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Trollhunters:

• Adorkable: For a myth fanatic like Claire, being in Trollmarket for the first time is like being a kid in a candy store.

I don't see any problems with the English.

I assume that being a "myth fanatic" is what makes her a dork, and being like a kid in a candy store is what makes her adorable? You might want to say that specifically, so that it isn't considered a Zero-Context Example.

edited 16th Jan '18 6:48:51 AM by Arivne

Touken Ranbu Hanamaru

• Funny Moments:
  • In Episode 5, where Kasen and the others finding spare clothes to wear when their clothes got wet from the rain. When they first asked Aizen, the clothes were too small and only fit some of them. Next, they asked Ishikirimaru, although it everyone just right except Yagen since the clothes were too big for him.
  • In the beginning of the second episode of Zoku, when Honebumi search for his brother, Namazuo only to find his brother sleeping on top his futon dreaming about gathering horse dung.

• Moment Of Awesome: In Zoku, Juzumaru manage to dodge three giant logs whenYamabushi throw them on top of the waterfall without opening his eyes during Yamabushi's training.

• Nightmare Fuel: In Zoku of the second episode, Honebumi has a nightmare where he witness Osaka Castle on fire and the two people he cares deeply, Ichigo and Namazuo walking toward the fire. As Honebumi tries to stop them, only to find his legs into stones. All he can do is watches his brothers being consumed in flames.

edited 17th Jan '18 11:13:23 PM by AzuraBlu22

• where Kasen and the others finding spare clothes to wear when their clothes got wet ->
  • where Kasen and the others find spare clothes to wear when their clothes get wet
• although it everyone just right except Yagen -> although everyone's clothes fit just right except Yagen's,
• when Honebumi search for his brother, Namazuo only...on top his futon ->
  • when Honebumi is searching for his brother, Namazuo, only...on top of his futon

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edited 18th Jan '18 2:51:59 AM by Arivne

In the "Family Theme Naming" from Videl (https://i.imgur.com/Q901dCc.png), the "her late mother was named Miguel, Spanish for "archangel"" is wrong, the name "Miguel" is the spanish word for "Michael", not "archangel".

edited 20th Jan '18 4:27:36 AM by VivaciousWallaby

Inuyasha's group:

• Love Makes You Dumb: Part of this group's Fatal Flaw (besides their respective tempers and communication issues) is that they're all a total mess when it comes to love.

edited 20th Jan '18 6:30:51 PM by jahman

@jahman

I don't see any problems with this example's English.

Inuyasha's Group:

• Fatal Flaw: As a result of being group of teenagers and a child, they have repeatedly shown to lack self-control (sans Miroku for the most part). As a result, the group has found itself in hot water on more than one occasion, thanks to being overly impulsive in many matters both in and out of the battlefield.

• As a result of being group of -> As a result of being a group of
• they have repeatedly shown -> they have been repeatedly shown
• in many matters both -> in many matters, both
• in and out of the battlefield. -> on and off the battlefield.

Konnsuke

• Trademark Favorite Food:
  • Like his Katsugeki counterpart, his favorite food is fried tofu and he prefers it to be boiled, roasted or made into a sandwiched.
  • Inari Sushi. He has a carve for them and heavily implied he's the one who wrote one of notes during the Sport Festival about a lot of Inari Sushi. He can be seen drooling and happy about it.
• Iconic Item: The Konnsuke who appears in Zoku, wears a red apron and it's a better to tell the other Konnsukes apart.

Touken Ranbu Hanamaru

• Funny Moments:
  • In the Episode 7, Namazuo and Honebumi build a sand done together at the beach, He thought he feel Honebumi's hand touching him. However Honebumi wasn't touching him, it turns out it was actually Urishima's pet turtle biting Honebumi's finger and he comedic freak out afterwards.
  • In the first event of the sport festival, where one of the teams has to search for a specify item that says on the sheet of paper, A while most of them got the simpler tasks to find like black clothes, glasses, a cute cord, and large cloth except Hasabe. He ends up getting the most difficult task is making a lots of Inari Sushi. Konnsuke can be seen drooling after Hasabe realizing he has to make it.
  • In Episode 9, where Nihongou and others tries to catch a blue bird by stacking each other. It's both awesome and funny since Otegine manage to hold two muscular men on top of his shoulders despite having a leaner build.
  • In the second episode of Zoku, Kashuu attempts to overcome the obstacles by dodge three logs under the waterfalls like Juzumaru, only to chickened out of Yamabushi's training.
  • In one of the events, Nihongou and others attempts by stacking each other as another way to throw the ball into the basket, but they realize how one of them going throw a balls into the basket a while they are stacking each other shoulders.

