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I have a trope for Sentinels of the Multiverse

• Grievous Harm with a Body: The base power of Extremist Sky-Scraper's Huge form Upheaval destroys any one environment card. If it's a target, she chucks it at a target to do damage.

From page 119: A post by brb1006

• The Japanese and Arabic version -> versions
• had longer scenes such as -> had longer scenes. These include
• wearing chef hats and when -> wearing chef hats, when

A post by Strafe2409 on page 119

• Speaking of Touhou's side material, -> This violates How to Write an Example - Remember That This Is A Wiki and Word Cruft - Positional comparatives. It should be deleted.

• some stages themes -> some stages' themes
• having a much moodier tone. -> have a much moodier tone.
• Especially Dolls in Pseudo Paradise -> This is especially true of Dolls in Pseudo Paradise,

• If it's a target, she chucks it at a target to do damage.

If what is a target? The previous sentence refers to both the base power and an environment card. Did you mean to say "If the card is a target..."?

If so, then shouldn't the rest of the sentence say "she chucks it at another target to do damage."?

Yea, that makes more sense. Counter stance though: the wording of Upheaval is to destroy an environment then chuck it at a target if the environment was a target. Due to the wording, she can indeed throw it at itself it is survives the destruction effect, and if it isn't indestructible then she can't do damage to it due to no longer being in play.

Sentinels likes to use Exact Words in it's rulings.

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Kaiego: keepers of nature is a webcomic/ screenplay created and written by E.A Okorie who currently has plans on having the series become a tv show of sorts in the near future the blight queen, Bildora wishes to do a compromise between the tribes of magea to share territories with each other after her home realm was destroyed. however, her powers of colonization was causing drastic consequences on earth making it nearly a wasteland. the people of magea had no other choice but drive her off their land.

flash forward to modern day. by that time, billdora has now returned and vowed revenge on magea by colonizing earth out of spite. to counter this, mother Ter'aia , goddess of earth, had reawakened the dominant bracelets which inhabit the essences of the warriors of legend, the Kaiego. she sends the bracelets off to find 5 people deemed worthy to wield the ancient powers stored within the them.

one of the bracelets in particular is taken in custody by a man in a antique shop which is then handed off to a boy by the name of John Archer. unknownst to him, the bracelet has picked him to become the new warrior of nature. now John has to unlock the inner power of the bracelet in order to combat the forces of the blight and monsters hailing from various realms. throughout the series, john with the help of chestnut finds others who are deemed worthy to wield the bracelets.

edited 19th Sep '16 10:52:19 AM by ewolf2015

First piece of advice: state the article you wish to make these edits to. It sounds like you are looking to create a new work article; is that correct?

Second, it's almost impossible to correct that text, because, among other things, you are not capitalizing the first letters of sentences or proper nouns, and you are writing quite a few run-on sentences, making it hard to tell what you're really trying to say. We could take a crack at it, but there are no promises that it'll be like what you intended.

Here's my shot at it. As an experiment, I'm just going to show the finished product after all corrections instead of listing each one the way I normally do.

Kaiego: Keepers of Nature is a webcomic/screenplay created and written by E.A Okorie, who currently plans on having the series become a TV show of sorts in the near future. After her home realm is destroyed, the Blight Queen, Bildora, wishes to bring about a compromise between the tribes of Magea to share territories with each other. However, her powers of colonization cause drastic consequences on Earth, making it nearly a wasteland. The people of Magea have no other choice but to drive her off their land.

Flash Forward to the modern day. Billdora has returned and vows revenge on Magea by colonizing Earth out of spite. To counter this, mother Ter'aia, goddess of Earth, reawakens the dominant bracelets which contain the essences of the warriors of legend, the Kaiego. She sends the bracelets off to find 5 people deemed worthy to wield the ancient powers stored within them.

