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* FamousLastWords: If a character even gets a chance at final words, there is a good chance they end up as this.
** [[spoiler: "I am afraid, Eaton"]] -- [[spoiler: Robert Raylan]]
** [[spoiler: "Don't want to die here"]] -- [[spoiler: Dairon]]
** [[spoiler: "I never wanted to care. For this city, for the children. But I did and... And now I just want to get old and listen to their laughter"]] -- [[spoiler: The Burned Man]]
** [[spoiler: "Love you. So proud"]] -- [[spoiler: Terroma]]
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Originally, the story could be read [[https://telltale.com/community/discussion/89129/forum-of-thrones-an-interactive-story on the Telltale Forums]], but when the Game of Thrones section of the forums got closed down a few months after Telltale's bankruptcy, the author moved the story to [[https://creators-haven.boards.net/board/2/forum-thrones Creator's Haven]], an original forum dedicated to Interactive Fanfiction, where it is also primarily updated and where the author mostly interacts with the readers. New parts appear there first and it is also the place where readers can vote on how the story is supposed to continue. However, the chapters are also available [[https://docs.google.com/document/d/1iJ0nKWFx5tvopkCvlpUXAqoIxnvp-KBAoe-BbPmSf3o/edit?usp=sharing on google docs]].

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Originally, the story could be read [[https://telltale.com/community/discussion/89129/forum-of-thrones-an-interactive-story on the Telltale Forums]], but when the Game of Thrones section of the forums got closed down a few months after Telltale's bankruptcy, the author moved the story to [[https://creators-haven.boards.net/board/2/forum-thrones Creator's Haven]], an original forum dedicated to Interactive Fanfiction, where it is also primarily updated and where the author mostly interacts with the readers. New parts appear there first and it is also the place where readers can vote on how the story is supposed to continue. However, the chapters are also available [[https://docs.google.com/document/d/1iJ0nKWFx5tvopkCvlpUXAqoIxnvp-KBAoe-BbPmSf3o/edit?usp=sharing on google docs]].
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The story can be mainly read [[https://telltale.com/community/discussion/89129/forum-of-thrones-an-interactive-story on the Telltale Forums]], where it is also primarily updated and where the author mostly interacts with the readers. New parts appear there first and it is also the place where readers can vote on how the story is supposed to continue. However, the chapters are also available [[https://docs.google.com/document/d/1iJ0nKWFx5tvopkCvlpUXAqoIxnvp-KBAoe-BbPmSf3o/edit?usp=sharing on google docs]].

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The Originally, the story can could be mainly read [[https://telltale.com/community/discussion/89129/forum-of-thrones-an-interactive-story on the Telltale Forums]], but when the Game of Thrones section of the forums got closed down a few months after Telltale's bankruptcy, the author moved the story to [[https://creators-haven.boards.net/board/2/forum-thrones Creator's Haven]], an original forum dedicated to Interactive Fanfiction, where it is also primarily updated and where the author mostly interacts with the readers. New parts appear there first and it is also the place where readers can vote on how the story is supposed to continue. However, the chapters are also available [[https://docs.google.com/document/d/1iJ0nKWFx5tvopkCvlpUXAqoIxnvp-KBAoe-BbPmSf3o/edit?usp=sharing on google docs]].
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* InTheBlood:
** Members of House Hoare have such a reputation. They are known as the "Black Blood" and for their violent nature. Most of the Hoare's in the story have displayed disturbing tendencies and habits and the current head of the house is universally reviled as a cruel tyrant. From what we know about his ancestors, he isn't even the worst.
** The Storm Kings of House Durrandon have a legendary temper, attributed in-universe to them being descendants of the gods of wind and sea. While the truth of this is up for speculation, at least the Durrandons in the story display a wild HairTriggerTemper.


