"Let me get this straight... Two members of the Sailor Senshi, champions of love and justice, just attempted a backstreet mugging."
The war with the Dark Kingdom is going badly, and the Sailor Senshi naturally have a problem. Usagi never became Sailor Moon, nor is she the Moon Princess, so the leadership of the Senshi falls to Minako, as Sailor Venus. All of Sailor Mars' attempts to divine the location of the Moon Princess have, so far, failed but just as they are about to give up hope, Mars finally locates the Moon Princess; her name is Takamachi Nanoha, age 16. She's back on planet for her brother's wedding.That's the good news. The bad news is that Nanoha's still recovering from her injuries incurred during the timeskip between A's and StrikerS. Luna attempts to make contact, but is brushed off by Fate, who has made it her personal mission that nothing interrupt Nanoha's recovery. Things begin to go downhill from there...Even worse, Queen Beryl has noticed that her most hated rival, the Moon Princess, has returned from wherever she was hiding, and she's not about to let things go, no sir.Can be found here. Now complete.
This fanfic contains examples of:
Absurdly Youthful Mother: It's lampshaded in the ending when Fate's older- but biologically younger- sister Alicia finds it strange that Fate has adopted a child younger than her.
A Handful for an Eye: Ami throws a handful of magically created ice crystals into the face of a youma to distract it long enough to transform.
Alternate Universe: Nanoha got injured at 16, not 12 like in canon. This is an author-induced change invoked partially to reduce the squick factor in the Nanoha/Mamoru pairing and partially to assist with the problem of two middle-school students living on their own and not attending school (high school being quasi-optional in Japan).
Anger Born of Worry: Fate scolds Nanoha for overexerting herself again, telling her how much she's worried about her.
Anvil On Head: Mercury fires a Shabon Spray Freezing into a cloud, creating the largest hailstone in history, which lands on top of Zoicite.
Awesome by Analysis: The TSAB considers the Senshi this. They managed to fight against a foe with superior power and numbers on their own, with little in the way of supplemental aid, little-to-no training, and no relief, for over a year before they finally received reinforcements from TSAB agents who were alerted to the situation. Fate doesn't think that she could last a few weeks in a similar situation.
Bad Boss: When anything goes wrong with her plans, Beryl will torture someone for being at best incompetent and at worst a potential traitor.
Badass Family: The Takamachis. Apart from Nanoha, both Shiro and Miyuki had their chances to shine.
Badass Normal: Miyuki, who after being kidnapped by Nephrite after a failed attempt at setting up a trap for him, wakes up in the Dark Kingdom in the throne room, surrounded by Youma, Nephrite, and Queen Beryl. She then proceeds to kneel before Beryl as she is told to for just long enough to have them start gloating, and then immediately sprints towards Beryl, pulls out two knives she had hidden on her, fights the Youma, forcing them to kill each other through friendly fire, positions herself so that Nephrite's attack hits Queen Beryl, and then comes within a hair's breadth of bisecting Beryl from head to toe before she gets taken out by a desperate but successful attack from Beryl. She still manages to cut Beryl's face.
Oddly enough, Usagi Tsukino; even though she is simply a normal school girl in this timeline, she still managed to distract some monsters that were trying to kill Naru.
Berserk Button: Attacking any of the close family of Fate and Nanoha will make them turn off the non-lethal Power Limiter normally in place the Nanohaverse and they will end you. First shown when Nanoha disintegrates Jadeite with a Divine Buster, and shown for Fate when Precia lost her temper at Alicia and hit her with a lighting spell. Suddenly, Big FatLaser Sword through the chest.
On a less life-threatening sense, Ami doesn't appreciate Alicia talking about Precia without knowing of her actions- which include putting Ami's mother into a coma. Although it gets much more dangerous when she encounters agents of the Dark Kingdom trying to kill her comatose mother. Maybe the villains should just avoid threatening any relatives of any member of the main cast just to be on the safe side.
Big Damn Heroes: Sailor Venus pulls one of these in Chapter 5 when Jadeite's forces attack the Takamachi wedding, distracting Jadeite at a crucial moment and giving Nanoha enough time to change into her Barrier Jacket and charge up the Divine Buster.
