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#26: Mar 4th 2014 at 7:15:32 PM

I thought as much, but I still figured I should clarify.

In my hypothetical example, though, it wouldn't have been giving Destiny a gummi-like transformation, just similar functionality for traversing the inter-World medium/Lanes Between.

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#27: Mar 5th 2014 at 9:02:25 PM

Say, do you guys think I can get away with treating Darkness a bit like Rinki/DoRinki? In that show, Rinki is a generally malevolent ki powered by aggression/pain, and its nigh-hax super form, DoRinki, is achieved by the JyuKen practitioner having sufficient Hate, Envy, and Rage.

Heck, in the last few episodes Rio and Mele even pull a Heel–Face Turn and show that Dark Is Not Evil, using their RinJyuKen to try and save the world from Long.

edited 5th Mar '14 9:03:58 PM by EvaUnit01

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#28: Mar 6th 2014 at 9:32:57 AM

I wonder, would a deconstruction of fan-made Keyblade users count as a Take That when the self insert from his POV does not like them at all due to them being arrogant douches?

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#29: Mar 6th 2014 at 12:02:50 PM

I take it there are fan-made Keybearers in your 'verse?

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#30: Mar 8th 2014 at 11:08:32 AM

Yes, but Sophie (the female character who uses a keyblade) is more or less my critique of my thoughts of a normal person being a Keyblade user, why it would suck at first and eventually why it would be awesome.

The other four are Wrong Genre Savvy. They think that they're in your typical Gary/Marty Stu fanfic where they're the best like no one ever was when in reality their acting like stupid idiots who will Leeroy Jinkens EVERYTHING with no general plan in mind. While it's a War is Hell story. Yeah.

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#32: Mar 8th 2014 at 5:54:44 PM

A mixture of Metal Gear and Gundam-style.

edited 9th Mar '14 1:41:16 AM by HeirophantsFool

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#33: Apr 12th 2014 at 10:54:31 AM

Sorry, double posting.

How do you guys feel about using world that are not Disney? Because I'm doing it...

The worlds I know I'm using:

Jojo's Bizarre Adventure Part 1

The Incredibles

Metroid: Zero Mission

The Hunchback of Notre Dame (I hate that damn adaption in 3D.)

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#34: Apr 12th 2014 at 7:42:14 PM

YOU'RE USING PHANTOM BLOOD?! HELL YES!!!!!

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#35: Apr 13th 2014 at 2:58:28 AM

[up]I was going to use Part 3 but Stands.

I was also going to use Castlevania Aria of Sorrow but I thought that would be redundant.

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#36: Apr 13th 2014 at 11:49:14 AM

USE PHANTOM BLOOD. 1) I've actually read it. 2) Jonathan is awesome.

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#37: Apr 13th 2014 at 5:51:54 PM

I am going to use Part 1.

edited 13th Apr '14 5:52:12 PM by HeirophantsFool

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#39: Apr 13th 2014 at 11:29:30 PM

I also need help with choosing worlds that fit the KH tone though I'm willing to compromise.

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#40: May 5th 2014 at 9:29:35 PM

On a side topic, here is a team (and perhaps a pairing) that needs to happen in a future KH title (official or Fanfic) due to their similarities, as well as those of their respective Siblings:

Golbez and Elsa.

(Yes, the heart is not so much black as it is completely gray. The commonality still holds.)

Seriously, anyone who's played Final Fantasy Dissidia and watched Frozen can easily imagine Cecil singing Do You Want to Build a Snowman.

Actually, I'd have those two band together under Riku who would pull a similar stunt... and it might be him who "kidnaps" Elsa. (Or they both could appear in that cutscene; I'd imagine that their arrival would be when Hans' army has penetrated Elsa's fortress; Donald and Goofy would be with that army while Sora would be with Anna and Christoph.)

All we need is one more "Wild Card" from each group (Disney and Square) to join them to become "Die fünf schwarze Ritter". And the Chapter featuring the fight between this group and their respective full-heroes and the reveal that they are good guys too, just not pure guys, would have a Mirrored Confrontation Shot on its Episode Title Card.