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** Members of House Hoare have such a reputation. They are known as the "Black Blood" and for their violent nature. Most of the Hoare's in the story have displayed disturbing tendencies and habits and the current head of the house is universally reviled as a cruel tyrant. From what we know about his ancestors, he isn't even the worst.
** The Storm Kings of House Durrandon have a legendary temper, attributed in-universe to them being descendants of the gods of wind and sea. While the truth of this is up for speculation, at least the Durrandons in the story display a wild HairTriggerTemper.
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** Though not exactly evil, the Storm Kings of House Durrandon have a legendary temper, attributed in-universe to them being descendants of the gods of wind and sea. While the truth of this is up for speculation, at least the Durrandons in the story display a wild HairTriggerTemper.

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** Though not exactly evil, the The Storm Kings of House Durrandon have a legendary temper, attributed in-universe to them being descendants of the gods of wind and sea. While the truth of this is up for speculation, at least the Durrandons in the story display a wild HairTriggerTemper.
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''Forum of Thrones'' by [=LiquidChicagoTed=] is an ongoing ElsewhereFic set in the world of [[Literature/ASongOfIceAndFire A Song Of Ice and Fire]][=/=][[Series/GameOfThrones Game of Thrones]]. It takes place roughly 300 years before the main events of the novels and the series, during the period that would later be known as The War of Conquest. Starting shortly before the beginning of the war, the initial main setting of the story deals primarily with a SuccessionCrisis in the city of Raylansfair in the Kingdom of the Reach, where Lord Robert Raylan, the last of his line, dies without naming an heir, leaving the rich and strategically important city to be preyed upon by several interested parties, each with their own distinct motives and personalities. That said, the narrative eventually expands to feature locations across all of Westeros and beyond, telling a story of epic scales through the eyes of over two dozen Point-Of-View characters, as one of the most important moments of Westerosi history unfolds before their eyes.

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''Forum of Thrones'' by [=LiquidChicagoTed=] is an ongoing ElsewhereFic set in the world of [[Literature/ASongOfIceAndFire A Song Of Ice and Fire]][=/=][[Series/GameOfThrones Game of Thrones]].''Literature/ASongOfIceAndFire''/''Series/GameOfThrones''. It takes place roughly 300 years before the main events of the novels and the series, during the period that would later be known as The War of Conquest. Starting shortly before the beginning of the war, the initial main setting of the story deals primarily with a SuccessionCrisis in the city of Raylansfair in the Kingdom of the Reach, where Lord Robert Raylan, the last of his line, dies without naming an heir, leaving the rich and strategically important city to be preyed upon by several interested parties, each with their own distinct motives and personalities. That said, the narrative eventually expands to feature locations across all of Westeros and beyond, telling a story of epic scales through the eyes of over two dozen Point-Of-View characters, as one of the most important moments of Westerosi history unfolds before their eyes.



* SensitiveGuyAndManlyMan: The SiblingTeam of the Breaker brothers consists of the experienced and hardened raider Torvin as the [[RatedMForManly Manly Man]] and his thoughtful, cultivated and sophisticated brother Garthon as the SensitiveGuy

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* SensitiveGuyAndManlyMan: The SiblingTeam of the Breaker brothers consists of the experienced and hardened raider Torvin as the [[RatedMForManly Manly Man]] and his thoughtful, cultivated and sophisticated brother Garthon as the SensitiveGuysensitive guy.

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* DeathOfAChild
** The way Harren Hoare breaks Torvin's resistance is by [[spoiler: murdering his unborn child]].
** [[spoiler: Himani Sand is captured, tortured and eventually killed in the Chapter 6 finale.]]



* InfantImmortality: The story successfully averts it.
** Butterfly is known for his WouldHurtAChild Tendencies, as long as said child is working for the Burned Man.
** The way Harren Hoare breaks Torvin's resistance is by [[spoiler: murdering his unborn child]].
** [[spoiler: Himani Sand is captured, tortured and eventually killed in the Chapter 6 finale.]]
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** Admittedly, it only consists of two members by the time the story is set, but both Durrandon's are noted for their fighting skills. This trope runs in the family, as the Storm Kings of House Durrandon are expected to be warrior kings and, save for some shameful exceptions, have lived up to these expectations.

