History Fanfic / RiseOfTheGaleforces

12th Dec '15 3:22:46 PM desdendelle
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Unfortunately, the fanfic was plagued by massive characterization issues, mostly stemming from a GaryStu who was stated to be Sarah's brother, as well as [[MegaCrossover a ton of confusing crossover elements.]] Geosternbergia's [[SmallNameBigEgo then-inflated ego]] did not help matters as said GaryStu became increasingly prominent; this eventually came to a head near the end of the fic, when the already tenuous plot finally imploded upon itself, with disastrous and rather gruesome results. Despite promoting the strengths of the fic over the years, Geo eventually tired of it after realizing how flawed it was. He eventually took the time to spork/critique the fic himself upon joining the Fanfic/ProtectorsOfThePlotContinuum, during which one of his agents had a bit of an identity crisis when encountering the fic's badly written characters.

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Unfortunately, the fanfic was plagued by massive characterization issues, mostly stemming from a GaryStu who was stated to be Sarah's brother, as well as [[MegaCrossover a ton of confusing crossover elements.]] Geosternbergia's [[SmallNameBigEgo then-inflated ego]] did not help matters as said GaryStu became increasingly prominent; this eventually came to a head near the end of the fic, when the already tenuous plot finally imploded upon itself, with disastrous and rather gruesome results. Despite promoting the strengths of the fic over the years, Geo eventually tired of it after realizing how flawed it was. He eventually took the time to spork/critique the fic himself upon joining the Fanfic/ProtectorsOfThePlotContinuum, WebOriginal/ProtectorsOfThePlotContinuum, during which one of his agents had a bit of an identity crisis when encountering the fic's badly written characters.
5th Nov '15 8:57:32 AM nombretomado
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** Thunderhead is [[TheMightyThor Thor]], only [[DumbMuscle dumber.]] He also smacks of [[Disney/TheEmperorsNewGroove Kronk]] in that he is not very smart, is well-chested, and is voiced by Creator/PatrickWarburton.

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** Thunderhead is [[TheMightyThor [[ComicBook/TheMightyThor Thor]], only [[DumbMuscle dumber.]] He also smacks of [[Disney/TheEmperorsNewGroove Kronk]] in that he is not very smart, is well-chested, and is voiced by Creator/PatrickWarburton.
18th Oct '15 10:48:28 AM nombretomado
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** Sarah is PowerGirl, though without the SuperToughness.

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** Sarah is PowerGirl, ComicBook/PowerGirl, though without the SuperToughness.
24th Sep '15 3:47:53 PM nombretomado
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** Splashdown is ComicBook/{{Aquaman}} as voiced by Creator/AshtonKutcher, and Kate is [[{{Gen13}} Freefall]] as played by KatherineHeigl. Both of them also played a married couple in ''Film/{{Killers}}''.

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** Splashdown is ComicBook/{{Aquaman}} as voiced by Creator/AshtonKutcher, and Kate is [[{{Gen13}} [[ComicBook/{{Gen13}} Freefall]] as played by KatherineHeigl. Both of them also played a married couple in ''Film/{{Killers}}''.
25th Aug '15 11:40:37 AM HighCrate
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* CompetitiveBalance
** JackOfAllStats: Adam and Vi. The former is decently fast, strong enough to carry off his own weight, and able to take a few bullet rounds if need be. The latter is more of a StoneWall, but can also use the famous [=IncrediBall=] tagteam manuver alongside Dash for speed travel. Neither are as good as some of the other family members, though.
*** And both of the moms as well.
** FragileSpeedster: Dash, although he becomes a bit of a GlassCannon later on due to his lightning powers.
** GlassCannon: Sarah. She'd be a FlyingBrick if it ''weren't'' for her lack of SuperToughness.
** LightningBruiser: Velociripper. Keep in mind that according to Adam, ''actual'' deinonychosaurs were more of the JackOfAllStats variety.
*** And on the good side, we have [[ThoseTwoGuys Splashdown and Thunderhead.]]
*** [[spoiler:Violet in Episode 4.]]
** MightyGlacier: Mr. Incredible, although he borderlines on LightningBruiser at times.
** StoneWall: Vi, when she's in her force field at least, though she straddles the line between this and JackOfAllStats from time to time, [[spoiler:and [[ScaledUp becomes]] [[TyrannosaurusRex the ultimate]] LightningBruiser in Episode 4.]]



* ShownTheirWork: WordOfGod is surprisingly up to date with the paleontological evidence of the present day.

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* ShownTheirWork: ShowingTheirWork: WordOfGod is surprisingly up to date with the paleontological evidence of the present day.
13th Jul '15 8:05:14 PM Llygodenfawr
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[[WesternAnimation/TheIncredibles Violet and Dash Parr]], sibling Supers in training, recieve a call from [[VideoGame/{{Portal}} Aperture Science and Technology]] about an important project downtown. What they find is a discovery that will change their lives forever -- a cloning facility housing the late Supers from the Golden Era. Narrowly escaping from the lab with their lives, they meet one of the clones, Sarah Squall a.k.a. Stratogale, and help her reunite with the rest of her family.