EDIT (1 hour later): Ugh! Why didn't I think about Ralph?! That's Four Black Knights. All we need is one more from a Squeenix Property. Preferably a Mad Scientist so that the Knights could take the guise of a Five Bad Band. (EDIT (20 min after that): I had the thought of Gilgamesh being the fifth placing Golbez as The Smart Guy, but there's just not the synergistic relationship between Bartz and Gilgy as exists between the other 4 pairs. Then I thought of Jecht, which could work, but there's the problem of him actually being evil in Dissidia, whereas Golbez was a Reverse Mole. Perhaps Jecht could be corrupted by The Virus fueling the fears that Riku, Golbez, Elsa, Ralph, and whomever the 5th person is are corrupted as well. Schala would also not work for similar reasons.)

Alternately, Golbez could have Elsa as a fifth Archfiend (specifically, the Elemental Embodiment of Ice,) with perhaps a few others collected from the Disney Worlds, again as an Anti-Hero Team.

Either way, I'd imagine Golbez would make Elsa a Badass Cape mirroring that of his former lieutenant Rubicante (his was fire-lined and ice-coated, hers would be ice-lined and fire coated).

And here's an exchange from a potential Boss Battle that would be around mid-game: Cecil's in his "Dark Knight" form for this battle, to contrast with his opponent's image. For the record, the "scum" in question was Baigan.

Cecil: I've dealt with scum like you. You're nothing more than a pawn.
Hans: Then perhaps it's time I promoted myself.
Form and Music Change

edited 5th May '14 10:59:21 PM by DonaldthePotholer

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#41: May 5th 2014 at 11:15:07 PM

So, I was given permission to write an entry in Lord Cavendish's Kingdom Hearts Fanfic Verse, and I cannot help but confide in all of you that I am worried.

He's my inspiration, you see. I only hope this fanfic, which I am pouring my all into, will be sufficiently "epic".

I have a link to the prologue here. It mostly functions to introduce us to a certain character.

I have a lot of plans for Worlds for the New Kingdom Hearts Crew to visit, including the world of Frozen, a "real" City of Lights, which will include a battle with a Hellfire Slinging Frollo in full on Laughing Mad "Holy Heartless" Mode, and numerous others.

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#42: May 9th 2014 at 7:54:10 PM

[up]I'm sorry, what is the series?

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#43: May 9th 2014 at 8:17:44 PM

[up] Its a rather old verse, most of it was written before Kingdom Hearts II came out, but even now, I gotta say its a fun read.

And I was allowed to write in this verse. Its simultaneously exciting...and a little nerve wracking. What if I don't do it justice? What if Wolfang is not a threatening enough villain?

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#44: May 9th 2014 at 9:32:57 PM

[up]Well, I guess considering how batshit your new villain is, I guess you could make him a Determinator.

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#45: May 14th 2014 at 3:35:19 PM

...Yeah, I think I like that. And that I succeeded in portraying him as just that insane.

The first chapter is coming up very soon, and I have to say, its one of the longest chapters I've ever written.

So. Much. Happening...

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#46: May 15th 2014 at 7:15:41 AM

I just realized something...

The self inserts, they never did deal with the whole the 'my world is gone' thing, right?

So, we have being homeless, no source of income, parents being dead/frozen in their world/Heartless, being on the streets with Heartless/Nobodies/whatever and those are just the problems I can immeadiatly think of.

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#47: Jun 4th 2014 at 3:38:40 PM

Chapter 2 of my fanfic is finally up, after a hiatus I hadn't planned to occur. Mostly it was personal issues related to home and work.

Please read and review. Link here.

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#48: Jun 11th 2014 at 9:14:30 PM

Hm, how would one go about attaining more reviewers? Should I try to make the story more interesting?

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#49: Jun 13th 2014 at 4:19:28 AM

I'll give you the full rundown of how powerful the SI will become (And no, Sora, Riku and Kairi will still be stronger):

Physical Strength: His strength is constantly being enhanced by the nano-machines in his body and the armor (more on that later) that enhances his strength even futher giving him super strength and letting him drop steamrollers with ease. The nano-machines also massage his muscles giving enhanced reflexes. This, combined with his [[Series//Gundam Newtype]] powers makes him untouchable. Though, the Stop/Slow spell family and the Quick spell would make his reflexes and Newtype powers moot.

