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Orihime is an affectionate, kind-hearted, and polite individual. How kind is she? To the point of not only not becoming bitchy or bitter out of jealousy towards Rukia, but Orihime also gushing about how wonderful and amazing Rukia is and how bad she feels to be jealous of such a good person. Rangiku herself notes this as a reason why Ichigo needs Orihime as much as he needs Rukia and why she is a truly good person herself.

^ You don't need to use Orihime's name again because the reader already knows you're talking about her.

^ You used "becoming" earlier in the sentence, and the tense of the verb "gush" (gushing) should match it.

Barry Allen (The Flash 2014):

• The Chosen One: In Oliver Queen's own words, the force behind the lightning that struck Barry chose him for a reason. Additionally, Eobard Thawne keeps implying that there is something special about his speed. "The Runaway Dinosaur" confirms this by having the Speed Force itself state that it specifically chose Barry. However due to Flashpoint, the Speed Force effectively un-choses him by making him occupy the prison he built for Savitar; otherwise the Speed Force would collapse. "(Addition)": In "The Last Temptation of Barry Allen: Pt. 1" seems to imply that it re-choses him, especially since during the Crisis, he is also chosen to be the "Paragon of Love".

The last sentence is my addition.

In "The Last Temptation of Barry Allen: Pt. 1" seems to imply that it re-chooses him, especially since, <- comma during the Crisis, he is also chosen to be the "Paragon of Love".

Sakura Haruno (Naruto):

• Prone to Tears: When it comes to Naruto and Sasuke, Sakura sheds tears almost as easily as she breathes. As the series continues up to the end of the Fourth Shinobi World War and things grow direr for her original teammates for multiple reasons, Sakura becomes more of a sobbing wreck.

When it comes to Naruto and Sasuke, Sakura sheds tears almost as easily as she breathes. As the series continues up to the end of the Fourth Shinobi World War and things grow more dire for her original teammates for multiple reasons, Sakura becomes more of a sobbing wreck.

Glitch Techs (Laconic):

When The Men in Black + Recruit Teenagers with Attitude meets Video Game Society.

Edited by jahman on Feb 24th 2020 at 5:10:48 AM

I don't have enough information to tell whether this is correct English or not.

If The Men in Black + Recruit Teenagers with Attitude results in a singular entity (a mashing together of the two tropes), "meets" is fine. If they are together but separate (and thus plural), "meets" should be "meet".

Video Game Society

• If this is the actual name of something, it's a proper noun/name and thus correct.
• If you mean the society around video games, "society" is a common noun and should not be capitalized (e.g. Video Game society).

Edited by Arivne on Feb 25th 2020 at 2:34:46 AM

Germans Love David Hasselhoff

• Oliver & Company is very beloved in France, while the film was a modest success in the United States. It lost to Don Bluth's The Land Before Time. In France, Oliver & Company was very popular. To promote the film's french release in 1989, Anne Meson made an album called "Oliver" which was a hit in France. Oliver alongside Dodger, Tito, and Francis were featured in a series music videos starring her between 1989 and 1990. Anne Meson even performed the song "Oliver" at Disneyland Paris (then "Euro Disney") with Oliver and Dodger during the park's inaugural year.

Edited by brb1006 on Feb 27th 2020 at 11:19:20 AM

Chitoge Kirisaki (Nisekoi):

• Insecure Love Interest: In Chapter 227, when Raku confesses to her, Chitoge tearfully admits and acknowledges all her faults and flaws, showing how insecure she feels as a girl when she compares herself to a much more feminine figure as Onodera, ultimately calling herself a "Fake". When Raku chooses her regardless of all that, she happily accepts with tears running down her face.

@brb1006

Oliver & Company is much beloved in France, while the film was a modest success in the United States. It lost to Don Bluth's The Land Before Time. In France, Oliver & Company was very popular. To promote the film's French release in 1989, Anne Meson made an album called "Oliver", <- comma which was a hit in France. Oliver, <- comma alongside Dodger, Tito, and Francis were featured in a series of music videos starring her between 1989 and 1990.

^ I deleted "In France, Oliver & Company was very popular." because the first sentence already said something similar.

^ I deleted "alongside" to make the verb "were" correct.