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[[WesternAnimation/TheIncredibles Violet and Dash Parr]], sibling Supers in training, recieve receive a call from [[VideoGame/{{Portal}} Aperture Science and Technology]] about an important project downtown. What they find is a discovery that will change their lives forever -- a cloning facility housing the late Supers from the Golden Era. Narrowly escaping from the lab with their lives, they meet one of the clones, Sarah Squall a.k.a. Stratogale, and help her reunite with the rest of her family.
13th Jun '15 2:44:08 AM Morgenthaler
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** Splashdown is ComicBook/{{Aquaman}} as voiced by Creator/AshtonKutcher, and Kate is [[{{Gen13}} Freefall]] as played by KatherineHeigl. Both of them also played a married couple in ''{{Killers}}''.

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** Splashdown is ComicBook/{{Aquaman}} as voiced by Creator/AshtonKutcher, and Kate is [[{{Gen13}} Freefall]] as played by KatherineHeigl. Both of them also played a married couple in ''{{Killers}}''.''Film/{{Killers}}''.
12th Mar '15 8:26:18 PM TVRulezAgain
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->'''Sarah:''' I blushed, naturally. An entire team named after me? They shouldn't have. "Aww, thanks guys," I said. "But even if the team is named after me, I want this to be about all of us. And if Mr. Incredible is ''TheIncredibles''' leader, Splashdown should be The Galeforces' leader."

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->'''Sarah:''' I blushed, naturally. An entire team named after me? They shouldn't have. "Aww, thanks guys," I said. "But even if the team is named after me, I want this to be about all of us. And if Mr. Incredible is ''TheIncredibles''' ''WesternAnimation/TheIncredibles''' leader, Splashdown should be The Galeforces' leader."



[[TheIncredibles Violet and Dash Parr]], sibling Supers in training, recieve a call from [[VideoGame/{{Portal}} Aperture Science and Technology]] about an important project downtown. What they find is a discovery that will change their lives forever -- a cloning facility housing the late Supers from the Golden Era. Narrowly escaping from the lab with their lives, they meet one of the clones, Sarah Squall a.k.a. Stratogale, and help her reunite with the rest of her family.

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[[TheIncredibles [[WesternAnimation/TheIncredibles Violet and Dash Parr]], sibling Supers in training, recieve a call from [[VideoGame/{{Portal}} Aperture Science and Technology]] about an important project downtown. What they find is a discovery that will change their lives forever -- a cloning facility housing the late Supers from the Golden Era. Narrowly escaping from the lab with their lives, they meet one of the clones, Sarah Squall a.k.a. Stratogale, and help her reunite with the rest of her family.



''TheIncredibles: Rise of the Galeforces'' is a fanfiction collab by Troper [=Geosternbergia=], known on deviantArt as [[http://shadow-aspect.deviantart.com/ Shadow-Aspect]], and fellow deviantArt compatriot [[http://georgemiser.deviantart.com/ georgemiser]]. It all started with a comment on one of Shadow-Aspect's deviations, but what blossomed was a fanfiction that explores the backstories and histories of a majority of the late Supers mentioned during the Incredibles movie far better than anything cranked out by the NSA. Although it was a relatively local fanfic, it speculates about what the past Supers' lives may have been like, and it certainly was more comprehensive than all of the NSA files on the bonus DVD put together.

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''TheIncredibles: ''WesternAnimation/TheIncredibles: Rise of the Galeforces'' is a fanfiction collab by Troper [=Geosternbergia=], known on deviantArt as [[http://shadow-aspect.deviantart.com/ Shadow-Aspect]], and fellow deviantArt compatriot [[http://georgemiser.deviantart.com/ georgemiser]]. It all started with a comment on one of Shadow-Aspect's deviations, but what blossomed was a fanfiction that explores the backstories and histories of a majority of the late Supers mentioned during the Incredibles movie far better than anything cranked out by the NSA. Although it was a relatively local fanfic, it speculates about what the past Supers' lives may have been like, and it certainly was more comprehensive than all of the NSA files on the bonus DVD put together.
2nd Dec '14 11:17:46 AM nombretomado
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* AnachronismStew: The ''entire story'' is supposedly set in 1980 but has cell phones, computers advanced enough to play Portal, the Internet, and {{Blink182}}. And most of the involved continua don't take place until several decades later.

