an example of the trope. The cited incident is not making a joke but planning a war strategy, and it is not insensitive as Sokka has no reason to know it'll make Aang upset.

Edited by Fighteer on Jan 17th 2021 at 11:48:35 AM

"It's Occam's Shuriken! If the answer is elusive, never rule out ninjas!"

You've seen Avatar: The Last Airbender then, Fighteer?

Edited by jahman on Jan 17th 2021 at 9:59:50 AM

Spider Man PS 4 Heroes:

Peter Parker/Spider-Man I:

• Significant Wardrobe Shift: When Peter's Classic Suit suffers Clothing Damage, he upgrades it to the Advanced Suit as his newest default Spider-Man costume. An updated version of his Classic Suit that looks more like modern athletic wear than spandex, with white carbon fiber armor reinforcements on the chest and back logos, backs of his hands, and knuckles. Word of God states it reflects how this version of Peter Parker/Spider-Man is more mature and Experienced Protagonist, having long past his phase as a Kid Hero.

When Peter's Classic Suit suffers Clothing Damage, he upgrades it to the Advanced Suit as his newest default Spider-Man costume; an updated version of his Classic Suit that looks more like modern athletic wear than spandex, with white carbon fiber armor reinforcements on the chest and back logos, backs of his hands, and knuckles. Word of God states it reflects how this version of Peter Parker/Spider-Man is a more mature and Experienced Protagonist, having long past his phase as a Kid Hero.

If you're explaining something, don't start a new sentence; use a semicolon. You were also missing an "a" between "is" and "more".

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That's not quite correct. Whether a semicolon is appropriate or not doesn't depend on whether you're explaining something.

~jahman: Yes, it is one of my favorite animated shows (indeed one of my favorite shows, period) of all time.

"It's Occam's Shuriken! If the answer is elusive, never rule out ninjas!"

x 9 @Bootlebat

Shooting six eightball launcher rockets or grenades into the group is a good idea, <- comma as they can all be taken out at once.

x 8 @Melinda

..."His image was squeaky clean - <- space never gossiped...

Loving

Big Damn Heroes: Richard and Mildred are seconds away from being sent to jail for violating their probation when their lawyer arrives and claims that they only returned to Virginia because a clerical error made them think they had permission. This is hinted to be a lie, but the judge believes it and lets them go.

^ According to its Laconic and Description, Big Damn Heroes is about heroes (or something similar) saving the day in a heroic way. I'm pretty sure it's not meant to include shyster lawyers lying to allow their clients to get away with violating probation.

^ As written, this at least violates Examples Are Not Arguable, and is probably Not an Example.

Are we allowed to use the future tense as I have in the Not Growing Up Sucks entry?

^ Yes, as long as what you're talking about occurs in the future In-Universe.

...then she taunts Beetlejuice by repeatedly saying his name twice, <- comma then saying...Instead, Lydia uses the more trustworthy Banners to ruin her parents' party...

^ If Banners is someone's name, it shouldn't have an apostrophe at the end: that indicates that Banners possesses/owns something, e.g. "parents' party".

Edited by Arivne on Jan 18th 2021 at 10:31:05 AM

~Michael Katsuro: Shit, sorry. I was running on 4:00 AM Brain at the time and couldn't figure out how to explain it otherwise.

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@ Arvine are all the other examples ok?

Arivne. I won't post the Loving Big Damn Heroes example. However, considering that the "crime" Richard and Mildred are on probation for is entering into a mixed-race marriage, his intervention (whether it was a lie or not) is portrayed as a positive thing. Also, for Beetlejuice the name I meant to put was Banner, not Banners. Which is redundant because I somehow got the characters last names wrong anyway.

@ Beetlejuice Is this sentence correct after I change the name Banner to Maitland?

Instead, Lydia uses the more trustworthy Maitlands to ruin her parents' party and leaves Beetlejuice trapped.

@ 100 Bullets

• Foolish Sibling, Responsible Sibling: Jack is a drug-addicted mercenary, while his brother David is a hard-working fishmonger and Benevolent Boss who doesn't want Jack bothering their mother. 

@ Behind Enemy Lines

• Elvis Impersonator: One of the Bosniak guerrillas has Elvis-stye sideburns and shades and plays an Elvis song on his truck radio.

@ Teen Power Inc.

• Suspicious Spending: In The Sorcerer's Apprentice, as a mugger terrorizes Raven Hill, Tom gets a job working for magic shop owner Sid Foy. Sid's shop has few customers, and what money he has made recently (along with the rent from an apartment above his store) is lost in one of the muggings. Yet, less than a week later, Sid can afford to bring in lots of new stock (such as expensive computer games) to attract younger customers.  Sid is innocent, and the money is from a bank loan.

@ Prisoner's Base

• The Mourning After: Sarah Jaffee has been an emotional wreck since her husband died in World War II, at least half a decade earlier. She's tortured by reminders of him lying around their apartment, but can't bring herself to throw them out.

Edited by Melinda on Jan 19th 2021 at 8:50:23 AM