Blood-Splattered Wedding Dress: Miyuki's bridesmaid's gown, after the fight breaks out. The actual bride's dress did not end up like that (or at least not as severely), as Shinobu wasn't participating in the fight.
Bouquet Toss: Minako would have caught it, if she hadn't immediately rushed to Nanoha's side after her collapse.
Boxed Crook: The Sailor Senshi, having assaulted Fate and Arf in their attempts to contact Nanoha, get the same treatment as Nanoha's formerenemies did, avoiding formal punishment by means of community service.
Break the Cutie: Alicia and Hotaru go through quick and milder forms of this when they learn about what their parents are up to.
Fate to Precia, after Precia loses it and attacks Alicia in anger after Alicia herself called HER MOM out on Fate's treatment.
Cast from Hit Points: Hotaru's healing magic, because of some unidentified force that is draining her of life. As such, if the problem is not resolved it will most likely become Cast From Lifespan. Fans of Sailor Moon will recognize what this most likely is. Nanoha and Shamal both realize the similarities to Hayate's situation, and share some of the information with Hotaru.
Ultimately averted when Shamal and Sailor Mars destroy Mistress 9. This gives Hotaru a vital role in the hospital when it's flooded with casualties from the Dark Kingdom's attack.
Chekhov's Skill: Sailor Venus lands a blow on Signum during a sword fighting lesson due to knowing a maneuver that's very similar to a Belkan form with one small variation at the end. Since Signum is expecting it, the variation slips past her defense. She later uses the same manuever with the Belkan final strike to kill Kunzite.
Nanoha. Better than half the conflict in the first part of the story stems from this; if the Senshi succeed in asking Nanoha for her help, she'll try to help them as best she can regardless of what it may cost her.
Hotaru is willing to heal anyone she sees get hurt even though she knows that most of her patients hate her and will only hate her more afterwards. This behavior doesn't change even after learning that due to her Cast from Hit Points problem, continuing to do so could result in her ending up crippled or dead.
Both of the attempts by Tuxedo Kamen and the Inner Senshi to get rid of Fate fail. Rather badly. The second time also jeopardized their mission that without Beryl's Villain Ball, they wouldn't even BE allies.
Vivio fights Chibi-Usa in an omake at the end of chapter 10, the 'fight' lasts 10 seconds
Darker and Edgier: Mildly so. The Sailor Moon half of the plot has some faint overtones of Sailor Nothing; the war has turned into a stalemate, the Senshi are demoralized and all of them really want to go back to their old lives, Usagi isn't around to hold the group together, and the girls treat each other more like coworkers than the True Companions they were in canon because they have nothing in common with each other.
Dark Magical Girl: Fate, causing another misunderstanding when Luna sees her Barrier Jacket.
Deadly Dodging: A key part of Miyuki's strategy when attempting to take out Beryl.
Disco Dan: Despite all reason, Luna continues to act as if the Moon Kingdom is still in existence, just severely diminished. This leads to problems when she refuses to explain herself to Fate during the early chapters due to her, now nonexistent, position as one of Queen Serenity's advisers. Also, she does NOT take it well when Nanoha states that she has no intention to revive the Moon Kingdom.
For Want of a Nail: According to the prologue, it seems the whole reason that 'Princess Serenity' was reborn as Nanoha rather than Usagi (who does exist, just not as anyone significant) was because Queen Serenity flubbed the reincarnation spell due to her injuries.
Flanderization: Luna's character has been stripped down to almost nothing. See the entry for Disco Dan; that's more or less her entire purpose in the story.
From Bad to Worse: The day of the wedding Nanoha's agitated her Linker Core again by an unknown amount, while Beryl's discovered that letting Metallia absorb the magic of the Jewel Seeds is giving the monster a major boost towards revival, and now Beryl wants the rest of them.
Game Breaking Injury: One of the factors about Nanoha that makes Fate keep rebuffing Luna. After Nanoha kills Jadeite, she faints. Shamal then orders Nanoha not to use any magic for the foreseeable future. At the cost of temporarily losing the use of her legs, Hotaru Tomoe was able to heal Nanoha to avoid this trope.