His attainment and eventual mastery of the [[Manga//Jojo'sBizzareAdventure Ripple]] makes him even more deadly in a fist fight though he would rather rely on guns and attack drones. However, due to the nature of the Ripple, it's easily disruptable if he gets his air knocked out of him, can't breathe, loses too much blood, ect. As such he hardly relies it. Since most of his most of his weapons are laser based, and thus don't have a physical conduit so fist and feet only.

Magical Strength: He can't use magic at all. He can 'hear' (read: Newtype powers tingling) magic before the spell can be casted. And the Fin Funnels can reflect magic.

Equipment: Well...

Attack Drones: With the Newtype powers and Gadgeteer Genius skills at his disposal, he made five types of Attack Drones. Due to their nature, they run on batteries.

SR (Shooter) Fangs: Exactly what it says on the tin. Used in tandem with the Slasher fangs.

SS (Slasher) Fangs: Forms a red energy blade to slash the enemy. Used in tandem with the Shooter fangs.

SC (Scouter) Fangs: Does not have any offensive abilities but is used for reconnaissance.

EX (Explosion) Fangs: A Fang that has a powerful explosive inside of it. Is in limited quantity due to the explosives.

Fin Funnel: An attack drone that blocks laser attacks and later magic attacks.

GM Strike/Impulse: A human sized psychic controlled robot. At first used as suprise attack but then used in actual stratagies once he makes more. Each one has an Aile, Launcher and Sword Striker. Once remodeled they can use the Force, Sword and Blast Silhouettes. Due to the complex nature of these machines, the SI builds Minovsky reactors to power them.

-/

Armor:

Since the SI can't use magic that means he gets to make his own. And he gets to base it of Gundams. Official or fanmade.

The choices are:

F91-> V-Dash Gundam Hexa -> V2 Assault Buster

Exia -> 00Raiser -> 00 Qan [T]

Strike -> Impulse -> Arch Destiny (Made by Wacky Modder 84 and The Anime Overviewer)

(Note: He's only going to choose one.)

edited 13th Jun '14 5:09:41 AM by HeirophantsFool

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#50: Jun 30th 2014 at 11:13:53 PM

Chapter 2: Whispers Loudening

“As you all most likely know, the Alliance as we know it today arose out of the strife-filled period called the Empyreal Period today, where Lord Cavendish, the Cavendish Shinobi, and his various Generals and Commanders swarmed over the worlds, adding countless worlds to their sway! The fiendish Cavendish, some say, threw open the doors to the feared “Darkness”!”

Black smoke poured out through a number of devices positioned around the area;

“Cavendish at first seemed unstoppable! His forces were like a pestilence – yet a brave light stood forward. The heroic Sora, Riku and Kairi all stood forth, and though their paths are recorded as dividing, ultimately, they came together and faced the forces of Cavendish time and again!”

A number of paintings slid across the ceilings, some depicting battles with a white-clad shinobi, others depicting the Key-Wielders facing off against three Generals;

“But when all seemed lost at the hands of General Ameba, the cruelest of the Generals of the Empire, a miracle shown through! Riku arose from where Ameba so cowardly struck him down, after Sora had vanquished the monstrous general! Ultimately, brave warriors from across the cosmos gathered together and threw Cavendish himself into the hell of his own making!”

A painting showed Cavendish still smirking madly, his face-mask removed, in front of a massive swirling vortex with numerous swirling pieces to the vortex, all resembling black wings;

“It was this coalition which inspired the Universal Alliance, whose delegates met here, in Oceansburg! Electing President Sneer, the new Alliance would see its mettle tested by the devilish Midnight Faction, and its powerful commander, Sirius Viicous, his Sword Generals, and numerous other branch factions from the Empire! Cavendish indeed struck from beyond the grave!!”