One of the bracelets is obtained by a man in an antique shop, and is then handed off to a boy by the name of John Archer. Unbeknownst to John, the bracelet has picked him to become the new warrior of nature. Now John has to unlock the inner power of the bracelet in order to combat the forces of the Blight and monsters hailing from various realms. Throughout the series, John (with the help of Chestnut) finds others who are deemed worthy to wield the bracelets.

edited 20th Sep '16 3:19:25 AM by Arivne

I have a few additions for Star Vs The Forces Of Evil:

• Badass Family: The Butterfly-Johansen royal families of Mewni, Star are a Badass Princess who has battled monsters since her childhood, long before she received the family wand. Her father regularly sneaks off to hunt the most dangerous monsters he can find, as it’s the only think that keeps him sane. While her mother is the previous holder of the wand and even without it is capable of incredibly powerful magic. As shown in “Game of Flags” every single member of her family on both sides (save perhaps Star’s toddler cousins) count, as they all happily take part in the unrealistically violent and dangerous game, that is about scaling an incredibly dangerous mountain while doing whatever it takes to win to each other, as a pastime.
• Elves vs. Dwarves: The Butterfly-Johansen families seem fulfil this dynamic. The Johnsons are card carrying warriors, who are rough, barbarous and highly emotional. The Butterflies are elegant, regal, stuck up and highly reserved. The marriage of Moon Butterfly and River Johansen brought the two families together, creating Star who is a blend of both.
• Only Sane Woman: While she has her own blind spots and can get to caught up in expectations, Moon is debatable the most sensible member of her family. She has a lot more impulse control than either her husband or her daughter, likewise as “Game of Flags” shows her extended family aren’t much better. The Johansen’s are uncouth, rough and violent, while the Butterfly’s are snobbish, regal and just as aggressive and ruthless. Best demonstrated by the fact she was the only one trying to keep peace at the family reunion.

Any Errors?

edited 20th Sep '16 11:50:43 AM by MGD107

• The Butterfly-Johansen royal families of Mewni, Star are -> The Butterfly-Johansen royal families of Mewni. Star is
• it’s the only think -> thing
• While her mother is the -> Her mother is the...
• As shown in “Game of Flags” every -> As shown in “Game of Flags”, every

This is a really long sentence and should be broken up. I have also made a couple of other changes.

• seem fulfil this dynamic. -> have this dynamic (see Examples Are Not Arguable)

• can get to caught up -> too
• Moon is debatable the most sensible -> Moon is the most sensible (Examples Are Not Arguable)
• The Johansen’s are -> The Johansens are
• while the Butterfly’s are -> while the Butterflies are

edited 21st Sep '16 5:46:55 AM by Arivne

Thank you, here is the second version with your changes. Anymore errors?

• Badass Family: The Butterfly-Johansen royal families of Mewni. Star is a Badass Princess who has battled monsters since her childhood, long before she received the family wand. Her father regularly sneaks off to hunt the most dangerous monsters he can find, as it’s the only thing that keeps him sane. Her mother is the previous holder of the wand and even without it is capable of incredibly powerful magic. As shown in “Game of Flags”, every single member of her family on both sides (save perhaps Star’s toddler cousins) count. As a pastime, they all happily take part in an unrealistically violent and dangerous game, which is about scaling an incredibly dangerous mountain while doing whatever it takes to win to each other, as a pastime.
• Elves vs. Dwarves: The Butterfly-Johansen families have this dynamic. The Johnsons are card carrying warriors, who are rough, barbarous and highly emotional. The Butterflies are elegant, regal, stuck up and highly reserved. The marriage of Moon Butterfly and River Johansen brought the two families together, creating Star who is a blend of both.
• Only Sane Woman: While she has her own blind spots and too caught up in expectations, Moon is the most sensible member of her family. She has a lot more impulse control than either her husband or her daughter, likewise as “Game of Flags” shows her extended family aren’t much better. The Johansens are uncouth, rough and violent, while the Butterflies are snobbish, regal and just as aggressive and ruthless. Best demonstrated by the fact she was the only one trying to keep peace at the family reunion.

• Her mother is the previous holder of the wand and even -> Her mother is the previous holder of the wand, and even
• As a pastime, they all happily take part...to win to each other, as a pastime. -> Delete the second "as a pastime."

• While she has her own blind spots and too caught -> ...and can get too...

Thank you.

wow. looks the same to me

Until you understand the differences, we can't allow you to edit.

I have some additions for the character page on Powerpuff Girls in Bubbles' character folder.

• Adaptational Villainy: Behavior wise; Bubbles has a bigger temper in the 2016 series.
• Large Ham: Some of her Genki Girl moments are this. It's especially prominent in the reboot.
• Tender Tears: Does this frequently, and this is an example that is not always played for laughs.

