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x 5 @Elfen Lied Fan 90

Changed verbs from past to present tense as per How to Write an Example - Write in Historical Present Tense.

Played for laughs, <- comma as Shin is seemingly dislikes his shoulder getting patted by someone else.

Sicily von Claude is a rather shy and timid girl who is rather soft-spoken and polite towards other people.

Much like some Isekai protagonists, Shin was hit by a truck while home from work back on his original homeworld. <- period When he got reincarnated, his new family was massacred by the monsters.

A female version of it. <- period but Melinda Bowen often nags if Shin does something careless.

Shin is truly happy when he gets adopted as a grandson of Merlin Walford, <- comma despite his grandfather telling him the truth: <- colon that he is adopted and his parents were killed. This is due to both of his grandfather and grandmother taking good care of him.

See Grumpy Old Man above. Melinda mostly nags a lot because of either Shin or Merlin's carelessness. <- period

^ "See Grumpy Old Man above." should be deleted as per How to Write an Example - Remember That This Is A Wiki.

Both Merlin Walford and his wife <- no comma Melinda Bowen <- no comma were hailed as the legendary heroes of Earlshide Kingdom after they defeated a legendary demon in the past and are still living today as Shin's adoptive grandparents.

Before reincarnating in a fantasy world and being adopted by Merlin, Shin died after he got hit by a truck in his original world.

When Sicily rejects Kurt's engagement proposal, Kurt ends up snapping and calling her a whore while saying that women's only job is to obey and please their men.

Diseum von Earlshide is the current king of Earlshide Kingdom. <- period He has a pretty relaxed personality towards Shin and sees him as his own nephew. And He's also the person who enrolls Shin into the Magic Academy so that he can assess how different Shin is compared to other magically gifted people. It is also revealed that when Earlshide Kingdom attacked in the past, Diseum tried his best to participate in the battle to reduce the casualties.

How Both Melissa and Sicily view Kurt von Ritzbug as one due to his crush on Sicily. <- period Sicily tries to stalk him so that she can become engaged to him.

Sicily von Claude is the only character in the main cast who has unique hair: it's colored blue hair.

Edited by Arivne on Mar 4th 2019 at 4:21:57 AM

x 5 @jahman

When she isn't busy being a Grumpy Bear towards others (Naruto being the most frequent and unfortunate candidate), <- comma she is also kind, loving and has cherry pink hair.

x 5 @Kazuya Prota

You have a couple of really long sentences there. I've taken the liberty of breaking them up. The longer a sentence is, the harder it is for the reader to grasp the whole thing.

Changed verbs from past to present tense as per How to Write an Example - Write in Historical Present Tense.

Bagramon is the leader of the Bagra Army. Brother of the "dark" digimon Skull Knightmon, Bagramon used to be a angel digimon working for the digital deity Homeostasis. Rebelling against Homeostasis because of her plan to have digimon branded as heroic or villainous, in a system that would result in his brother's death, Bagramon is defeated and exiled. Finding the remains of the digital deity Ygdrassil, Bagramon uses them to empower himself and begin his conquest, creating the Xros Loader and the powerful artificial Digimon Tactimon. <- period He then rebels again with the loyalty of dark digimons, defeating the Royal Knights and breaking the digital world. Manipulating his brother using two minions and some humans, Bragramon intends to judge humans and digimons based on who wins between them. When his brother "wins" while losing his sanity, Bagramon cries for him before using him to recreate Zeed Milleniunmon, intending to use it to euthanize both the digital and human worlds and save them from decay. When he is proven wrong by the heroes, Bagramon cheers for them and dies saving his brother, encouraging him to be better. Inspiring absolute loyalty in his followers, Bagramon truly wishes for a better future.