The presenter became more animate, trying to depict a scenario of a disembodied Cavendish guiding his forces, even when most present had read their history books and knew established fact from conspiracy theory;

“And once again, Sora, Riku and Kairi, and numerous others from the Disney Kingdom, and others from countless other worlds banded together! They fought the dread Midnight Faction, fought it until the Arakis Foundation turned to the side of Good!”

Some groans at the notion that this was all black and white;

“With the Dark Axis fractured, it was only a matter of time! With General Saber, the infernal monster, stricken down like a beast, Sirius Viicous too met his end in Cetorburg.”

Even though some others suspected such was not truly the case. Which this presenter would ironically depict as a conspiracy theory.

“And that ushered in the period called The Last Remnants' Time, where the glorious Alliance Army marched world to world, crushing to dust any hold outs from the Empire or Axis! Alas, many great heroes were lost in these campaigns.”

Paintings came up which depicted these, making Jonahs grimace at how appallingly tasteless this was, to depict the death of heroes like it was just a stepping stone to something.

“Commander of the Disney Knights, Goofy, lost aboard the vessel of the Crimson Corsairs Pirates!”

“Court Wizard Donald, lost in dimensions in battle against the fiendish harlot Liana Hellish!”

“While regretable, these heroes died so that others could live in peace! And when Sneer retired, the Conservatori Party, glorious patriots, them, led by the illustrious war hero Alric Maynes and his valorous, handsome son Edric, took the reins! With them in power, we have never had a war since!”

And his political leanings come to light. Just when Jonahs thought this couldn't get more disgusting, it did.

Thankfully, though, he was not the only one to think so. A long haired young woman wearing an army uniform marched to the front, her attention-grabbing hair was a dark shade of silver, her skin a tan color likely resulting from outdoors work.

That was not the only thing attention grabbing about her. Jonahs grinned slightly when he saw the assets, but one cross look from Eva basically calmed him down.

The woman outright slapped the presenter across the forehead with a history book, “Does this book ring a bell? Most students here have read it, and it most likely contains next to none of your partisan hack behavior, nor does it baby our visiting students!”

She proceeded to open it and shoved it into his hands, “Go home and read it yourself.”

The presenter turned bright red, both with fury and embarrassment, “...Do not...undertake such brash displays, Anesha. You may hold some sway with Alric, but...”

“But what? Say what you're going to say. I am REALLY interested to hear what a sniveling toad has to say about me being out of the kitchen.”

The man looked shocked, as if she had read his mind.

She was lightly caressing the side of his face now, but going by how the guy was sweating, you could tell he somehow thought he was close to death. Jonahs admitted, there was a frightening aura around this lady.

Frightening, dangerous, probably a good hand in a fight...maybe he could get her for a spar some time.

The presenter, evidently, did not like the idea of further angering her, and so he hurried off with the history book, “W-Will do, m'lady Anesha.” It was evident in the way he hurried off that he feared her. Even though Jonahs couldn't see a weapon, he knew she could bring one to hand somehow.

Is it Requip? So he thought to himself. Going by her posture and the way she was so easy about going in close to people, that was most likely the case.

By now, though, Jonahs' thoughts had drifted to the mysterious wanderer he had seen before. Wolfang Richler. The police were still a heavy presence around this area, and he had to wonder if this was really a wise idea, letting everyone in here just for a partisan showboating.

If this was really all that was intended to be shown, then he was severely disappointed. Enough that he decided to just lean back and try to get some sleep against one of the walls.

As he rested there, thinking about things like the Wolfang encounter and the fact that it seemed odd they were let into a place where two people were petrified by a highly dangerous man, he made sure to keep enough of his awareness.

Which paid off when someone threw a pen at him.

He suddenly snapped into action, bringing a hand up and catching it, though noting it had slightly scraped his hand. Someone was pretty good with their physical abilities if they could use such a thing as a pen as a weapon.

He looked over to see another of those army types that it seemed were working with the police in here. The guy had some weird haircut that involved dyed blond hair and backfacing prongs, and looked like he was built like a tank.