Geeky Turn-On: Ami becomes interested in Yuuno after he gives a short lecture on how many different ways there are to use magic.
I Choose to Stay: Ami, in a roundabout way. Of the four senshi she alone chooses to go to Mid-Childa to study magic, though by all hints her role would be more like Yuuno's than Nanoha's.
Idiot Ball: Again, Luna and the Senshi (excluding Venus and Mercury) for the first few chapters. Also again, Luna apparently doesn't want to let go of it.
Artemis Lampshades this when he comments that Luna seems to be unable to recognize that her old authority no longer exists.
The TSAB not only leaves Hayate unprotected during the battle for Tokyo, but does so while she has the Jewel Seeds in her Device. This results in Beryl defeating her and stealing them.
I Hate My Previous Life: Nanoha was very disapproving of how Princess Serenity lived her life. As such it became an Awful Truth for the Senshi as their sacrifices were wasted due to Serenity's suicide.
I Just Want to Be Normal: The Senshi want this so bad. They get it in the end when Nanoha absolves them of their duty to her, although Ami does choose to go on to become a mage scholar like Yuuno.
While he did not explicitly want this, Artemis was more accepting of becoming a normal housecat than Luna was.
Ill Girl: Nanoha, still recovering from her wounds. Healed by Hotaru Tomoe.
Incredibly Lame Pun: The author's note at the end of chapter 14 begins with, "All hail Zoicite." He was killed when Ami dropped a car sized hailstone on him earlier in the chapter.
I Need a Freaking Drink: Jupiter's reaction to having the war end because the princess is a lesbian and not interested in Endymion in an omake. The rest of the Senshi agree with her.
Interrogated for Nothing: No, Beryl. Nephrite did not sell you out, trade information to the Senshi, and knowingly bring an armed assassin into your royal presence. For that matter the only information the "assassin" had (Venus' name and Serenity's street address) was never asked for when she was put to the question.
It's Personal: Nephrite vs. Miyuki. He hates her for trying to lure him into a trap, trying to kill Beryl, and making Beryl think he betrayed her. She hates his kind for their attacks on her family.
Killed Off for Real: Jadeite, Precia Testarossa, Zoicite, Souichi Tomoe, Mistress 9, Kunzite, Nephrite, Beryl, Metallia.
Kill It With Ice: Mercury does this very thoroughly when she faces Zoicite. First she locks him inside a large razor-edged fractal ice sculpture, then while he's trying to get out, she drops a car-sized hailstone on his head.
Kill Screen: Nanoha reaches this in the Sailor V game, which everyone had previously thought to be Unwinnable - on her first try. It required her getting a million points when the previous high score was 150,000. The game ended gracefully without anything strange happening beyond getting extra prizes (a disguise pen, a senshi communicator, and the Sailor Moon transformation brooch - none of which she has actually used.)
Justified in that it's actually a Senshi training simulator in disguise and Nanoha is already a veteran Magical Girl.
Kneel Before Frodo: The four Senshi kneel before Nanoha, prompting Hayate to take a picture before reminding them that when their monarch is in uniform, they must bow rather than kneel.
Last Name Basis: Used among the Senshi to indicate that rather than being True Companions, they would not voluntarily associate with one another. Hayate also calls Mars "Hino-san".
Living on Borrowed Time: Alicia, though the time isn't so much borrowed as it is stolen - something she does not take learning well.
Love Ruins The Realm: As Nanoha points out, the Dark Kingdom invasion is only one possible negative outcome of Serenity's trips to Earth and affair with Endymion.
Some reviewers took issue with Vivio defeating Chibi-Usa in the omake for Chapter 10, thus causing her and the future in which she was born to cease to exist, whereas Vivio would most likely still exist even if her mothers never got together. It seems to be only serve the purpose of painting the other future as a bad one because it's built on Reincarnation Romance even though it does not make it a less valid future.