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** Admittedly, it only consists of two members by the time the story is set, but both Durrandon's Durrandons are noted for their fighting skills. This trope runs in the family, as the Storm Kings of House Durrandon are expected to be warrior kings and, save for some shameful exceptions, have lived up to these expectations.
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* BadassGay: Samantha and Sasha are both explicitly stated to be interested solely in women ([[ShipTease As well as possibly each other]]) and they are both explicitly shown to be supremely badass.
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* {{Adorkable}}:
** Dairon, who has a lack of social skills, is shy and friendly and a bookish nerd. [[spoiler:Which makes his early death all the more tragic.]]
** Hjalgar has shades of this as well. He is one of the few genuinely nice and kind Ironborn in the story, very shy and his unwillingness to kill others can come across as endearing. That said, he is a serious case of BewareTheNiceOnes.
** Arthur Nathamer crosses into this territory whenever he encounters a beautiful woman to crush on.
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* FirstEpisodeSpoiler: Maester Eaton and Lord Raylan are murdered by an assassin, meaning that someone with sinister motives is interested in Raylansfair.

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* FirstEpisodeSpoiler: FirstEpisodeTwist: Maester Eaton and Lord Raylan are murdered by an assassin, meaning that someone with sinister motives is interested in Raylansfair.

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** Though he is weakened by a serious wound and having pushed himself to his limits, [[BadassGrandpa Terroma]] manages to deliver an impressive one when he faces Noelle and Marak.

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** Though he is weakened by a serious wound and having pushed himself to his limits, [[BadassGrandpa Terroma]] Terroma manages to deliver an impressive one when he faces Noelle and Marak.



* BadassGrandpa:
** Terroma is nearing his sixties, but that does not stop him from destroying pretty much every opponent he has to face. [[spoiler: The only exception is Marak, who is a badass himself and thirty years younger. The fight between them ends in a mutual kill.]]
** Argilac Durrandon is even older. He used to be one of the best fighters in Westeros and though old age has left its toll, he still is extremely deadly.
** Jarow might be even more badass than the ones above. Unlike them, he has lived as a hobo for fifteen years, sleeping under a bridge near Raylansfair. His health is declining as a result of his lifestyle and he is wounded, yet he still manages to defeat five men in under a minute without breaking a sweat.



** Terroma combines this trope with being a BadassGrandpa. Even when he does not kick ass, he is witty, caring and overall loveable. Almost every person he interacts with gets along with him.

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** Terroma combines this trope with being a BadassGrandpa.Terroma. Even when he does not kick ass, he is witty, caring and overall loveable. Almost every person he interacts with gets along with him.



** Argilac Durrandon is first introduced training his recruits. By training, we mean that he, a man in his sixties, straight up charges at his terrified recruits when they fail to form a proper shield wall and beats them mercilessly with his training sword, all under the cheers of the soldiers around him. It shows both, his [[BloodKnight love]] and [[BadassGrandpa skill]] for battle, while a nearby soldier comments that his harsh, but effective training methods also serve to [[AFatherToHisMen minimize later losses during the ongoing war his kingdom fights with the dornishmen]].

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** Argilac Durrandon is first introduced training his recruits. By training, we mean that he, a man in his sixties, straight up charges at his terrified recruits when they fail to form a proper shield wall and beats them mercilessly with his training sword, all under the cheers of the soldiers around him. It shows both, his [[BloodKnight love]] and [[BadassGrandpa skill]] skill for battle, while a nearby soldier comments that his harsh, but effective training methods also serve to [[AFatherToHisMen minimize later losses during the ongoing war his kingdom fights with the dornishmen]].