He wore rather old fashioned armor rather than the army uniform his ally evidently preferred, and Jonahs did admit, he sensed something dangerous from those two. And somehow, he had found the right moment to throw it at Jonahs through the throngs of students and other people moving through the museum.

He pocketed the pen, and took this to mean that either he was being watched by a hostile force, or that there was a message of “we're about to go after you”, or maybe they were trying to tell him to not lower his guard...

Yeah, he gave the impression of laziness, but that was because Jonahs liked to rest. He enjoyed excitement as much as the next youth, and—-

That brought back what he had said to Wolfang. There was no doubting it now, he decided, he had said the wrong thing to the wrong person.

By the time the presentation moved on, Jonahs moved with it. He could sleep later. There were things he would need to do. He didn't like being obligated to do anything, but the fact is, he was not the kind of man to dodge something once it started.

As they moved on to the next room, a room depicting numerous important battles, evidently Anesha took over from her lacklustre colleague. She started on the final battle of the war with the Midnight Faction, Cetorburg.

“In the battle of Cetorburg, the notorious enchanted castle disabled advanced weaponry, such as airship batteries and other distanced weapons, necessitating brutal, old fashioned fighting. He may have been eager to skip past it, but there can be no discounting what happened at Cetorburg.”

She seemed to know this personally, somehow. Jonahs remembered that his father fought at this battle too. “The battle saw the intervention of large numbers of Keyblade Wielders suddenly chosen, including the father of Destiny Islands' infamous Swordmaster, Perseus Sarasho. Perdus, among others, fought in this battle. It was here that heroes were made...and it was here where those who did not have such grandiose destinies perished.”

She once again seemed nostalgic as she gathered her voice to continue, “What the history book will not tell you is that Sora, Riku and their Team, KH, broke through the siege and personally battled Sirius Viicous, and it was there that they struck such a blow against him that he ended hostilities. What happened to Sirius is not my concern, but what is evident is that the rest of the Dark Axis fell in short order as more of their leaders found themselves dead.”

Jonahs grimaced. Yeah, it was pretty clear, going by some old stories Riku told him that Sirius Viicous probably had some hand in it. He'd thought it was just a conspiracy theory, but evidently, Sirius had lived.

He doubted the man yet lived today, but this put several things Alric Maynes wanted pushed as fact into doubt. And if those things were dismissed, how many of the other facts presented even in the history books or stated by historians were outright lies?

There was a damn good reason they had brought in that partisan hack – they wanted to ensure one way or another that the story was set in young peoples' minds. If they were trying to become dictatorial, they were really, really bad at it.

With that, and the crime that had happened there, the students were encouraged to leave the area. Well, not so much encouraged as forced out by the police. Jonahs made sure to watch them for any hostile actions.

When they exited, however, it looked oddly dark out. Jonahs did not like the feeling he was getting outside. He turned and looked at the police, the leader among them brooked no argument, “I was told you are to leave and go to your assigned hotel for a set time before further activities later. You will not be allowed back in the museum.”

Jonahs did not feel safe out here, and he doubted it was safe for the girls, or the regular students. So he wouldn't take this from some police officer probably taking handouts from Alric!

“It doesn't feel safe out here. I can just kinda...tell. Its not a good atmosphere, I guess.”

He cursed his inability to sound convincing, though. He was no orator, and his tongue always got tied up when he tried to vocalize these things.

The officer simply forced him back with one hand, and walked forward looking around, “You kids and your fear of the dark.”

Jonahs had to rub his eyes as the officer looked left and right, darkness was surging up behind him. The rest of the officers were cowering now. Black wings were starting to show from the surging darkness.

Wolfang. Jonahs tensed, ready to move in case this turned uglier than it already was.

The son of Sora looked over at Eva, concern evident in his eyes, but she seemed to be steely and ready to go. He showed a slight grin. Looked like there'd be excitement here after all.

Setanta tapped him on the shoulder again, now revealing that he had somehow managed to smuggle his collapsible lance into the city. “Ready to hit em hard, J?”

Jonahs knew he couldn't really do much without his weapon, but he wasn't just trained in armed combat. He was still pretty good unarmed just as well!