The Bureau isn't immune to this either. Hayate arrests the Senshi for assaulting Fate in spite of the Senshi being outside the Bureau's jurisdiction — they aren't interdimensional criminals and Earth isn't a part of the Bureau, so Hayate can't legally arrest them for anything. She does so anyways, and nobody calls her on it.
The Senshi do acknowledge that they committed a crime against their princess by attacking one of her friends. From their perspective, the princess deferred the punishment that they knew they deserved to one of her associates.
It should be noted that the TSAB's jurisdiction has never been firmly defined, either in MGLN canon or in the fanfic itself. Given that the assault in question was on one of their officers, it was inevitable that they'd get involved.
She later uses them to chill a lukewarm glass of water right in front of her mother. Bye bye masquerade.
Murder the Hypotenuse: This seems to be one of the major reason Beryl started her rebellion in the first place, jealous that Prince Endymion chose Princess Serenity over herself. Of course, she's gunning for Nanohain this universe, so as far as most readers are concerned, her attempt is doomed to failure.
The pettiness of starting a war for this is Lampshaded both by the cast and in an Omake in which Nanoha ends the whole war when she points out she's gay.
Also, after Miyuki is interrogated by Beryl, she says to her face that Nanoha has no interest in Endymion at all, and is perfectly happy with Fate. And that if Beryl hadn't ordered the attack on the wedding, Nanoha wouldn't have even gotten involved. Beryl goes into a combination of Villainous BSOD and denial mode.
Mythology Gag: Nanoha notices that the bodyguard of a family friend bears a close resemblance to Fate, referencing said bodyguard's existence in Triangle Heart 3. At least some wedding guests thought they were siblings.
At the end of Codename: Sailor V, Minako was cursed to never find happiness because she would always put her duty ahead of her own desires. At the wedding, she would have been the one to catch the bouquet had she hadn't immediately ran to Nanoha's side when she collapsed. After Metallia is finally defeated her duty is finally relieved and she can pursue her desires.
An early chapter mentions a dream Nanoha had about eating a large pile of sweet potatoes, only to wake up and realize that she had been chewing on Yuuno (In ferret form) in her sleep. This was taken from one of the cut to commercial scenes in As.
Oh Crap: While not shown outright, it is highly suggested that the Senshi started feeling this as Nanoha was now cleared to take a direct hand in their training.
Shamal and Nanoha have a mild form of this when they learn just how powerful Hotaru really is.
Beryl gets it bad when she nearly gets taken out by a Dungeon Bypass and then realizes exactly why Serenity's reincarnation is known as The White Devil.
Out-of-Character Moment: Some see Nanoha's Calling The Old Woman Out as this, not necessarily because of her arguments (Nanoha is considerably more responsible than Usagi or Serenity), but because throughout, Nanoha is completely blunt and holds nothing back. Others suggest that her emotional state at the time influenced it.
Numerous other examples as well for many characters, to the point of being In Name Only in some examples. For instance, when you consider that even Quattro couldn't provoke Nanoha into using lethal force in the main series, her vaporizing Jadeite without so much as batting an eye can't be anything but this.
Nanoha had already rescued Vivio by the time she blasted Quattro. Jadeite was still a major threat to not only Nanoha's entire family but dozens of innocents when she blasted him. Additionally she was still injured and likely knew she would only get one shot against what was basically an unknown opponent, it's no wonder she hit him with everything she had.
This may also simply be a case of the story treating magic as being more lethal than it is in cannon. Canon Nanoha has blasted enemies with far more powerful attacks on a number of occasions without causing more than a Non-Lethal K.O..
More accurately, it's a matter of the author apparently unaware that in canon Nanoha's spells are explicitly non-fatal. Nanoha wouldn't throw those absurdly powerful spells at people she's trying to befriend if they could kill them; that being said, if the author believed those were potentially fatal attacks it rather changes Nanoha's character anyway.
Papa Wolf: Shirou tells Jadeite that he won't stand for people threatening his daughter, but soon afterward, Jadeite breaks his arm, making his threat somewhat hollow.
Poor Communication Kills: Luna never bothers to explain to Fate why she needs to talk to Nanoha. Justified when Artemis later explains that was how he and Luna used to do things back during the Moon Kingdom; they're used to having the authority to get things done without being questioned.