More honorable than his anime counterpart, The Dreaded Tactimon is one of Bagramon's top generals and his best creation. Leading his armies in the fractured Digital World, Bagramon is the digimon that broke it during his fight against the powerful Royal Knight Omegamon. A ruthless yet effective general willing to fire against his own soldiers in harsh fights, Bagramon also prefers to not waste their lives in pointless battles. Manipulating Mach Leomon to his death to test the power of his rivals, Tactimon follows the heroes to test their power as well. During the final battle of the Bagra Army, Tactimon asks permission to use his full power and challenge the heroes in a harsh fight, showing his impressive unmatched skill and only being defeated by their determination and teamwork. Lethally wounded, Tactimon congratulates them, happy at having found a Worthy Opponent before dying.

Raised in the beast-slaying organization Silven Kreuz, Alex befriends Victor during his time in the organization. Becoming a feared and cunning Bounty Hunter while remaining part of Silven Kreuz, Alex enjoys hunting both beasts and human criminals. Joining a police hunt of Victor while knowing that he isn't a murderer, Alex befriends a young Bounty Hunter and tries to convince him to return to his old life. <- period He gives him money before having a duel against Victor that ends in a harsh tie with both injured. Later, Alex manages to survive unscratched by the traps of the beasts in the town of White Rock Valley and kill his attackers. Enraged at the death of his friend, Alex joins forces with Victor to kill as many beasts as they can. Killing the beast leader personally by using his own power against him, Alex reminds the good times and allows Victor to go away, warning him about other members of Silven Kreuz and showing why he's both Victor's enemy and friend.

^ "Enraged at the death of his friend..." Which friend? The young Bounty Hunter?

^ "Alex reminds the good times..." Alex reminds who of the good times? Or did you mean "Alex is reminded of the good times..."?

Edited by Arivne on Mar 4th 2019 at 4:53:31 AM

x 5 @Trixus

Artyom's diary entry points out that Idiot always starts with a long explanation and always follows it with "on the other hand". As such, <- comma he agrees with both Artyom and Miller's points of view about the situation as neither right or wrong, <- comma and simply says that the only way to not be wrong is to say nothing.

^ You said "always" earlier in the sentence, so you don't have to say it again.

He calls himself that either out of humility or because he really liked Dostoevsky's book The Idiot. Either way, <- comma he is the most educated of the crew.

^ Namespaced, italicized (as per How to Write an Example - Emphasis For Work Names) and Blue Linked the work name.

He is not someone who gives short answers. Even worse is that he keeps bringing up both sides of an argument at the same time for every question, <- comma which just leaves the other person more confused than anything.

This is something Miller tries to exploit when he pairs the two together, <- comma by telling Artyom to be stealthy and cautious so Duke will give up his more risk taking attitude to emulate Artyom.

Armor-Piercing Response: Miller gives one to a group of cannibals asking him what were they supposed to do while isolated for twenty years with no food source.

Like past games, <- comma killing indiscriminately will lock you out of the good ending. <- period However, the game is more explicit about who you are allowed to use lethal force on than previous installments and shows where you can rescue innocents.

^ This was a run-on sentence connected together with a comma splice.

The Caspian region being turned into a desert is one of the biggest obstacles for the crew. Since the region is scarce on water and wood, <- comma the Aurora can't go full throttle and most of the rangers suffer from dehydration and sunburn. Stepan ends up bedridden, <- comma as he secretly skipped his water ration while still doing his duty as usual.

Idiot explains to Sam that they can't simply tell the people from the Metro about life on the surface without careful planning. The short summary is that even if all the factions agree on spreading the word, <- comma it will take a massive amount of logistics to move out, <- comma and even zones with breathable air are still infested with mutants that will devour non-combatants.

Edited by Arivne on Mar 4th 2019 at 5:22:44 AM

Thanks for the help.

Edited by KazuyaProta on Mar 4th 2019 at 8:58:22 AM

Seike Nobutsune and Chiyo are one of Kuchiki clan employee and often serve as Byakuya and Rukia personal servant

• Adorkable: Chiyo is a a cute and Genki Girl who serve as Rukia personal servant.

• Canon Character All Along: Seike often seen in light-novel. But he did make appearance in Manga at Rukia and Byakuya flashback.