Edited by Arivne on Mar 1st 2020 at 6:21:09 AM

@jahman

In Chapter 227, when Raku confesses to her, Chitoge tearfully admits and acknowledges all her faults and flaws, showing how insecure she feels as a girl when she compares herself to a much more feminine figure such as Onodera, ultimately calling herself a "fake". When Raku chooses her regardless of all that, she happily accepts, <- comma with tears running down her face.

Can I get this looked over?

This is the description for Anime.Night Head Genesis:

Most humans don't have access to 70% of their brain's mental power. However, some people do, and those people are called psychics.

The anime begins with two brothers, Naoto and Naoya Kirihara, who were born with psychic powers. They couldn't fit in with normal people because they couldn't control their powers well especially when they are overwhelmed by their abilities due to being so young. Their parents couldn't take the stress of caring for such abnormal children anymore so they drugged the boys and hand them over to a mysterious laboratory ( I guess it was a research center of sorts?) to be cared for and watched over.

After causing a scene at the facility out of anger, Naoto recalls his mother's words and realizes that he and his younger brother only have each so he vows to stay by Naoya's side and be his protector forever. Fast forward 15 years later, when the director of the laboratory dies the invisible barrier surrounding the building disappears, so now Naoto and Naoya are free to escape and experience the "normal' world as adults.

Night Head Genesis was a 24 episode that aired on 2006 and was broadcasted by Animax among others. In 2008, the series got licensed by Media Blasters and aired on the US network, Toku.

The anime is an adaptation of a 1992

Edited by MacronNotes on Mar 1st 2020 at 2:53:19 PM

• UFO Robo Grendizer: In Gosaku Ota's version, Science Minister Zuril is the most competent of the ruthless generals of the Vega Empire. A lover of nature, Zuril becomes personally angry at the human race after discovering their pollution of planet Earth and tries to exterminate them to save the ecosystem, managing to murder 300,000 civilians on one ocassion after putting entire cities to sleep using special waves before retreating due to the unexpected arrival of Grendizer. When his partner Gandal uses said tactical retreat to smear Zuril's reputation, Zuril frames Daisuke Umon as a spy of the Vegans, creating angry mobs that almost suceeded on killing Daisuke and allies. When the Defense Minister Dantos is send to Earth to replace Zuril and Gandal, they conspirate to murder Dantos and his guards. In the final arc, when King Vega himself orders to use multiple nukes in order to trigger a global nuclear war, Zuril murders the King in a tragic failed attempt to save the planet and stop the battle among his own countrymen. In the last scene, Zuril decides to help the survivors of humanity, saying that as long there's live, there's hope.

Edited by KazuyaProta on Mar 1st 2020 at 11:01:47 AM

@Macron Notes

They couldn't fit in with normal people because they couldn't control their powers well, <- comma especially when they were overwhelmed by their abilities due to being so young. Their parents couldn't take the stress of caring for such abnormal children anymore, <- comma so they drugged the boys and handed them over to a mysterious laboratory ( I guess it was a research center of sorts?) to be cared for and watched over.

^ "I guess it was a research center of sorts?)" was deleted as per First-Person Writing (AKA This Troper) and How to Write an Example - Don't Project Yourself Into the Entry and Aim For A Final Draft Appearance.

After causing a scene at the facility out of anger, Naoto recalls his mother's words and realizes that he and his younger brother only have each other, <- comma so he vows to stay by Naoya's side and be his protector forever. Fast forward 15 years later: <- colon when the director of the laboratory dies, <- comma the invisible barrier surrounding the building disappears, so now Naoto and Naoya are free to escape and experience the "normal' world as adults.

Night Head Genesis is a 24 episode anime that aired in 2006 and was broadcast by Animax, <- comma among others. In 2008, the series was licensed by Media Blasters and aired on the US network <- no comma Toku.

Edited by Arivne on Mar 3rd 2020 at 5:24:37 AM

@Kazuya Prota

A lover of nature, Zuril becomes personally angry at the human race after discovering their pollution of planet Earth and tries to exterminate them to save the ecosystem. <- period After putting entire cities to sleep using special waves, he manages to murder 300,000 civilians on one occasion before retreating due to the unexpected arrival of Grendizer. When his partner Gandal uses said tactical retreat to smear Zuril's reputation, Zuril frames Daisuke Umon as a spy of the Vegans, creating angry mobs that almost succeed in killing Daisuke and his allies. When the Defense Minister Dantos is sent to Earth to replace Zuril and Gandal, the latter conspire to murder Dantos and his guards. In the final arc, when King Vega himself orders the use of multiple nukes in order to trigger a global nuclear war, Zuril murders the King in a tragic failed attempt to save the planet and stop the battle among his own countrymen. In the last scene, Zuril decides to help the survivors of humanity, saying that as long there's life, there's hope.

