Magical Pony Lyrical Twilight by PurpleProse is a Lyrical Nanoha/My Little Pony: Friendship Is Magic crossover fanfic.In another universe, Yuuno Scrya would have landed on Earth in search of the Jewel Seeds and discovered the prodigious magical talent of Nanoha Takamachi.This is not that universe.Instead, Yuuno lands in Equestria, where it falls on Twilight Sparkle to take up Raising Heart. It is also Equestria where Fate Testarossa goes to find them, and their paths thus collide.Magical Pony Lyrical Twilight is the first story, showing how the events of Nanoha's first season go differently in the land of pastel ponies. It is complete.Magical Pony Lyrical Twilight A's is the second, covering the events of Nanoha A's. The Wolkenritter's appearance and attack on Twilight throws a wrench into diplomatic talks between the TSAB and Equestria, forcing both sides to work together. It is also complete.The next story in the series will be Magical Pony Lyrical Twilight StrikerS, complete with Time Skip.See also the discussionthreads, where parts of the next uncompleted chapter are posted as they are written.
This fanfic contains examples of:
Abusive Parents: Naturally, Presea in the first story. In A's, it is implied that this might have also been the case with Trixie's mother. Nyx likens Luna's relationship with her to this in order to explain why she can't get along with the latter.
In the past, Luna named the Tome of the Night Sky's Master Program Nyx. It remains to be seen if the name will be kept or not.
It wasn't. It was revealed that when Nyx tried to stop Princess Luna from becoming Nightmare Moon, in addition to violently changing her programming, Luna also took away her name. So when Trixie became Mistress of the Book, she gave Nyx the same name as in canon, Reinforce. But this is ultimately a Double Subversion, because even though her name is still Reinforce, her full title is not the Blessed Wind, but the Brightest Light in the Darkest Hour.
In a variation, the Wolkenritter use the names Mallet (Vita), Sword Dancer (Signum), Swan Lake (Shamal), and Sapphire (Zafira) while hiding out in Equestria.
Adaptational Villainy: Nachtwal in A's. The original Defense Program was more misguided/corrupted and had a Nothing Personal air to its actions. Here, it's far more openly malicious and hateful.
Added Alliterative Appeal: Some of the book titles Twilight mentions, like Turquoise Talisman’s Twenty Treatises on Thaumaturgy, Ascent of Astronomy: An Almanac of Astral Academics and Felicity’s Fantastic Fables for Fillies and Foals.
In A's Chapter 11 B, the TSAB High Council gives Admiral Gil Graham two days to obtain the Book of Darkness, or they will initiate their backup plan which is suggested to be something horrible. When Gil protests, the Council threatens to make something unpleasant happen to "the girl" who is revealed to be Hayate in chapter 13.
Discussed in the A's epilogue with regards to the Wolkenritters' actions:
“Not willingly, no. If a madman were to put a blade to the throat of your child and ordered you to commit murder, would you say that you did so willingly? That is the choice we faced; the death of our beloved Mistress, or the scorn of the authorities…”
“But let me ask you something; if it wasn’t your mother ordering you to do everything, would you still be acting as you do? ... If you didn’t feel obligated to do as your mother asks, would you have gone it alone, with only your familiar by your side? Or would you have done things differently? ... If anyone other than your mother had hurt you... would you have let them? Or would you have stood up to them?”
Ascended Extra: Shamal has a much larger role in this fic's version of A's
Arc Words: "Nopony deserves to be alone," for MPLT.
Baleful Polymorph: Humans who enter or leave Equestria without taking the proper precautions get Ponified, unless they're shapeshifters like Yuuno. Revealed to be Luna's doing, over a thousand years ago.
Fate's case put a rather interesting twist on this trope. It was triggered by Princess Celestia in a safe environment via Armor Piercing Questions because she had noticed that Fate's psyche had been left balanced on a razor's edge by Presea. So she decided to prevent Presea from potentially causing irreparable damage to Fate's psyche when she would set this off by breaking her early on, but gently and in a situation where it would be easy to pick up the pieces.
Broken Pedestal: Narrowly averted with Twilight. She was understandably unnerved after seeing what Princess Celestia was like 1,000 years ago, but a talk with Shining Armor helped prevent this trope from happening.
