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~owlcyclops, this post:

Firstly, please take a look at CamelCase. When there is a page you want to link to, such as a work page or a trope page, and it has multiple words, you put them next to each other without spaces, but with correct capitalization. Like so: SpySpeak will link as Spy Speak.

Secondly, take a look at Zero-Context Example. Your write-ups for Spy Speak, Freefall Fight, and Battle in the Rain need additional information to avoid being a zero-context example. All examples must demonstrate why they are an example of that trope, without having to look at the work itself. For example, what Spy Speak is used? What is it Spy Speak for?

While I'm not familiar with the work (and I'm not sure what page you wanted to add these to either), you should also review our spoiler policy to ensure your spoiler tags are appropriately applied.

• Spy Speak: Fiida speaks like this to her commanders to warn them of a witness who "throws around magical blue bullshit".
• Freefall Fight: The summary of Fiidas and Khleilfai's first fight.
• Screw This, I'm Out of Here!: One of desets (Is it "Deset", or "Desets"?) allies says a variation of this when they discover that they're using a blood farm from prisoners as fuel for their blood stones (is this "bloodstone weapons" or "bloodstone's weapons"?) weapons, which may get them the death penalty in their home nation.
• Battle in the Rain: The summary of Fiidas and Khleilfai's first fight.

A couple of very simple things that will improve your write-ups:

• Include a colon and space between the trope and the write-up. Spy Speak: [Example]; Freefall Fight: [Example].
• Include an ending punctuation (a period - .) at the end of your sentences.
• Their means "it belongs to these people"; they're means "they are"; there means "at that place".

Thank you for your help. Since that i still have my account suspended I'll try to get help on discord for the editing.

To be honest with you I am not cut out for the editing like I thought I was. I should probably just be in the discussion instead with is the only reason now that don't want to be suspended anymore.

Edited by owlcyclops on Aug 17th 2019 at 6:35:56 AM

Best of luck.

To nombretomado:Responding to this comment

Um...

"Ruby: Her birthday" to "Ruby's birthday"

The grammar is not wrong. Saying, Work: Character: [Example]" is a different way to format it, but it is not grammatically incorrect. But, sure. Updated.

Edited by nombretomado on Aug 17th 2019 at 8:37:57 AM

Okay they are more willing to help me then I thought and I have a little more information one one of the things on [[redirect:Webcomic/Supercell]]

Spy Speak: Fiida speaks like this to her commanders to warn them of Khleilfai who "throws around magical blue bullshit".

Screw This, I'm Out of Here!: One of Desets allies says a variation of this when they discover that hide this text they're using a blood farm from prisoners as Zo-Ruoka fuel for their Khen-Rho, which will get them the death penalty in their home nation Kastina if they are caught.

Battle in the Rain: I'ts when Khleilfai first meets Fiida kidnapping Fallan in front of her.

any more advice I would need?

Edited by owlcyclops on Aug 17th 2019 at 9:52:46 AM

From page 252, @Kazuya Prota

Ingress: Christopher Brandt, an altruistic scientist who wants to use the MX for the benefit of humanity is the creator of the augmented reality glasses used by the Collaborators. Using the Dark MX to , Brandt uses the Dark MX in himself. Brandt uses the Dark MX in himself to revive his bodyguard Jack. Searching for Sarah, a woman with notorious potential to control MX, Brandt blows himself up in front of her to activate her potential. <snip> Trying to devour Sarah in a last attempt to fulfill his goal, Brandt is defeated only due to Makoto's, the Ingress users' and Jack's sacrifice. Realizing that his best friend has chosen his own path, Brandt calmly accepts his defeat before vanishing.

^ Always put work names in either italics (for long works) or quotes (for short works) as per How to Write an Example - Emphasis For Work Names.

@owlcyclops

Okay, <- comma they are more willing to help me than I thought and I have a little more information on one of the things on [[redirect:Webcomic/Supercell]]. <- period

Fiida speaks like this to her commanders to warn them about Khleilfai, <- comma who "throws around magical blue bullshit".

One of Deset's allies says a variation of this when they discover that [[spoiler:they're using a blood farm from prisoners as Zo-Ruoka fuel for their Khen-Rho, which will get them the death penalty in their home nation Kastina if they are caught.]]

The above will look like this:

One of Deset's allies says a variation of this when they discover that they're using a blood farm from prisoners as Zo-Ruoka fuel for their Khen-Rho, which will get them the death penalty in their home nation Kastina if they are caught.

It's when Khleilfai first meets Fiida, <- comma kidnapping Fallan in front of her.

Any more advice I would need?

^ Yes. Capitalize the first word in each sentence. :)

Edited by Arivne on Aug 18th 2019 at 2:00:49 AM

Transformers Film Series' Trivia page

• Disowned Adaptation:
  • Matt Frank, the artist for the Transformers: Beast Wars Sourcebook, reveals that he is angry for sitting through 10 years of the Bay-directed movies after watching Bumblebee.

Edited by FigureGunplaFan on Aug 18th 2019 at 10:42:15 PM

Love Live's Ho Yay page

Grammar fixes, with Grammarly:

From:

While Umi was forced to wore a baggy mascot outfit, Honoka joined Umi by going inside the suit as well, creating a perfect shape for the outfit while increasing the heat inside it, much to Umi's complete embarrassment. As they are practicing on how they move, they accidentally bump on Nico entering the club room. Given on how both Honoka and Umi are in the suit while falling down to Nico, god knows on what did they do inside it as they lost balance.