edited 22nd Jan '18 9:26:05 AM by AzuraBlu22

I need help with my English. I read Trope and TLP Guidelines

edited 22nd Jan '18 7:10:34 PM by NonTroper

@Azura Blu 22

• made into a sandwiched. -> made into a sandwich.
• He has a carve for them -> ??? I have no idea what you meant to say here.
• and heavily implied he's -> and it's heavily implied that he's
• the one who wrote one of notes -> one of what?
• about a lot of Inari Sushi -> about a lot of Inari Sushi
• The Konnsuke who appears in Zoku, wears a red apron and it's a better to tell ->
  • The Konnsuke who appears in Zoku wears a red apron and it's a better to tell him apart from
• the other Konnsukes apart. -> the other Konnsukes apart.
• In the Episode 7, Namazuo -> In the Episode 7, when Namazuo
• sand done -> sand dune? sand castle? sand dome?
• beach, He thought he feel -> beach, he thinks he feels
• However Honebumi -> However, Honebumi
• finger and he comedic freak out afterwards. -> finger, causing a comedic freak out afterwards.
• In the first event of the sport festival -> During the first event of the sport festival
• where one of the teams has to search for a specify item that says on the sheet of paper ->
  • where one of the teams has to carry out a scavenger hunt
• A while most of them got the simpler tasks to find like ->
  • A while Most of them got the simpler things to find, like
• a cute cord, and large cloth except Hasabe. -> a cute cord, and a large cloth, except Hasabe.

How exactly is the cord "cute"?

• He ends up getting the most difficult task is making a lots of Inari Sushi. ->
  • He ends up getting the most difficult task, making lots of Inari Sushi.
• after Hasabe realizing he has to make it. -> after Hasabe realizes he has to make it.
• Nihongou and others tries -> Nihongou and others try
• by stacking each other. ->
  • by stacking on each other's shoulders.
  • by forming a human ladder.
• It's both awesome and funny since Otegine manage ->
  • It's both awesome and funny, since Otegine manages
• attempts to overcome the obstacles by dodge -> attempts to overcome the obstacles by dodging
• only to chickened out -> only to chicken out
• Nihongou and others attempts by stacking each other ->
  • Nihongou and others attempt to stack on each other's shoulders
  • Nihongou and others attempt to form a human ladder
• but they realize how one of them going throw a balls into the basket a while ->
  • but they realize that none of them can throw a ball into the basket while
• they are stacking each other shoulders. -> they are stacked on each other's shoulders.

edited 23rd Jan '18 3:12:54 AM by Arivne

He has a carve for them = He has a craving for them

I'm having a bit of trouble with this example I want to add to Adaptation Name Change.

• In the The Maze Runner books, the Gladers' names are revealed to be false names implanted in their brains when they were first taken in by WICKED, with their the real names going unrevealed with three exceptions revealed in the prequels: The Kill Order reveals that Teresa was originally Dee Dee and The Fever Code reveals that Thomas and Sonya were Stephen and Lizzy respectively. However The Maze Runner (2014) lacks the reveal about the Gladers' names being false, and Maze Runner: The Scorch Trials has a flashback where Thomas's mother calls him "Thomas" before he's handed over to WCKD and in a later scene Teresa, having recovered her memories, mentions a memory of her own mother calling out "Teresa" long before she was ever taken by WCKD, both of which suggests that the names they've been using are their real names - which is implied to be true for the other Gladers as well.