• Kindly Housekeeper:
  • Seike is one of the main servant of Kuchiki clan. In light- novel, he often seen to serve food and cloth, also he willingly do some handicraft activity like helping Orihime to finish her wedding veil gift for Rukia. In Rukia flashback, it shown that Seike give her instruction before she officially adopted into Kuchiki clan.
  • Chiyo also very compassionate toward Rukia. As stated in Death Save The Strawberry light-novel, it's implied she already long enough to serve as her personal servant and has close friendship with her.

• Nice Person: Both Seike and Chiyo are very polite and pleasant.

Seike Nobutsune and Chiyo are one of Kuchiki clan employees and often serve as Byakuya and Rukia's personal servants. <- period

Chiyo is a a cute and Genki Girl who serves as Rukia's personal servant.

Seike is often seen in the light novel. However, he makes an appearance in the manga in a Rukia and Byakuya flashback.

Seike is one of the main servants of the Kuchiki clan. In the light novel, he is often seen to serve food and provide clothing (???), also he willingly does some handicraft activity like helping Orihime to finish her wedding veil gift for Rukia. In the Rukia flashback, it is shown that Seike gives her instruction before she is officially adopted into the Kuchiki clan.

Chiyo also very compassionate toward Rukia. As stated in the Death Save The Strawberry light novel, it's implied she has known her (???) long enough to serve as her personal servant and has a close friendship with her.

^ ^^ (???) means that I can't be sure what you meant to write. What I changed it to is my best guess, based on the context.

Edited by Arivne on Mar 5th 2019 at 4:59:08 AM

• Iron Man
• Moment of Weakness: During the Manhunt comic arc in Iron Man were Tony Stark was frame for the attacks on the Chinese. FBI agent Neil Streich threatened to draw in Pepper Potts and the hospitalized Happy Hogan unless Pepper agreed to cooperate with him. Pepper agreed, and provided Stretch with the code he needed to activate a failsafe which deactivate the Iron Man armor. Pepper was heart broken and horrify when she give Neil the code and shamefully admit to a comatose Happy that was the worse thing she could have done to him. When Tony was able to evade capture and clear his name; he forgive Pepper for her betrayal. Pepper break down and cries as Tony hug her saying you don't have to say that. You've have every right to think I let you down because I did. Stretch got me worry about Happy and I should have been stronger, or cleverer as Tony hug her as he saying everything ok.
• My God, What Have I Done?: When FBI agent Neil Stretch threatened to arrest Pepper Potts and the the hospitalized Happy Hogan unless Pepper agreed to cooperate with him, Pepper agree to work with him. Pepper provided Stretch with the code he needed to activate a failsafe which deactivate the Iron Man armor. She regretted giving Stretch the code the minute she give it to him, as she told a comatose Happy.
• Pet the Dog: When Tony Stark was prove innocent and the FBI still charge Tony Stark with resisting arrest, FBI agent Neil Stretch argue again that idea with Nick Fury. Neil Stretch was transferred to the Alaska field office as a result. Neil also told Tony not to be mad at Pepper Potts because she did not break easy, she was in distress and he played her like he was train to do. You want to be pissed at anyone, be pissed at me.
• Reassigned to Antarctica: When the FBI wanted to still charge Tony Stark with resisting arrest, FBI agent Neil Stretch and Nick Fury argue again that idea. Neil Stretch was transferred to the Alaska field office as a result.

Edited by AmazingCartoonHero on Mar 5th 2019 at 6:38:06 AM

Could you please read How to Write an Example - Write in Historical Present Tense? Most of your mistakes below are violations of that rule.

Also, when you're quoting material from a work, you need to put the quoted material inside quotes.

During the Manhunt comic arc in Iron Man where Tony Stark is framed for the attacks on the Chinese. FBI agent Neil Streich threatens to draw in Pepper Potts and the hospitalized Happy Hogan unless Pepper agrees to cooperate with him. Pepper agrees, and provides Stretch with the code he needs to activate a failsafe which deactivates the Iron Man armor. Pepper is heart broken and horrified when she gives Neil the code and shamefully admits to a comatose Happy that that was the worst thing she could have done to him. When Tony is able to evade capture and clear his name, <- comma he forgives Pepper for her betrayal. Pepper breaks down and cries as Tony hugs her, <- comma saying "You don't have to say that. You have every right to think I let you down because I did. Stretch got me worried about Happy and I should have been stronger, or cleverer" as Tony hug her as he says everything is OK.