* InSeriesNickname: Plenty of characters use a nickname in the story, [[OnlyKnownByTheirNickname sometimes they are even exclusively known by them]]. Examples include [[TheCaligula Harren "The Black" Hoare]], [[BadassGrandpa Argilac "The Arrogant" Durrandon]], [[BearsAreBadNews Bear]], [[BigCreepyCrawlies Roach]], [[NobleDemon Arkan "The Burned Man" Gorys]], [[DrillSergeantNasty Ilhan "The Impaler" Lagoon]], [[NobleTopEnforcer Samuel "The Fang of Shadows" Harrington]], [[HunterOfMonsters Vaasrand "The Serpent" of Lys]], [[AnAxeToGrind Tedyn "The Axeman" Bullister]], [[BloodKnight "Bloody" Brandon Frey]], [[RapePillageAndBurn "Cleaver" Clint Volmark]], [[GentlemanThief Keat "The Trickster"]], [[CloudCuckoolander Dimitri "The Wise"]], [[BastardBastard Rodrik "The Kinslayer" Stone]], as well as [[spoiler: [[WellIntentionedExtremist Maron "Butterfly" Mullendore]].]]

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* InSeriesNickname: Plenty of characters use a nickname in the story, [[OnlyKnownByTheirNickname sometimes they are even exclusively known by them]]. Examples include [[TheCaligula Harren "The Black" Hoare]], [[BadassGrandpa Argilac "The Arrogant" Durrandon]], Durrandon, [[BearsAreBadNews Bear]], [[BigCreepyCrawlies Roach]], [[NobleDemon Arkan "The Burned Man" Gorys]], [[DrillSergeantNasty Ilhan "The Impaler" Lagoon]], [[NobleTopEnforcer Samuel "The Fang of Shadows" Harrington]], [[HunterOfMonsters Vaasrand "The Serpent" of Lys]], [[AnAxeToGrind Tedyn "The Axeman" Bullister]], [[BloodKnight "Bloody" Brandon Frey]], [[RapePillageAndBurn "Cleaver" Clint Volmark]], [[GentlemanThief Keat "The Trickster"]], [[CloudCuckoolander Dimitri "The Wise"]], [[BastardBastard Rodrik "The Kinslayer" Stone]], as well as [[spoiler: [[WellIntentionedExtremist Maron "Butterfly" Mullendore]].]]
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** The Sphynx, Butterfly's head torturer, dresses in white. His boss, the Tom, wears a mask in white and golden. The Moggy, another member of the Alley Cats, is an EvilAlbino.

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** The Sphynx, Butterfly's head torturer, dresses in white. His boss, the Tom, wears a mask in white and golden. The Moggy, another member of the Alley Cats, is an EvilAlbino.albino.
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One thing that makes this Fic stand out compared to others of its kind is its interactivity and how heavily reader input can change its course. After almost every part, the author offers a number of options on how the Point-Of-View character is supposed to deal with a situation and the readers are allowed to give their vote for their favoured option, similar to a ChooseYourOwnAdventure-story. The option that gets the most votes determines how the character is going to act in their next part and their actions in turn affect the characters around them. These choices can have a drastic effect on how the story continues. Another key feature of the story is that it allows the readers to create their own characters, which will eventually appear at some point in the story. Over the time, a huge and diverse cast has been created by dozens of readers and many of these characters take a central role in the story.

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One thing that makes this Fic stand out compared to others of its kind is its interactivity and how heavily reader input can change its course. After almost every part, the author offers a number of options on how the Point-Of-View character is supposed to deal with a situation and the readers are allowed to give their vote for their favoured option, similar to a ChooseYourOwnAdventure-story.{{Gamebook|s}}-story. The option that gets the most votes determines how the character is going to act in their next part and their actions in turn affect the characters around them. These choices can have a drastic effect on how the story continues. Another key feature of the story is that it allows the readers to create their own characters, which will eventually appear at some point in the story. Over the time, a huge and diverse cast has been created by dozens of readers and many of these characters take a central role in the story.



->''"[[ChooseYourOwnAdventure The Voting is closed!]]"''

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->''"[[ChooseYourOwnAdventure ->''"[[{{Gamebooks}} The Voting is closed!]]"''
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Gray Eyes is now a disambig per the appearance trope thread and is being dewicked.