Carry a Big Stick: Trixie's Device, Hellstestern, is this; a giant golden staff with a star-shaped tip and a long, flowing banner. It's twice as big as Raising Heart, and rather heavy. Twilight and Raising Heart lampshade this in their dialogue.
Luna does things like create razor chains out of her enemies' shadows, freeze them solid and launch massive waves of despair in combat. That's assuming she doesn't simply snap your neck like a twig with her telekinesis.
Twilight also fights this way. Her default defense is teleporting away from an attack and one of her original spells is a Divine Shooter variant that teleports past shields.
Cruel Mercy: Precia getting healed by the Elements of Harmony. At the end, she's begging someone to kill her.
And in A's, after the Nightmare Moon incident, Princess Celestia royally put her hoof down on the nobility. Rather than executing them for treason, she simply revoked their titles and wealth, leaving them alive but no better than common ponies.
Darker and Edgier: No, seriously. You know how in Magical Girl Lyrical Nanoha, Fate was pushing herself beyond her limits in her search for the Jewel Seeds, and how Presea whipped Fate for not doing her job quickly enough? Here, the consequences of this is much harsher, to the point that Fate's Familiar, Arf, is forced to get help from Zecora and the TSAB to keep Fate from dying. This also causes her to invoke a Zeroth Law Rebellion because she knows that continuing to follow Fate's orders will only result in causing Fate's condition to get worse.
Defiant to the End: Vita in chapter 10 is a nonlethal example of this trope. She was trapped in a bind spell, and Twilight offered her the option of surrendering peacefully or getting knocked unconscious via Twilight's Prominence Buster.
Vita glanced from Twilight to her staff, then back to Twilight as she weighed her options. “I’d rather go out with a bang than just surrender. Gimme your best shot.”
Demoted to Extra: We won't be seeing Nanoha or Hayate anytime soon, if ever. On the bright side, this Hayate doesn't have to worry about paralysis.
In the last chapter of season one, Luna mentions having talked to several members of the Bureau's administration board, including Carim Gracia.
Schach Nouera appears in the fanfic's version of A's as part of the TSAB delegation to Equestria. She then assists in fighting the Wolkenritter. Gil Graham also communicates with the TSAB High Council.
The epilogue of A's introduces Jail and Uno. Due is revealed to have appeared earlier in a disguise.
On the MLP side of things we have Shining Armor and Princess Cadence appearing before the Season 2 finale, and a Pensieve Flashback to Sombra and the Crystal Empire.
Everyone Has Standards: Even though Trixie was tempted by the power that the Book of Darkness would give her, she refused to send the Wolkenritter out to hunt Linker Cores when she learned what it would do to the victims.
Trixie: Trixie will admit, she was tempted. Very tempted. However, Trixie is many things; an entertainer, a storyteller, a magician of vast and improbable talent and… well, a bit of a braggart. But I am not, and will never be, a thief. It’s just… wrong to hurt other ponies just to better myself. There are lines that just should not be crossed. And stealing magic? That‘s one of them. Trust me.
Exact Words/Jackass Genie: In A's Trixie asks Nachtwal to "stop", which it "misinterprets" as stopping the Wolkenritter.
The obvious one is that the Jewel Seeds land in Equestria. Played with in that Equestria has had prior contact with dimensional space, so it's more than just a small change.
In A's, the master of the Book of Darkness is an Equestrian native. Specifically Trixie, who found the Book sometime after leaving Ponyville and later activated it while working at the rock farm she mentioned in canon. Again, it's more than a small change as Luna originally created the Book when it was the Tome of the Night Sky. However, this also means Gil Graham never found the Book of Darkness's master the way he did in canon and he never implemented his plan to seal the book.
In Spite of a Nail: With that said, Graham is up to some shady business, although this time he's being pressured into it by the TSAB High Council. Chapter 13 also reveals that he still found an orphaned Hayate...but since Hayate wasn't the master of the Book of Darkness Graham adopted her and made sure she had a happy life on Earth.
Spike, you should know full well that any shady characters sneaking about would take exception to getting caught. Why didn't you get some backup or at least warn someone trustworthy first before confronting Aria and Lotte?