Thanks! I have to proof read my stuff better.

Noddy

• Adaptation Distillation: The 1994 stage show "Noddy Live" combines Toyland Adventures with the original book universe. The first act combines Noddy Goes To Toyland and Noddy And His Car, while Sly and Gobbo were introduced as soon as Big Ears first encounter Noddy. ^note  In the original books, Noddy first meet Gobbo in Hurrah For Noddy, and Sly in Well Done Noddy Whiskers the cat (as a puppet) is also prominent in the show. Toyland Adventures gets a small reference when Tessie mentioned Dinah Doll being on Holiday and is chosen to run her shop.

• Wicked Witch: The 1994 stage show introduces a unnamed witch who wears shades. Her motivation is to use Noddy's Car as faster transportation due to her broom not working properly. She also makes strange noises when she gets very annoyed.

Edited by brb1006 on Mar 2nd 2020 at 6:23:42 AM

The first act combines Noddy Goes To Toyland and Noddy And His Car, while Sly and Gobbo were introduced as soon as Big Ears first encounters Noddy...Toyland Adventures gets a small reference when Tessie mentions Dinah Doll being on holiday and is chosen to run her shop.

^ "as soon as Big Ears first encounter Noddy" could also be written as "as soon as Big Ears's first encounter with Noddy".

^ "mentioned" -> "mentions" as per How to Write an Example - Write in Historical Present Tense.

The 1994 stage show introduces an unnamed witch who wears shades.

Edited by Arivne on Mar 3rd 2020 at 5:34:09 AM

Ringing Bell Nightmare Fuel

• The entire scene of Woe attacking the sheep inside the stable. One moment the entire flock are sleeping peacefully, when suddenly they're woken up to ominous noises coming from outside. Then out of nowhere, Woe bursts open the door (which appears to be locked) and the entire flock tries to run away from him. One of the sheep is so scared of Woe, that it starts foaming from the mouth and immediately fainting.
  • While the flock is under attack, Chirin appears to be half asleep. He suddenly witnessed a sheep get killed right in front of him. We only see that sheep get killed in shadow form, but we do see it's body fall in front of him.

Edited by brb1006 on Mar 7th 2020 at 6:57:47 AM

some tropes for One Piece YMMV

• Big-Lipped Alligator Moment: In Marineford, many scenes happen without consequences, like Sengoku rolling up one of his sleeves, ready to fight, only in the next scene to be still on the platform with the sleeve back down, or Garp sitting on the Admiral's Throne, which is treated like a big moment, only to have no impact on the plot. This causes most of these scenes to appear hilarious rather than epic.
  • Sengoku has two arms and rolls up only one of the sleeve

• Vindicated by History: When it first came out, the fans' reaction to Fishman Island was very negative, because it was often considered the worst arc of the series, but with time its reception among the fandom has improved thanks to its nuanced story about racism and doing a good job at showing the skills the Straw Hats have learned during the time-skip.

for Wapol

• Beard of Evil: After the time-skip, Wapol has grown a beard on his chin to reflect his cartonnishy evil personality.
• Card-Carrying Villain: Exaggerated: After being defeated by the Straw Hats and sent flying in the South Blue, he gets rich enough to fund the Evil Black Drum Kingdom, a kingdom version of this trope, while Wapol's appearance and behavior become much more villain-like, with dark-colored clothes, a goatee and a snidely Whiplash-like moustache.
• Personality Power: Wapol is a fat glutton and has eaten the Munch-Munch Fruit, which gives him the ability to eat anything and assimilate its properties.
• Self-Made Man: After being defeated by Luffy, Wapol lives in complete misery, but manages to become rich and the ruler of a new kingdom in a short amount of time by selling toys made with his Devil Fruit.

for Momonosuke

• Acrophobic Bird: Despite having the ability to turn into a dragon and fly, Momonosuke is hesitant to use this ability. When he meets Luffy in a junk-pit, the latter asks him if he could simply fly away to escape, but Momonosuke is too hesitant and flies only after being called a "coward". This fear originates from Kaido's attempt to toss Momonosuke from the Kozuki palace 20 years before.