* GrayEyes: Several characters from the North have these. It is a common trait with House Stark and apparently with House Frostborn as well. Kersea, Brandon and Wolfius also have gray eyes.
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''Forum of Thrones'' by [=LiquidChicagoTed=] is an ongoing ElsewhereFic set in the world of [[Literature/ASongOfIceAndFire A Song Of Ice and Fire]]/ [[Series/GameOfThrones Game of Thrones]]. It takes place roughly 300 years before the main events of the novels and the series, during the period that would later be known as The War of Conquest. Starting shortly before the beginning of the war, the initial main setting of the story deals primarily with a SuccessionCrisis in the city of Raylansfair in the Kingdom of the Reach, where Lord Robert Raylan, the last of his line, dies without naming an heir, leaving the rich and strategically important city to be preyed upon by several interested parties, each with their own distinct motives and personalities. That said, the narrative eventually expands to feature locations across all of Westeros and beyond, telling a story of epic scales through the eyes of over two dozen Point-Of-View characters, as one of the most important moments of Westerosi history unfolds before their eyes.

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''Forum of Thrones'' by [=LiquidChicagoTed=] is an ongoing ElsewhereFic set in the world of [[Literature/ASongOfIceAndFire A Song Of Ice and Fire]]/ [[Series/GameOfThrones Fire]][=/=][[Series/GameOfThrones Game of Thrones]]. It takes place roughly 300 years before the main events of the novels and the series, during the period that would later be known as The War of Conquest. Starting shortly before the beginning of the war, the initial main setting of the story deals primarily with a SuccessionCrisis in the city of Raylansfair in the Kingdom of the Reach, where Lord Robert Raylan, the last of his line, dies without naming an heir, leaving the rich and strategically important city to be preyed upon by several interested parties, each with their own distinct motives and personalities. That said, the narrative eventually expands to feature locations across all of Westeros and beyond, telling a story of epic scales through the eyes of over two dozen Point-Of-View characters, as one of the most important moments of Westerosi history unfolds before their eyes.



* BetweenARockAndAHardPlace: Many of the choices are this, forcing the readers to choose between two mutually exclusive options, sometimes having to consider their priorities or which option is the lesser evil.

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* BetweenARockAndAHardPlace: [[ScyllaAndCharybdis Between A Rock And A Hard Place]]: Many of the choices are this, forcing the readers to choose between two mutually exclusive options, sometimes having to consider their priorities or which option is the lesser evil.
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* ArtificialLimb: Holt Torv, the chief torturer of Harrenhal, has a wooden foot, to replace the one he lost in battle.

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* ArtificialLimb: ArtificialLimbs: Holt Torv, the chief torturer of Harrenhal, has a wooden foot, to replace the one he lost in battle.


* TryingToCatchMeFightingDirty: The more [[CombatPragmatist pragmatic]] characters in the story usually give little about a fair fight, using everything to their advantage.
** The most prominent example would be [[spoiler: Harris]] attacking [[spoiler: Ilhan]] from behind to start their fight, while the latter is distracted.
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* ControlFreak: According to Rhaenys at least, her father Aerion Targaryen was a very controlling man towards his children, deciding to whom they were going to marry from a young age. Aegon's grand ambition is seen as a way to leave his father's shadow behind.


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** Lord Aerion Targaryen, the father of Aegon, Rhaenys and Visenya, has been dead for several years but his children (and indirectly his niece Raenna) speak of him on occasion.
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** Damion Lannister is this for his cousin and King Loren Lannister.
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** Rhonda Upcliff has long black hair and a pale complexion, yet she's mostly calm, aloof, mysterious and only speaks when directly spoken to.


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** House Targaryen happens to be in possession of two; Blackfyre and Dark Sister.


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** Asher Velaryon serves as this for Orys Baratheon.


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** There is a major one at the end of Book 1 between [[spoiler:Lucas Flowers and the Tom. Despite his best efforts, Lucas ends up dying]].


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** Petyr Blackwood is only 48, but the stress and having to live under the rule of Harren Hoare made him look much older.
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* OutnumberedSibling: Jenna Harking has three older brothers and she's the only girl. The same applies to Argella Durrandon, who had three older brothers. Myles Cerwyn has three sisters as revealed in his biography, while Lord Edmyn Tully also has three daughters and one son.