When FBI agent Neil Stretch threatens to arrest Pepper Potts and the the hospitalized Happy Hogan unless Pepper agrees to cooperate with him, Pepper agrees to work with him. Pepper provides Stretch with the code he needs to activate a failsafe which deactivates the Iron Man armor. She regrets giving Stretch the code the minute she gives it to him, as she tells a comatose Happy.

When Tony Stark is proven innocent and the FBI still charges him with resisting arrest, FBI agent Neil Stretch argues about it again with Nick Fury. Neil Stretch is transferred to the Alaska field office as a result. Neil also tells Tony not to be mad at Pepper Potts because she did not break easily: <- colon she was in distress and he played her like he was trained to do. "You want to be pissed at anyone, be pissed at me".

When the FBI still wants to charge Tony Stark with resisting arrest, FBI agent Neil Stretch and Nick Fury argue about it again that idea. Neil Stretch is transferred to the Alaska field office as a result.

Edited by Arivne on Mar 6th 2019 at 6:42:56 AM

For RealLife/FakingTheDead:

• A man in Sanshui, Guangdong attempted to evade his bank loan debt by purchasing a corpse with $4000 YMB, crashing his car at a electric pole and setting it on fire. In order to fake his own death, he contacted his friend, who happens to be a mortician in a hospital, to purchase a corpse, claiming that he needs a corpse for ghost marriage. He then used the corpse to fake a traffic accident. However, his attempt was eventually foiled when the investigators found out that not only the DNA matching was unfit with the man's parents, the corpse he used to fake his death turned out to be a woman, and she was already severely rotten long before the man used her to fake his own death. The man ended up got convicted of deliberate corpse destruction for his troubles, whereas his mortician friend was convicted of illegal corpse trade and disrespecting corpses.

Edited by Mhazard on Mar 8th 2019 at 1:23:44 AM

Videogame: Skies of Arcadia

• Let's Dance: This is the phrase that Gilder says whenever he uses the "Gunslinger" super move attack.

EDIT: CORRECTED

some tropes

for Queen

• Stout Strength: Claims that all his fat is actually muscle.
• Wild Take: He does three in a row, when Babanuki lists the problems in the prison mine, one for each of the problems.

for the Prison mines warden in general

• Wardens Are Evil: They make the prisoners work into the toughest conditions, giving them a single small kimidango as reward for moving a large heavy rock, and clearly enjoy torturing them. The punishment for offences is first dismembering the arms, after a second offence the legs, and execution after a third offence.

for Babanuki

• Beard of Evil: Has a long beard and is an evil warden working under Kaido. It's also a Badass Beard since he's the strongest headliner of the prison.
• Belly Mouth: Exaggerated, he has an elephant head in his belly.
• Cruel Elephant: He's an evil warden of the Prison Mines and has eaten an elephant SMILE which gives some elephant traits.
• Early-Bird Cameo: Before his proper debut, he appears in the background while Daifugo punishes Hyogoro, not that he's hard to miss.
• Large and in Charge: Although possibly justified by having eaten a SMILE that turns him into an elephant hybrid, he's the warden of the Prison Mines and he's arguably as large as an actual elephant.
• Oni: His face has the same eyebrows, eyes and fangs as an oni, making him look like one. Just like onis are known for living in the mountains, the prison mines are close to tall mountains.
• Sneeze of Doom: The elephant on his chest can make an explosive sneeze powerful enough to damage Luffy, albeith the latter isn't in his best conditions.
• Top-Heavy Guy: His body is large enough to make the elephant head on the chest look small by comparison, while his legs... not so much.
  • Haki, in one piece world, can give the characters a kind of armor, anyway, I've changed it

for Daifugo

• Beware My Stinger Tail: Thanks to his scorpion SMILE, although the stinger is on his braid.
• Expy: The helmet he wears and his clothing style make him appear as a scorpion version of Jagi.
• Hell-Bent for Leather: He wears a pair of six-legged leather pants, and in his debut he kicks to the ground an old man.
• Scary Scorpions: He has eaten a scorpion SMILE, which gives him a stinger at the end of his braid and multiple legs, and he's an evil warden.
• Vertebrate with Extra Limbs: Justified by being a human who has eaten a scorpion SMILE , which gives him two extra pairs of legs just like scorpions.