• with their the real names -> with their the real names
• However The Maze Runner -> However, The Maze Runner
• over to WCKD and in -> over to WCKD, and in
• both of which suggests -> both of which suggest

Is the evil group named WICKED or WCKD? You use both.

Your example is made up of two very long sentences that need to be broken up into smaller ones for readability.

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edited 27th Jan '18 2:06:32 AM by Arivne

Bleach:

Renji:

• You Are Better Than You Think You Are: What Renji ultimately tells Rukia as he Bridal Carry her to safety from the Sōkyoku execution stand. Furthermore, he also tells her that she needs to stop blaming herself for everything, and learn to have more faith in those who cares about and risk everything for her.

• What Renji ultimately tells Rukia as he Bridal Carry her ->
  • What Renji ultimately tells Rukia as he does a Bridal Carry of her
• those who cares about -> those who care about

edited 28th Jan '18 3:32:26 AM by Arivne

Trollhunters

Clarie:

• What Beautiful Eyes!: Jim mentions how he can't ever say no to Claire's slightly large eyes.

I don't see any problems with the English in that post.

However, it's a Zero-Context Example because nowhere in it does it say:

• how her eyes are "very unique" or "special" (i.e. different from most people's). Just being "slightly large" isn't really enough.
• that her eyes are beautiful.
• how they're one of her main defining characteristics.

Note that many of the examples on the What Beautiful Eyes! page are Zero Context Examples by this standard, a common problem here on TV Tropes.

edited 29th Jan '18 2:22:50 AM by Arivne

Touken Ranbu Characters: Hotarumaru

• Super-Strength: In Zoku Hanamaru, even though he looks like a child, he is surprising strong as he manage to win for his team in a Tug-a-war event against one of teams in the Sport Festival without breaking a sweat.

Fate/Extra Last Encore

• Fridge Horror: During the Master candidate selection process, Hakuno asks Shinji if Misao is alright, he only respond that she's "in a safe place". It is possible that Shinji kills his own girlfriend, Misao the same way how he tried to kill Hakuno by stabbing him multiple times.

• Nightmare Fuel:
  • In the Action Prologue, a dying female female Hakuno dying with the large amount of her left hip and legs missing. What's worse, Saber unable to defeat Saver and ends up getting demolish by him as the result.
  • Shinji betrayed Hakuno by stabbing him in the chest follow by repeating him five times on the back. He only wants to survive and becomes one of chosen Master for the Holy Grail War to win and doesn't care about anyone but himself. The expresses he makes after he stabbed Hakuno is very disturbing.

edited 29th Jan '18 10:40:14 AM by AzuraBlu22

Dragon Ball Super -> Fridge Brilliance

• Toppo and his uniform is full of Rule of Symbolism. Since he considers it to be a symbol of justice, everytime someone has managed to damage it, they also end up damaging Toppo's own sense of justice. At the Zen Exhibition Match Goku managed to peel a chunk of it from his shoulder, which later led to Toppo becoming so stressed that when he lost 6 of his teammates to the U6 Saiyans, he becomes disillusioned with justice. However he doesn't completely abandon it as he still allowed the Kamikaze Trio to transform and had some comedic moments until episode 125. Which is when Frieza blasting him from the back to make him lose his Beam-O-War with Android 17, causing him to take serious damage and losing the top half of his uniform. That is when he completely renonces justice and starts to brutalize Frieza so badly he ends up looking like a worse villain than him. Better yet, in his nascent God of Destruction form he now has a Go D symbol on his belly. Showing that he is now committed to a new cause; destruction.

• Those that are strong believers in justice in Dragon Ball Super always end up becoming twisted by it somehow the moment they met Goku. Both Toppo and Zamasu have not become better because of their strong believe in justice but worse. Seeing things only in black and white and having that worldview completely challenged by someone with a Blue-and-Orange Morality (and the cloths to match). However they both end up disgracing justice in their own way. Zamasu became a psychotic zelot while Toppo ditched his believe in good and evil entirely. All of this boils down to one thing: Commitment. Zamasu was too committed and ended up not seeing that it fed his more negative traits to point he become a "Monster of Justice" while Toppo one the other hand, wasn't committed enough to endure the stress and danger that that Tournament of Power created, ended up betraying his own ideals in order to survive. Making him the moral equivalent of Dirty Coward compared to Zamasu's Tautological Templar.