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* AnachronismStew: The ''entire story'' is supposedly set in 1980 but has cell phones, computers advanced enough to play Portal, the Internet, and {{Blink182}}.Music/{{Blink 182}}. And most of the involved continua don't take place until several decades later.
18th Oct '14 8:10:44 PM Geosternbergia
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''TheIncredibles: Rise of the Galeforces'' is a fanfiction collab by [=SkarmorySilver=], known on DeviantArt as [[http://shadow-aspect.deviantart.com/ Shadow-Aspect]], and his good friend [[http://georgemiser.deviantart.com/ georgemiser]]. It all started with a comment on one of SS's dA deviations, but what blossomed was a groundbreaking fanfiction that explores the backstories and histories of a majority of the late Supers mentioned during the Incredibles movie far better than anything cranked out by the NSA. As a MassiveMultiPlayerCrossover, it also showcases characters from numerous other franchises. Although it's a relatively local fanfic, it speculates about what the past Supers' lives may have been like, and it certainly is more comprehensive than all of the NSA files on the bonus DVD put together.

The full story is available for reading [[http://fav.me/d3j5faq here, starting from Chapter 1.]]

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''TheIncredibles: Rise of the Galeforces'' is a fanfiction collab by [=SkarmorySilver=], Troper [=Geosternbergia=], known on DeviantArt deviantArt as [[http://shadow-aspect.deviantart.com/ Shadow-Aspect]], and his good friend fellow deviantArt compatriot [[http://georgemiser.deviantart.com/ georgemiser]]. It all started with a comment on one of SS's dA Shadow-Aspect's deviations, but what blossomed was a groundbreaking fanfiction that explores the backstories and histories of a majority of the late Supers mentioned during the Incredibles movie far better than anything cranked out by the NSA. As a MassiveMultiPlayerCrossover, it also showcases characters from numerous other franchises. Although it's it was a relatively local fanfic, it speculates about what the past Supers' lives may have been like, and it certainly is was more comprehensive than all of the NSA files on the bonus DVD put together.

Unfortunately, the fanfic was plagued by massive characterization issues, mostly stemming from a GaryStu who was stated to be Sarah's brother, as well as [[MegaCrossover a ton of confusing crossover elements.]] Geosternbergia's [[SmallNameBigEgo then-inflated ego]] did not help matters as said GaryStu became increasingly prominent; this eventually came to a head near the end of the fic, when the already tenuous plot finally imploded upon itself, with disastrous and rather gruesome results. Despite promoting the strengths of the fic over the years, Geo eventually tired of it after realizing how flawed it was. He eventually took the time to spork/critique the fic himself upon joining the Fanfic/ProtectorsOfThePlotContinuum, during which one of his agents had a bit of an identity crisis when encountering the fic's badly written characters.

The full story is available for reading [[http://fav.me/d3j5faq here, starting from Chapter 1.[[http://shadow-aspect.deviantart.com/gallery/30890410/The-Incredibles-Rise-of-the-Galeforces here.]] For the PPC mission critiquing this fic, go [[http://armorbirdpress.tumblr.com/post/100008990058/rc-227-mission-1-connecting-the-dots-complete here.]]



* {{Adorkable}}: Both Adam and Vi, but Adam especially.
* AnachronismStew: Carnotaurus in 1980 (it was actually discovered in 1985).
** For that matter, the ''entire story'' is supposedly set in 1980 but has cell phones, computers advanced enough to play Portal, the Internet, and {{Blink182}}.

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* {{Adorkable}}: Both Adam and Vi, but Adam especially.
especially. [[spoiler:Until you realize how badly written they really are...]]
* AnachronismStew: Carnotaurus in 1980 (it was actually discovered in 1985).
** For that matter, the
The ''entire story'' is supposedly set in 1980 but has cell phones, computers advanced enough to play Portal, the Internet, and {{Blink182}}.{{Blink182}}. And most of the involved continua don't take place until several decades later.



* AuthorAvatar: Adam/Terrordactyl at first, as outright stated by WordOfGod. He does diverge into his own character later on, however.

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* AuthorAvatar: Adam/Terrordactyl at first, as outright stated by WordOfGod. He does attempt to diverge into his own character later on, however.but ends up becoming a GaryStu through and through.



* BadassAdorable: All of the children, but especially the younger 'uns. Vi and Adam seem to lean more towards Badass {{Adorkable}}.
* BadassBookworm: Adam, particularly where dinosaurs are concerned. It leads to a lot of ArtisticLicensePaleontology jokes whenever he's around.

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* BadassAdorable: All of the children, but especially the younger 'uns. Vi and Adam seem seems to lean more towards Badass {{Adorkable}}.
{{Adorkable}} [[spoiler:until she gets turned into a ''T. rex'']].
* BadassBookworm: Adam, particularly where dinosaurs are concerned. It leads to Unfortunately, that doesn't save him from being a lot of ArtisticLicensePaleontology jokes whenever he's around.GaryStu.



* TookALevelInBadass: Many of the more important characters level up in the course of the plot.

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* TookALevelInBadass: Many of the more important characters level up in the course of the plot. [[spoiler:Adam and Violet eventually end up going into full-scale Suvian territory later on.]]
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