To:

While Umi is asked to wear a baggy mascot outfit, Honoka joined her by going inside the suit for creating a perfect shape while increasing the heat inside it. As both are practicing on how to move inside the costume, they accidentally bump on Nico who just entered the club room. Given how Honoka and Umi are in the suit while falling to Nico, god knows on what did they do inside after they lost balance.

To nombretomado Invader Zim: Enter the Florpus' YMMV page

• Memetic Mutation: A scene of the Red and Purple Tallest being comfortable to Zim's absence is seen as a metaphor of Nickelodeon Studios forgetting the show's existence/being happy to the show's cancelation.

Edited by FigureGunplaFan on Aug 19th 2019 at 11:25:46 PM

Love Live's YMMV page

• Hilarious in Hindsight:
  • Honoka pointing up the sky◊ will LET THE VOICE OF LOVE TAKE YOU HIGHERRRR!!!

Edited by FigureGunplaFan on Aug 18th 2019 at 11:07:21 PM

Some updates on The Boys (2019)'s YMMV page

• Memetic Mutation: Some DC fans jokingly interpret Karen Fukuhara's performance as The Female as her being genuinely Enforced Method Acting based on her deteriorated insane insanity after her role in Suicide Squad (2016).

From the Video Game Arch Enemy page. I added information about Inferno and Elysium to the Soul series section, that I since deleted because I think that it could of been better said. How should I improve this?

Original Version;

• The Soul Edge and the Soul Calibur swords are destined to fight each other until the end of times. Soul Calibur was created specifically to destroy it, but the Soul Edge keep reassembling itself everytime and this has been going on for ages.

My edited version;

• The Soul Edge and the Soul Calibur swords are destined to fight each other until the end of times. Soul Calibur was created specifically to destroy it, but the Soul Edge keep reassembling itself everytime and this has been going on for ages. The Soul swords wills Inferno and Elysium have been trying to destroy each other through the vessels that they use.

Edited by neoamon on Aug 19th 2019 at 10:25:09 AM

Resident Evil 7's YMMV page

• Memetic Mutation
  • Leave Ethan.^{Explanation (spoiler warning)} A third joke option that consists of abandoning Ethan with Mia and Zoe leaving the Baker residence with Mia cured. Then again, Zoe would still get saved by Blue Umbrella and Chris Redfield, which makes the abandoning more reasonable.

BanG Dream! Girls Band Party!'s YMMV page

• Memetic Mutation
  • Many fans tend to make up fifth answers on the official pages' questionnaire posts, such as Ran's favorite food being Moca herself, or Ako needed help choosing an engagement ring to propose to Rinko.

~FigureGunplaFan, this post: the only issue is that Bumblebee, as a film, should be italicized.

~FigureGunplaFan, this post:

When Umi is asked to wear a baggy mascot outfit, Honoka joins her by going inside the suit to create the perfect shape. while increasing the heat inside it. As both are practicing on how to move inside the costume, they accidentally bump into Nico when she enters the club room. Given how Honoka and Umi are in the suit while falling over Nico, god knows on what did they did inside after they lost balance.

~FigureGunplaFan, this post:

• Memetic Mutation: A scene of the Red and Purple Tallest being comfortable to Zim's absence is seen as a metaphor of Nickelodeon Studios forgetting the show's existence/being happy for the show's cancelation.

This doesn't appear to be memetic mutation, based on the write-up. It's just describing an assumed metaphor.

~FigureGunplaFan, this request needs context. There are no grammar issues.

~FigureGunplaFan, this post:

• Memetic Mutation: Some DC fans jokingly interpret Karen Fukuhara's performance as The Female as her Enforced Method Acting based on her deteriorated sanity after her role in Suicide Squad (2016).
  • The struckthrough "her" is redundant.
  • If you are saying something has degraded, it would be more appropriate to say the whole/undamaged thing is "deteriorated" (sanity), and not the damaged version (insanity).

~FigureGunplaFan, this post:

• Memetic Mutation: Leave Ethan.[[labelnote:Explanation (spoiler warning)]]A third joke option that consists of abandoning Ethan with Mia and Zoe, leaving the Baker residence with Mia cured. Then again, Zoe would still get saved by Blue Umbrella and Chris Redfield, which makes the abandonment more reasonable.[[/labelnote]]

Edited by nombretomado on Aug 19th 2019 at 7:25:58 AM

~FigureGunplaFan, this post:

• Many fans tend to make up fifth answers on the official pages' questionnaire posts, such as Ran's favorite food being Moca herself, or Ako needing help choosing an engagement ring to propose to Rinko.

Unless the concept of leaving a fifth answer is demonstrably memetic, or one of those answers specifically is memetic, this does not describe Memetic Mutation.

to {{Tropers/nombretomado}

Responding to this comment:

• Honoka pointing up the sky◊ will LET THE VOICE OF LOVE TAKE YOU HIGHERRRR, courtesy of Jojo's Great Days song.

Responding to this comment

You added another "Memetic Mutation".

Edited by FigureGunplaFan on Aug 19th 2019 at 10:50:54 PM

So I did.