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* LongLived: Princess Meria Martell is 80 years old at the start of the series, and has ruled for nearly 50 years, a rarity in Westeros. Lord Lucan Estermont is even older at 90 years old, the oldest lord in the Stormlands. Balerion the Black Dread is already over a hundred years old, which is rather average for a dragon but incredibly old for a human.



* SacrificialLion: Up to their untimely deaths, [[spoiler: Ilhan Lagoon, Dairon, The Burned Man, Marak, Terroma and Lyria]] have all been fairly major characters, so their deaths are big plot points.

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* SacrificialLion: Up to their untimely deaths, [[spoiler: Ilhan Lagoon, Dairon, The Burned Man, Marak, Terroma Terroma, Lyria, Lucas and Lyria]] Richard]] have all been fairly major characters, so their deaths are big plot points.


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** Members of the Storm guard Dickon Morrigen and Beric Storm are usually seen and mentioned together.
** The Winterfell guards Eon Dustin and Harrold Hornwood are best friends and are always together.
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** This is actually lampshaded with the two Torvins, Breaker and Hale. Garthon Breaker is actually surprised to meet a man with the same name as his brother.
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* KingBobTheNth: This is how the kings of Westeros are typically introduced.

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* KingBobTheNth: This is how the kings of Westeros are typically introduced. Mern Gardener happens to be the ninth of his name. Argilac Durrandon and Loren Lannister are explicitly the first of their respective names.



* OneSteveLimit: With so many characters is no surprise this is averted, although they are usually on different regions, which makes them easier to identify:

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* OneSteveLimit: With so many characters is no surprise this is averted, although they are usually on different regions, which makes them easier to identify:differentiate:
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* OneSteveLimit: With so many characters is no surprise this is averted, although they are usually on different regions, which makes them easier to identify:
** The are two Petyrs; Petyr Vyrwel and Petyr Blackwood, both important supporting characters.
** Two Edwards: Edward Anturion and Edward Lancaster.
** Two Darrens: Darren Reyne and Darren Tallwood. There's also Darreth Kailen, whose name sounds similar.
** Two Leonards: Leonard Constantine and Leonard Hill (both important supporting characters).
** Three Damons: Damon Greyjoy, Damon Darklyn and Damon Blackmont (the last one has only been mentioned so far).
** Two Samuels: Samuel Harrington and Samuel Puffer (both important supporting characters). There's also a Samantha.
** Two Lucas: Lucas Flowers and Lucas Lolliston. The former one is a POV character while the latter is a secondary character.
** Then there are the characters with similar sounding names; Jared, Jaron, Jarrod Estermont, Jaro, Jaylon, Jarek and Jarow.
** And of course there are Jons (or variants of it); John Gutten, Jon the Harper, Jon Mooton, Jonathan Errol and Jonos Arryn (none of them have been on the same place so far).
** There's also a Ryder and a Ryler (Harrington and Grimthorn, respectively).
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* AgeLift: Prince Aenys Targaryen has been born on the first year of the Conquest instead of a couple of years afterwards.
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** [[spoiler: Richard stays behind at his farm trying to give time to Kersea, Leonard and Jenna to escape from Mullendore's grasp, being beaten to death in the process.]]


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** Donna Flowers is a surprisingly nice and understanding person that gets along with ''both'' Harrington siblings.


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* HorseOfADifferentColor: Mace Crowl owns and rides a {{Unicorn}}, while Harrold Hornwood has semi-tamed a moose he intends to ride one day.
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** Jaylon's most heroic action in the entire story of turning against corrupt guardsmen to save Samantha, which happened only shortly after they bonded, with her treating him with a kindness he had never experienced before.

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** Jaylon's most heroic action in the entire story of is turning against corrupt guardsmen to save Samantha, which happened only shortly after they bonded, with her treating bonded (as she treated him with a kindness he had never experienced before.before).

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