Dragon Ball Super:

• Toppos attacks as newly ascended God of Destruction on Freiza was utterly horrific. Sure Freiza is a Complete Monster that deserve to be in Hell for all of eternity but between getting hit by the full force of God of Destruction's energy sphere and then nearly getting his skull crushed was goddamn horrific. Had it not been for the tournaments rules against killing, he would have been gone for good regardless of him being alive or not. It just goes to show that when a God of Destruction stops fucking around. Shit. Gets. REAL:
  • Toppo's Insane power and speed is one thing, but his all-destroying aura is another thing entirely as it destroys anything that touches it. 17 was lucky to be as tough as he is when he got punched but since Toppo's fighting style also involves grappling. Just imaging getting a Bear Hug from him in this state! [[Squick Yeesh]]!

Dragon Ball Fighter Z - Fridge Brilliance (Ok correct me if i am wrong on this one as I haven't gotten that far in the game):

• Of all the clone fighters it seems that it's only Fat Buu that doesn't have a clone of himself and that begs the question, why couldn't 21 not clone? Well that is because he is still alive and possesses complete control over his cells as a magical nigh-invulnerable being. Kid buu is dead so the only thing that could be used was the cells he left behind when he destroyed Earth or whatever remains that were left behind. Also it seems that even Buu is cloneable as 21 otherwise wouldn't have a Majin form .This also would imply that Kid buu only has a limited range of where he can control his own cells before they are out of his core's range.
  • This means that 21 was able to revive Kid Buu the only way that possible as his true self is reincarnated as Uub and that prevents him from ever truely returning as the closest she can get to creating Kid Buu is through the aforementioned method.

But there is also bit of Right Makes Might involved. Fat Buu was could still match his evil counterpart for a while when he split in spite Evil buu having the upper hand. But the good half of 21 was much weaker compared to her evil half, to the point that she needed to train to even narrow the gap in power to the same level of power Fat Buu vs Evil Buu. Which implies that a Majin's inherit goodness is the key to how much power they retain when expelling their own evil. compare Fat Buu to 21. He was far more benevolent than 21 in spite of his rampage when he was first unsealed because he was able to learn empathy from Mr. Satan while 21 in spite of the help she got from people trying to curb her destructive urges still had them (although to be fair, Cell did fuck shit up by being the asshat that he is by attacking 21 during her moment of weakness).

In spite of the points I am making about her being a more evil that she seems, she still had a good side who was willing to give her life to stop own wickedness incarnate and that she was as kind and motherly as she appeared to be in the past. Losing ones son while having your husband turn you into a killing machine with the cells of a magical psycho still ain't something anyone should suffer and pretty much gives her a very poignant Freudian Excuste and shows she is villain created through circumstances and completely by choice.

Dragon Ball FighterZ -> Android 21.

• Evil Is Not a Toy: Having Buu's cells integrated into your own DNA is a very bad idea unless you enjoy losing your sanity. Combing with her pre-programed enjoyment of absorbing strong fighters, it's a recipe for disaster. The only way to at least mitigate the effects is to use fission to create a good and evil half of the original but even then her evil half recovers what power she lost during the split and then some by continuing to hurt for fightes to eat.

edited 29th Jan '18 5:08:21 PM by xxlogos

@Azura Blu 22

• he is surprising strong as -> he is surprising strong, as
• he manage to win for his team in a Tug-a-war event against one of teams ->
  • he manages to help his team win a tug o' war event against one of the teams
• Hakuno asks...he only respond that -> when Hakuno asks...he only responds that
• girlfriend, Misao the same way how he tried to kill Hakuno by ->
  • girlfriend, Misao, the same way how he tried to kill Hakuno, by
• a dying female female Hakuno dying with the large amount ->
  • Hakuno dying with a large amount
• What's worse, Saber unable to defeat Saver and ends up getting demolish ->
  • What's worse, Saber is unable to defeat Saver and ends up getting demolished
• stabbing him in the chest follow by repeating him five times on ->
  • stabbing him in the chest, followed by stabbing him five more times in
• He only wants to survive and becomes one of chosen Master for the Holy Grail War to win ->
  • He only wants to survive and become one of chosen Masters to win the Holy Grail War

I think that's what you meant to say, but I can't be sure.