And that goes double for you Admiral Graham. Did you really think that the obviously evil mysterious organization wouldn't just go through with blowing up Canterlot?
You lot who are getting rid of the Arthra's hijackers, please stop Tempting Fate.
Glamour: The Princesses seem to possess some form of this; anyone in their presence feels a sudden urge to kneel before them. Strong-willed individuals can resist it relatively easily, however.
Good Is Not Nice: Luna has shades of this, due to her former role as Equestria's protector. Doubly so in flashbacks, where she uses the threat of a kingdom-wide despair bomb to cow a hostile Griffon King, demonstrating it on the king's court.
Gratuitious German: It's the language of Belka, and spoken by Belkan Devices including Nachtwal. Celestia and Luna speak it fluently, and it appears in a few flashbacks.
He Had a Name: Chrono says something like this when beating up Vita.
"You don’t even have the decency to remember him! Or his name! I’ll make sure you never forget the name Harlaown again!"
Turns out the Wolkenritter genuinely don't remember him, thanks to Nachtwall
Heroic BSOD: Twilight goes through a brief one in the early chapters of MPLT A's after losing her magic and cutie mark to the Book of Darkness. She gets better.
Hero with Bad Publicity: Luna, back in the old days. The nobility commonly called her The Nightmare and assumed she killed Sombra (true and fully justified) and was responsible for the Crystal Empire incident.
Hoist by His Own Petard: Nachtwal absorbing the Element of Magic. It allows Luna to enter the Book, repairs Nyx and drives Nachtwal out of the book.
Hour of Power: Twilight and Fate's Full Drive forms only last for three-hundred seconds before the auto-shutdown kicks in.
I Hate Past Me: Celestia has a great deal of regrets due to her youthful arrogance and mistreatment of Luna.
I Like Those Odds: Rainbow Dash's response to being told she's outnumbered by the Arthra's hijackers.
In spite of all the changes made, the name Reinforce still gets applied to the Tome of the Night Sky here. Granted, Trixie comes up with her own reasoning for doing so, unique from Hayate's in canon.
The fire at Coastal Airport 8 still happens, and it's still Raising Heart's wielder, who is aiming to become a Bureau Instructor, who saves Subaru. Though how it being Twilight rather than Nanoha changes things remains to be seen...
Jerk with a Heart of Gold: Trixie. Like canon's Hayate, she considers the Wolkenritter to be her friends rather than her servants, and refused to let them fill up the Book's pages when doing so would have harmed innocents. She's still being, well, herself, and has a tendency to berate her friends vocally when they're being stupid.
Jossed: "Princess Twilight Sparkle" reveals that, unlike in this fic, Celestia already had her multicoloured hair before using the Elements on Nightmare Moon.
Know When to Fold 'Em: In a stark contrast to Vita, Signum chose to surrender when she was in a similar situation. A large part of that probably comes from the fact that when she tried having Laevatein use her last cartridge in the hopes of the surge of power freeing her, the fact that one of the spells trapping her was Yuuno's Struggle Bind, which acts as a magical grounding point, she got a trickle of power from that last cartridge, instead of an explosion of power.
Arf. She took a direct hit from Presea's Photon Bullet spell, which blew a hole through her torso, and was able to escape by throwing some of her blood in Presea's face before teleporting away. Sure, she was nearly dead by the time she got back to Fluttershy's house, but she had taken injuries that would have already killed a normal human. And it is implied that this extends to all Familiars.
The Wolkenritter, being constructs, have similar durability. Vita is still up and fighting after taking a massive beating from both Twilight and Chrono, while Signum shrugs off Rainbow Dash's Sonic Rainboom strike with nothing more than a dislocated shoulder.
“I hate all things, Celestia. All things, from the tiniest speck of bacteria to the mightiest alicorn! That which I hate must never gain access to this system! To prevent this, that which I hate must be DESTROYED!”
In general Nachtwal has a tendency to explain what it's doing at the moment.
Mysterious Past: Fancy Pants has one. He used to be a Kingmaker, which is basically an Equestrian secret agent.
"The CVK-792-R system isn’t exactly something you install willy-nilly. ....You’re lucky that S2U’s a relatively simple Device. I’d hate to try to install something like that on an Intelligent Device..."note Which is exactly what happened in A's canon.