• Adaptational Villainy: In the 2016 series she is fine with hitting others unprovoked.
• Big Eater: Downplayed, but it still shows up on occasion. Buttercup has mentioned being hungry more often than the other two, and whenever she is seen eating, she eats pretty ravenously.
• No Indoor Voice: Had this in the original series, until around the reboot when her voice gets a little softer and quieter, having become more snarky.

• Adorkable: Has this personality in the 2016 series.
• Character Tics: Her bow droops whenever she is sad, afraid, or tired.
• Dogged Nice Girl: For Jared in the 2016 series.
• Super OCD: She hates anything unsanitary and freaks out if she gets dirty in the 2016 series.
• Terrified of Germs: Flanderized into this on the reboot, see Super OCD.

Several of those examples are lacking in context. "Has this personality in the 2016 series," especially says nothing. Having a temper is not villainous.

All right, thank you for the point of advice. Here are the corrected ones, now with more context! For Blossom:

• Adorkable: Is notably dorkier in the 2016 series, being a germaphobe pretty cute and is particularly awkward around Jared.
• Neat Freak: Her obsession with cleanliness is amped up in the 2016 show.
• Super OCD: In the 2016 series, Blossom has been flanderized into this; she likes using latex gloves, turning into a glove-like aura using her [[Franchise/Green Lantern Green Lantern]]-like powers, or just avoiding it entirely, and she freaks out if she gets dirty.

• Took a Level in Jerkass: Is fine with hitting others unprovoked in the 2016 reboot; she's even forgotten to put her sisters' needs above her own twice.

Sorry, there was a spelling mistake in one of the examples. Thanks, auto correct.

Blossom

• Adorkable: Is notably dorkier in the 2016 series, looking adorable being a germaphobe and is particularly awkward around Jared.
• Neat Freak: Her obsession with cleanliness is amped up in the 2016 show.
• Super OCD: In the 2016 series, Blossom has been flanderized into this; she likes using latex gloves, turning into a glove-like aura using her [[Franchise/Green Lantern Green Lantern]]-like powers, or just avoiding it entirely, and she freaks out if she gets dirty.

Bubbles

• Took a Level in Jerkass: Definitely has not had it as bad as Buttercup, but has a pretty big temper in the reboot, and her more selfish side comes out more frequently.

Buttercup

• Took a Level in Jerkass: Is fine with hitting others unprovoked in the 2016 reboot; she's even forgotten to put her sisters' needs above her own twice.
• Totally Radical: Her Verbal Tic in the 2016 show, "Dude!" Buttercup also uses other slang often too, though it does signify her as One of the Boys.

Blossom

• Adorkable: Is notably dorkier in the 2016 series, being a germaphobe pretty cute and is particularly awkward around Jared.
• Neat Freak: Her obsession with cleanliness is amped up in the 2016 show.
• Super OCD: In the 2016 series, Blossom has been flanderized into this; she likes using latex gloves, turning into a glove-like aura using her [[Franchise/Green Lantern Green Lantern]]-like powers, or just avoiding it entirely, and she freaks out if she gets dirty.

Bubbles

• Took a Level in Jerkass: Definitely has not had it as bad as Buttercup, but has a pretty big temper in the reboot.

Buttercup

• Took a Level in Jerkass: Is fine with hitting others unprovoked in the 2016 reboot; she's even forgotten to put her sisters' needs above her own twice.

• being a germaphobe pretty cute -> What does "germaphobe pretty cute" mean?

• flanderized -> blue link: {{flanderized}} = flanderized
• [[Franchise/Green Lantern Green Lantern]] -> [[Franchise/GreenLantern Green Lantern]] = Green Lantern
• powers, or -> powers or
• or just avoiding it entirely: What does the "it" refer to?

• Took a Level in Jerkass -> Took a Level in Jerkass

edited 24th Sep '16 2:59:14 AM by Arivne

I meant that Blossom looked pretty cute when trying to not get dirty and freaking out over it. Also, the "it" in "avoiding it entirely" was any sort of dirt.

Here are some additions to the Inelegant Blubbering page, when this happens on Powerpuff Girls.

• Professor Untonium falls into this in "Reeking Havoc" during a flashback when he lost the Townsville Chili Cook-Off.
  • As for the 2016 series, Bubbles goes into a giant bawling fit after she gets a bad picture for Picture Day, and is shown with a wrinkly face.
  • In that same series, during "Odd Bubbles Out", Bubbles does this after her argument with Donny, which apparently went on for 2 hours straight, complete with bloodshot eyes.