for Solitaire

• Dual Wielding: Four of her six arms are busy wielding a sword.
• Everythings Better With Monkeys: She has eaten a monkey SMILE which gives her a monkey tail and, somehow, multiple arms.
• The Smurfette Principle: She's the only female warden of the Prison Mines.

Edited by fishysaur on Mar 8th 2019 at 9:33:06 AM

@Mhazard

Could you please read How to Write an Example - Write in Historical Present Tense? Most of your mistakes below are violations of that rule.

A man in Sanshui, Guangdong , <- comma attempts to evade his bank loan debt by purchasing a corpse with $4000 YMB, crashing his car into an electrical pole and setting it on fire. In order to fake his own death, he contacts his friend, who happens to be a mortician in a hospital, to purchase a corpse, claiming that he needs it for a ghost marriage. He then uses the corpse to fake a traffic accident. However, his attempt is eventually foiled when the investigators find out that not only does the DNA not match the man's parents, the corpse he uses to fake his death turns out to be a woman, and she was already severely rotten long before the man uses her to fake his own death. The man ends up being convicted of deliberate corpse destruction for his troubles, whereas his mortician friend is convicted of illegal corpse trade and disrespecting corpses.

Edited by Arivne on Mar 8th 2019 at 4:57:49 AM

@Ruben Ferro

• Let's Dance: This is the phrase that Gilder says whenever he uses the "Gunslinger" super move attack.

I don't see anything wrong with the English in that post.

@fishysaur

They make the prisoners work in the toughest conditions, giving them a single small kimidango as reward for moving a large heavy rock, and clearly enjoy torturing them. The punishment for offences is first dismembering the arms, after a second offence the legs, and execution after a third offence.

Exaggerated, he has an elephant head in his belly.

Cruel Elephant: He's the warden of the Prison Mines and has eaten an elephant SMILE.

^ This is a Zero-Context Example because you don't say how he's an elephant (or elephant-like) or how he's cruel.

His face has the same eyebrows, eyes and fangs as an oni, making him look like one.

^ If you didn't have the word "same" in there, "of" would be correct.

The elephant on his chest can make an explosive sneeze powerful enough to damage Luffy without Haki.

^ "without Haki" what?

His body is large enough to make the elephant head on the chest look small by comparison , <- comma while his legs... not so much.

The helmet he wears and his clothing style make him appear as a scorpion version of Jagi.

He wears a pair of six-legged leather pants , <- comma and in his debut he kicks an old man to the ground.

Vertebrate with Extra Limbs: Justified by his SMILE fruit, which gives him two extra pairs of legs.

^ Technically this is a Zero-Context Example, because you don't say that he was originally a human being and therefore a vertebrate.

Edited by Arivne on Mar 8th 2019 at 5:36:28 AM

CORRECTED

A couple of more tropes

for the All Stars

• The Dreaded: Being the strongest subordinates of an Emperor, this isn't surprising. Jack is also feared because he's quite hard to reason with, while Queen's subordinates try their best not to anger him.

some more for Queen

• Agent Peacock: He might have all of the mannerisms of an okama, but he's still a pirate with a bounty of over one billion berries.
• Big Beautiful Man: Inverted. He claims that if he loses weight he would be too handsome, although he specifies his fat is actually muscle.

for the Onibawanshu

• Face–Heel Turn: They worked for the previous shogun, Oden, but, after his death, they swore loyalty to Orochi, who usurped Oden's title.

for Jerry

• Badass in a Nice Suit: Well, not so much of a badass, although you must be pretty strong to be a member of CP6, but his suit is quite nice and elegant.