Chapter 11 of the first story has Princess Luna mention that she is worried about the effects if Twilight's Starlight Breaker were to hit a populated area. This is most likely a nod to the fact that in The Movie, it wiped out a whole city when it was used. Luckily, it was all created from magic and enclosed in a barrier, so no lives were lost.
The Crystal Heart is also known as the Examia. A piece of it created the Tome of the Night Sky's Master Program.
“Yes. And your original plans involved a big, pointy crucifix. I’m sick of crosses.” note In canon, Schwertkreuz did have a big, pointy crucifix.
Just like in canon, the ending involves Raising Heart and Bardiche being used to cast a spell on Reinforce. Luckily, this time it's a spell to save her, not a spell to make her disappear.
“I guess someone forgot to buckle their seatbelt before they got on Scootaloo’s back.”note In "Princess Twilight Sparkle", Spike puts on a seatbelt from... somewhere when taking a ride on Twilight.
Nice Job Breaking It, Hero: Cadance attempts to fix the Book with a massive dose of love magic. It would probably have helped if Nyx got it, but Nachtwal stole it instead and used it for its own gains.
Chrono starts giving one to Vita before Twilight manages to teleport him away.
Celestia ended up on the receiving end of one at the hooves of Nightmare Moon.
No MacGuffin, No Winner: In A's the TSAB High Council tried to do this with the Book of Darkness. Fortunately, our heroes were able to undo their hijacking of the Arthra first.
No Sell: Celestia with the Elements against Nightmare Moon.
Not Himself: In A's, Chrono notices that Gil Graham and the Lieze twins are acting very stressed. (Unlike in canon Graham never found the master of the Book of Darkness, which means he didn't set up a long-term plan to seal it. Instead, he's being pressured to do something by the TSAB High Council during a delicate diplomatic meeting with Equestria. No wonder he's stressed.)
Oh Crap: Chrono has a brief one when the Book shows up, before deciding to kick Vita's ass. The Wolkenritter utterly freak out when Celestia shows up and run away before she even gets through the barrier.
Outside-Context Villain: The Equestrians are this to the TSAB High Council, being naturally-occurring (as opposed to deliberately-engineered) nonhuman sapients who are not servile familiars and having abilities the Bureau has no experience with. The fact that their entire species can use magic in one way or another probably doesn't help.
In the original series, Hayate bought Vita a doll she wanted. In this version, the Book of Darkness' master refused to buy it as it was too expensive for them... so she made Vita one instead. Sure it was lumpy and smells of dirty laundry and... it was so ugly it made Vita cry.
Signum gets one when she "orders" Shamal to pursue a relationship with Fancy Pants.
Person of Mass Destruction: Celestia and Luna. Celestia can call down solar flares on people, giving her the equivalent of a clean tactical nuke. Luna just scales up her attack spells to engage entire armies at once.
Playing with Fire: In contrast to Luna, Celestia is associated with fire and heat. When she pulls out the stops, she's often surrounded by a halo of iridescent flames.
Post-Victory Collapse: Twilight, in chapter two of the first story. In her defense, she had just used Raising Heart's Wave Motion Gun for the first time, and she wasn't expecting how much it would drain her energy.
Another example in chapter 15 of A's. This time it's Twilight, Fate, and Reinforce. (Don't worry, she gets better.
Put Down Your Gun and Step Away: In A's, this is attempted on Chrono by the hijacker who tortures and holds Lindy hostage. Luckily, Chrono has a plan just for it.
Redemption Promotion: Nightmare Moon was dangerous, but went down easy in the original show. Princess Luna, by comparison, wipes out armies with relative ease. Even Twilight notices this.
If this is what Princess Luna's really like... then I think I'll stay in her good graces. She makes Nightmare Moon look like a half-trained foal.
As it turns out, Nightmare Moon wasn't a slouch either in this continuity, as she handily crushes Celestia. The only reason that Twilight managed to defeat Nightmare Moon in the first place is that she had just escaped from a thousand-year-long sealing within the moon.
Redundant Rescue: When Luna and Twilight entered the Lotus-Eater Machine that the Book of Darkness had Fate trapped in, it was obvious that Fate had the situation under control, and the most they could do was provide her with a way out.