The officer finally got the hint that there might be something behind him as the darkness released something. It looked like some sort of figure, clad in black armor and wearing numerous dead branches across his frame. War paint was smeared across a skull-like face, glaring red eyes evident, ghastly chalk white hair upon its head.

Next to it was a large Heartless with a pair of rather goofy hands, its body seeming fat, and its head small. He remembered his father had told him about Large Body Heartless.

The other two were not out of any stories. They were black, jet black, constantly looking for any sign of prey that broke from the group. They only tangentially looked like wolves. The hungry death glare and darkness seeping out of their mouths full of fangs told him they were Heartless, through and through.

Pure-breeds, a vastly more dangerous sort.

But even they were incomparable to the sentient...intelligent...dweller of darkness that had exited that portal.

The officer barely had the time to register what he was seeing as he looked over his shoulder when the elf-like creature struck, so hard and fast that the officer's limp body crashed into the ceiling of the building.

It chuckled maliciously, “Pfahahah...barely even a challenge. And these disgusting cretins of the Realm of Light are trusted to serve and protect flocks...now to gorge myself on the sheep he guarded.”

Jonahs had not heard of anything quite like that monster before. Maybe it was some sort of other being from the Realm of Darkness. Maybe Wolfang had sprung a few of his old friends, being that he seemed like something from that Realm.

Setanta whispered excitedly, “Hey, dude, you handle tall dark and cocky, I'll take the Large Body...”

Eva butted in and sighed, “You're leaving the mutts to me? Fine, I'll beat them into house-worthy condition.”

She extended one arm and darkness flowed from her arm, slowly condensing into the form of a long, two sided silver blade. She knew what was to come after the battle, but it would be better than allowing these creatures to run roughshod.

The teenagers moved forward to undertake their missions, even as more portals opened across the area, with Anesha and the Pen-Thrower running off to take care of those.

Setanta leaped up, taking aim at the Large Body Heartless' vulnerable head, and remembering what his father had showed him before.

Jonahs, however, rushed forward at the creature he supposed fit the old stories of elves, and struck out with his right hand first, finding his frontal strike blocked and forced aside, to which he responded with a kick at the side of the creature's torso, which it simply took in stride.

The young son of Sora just looked astounded. He'd fought a lot of tough opponents in the sword tournaments on the island, but this guy was leagues and beyond anything he'd fought before...

The dark creature grinned, a sallow, joyless expression that looked more like mimicry than anything else, “Is that all? The Dark Angel informed me that there would be a son of the Keymaster. However, all I see...”

Just as it raised a hand to attack, Eva jumped in, pursuing the mutts, which yelped and bit in at her, to which she responded by impaling one of their heads to the ground, then leaping above the other attack, helping Jonahs by necessitating a distance between the fighters.

She looked on as she defeated another of the beasts, only to be bitten on the shoulder and forced down as the Shadow Dog that she thought beaten before dragged her to the floor.

Jonahs found himself distracted by the sight of Eva in trouble, and he abandoned the very thought of fighting the “elf” and vaulted toward her, he would not let the old sad stories happen again, he would not let himself fail to save her!

However, that was when something earth-shatteringly powerful cracked into his back. He felt his spine shatter at the impact sight, a widening numbness and dread spreading through his frame as he went flying forward, skidding roughly on the ground – his face badly bruised in the process.

The dark creature he had previously been fighting licked its lips as it stood there, its fist crackling with almost electric looking black energy. It slowly walked forward to the paralyzed son of the Keyblade Wielder, savoring every step.

“Shadow Dogs. Bring the girl over.” Even as she struck outward one last time and destroyed one of the Shadow Dogs with her blade, the others ganged up and dragged her over to Jonahs.

He wished he could get up and help her, he wished he could cast something, say something, kick at the damn monsters, just...do something! Do something, he screamed at his body, but not a sound came from his lungs. And not a movement came from his body.

Here is what I got insofar in Chapter 3. Thoughts? I know it ends on a really dark note right now, but things are about to look up in a big way.

edited 30th Jun '14 11:14:58 PM by NickTheSwing


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