• The expresses he makes after he stabbed -> The expression he makes after he stabs

edited 30th Jan '18 4:10:35 AM by Arivne

@xxlogos

All changes of verb tense from past to present below are based on How to Write an Example - Write in Historical Present Tense.

• Toppo and his uniform is -> Toppo and his uniform are
• At the Zen Exhibition Match Goku managed -> At the Zen Exhibition Match, Goku managed
• when he lost 6 of his teammates -> when he losses 6 of his teammates
• However he doesn't completely abandon it as -> However, he doesn't completely abandon it, as
• Which is when Frieza blasting him -> This is when Frieza blasted him
• That is when he completely renonces -> This is when he completely renounces
• his belly. Showing -> his belly, showing
• Those that are strong believers in justice in Dragon Ball Super ->
  • In Dragon Ball Super, those who''' are strong believers in justice
• becoming twisted by it somehow the moment they met ->
  • somehow becoming twisted by it the moment they meet
• strong believe in justice but worse -> strong belief in justice, but worse
• and the cloths to match -> and the clothing (?) to match

This is a sentence fragment.

• However they both end -> However, they both end
• Zamasu became a psychotic zelot while Toppo ditched his believe ->
  • Zamasu becomes a psychotic zealot while Toppo ditches his belief
• Commitment -> commitment
• Zamasu was too committed and ended up not seeing that it fed ->
  • Zamasu is too committed and ends up not seeing that it feeds
• to point he -> to the point he
• while Toppo one the other hand, wasn't committed -> Toppo, on the other hand, isn't committed

Split up an extremely long sentence into two smaller ones.

• that that Tournament of Power created, ended up -> that the Tournament of Power creates, ending up
• Making him the moral equivalent of Dirty Coward compared ->
  • This makes him the moral equivalent of a Dirty Coward

This is another sentence fragment.

• Toppos attacks as newly ascended God of Destruction on Freiza was utterly horrific. Sure Freiza
  • Toppo's attacks as a newly ascended God of Destruction on Freiza are utterly horrific. Sure, Freiza
• that deserve to be in Hell for all of eternity but -> that deserves to be in Hell for all of eternity, but
• full force of God...tournaments rules -> full force of the God...tournament's rules
• Toppo's Insane power and speed is one thing -> Toppo's insane power and speed are one thing
• another thing entirely as...got punched but -> another thing entirely, as...got punched, but
• but since Toppo's fighting style also involves grappling. ->
  • but since Toppo's fighting style also involves grappling.
• Just imaging getting a Bear Hug from him in this state! [[Squick Yeesh]]! ->
  • Just imagine getting a Bear Hug from him in this state! Yeesh!

This is a single example at the 2nd level of indentation, which violates Example Indentation.

• Ok correct me if i am wrong -> O.K., correct me if I am wrong
• Of all the clone fighters it seems -> Of all the clone fighters, it seems
• why couldn't 21 not clone? -> why couldn't 21 not clone?
• Well that is...Kid buu is dead so -> Well, that is...Kid Buu is dead, so
• Also it seems that even Buu is cloneable as -> Also, it seems that even Buu is cloneable, as
• a Majin form .This -> a Majin form. This
• Kid buu only has a limited range of where he can -> Kid Buu only has a limited distance in which he can
• the only way that possible...truely returning as -> the only possible way,...truly returning, as

This is a single example at the 2nd level of indentation, which violates Example Indentation.