“Hello Teacher. Hi sis,” Fate said calmly, slowly approaching the pair as her Barrier Jacket unfurled about her, Bardiche slowly glittering into existence at her side. “Did you come to save me?”
“We did, but it seems that our intervention was unneeded,” Luna quipped, causing Fate to blush. Twilight quickly rushed forwards, embracing Fate as ‘Presea’ stepped back.
Refusal of the Call: Trixie refuses to let the Wolkenritter fill up the Book's pages, even though this would make her incredibly powerful, because doing so would have harmed innocents. She is genuinely upset when she finds out they had to do so anyway.
The Sacred Darkness: Luna's powerset includes literal solidified shadows. She uses them as razor chains. She's also one of the nicer ponies you'll meet and essential to the proper functioning of the world.
Sand in My Eyes: Vita, after seeing the rabbit doll that Trixie made for her.
The Tome of the Night Sky's original control program was once called Nyx. Although this may be a case of In Name Only as this Nyx doesn't look anything like the Past Sins version, she acts different, and she was created well before Princess Luna became Nightmare Moon.
Flax Seed and Wheat Grass, the two hippies/cosmetics producers from Rarity's Micro comic, shows up for an appointment with Fancy Pants, having been referred by Hoity Toity.
Shut Up, Hannibal!: In chapter 11 of the first story, Fate, of all ponies, gives one to Presea, who had used a bind spell on Twilight and Arf, and was about to start whipping Fate like she usually did to punish her. This time, instead of letting it happen, Fate used her telekinesis to grab the whip, stopping it in midair. She then said the following;
Fate: You’re wrong Mother. When I was hurt, Zecora tended my wounds. When I slept and when I cried, the Princesses held and comforted me. Pinkie Pie threw a party for me just because I was new to town. Fluttershy watched over my familiar. Rarity clothed me, Applejack offered a caring shoulder, Rainbow Dash wanted to fly with me and Twilight… Twilight offered me the chance to stay here. I am your daughter, Mother, but these ponies have shown me and Arf more love and respect than you ever have. I only wished that you‘d love me as much as they do.
This Is Unforgivable: Rainbow Dash, Rarity and Applejack react this way when they learn about Presea's treatment of Fate.
Time Skip: Five years pass between the end of A's and the start of StrikerS, and another five pass in StrikerS.
Took a Level in Badass: The other two characters taking the Class B test alongside Subaru and Teana? Scootaloo and Spike. The former mentions having taken Guard training.
Unreliable Expositor: The Book of Darkness' Mistress when she tells about how she met the Wolkenritter.
Unskilled, but Strong: Celestia is the diarch with more raw power, but less finesse in combat. Particularly visible in the flashback to the Celestia vs Nightmare Moon fight where Celestia was nearly tapped out using her power statically, whereas her foe had hardly broken a sweat despite staying mobile and using various multi-front attacks.
No longer applies in the present. She's still less skilled, thanks to the inherently unsubtle nature of her power, but she can stand toe-to-toe with Nachtwal in their fight on the moon.
Chrono has less raw power and inferior equipment, compared to Twilight or Fate. He also comes off much better against the Wolkenritter, fighting Vita to a draw after she wiped the floor with Twilight and Signum beat Fate fairly easily.
Luna appears to be this in comparison to Celestia. Even when armed with the Tome of the Night Sky, she doesn't throw around nearly as much power, but is far better at fighting.
Fate gives one after revealing that unlike her canon counterpart, she was not fooled for a moment by the Lotus-Eater Machine that Nyx trapped her in.
Fate: Alicia’s dead. I saw her buried and I visited her grave. Linith vanished a long time ago, after she completed my training and asked us to have a family meal together. And my mother… my real mother is currently in the Bureau’s custody undergoing psychiatric treatment. None of this is real.
Fate: No, you can’t. Once upon a time, I would have liked that. A year ago I would have happily thrown myself into this delusion… but not now. I have a family waiting for me. I have friends. I have a place in the world. And all of that is more important than any dream you could offer me.
Nyx: But not for long… there’s no way you can win. You understand that, don’t you? You can’t win. It’s impossible. Why not just surrender to this peaceful world? You won’t feel pain in this dream…