Fanfic: Rise of the Galeforces

Adam: I looked at Sarah, aka Stratogale. Stratogale... Gale-force winds... Galeforces. "Would Galeforces sound good?" I asked.
Kate: "Yeah, it does sound good," I said. "It does bring Stratogale to mind."
Sarah: I blushed, naturally. An entire team named after me? They shouldn't have. "Aww, thanks guys," I said. "But even if the team is named after me, I want this to be about all of us. And if Mr. Incredible is The Incredibles' leader, Splashdown should be The Galeforces' leader."
Adam, Kate, and Sarah Squall, naming the new Super Family Team in town.

Violet and Dash Parr, sibling Supers in training, recieve a call from Aperture Science and Technology about an important project downtown. What they find is a discovery that will change their lives forever — a cloning facility housing the late Supers from the Golden Era. Narrowly escaping from the lab with their lives, they meet one of the clones, Sarah Squall a.k.a. Stratogale, and help her reunite with the rest of her family.

And so starts an adventure of a lifetime. Together, the Parrs and the Squalls, as mutual allies, go through all kinds of good-time heroic action involving ticklish situations, no-holds-barred ass-kicking, and new bonds of friendship.

The Incredibles: Rise of the Galeforces is a fanfiction collab by Troper Geosternbergia, known on deviantArt as Shadow-Aspect, and fellow deviantArt compatriot georgemiser. It all started with a comment on one of Shadow-Aspect's deviations, but what blossomed was a fanfiction that explores the backstories and histories of a majority of the late Supers mentioned during the Incredibles movie far better than anything cranked out by the NSA. Although it was a relatively local fanfic, it speculates about what the past Supers' lives may have been like, and it certainly was more comprehensive than all of the NSA files on the bonus DVD put together.

Unfortunately, the fanfic was plagued by massive characterization issues, mostly stemming from a Gary Stu who was stated to be Sarah's brother, as well as a ton of confusing crossover elements. Geosternbergia's then-inflated ego did not help matters as said Gary Stu became increasingly prominent; this eventually came to a head near the end of the fic, when the already tenuous plot finally imploded upon itself, with disastrous and rather gruesome results. Despite promoting the strengths of the fic over the years, Geo eventually tired of it after realizing how flawed it was. He eventually took the time to spork/critique the fic himself upon joining the Protectors of the Plot Continuum, during which one of his agents had a bit of an identity crisis when encountering the fic's badly written characters.

The full story is available for reading here. For the PPC mission critiquing this fic, go here.

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