If you go over the opening chapters and look at what each party is saying to the other from only one perspective at a time, it's more understandable as to why said poor communication turned out so disastrously. As Fate said, "It doesn't matter what is true, but what the person believes to be true."
Power Creep, Power Seep: Naturally, there has to be a bit of power level balancing to be done with this sort of crossover, given the two different magics at work. Gets sort of ridiculous in chapter 6, however, where Jupiter is said to have knocked out two TSAB Mooks with her bare hands.
Possibly justified – Jupiter is the only one of the Inners with any kind of formal martial arts training, and the average TSAB mook is a Squishy Wizard due to the TSAB putting more focus on magical combat than hand-to-hand. When Makoto trains with Zafira, who is extremely skilled, she gets her ass kicked several times before she manages to win even a single spar.
Done extremely weirdly. Word Of God says the Senshi are badasses for holding off the Dark Kingdom for a year by themselves and their power levels are roughly equivalent to A-rank mages by the Bureau's reckoning, which is a significant boost over their usual performance. In practice, however, they fight with no more competence than they showed in the anime — arguably less of it — and struggle to defeat enemies that A-rank mages should be able to steamroll. For instance, one of Precia's Mecha-Mooks (which they have no reason to hold back against) takes the entire team to bring down after analyzing it for weak points.
Makes some sense considering that the TSAB's modus operandi is to ensure that their agents have a reliable support structure and are not on a mission for too long. The Senshi have been fighting the Dark Kingdom for over a year, so the TSAB is rightly impressed with what they have managed to do so far.
Makes more sense when you remember that while the TSAB considers the Senshi A-class in raw power, as far as they're concerned the Senshi are practically untrained. That is to say, they have a lot of power, but no idea how to really use it
The villains are not powered up to match the Nanoha cast, let alone the combination of the Nanoha cast and the Senshi. Which means that except for the possibility that Metallia might be revived they never pose a credible threat.
Prophecy Twist: Nephrite foretells that the Moon Princess will come to harm at the wedding ceremony. Beryl takes that to mean that the Moon Princess will die, and has Jadeite attack the wedding. Nanoha injures herself further after using a Divine Buster on Jadeite, but survives.
Reality Ensues: Nanoha points out that even if the Dark Kingdom hadn't attacked, Serenity could have caused a diplomatic incident if she came to harm while on Earth, or could have handed the entire kingdom over to Endymion if he had been unscrupulous.
Screw Destiny: In regards to Nanoha/Mamoru vs Nanoha/Fate subplot. Word Of God says that Nanoha/Mamoru is not set in stone just because of the Reincarnation Romance angle, and the author has noted in proofreading discussion that Mamoru is making a crucial mistake in thinking of Nanoha as "the Princess" and not as "Takamachi Nanoha".
In Sailor Moon, it is implied that because the Earth Prince and Moon Princess were lovers in their previous lives, they are destined to be lovers again in their current ones. I don't find that plausible. I find the interpretation presented in the Deverry novels by Katherine Kerr to be more likely. In those stories, two people with a strong connection to each other (positive or negative) in one life will be inclined to similar feelings if they meet in another life, but they aren't bound to it. Reincarnated lovers will be inclined to like each other when they meet, making it easier for them to become lovers again, and reincarnated enemies will be inclined to dislike each other, making it easier for them to find a new reason to fight in the current life, but these are not set in stone. Reincarnated enemies can resolve their differences. Reincarnated lovers can end up parting ways. One's previous lives might influence the person they become, but it doesn't define them absolutely. Nanoha is not Princess Serenity. Mamoru is not Prince Endymion.
Though technically it took Mamoru and Usagi coming to know each other in their present lives before they actually really liked each other in canon, something that is oftentimes ignored.
For what it's worth, many reviewers have noted that Nanoha wouldn't be quite as good a match for him as Usagi is, but take that as you well.
For that matter, Nanoha not taking an interest in actually reviving the Moon Kingdom at all, only seeing it as something of historical interest. Luna is not happy about that at all.