Edited by fishysaur on Mar 9th 2019 at 10:17:02 AM

BrightBurn contain examples of:

• All of the Other Reindeer: According to Mrs. Breyer, Brandon Breyer has trouble fitting in with other kids. This was best shown in the second trailer, where a group of kids gang up on him and push him on the ground, and when a teacher tells a girl to help him up she protests, calling him a creep.
• Kids Are Cruel:
  • Brandon's classmates gang up on him, push him on the ground, and when a teacher tells a girl to help him up she protests, calling him a creep.
  • Brandon himself starts to take this trope Up To Eleven when he gets his powers. First he crushes the hand of the girl that insulted him. Then he terrifies the mother of that girl at work and brutally murders her because she wants Brandon arrested and jailed for breaking her daughter's hand. Then apparently Brandon brings down an airplane and kills over 200 people with him shown enjoying some snacks at the crash site.

YMMV / Bright Burn

• Tear Jerker:
  • During the two trailers, it is clear that Mrs. Breyer truly does love her son Brandon and considers finding him a gift. She and her husband raise him with love and tell him that he is meant to do great things. But then as the trailers show, even as Brandon becomes darker and twisted as he discovers his powers and starts to us them in violent ways, she still believes in him despite increasing evidence of Brandon's instability as well as her husband's well justified fears. The ending of the second trailer shows her being terrorized by her beloved son, with it implied that he murdered her husband, with the ending of the trailer saying "I want to do good, mom. I do."
  • Mr. Breyer, despite being able to see Brandon's instability and the danger he poses better than his wife, still raises him as a baby with his wife. It is implied he had a more loving relationship with his son before he got his powers, only for things to go downhill when Brandon gets his powers and shows homicidal tendencies. He outright tells his wife he's not their son and the ending of the second trailer implies Brandon murders him.
  • The first trailer had Mrs. Breyer say that Brandon is having trouble fitting in with other children. The second trailer expands on that - a group of children push Brandon to the ground with a teacher watching but doing nothing. When the teacher tells a girl to help him up she protests, calling him a creep. It's true that Brandon later breaks her hand, and becomes a monster, but it's heartbreaking to see a child be bullied like that.
  • Finally there's Brandon himself. The first trailer implies that he was a normal little boy with a loving relationship with his parent before he discovered his powers. But then we see him slowly become corrupt and twisted as he starts abusing his powers to hurt people, even turning against his own parents. It's implied that his powers are corrupting him, which means a normal kind little boy is being turned into a monster by his powers with his parents having no idea how to help him.

• Kaiserreich: Huey Long—also known as The Kingfish—is a populist from Louisiana that despises syndicalists while also desiring to save American economy with his "Share the Wealth" program—which he perceives as America's only defense against Syndicalism. Popular in the American South due to his bombastic style, Long allies with far right racist groups in order to create a anti-syndicalist power block in the form of the America First Party despite his relatively tolerant views for his time, being so charismatic that his death would mean its disolution. When the Second American Civil War starts as either him rebelling against the democratically ellected Reed, viceversa or due to Douglas MacArthur's millitary coup, Long serves as the face of the American Union State. If the AUS win, Long would declare himself President for Life and purge his most despicable allies while allowing his Minutemen harass Syndicalists. Despite being a dictator struggling between his own altruism and his growing authoritarianism, Long's charisma and relative benevolence made him stand out from most dictators.

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some tropes for Hyogoro

• Expy: His appearance, especially when he was younger, is based off the Nios, the guardians at the entrance of Buddhist temples.
• Flaming Hair: While not exactly on fire, when he was young, his hair and his beard were flame-shaped. Nowadays, he has just a tiny bit of hair that resembles a small ember.
• One Hundred Percent Adoration Rating: Shinobi says Hyogoro was so popular that, even after twenty years have passed, they would be able to gather the necessary 5000 people just for having him on their side.
• Take Me Instead: When both Hyogoro and Luffy are taken to Queen to be executed, Hyogoro pleads for the pirate to spare Luffy's life and just kill him.
• Tattooed Crook: Being a former Yakuza boss, he has a large tattoo with flower patterns on his shoulder. Unlike most examples, he is actually an honorable person beloved by everyone.
• Through His Stomach: Luffy gains Hyogoro's interest and respect by giving him some of his coupons for the kibidangos.