Edited by fishysaur on Mar 10th 2020 at 3:15:43 AM

• There's a small, but significant scene at the end of the final credits that plays. Ventus finds himself back within the comfort of a young Sora's heart. Sora then asked if Ventus was sad and Ventus asked if he could stay with Sora. Very heartwarming in the end.
  • Made even more Heartwarming in Hindsight, as it was Sora's heart that healed Ventus' at the beginning of the game when the latter's was fading away after being separated from Vanitas. Additionally, Sora is only a newborn infant at that time.

Italic is the addition.

Edited by jahman on Mar 8th 2020 at 11:52:47 AM

Ash Ketchum(Pokemon):

• Redemption Quest: The Orange Islands arc ends up being this for Ash. After suffering a humiliating defeat in the Indigo League partly due to his inexperience, laziness, and arrogance, Ash would go on to challenge the Orange Island League to refine himself as a trainer, along with his Pokemon. The trip through the archipelago proves to be a great boon for Ash in his growth as a trainer, culminating in not only winning against Drake in the League but also leading to further development and improvement in future leagues until eventually, he becomes Champion of Alola.

Edited by jahman on Mar 8th 2020 at 4:18:11 AM

x 4 @brb1006

The entire scene of Woe attacking the sheep inside the stable. One moment the entire flock is sleeping peacefully, when suddenly they're woken up by ominous noises coming from outside. Then, <- comma out of nowhere, Woe bursts open the door (which appears to be locked) and the entire flock tries to run away from him. One of the sheep is so scared of Woe <- no comma that it starts foaming at the mouth and immediately faints.

While the flock is under attack, Chirin appears to be half asleep. He suddenly witnesses a sheep get killed right in front of him. We only see that sheep get killed in shadow form, but we do see its body fall in front of him.

^ Your post goes against Example Indentation because you only have one example at the 2nd level of indentation (two asterisks). It should be changed to look like this:

• The entire scene of Woe attacking the sheep inside the stable.
  • One moment the entire flock is sleeping peacefully, when suddenly they're woken up by ominous noises coming from outside. Then, <- comma out of nowhere, Woe bursts open the door (which appears to be locked) and the entire flock tries to run away from him. One of the sheep is so scared of Woe <- no comma that it starts foaming at the mouth and immediately faints.
  • While the flock is under attack, Chirin appears to be half asleep. He suddenly witnesses a sheep get killed right in front of him. We only see that sheep get killed in shadow form, but we do see its body fall in front of him.

Edited by Arivne on Mar 9th 2020 at 7:40:39 AM

x 4 @fishysaur

In Marineford, many scenes happen without consequences, like Sengoku rolling up his sleeve, ready to fight, only in the next scene to be still on the platform with the sleeve back down, or Garp sitting on the Admiral's Throne, which is treated like a big moment, only to have no impact on the plot. This causes most of these scenes to appear hilarious more than epic.

^ Does Sengoku only have one arm, or only roll up the sleeve on one arm for some reason?

When it first came out, the fans' reaction to Fishman Island was very negative <- no comma because it was often considered the worst arc of the series, but with time its reception among the fandom has improved thanks to its nuanced story about racism and doing a good job at showing the skills the Straw Hats learned (???) during the time-skip.

^ A "warm" reaction is positive. A "hot" reaction would be negative.

After being defeated by the Straw Hats and sent flying in the South Blue, he gets rich enough to fund a new kingdom, the Evil Black Drum Kingdom, a kingdom version of this trope, while Wapol's appearance and behavior become much more villain-like, with dark-colored clothes, a goatee and a Snidely Whiplash-like moustache.

^ If someone founds a kingdom, it's understood that it's new.

Wapol is a fat glutton <- no comma and has eaten the Munch-Munch Fruit, which gives him the ability to eat anything and assimilate its properties.

, @jahman

Changed verb tense as per How to Write an Example - Write in Historical Present Tense.

After suffering a humiliating defeat in the Indigo League, <- comma partly due to his inexperience, laziness, and arrogance, Ash goes on to challenge the Orange Island League to refine himself as a trainer, along with his Pokemon.

Edited by Arivne on Mar 10th 2020 at 5:40:19 AM