Senseless Sacrifice: The death of the original Sailor Venus, in the eyes of Nanoha. Not because of anything that Venus did, but because Princess Serenity didn't make any effort to make Venus' sacrifice mean anything.
Sequel Hook: An omake in which Minako, now a music student on her school's annual charity concert tour, is forced to transform into Sailor Venus to repel a monster attack - on stage, during a performance. In front of Michiru Kaioh.
Super Mode: Lunar Excellion Nanoha. The closest powerup to having Nanoha a Sailor Senshi.
Switching P.O.V.: The narration switches between focusing on the Nanoha cast and the Sailor Moon cast, which determines which characters are referred to by name or how situations are described. For example, Fate finds "the cat" to be a nuisance who can potentially interrupt Nanoha's recovery, while Luna thinks that "the Dark Senshi" has brainwashed the princess and is threatening the fate of the world. After the two sides start working together, this effect lessens, though the POV continues to switch among the various characters (including the villains).
Training from Hell: The Senshi are certainly thinking the training Nanoha is subjecting them to is this. They are at least accepting it since it is clear that she intends to make them into the elite soldiers they were in a past life. Then Nanoha gets better...
Tranquil Fury: Nanoha is not pleased with her sister getting kidnapped.
As Vita looked up to Nanoha's eyes, she couldn't help the cold pit forming in her stomach. The same cold she had felt when she had seen those eyes leveled at her from a young girl, surrounded by fire. She remembered what she had called the girl back then...
Transformation Trinket: Nanoha gets one from the Sailor V arcade game. Fate promptly ships it off to the TSAB to be studied when she realized Luna sent it to Nanoha.
The Unmasqued World: The truth of the wedding attack is public as there are too many witnesses and photos of the Senshi, and Nanoha's family are now being hounded by lots of interested people.
Unskilled, but Strong: The Sailor Senshi, partly due to not operating under the same rules of engagement as the Bureau and partly due to not having much experience, are currently roughly equivalent to A rank, but have the potential to fight at AAA rank level.
Villain Ball: If Beryl wasn't so determined to kill Nanoha, it's highly likely that Nanoha and Fate would still be suspicious of the Sailor Senshi. Way to go, Beryl...She regretted bitterly when Miyuki pointed this and the fact that she had no interest in Endymion at all.
Precia's method of drawing energy at a hospital is too blatant and serves to draw the attention of the TSAB fairly quickly, resulting in Alicia ending up in Bureau custody.
Writer on Board: Between Chibi-Usa bashing, liberal use of Conflict Balls to force the Senshi into a Hero Antagonist role, and a massively one-sided Love Triangle among many other such signs, the author very obviously favors the Nanoha characters over the Senshi, who are portrayed as massively incompetent and wrong about everything even when they're not hideously out of character (RE: Luna). He gives them occasional lipservice in his authors notes, but in-fic the Senshi behave and perform like a squad of Mooks and struggle to take out a single drone that mages of their rank should be able to slaughter by the dozens early in the fic.
Definitely a YMMV topic. Much like Power Creep, Power Seep fans of one show will tend to feel that their show's characters are being maligned while the other show's characters are being Mary Sue'd.
Power is rarely the issue (I kind of agree with how the power stands up). It's usually plot elements that, when the two series are compared, the situation is usually resolved very quickly (often to the detriment of any possible dramatic or emotional tension), and overwhelmingly in favor of Nanoha's series.
One blatant example in the final chapter: what happened to the DD Girls, the ones who in the Sailor Moon anime killed all the Inner Senshi? All but one died because they just happened to be in the path of Nanoha's first Divine Buster (Nanoha was trying a Dungeon Bypass).
You Can't Thwart Stage One: Averted. The Mistress Nine parasite is identified and removed before it gets entrenched deep enough in Hotaru's soul to actively fight back, leading to the dismantling of the Death Busters' operations before they're even equipped to be a threat.
Played straight on the other hand with Metallia's revival.
You Shall Not Pass: Jupiter attempted one of these during the fall of the Moon Kingdom. She died in the attempt (rather messily), but between them she and Mercury bought Queen Serenity enough time to stop Metallia.