Edited by fishysaur on Mar 9th 2019 at 10:20:19 AM

, @fishysaur

Changed verbs from past to present tense as per How to Write an Example - Write in Historical Present Tense.

Being the strongest subordinates of an Emperor, this isn't surprising. Jack is also feared because he's quite hard to reason with, <- comma while Queen's subordinates try their best not to anger him.

He might have all of the mannerisms of an okama, but he's still a pirate with a bounty of over one billion berries.

He claims that if he loses weight he would be too handsome, although he specifies his fat is actually muscle.

...although you must be pretty strong to be a member of CP 6...

Nowadays, he only has just a tiny bit of hair that resembles a small ember.

Shinobi says Hyogoro is so much popular that, even after twenty years have passed, they would be able to gather the necessary 5000 people just for having him on their side.

When both Hyogoro and Luffy are taken to Queen to be executed, Hyogoro pleads for the pirate to spare Luffy's life and just kill him.

Being a former Yakuza boss, he has a large tattoo with flower patterns on his shoulder. Unlike most examples, he is actually an honorable person beloved by everyone.

@Amazing Cartoon Hero

This is best shown in the second trailer, where a group of kids gang up on him and push him to the ground, and when a teacher tells a girl to help him up she protests, calling him a creep.

Then, <- comma apparently Brandon brings down an airplane and kills over 200 people, <- comma with him shown enjoying some snacks at the crash site.

But then, <- comma as the trailers show, even as Brandon becomes darker and twisted as he discovers his powers and starts to use them in violent ways, she still believes in him, <- comma despite increasing evidence of his instability as well as her husband's well justified fears. The ending of the second trailer shows her being terrorized by her beloved son, with it implied that he murdered her husband, ending with him saying "I want to do good, mom. I do."

He outright tells his wife that Brandon is not their son, <- comma and the ending of the second trailer implies Brandon murdered him.

^ The murder occurs in the past of that scene so using past tense is correct.

The first trailer has Mrs. Breyer say that Brandon is having trouble fitting in with other children...It's true that Brandon later breaks her hand <- no comma and becomes a monster, but it's heartbreaking to see a child be bullied like that.

Finally there's Brandon himself. The first trailer implies that he was a normal little boy with a loving relationship with his parents before he discovered his powers.

@Kazuya Prota

Kaiserreich: Huey Long—also known as The Kingfish—is a populist from Louisiana who despises syndicalists while also desiring to save the American economy with his "Share the Wealth" program, <- comma which he perceives as America's only defense against Syndicalism. Popular in the American South due to his bombastic style, Long allies with far right racist groups in order to create a anti-syndicalist power block in the form of the America First Party despite his relatively tolerant views for his time, being so charismatic that his death would mean its dissolution. When the Second American Civil War starts, <- comma as either him rebelling against the democratically elected Reed <- no comma viceversa or due to Douglas MacArthur's military coup, Long serves as the face of the American Union State. If the AUS wins, Long declares himself President for Life and purges his most despicable allies, <- comma while allowing his Minutemen to harass Syndicalists.

Edited by Arivne on Mar 9th 2019 at 5:49:40 AM

Videogame: Styx: Shards of Darkness

• Or Are You Just Happy to See Me?: One of the belittling lines that Styx uses when you die goes like this:

I don't see anything wrong with what you wrote, but you misquoted the quote. It should be:

"Dead again? Is that your controller in your pocket, or are you just pleased to see me?"

You can watch it here.

Edited by Arivne on Mar 10th 2019 at 4:39:24 AM

Well, I was kind of torn on that one. However, the video I copied the quote from had the subtitles on, so I ultimately went with that. Might be a mistake in the actual game.