• might seems innocent...has realise -> might seem innocent...has to realise
• his last resort of last resorts in case even cell messes up. ->
  • his last resort [[strike:of last resorts in case even Cell messed''' up.
• her good and her evil half have different opinion of her former spouse. It's safe ->
  • her good and her evil halves have different opinions about her former spouse, it's safe
• But she was -> However, she was
• However like Fat Buu, she could yo-yo -> However, like Fat Buu, she can yo-yo
• But there is also bit -> But there is also a bit
• Fat Buu was could still match -> Fat Buu was could still match
• when he split in spite Evil buu -> when he split, in spite of Evil Buu
• same level of power Fat Buu vs Evil Buu. -> same level of power as Fat Buu vs Evil Buu.
• Which implies that -> This implies that
• Majin's inherit goodness...compare -> Majin's inherent goodness...Compare
• than 21 in spite of his rampage when he was first unsealed because ->
  • than 21, in spite of his rampage when he was first unsealed, because
• Mr. Satan while 21 in spite of the help she got from people trying to curb her destructive urges still ->
  • Mr. Satan, while 21, in spite of the help she got from people trying to curb her destructive urges, still
• In spite of the points I am making -> This violates This Troper.
• her being a more evil that she seems -> her being a more evil than she seems
• stop own wickedness incarnate...and that she -> stop her own wickedness incarnate...and [that she
• Losing ones son...Freudian Excuste..she is villain..Combing with ->
  • Losing one's son...Freudian Excuse...she is a villain...Combined with
• the original but even then -> the original, but even then
• continuing to hurt for fightes to eat. -> continuing to hunt for fighters to eat.

Fate/Extra: Last Encore

• Tear Jerker:
  • After Saber loses to Saver, both her and her Master unexpectedly catches a glimpse with each other one last time before they meet their tragic deaths.
  • A male student died after he lost to Leonardo to the game of chess, none of the other students except Hakuno shows no remorse or shock over his death as if this is natural routine.

• Nightmare Fuel:
  • In one of the most gruesome scenes when the Moon system decides to purge the school of all NPC's and Students who did not make it into the Grail War. All the student's death is very unpleasant and horrify as their bodies isn't shown, but their silhouette can be seen as there bodies decapitated, or impaled. Their corpses are seen around the school ground.

Zoku Touken Ranbu Hanamaru

• Funny Moments:
  • In Episode 9, None of the other Touken Danishi recognize Shishio's disguise as a Super Touken Danishi except the ones who helped made his costume and surprising Mikazuki, who knew it was Shishio right away.
  • In Episode 11, Nagasone and Mutsunokami comically bickering about their former masters who's the best manly person.
  • In the fourth episode of Zoku, after Yamanbagiri's brothers finished performing for Kogarasumaru and the others, he attempts to perform, however the other Touken Danshi arrives, he becomes so flutter, his face turn red. As a result, he passed out of embarrassment.

edited 2nd Feb '18 11:35:26 AM by AzuraBlu22

• both her and her Master unexpectedly catches a glimpse with each other ->
  • both she and her Master unexpectedly catch a glimpse of each other
• A male student died after he lost to Leonardo to the game of chess
  • When a student dies after losing a game of chess to Leonardo
• none of the other students except Hakuno shows no remorse or shock over his death as if this is natural routine.
  • none of the other students except Hakuno show any remorse or shock over his death, as if this is a natural routine.
• In one of the most gruesome scenes when -> In one of the most gruesome scenes, when
• All the student's death is very unpleasant and horrify as ->
  • All the students' deaths are very unpleasant and horrifying, as
• their bodies isn't shown, but their silhouette can be seen as there bodies decapitated, or impaled.
  • their bodies aren't shown, but their silhouettes can be seen with their bodies decapitated or impaled.
• In Episode 9, None of the other -> In Episode 9, none of the other
• costume and surprising Mikazuki, who knew it was Shishio right away. ->
  • costume. This surprises Mikazuki, who knew it was Shishio right away.
• bickering about their former masters who's the best manly person. ->
  • bickering about which of their former masters is the most manly person.
• after Yamanbagiri's brothers finished -> after Yamanbagiri's brothers finish
• he attempts to perform, however -> he attempts to perform as well. However,
• However the other Touken Danshi arrives, he becomes so flutter, his face turn red.
  • However, when the other Touken Danshi arrive, he becomes so flustered that his face turns red.
• As a result, he passed out of embarrassment. -> As a result, he passes out due to embarrassment.