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I read that as "Alien Iverson"...that would be cool...Aliens invade to play basketball!

Huh? It has been done before...

I didn't mean that.

@ JHM.

The problem is, that I am also writing it in Estonian. And I am not a very proficient translator. :D

I'm calling this fantasy story idea "The Lightbringers":

The hero is a vagrant knight named Rowan who lost one eye in a duel. The story opens with him traveling through a jungle when he discovers a giant, ancient stone head with facial features he's never seen on human beings before. After marveling at the strange sculpture and pondering its origin for a moment, he stumbles upon a living civilization of people with glowing sun symbols on their heads. These people, who call themselves the Lightbringers, are a nation of magicians who derive their power from a sun-like divinity they call the Light. Their leader, Queen Herschel, tells Rowan their history while taking him on a tour of her capital city.

Long ago, the Lightbringers once had a powerful kingdom, the Enlightened, where the jungle grows now. However, after their Queen Rayna (identified with the sculpture Rowan saw earlier) violated a certain covenent with the Light, It banished them to the faraway country of Volkenland. In the ensuing centuries, the Lightbringers suffered oppressive persecution at the hands of the local Volkish authorities, which culminated in a genocide orchestrated by King Friedhelm. Fortunately the Light's punishment had expired by this point, so the Lightbringers were able to return to their original homeland and rebuild their civilization. This good news turned to bad news when an army of demons called the Darkhorde invaded the Enlightened to terrorize the Lightbringers, who have resisted them ever since.

Herschel offers to restore Rowan's lost eye on the condition that he discover where the Darkhorde's secret lair lies (apparently the Light's magic cannot reach it). Rowan then explores the jungle with one of the Lightbringer mages accompanying him, but they are attacked by a native dragon whose venom can destroy magic. The mage gets killed, but Rowan is saved by human warriors who turn out to work for the so-called Darkhorde. Leading these warriors is the beautiful and compassionate Khanyisile, whose facial features happen resemble the sculpture of "Queen Rayna" far more than any of the Lightbringers.

Khanyisile explains to Rowan the real history of the conflict:

The "Darkhorde" (or more properly the Watu) are the land's real native inhabitants. They are the people whose ancestors carved the big sculpture, which really belongs to the late Queen Sindisiwe. The "Lightbringers", on the other hand, are really a cult of Volkish demon-worshipers who invaded the Watu's land and violently dispossessed them using destructive magic. Having earlier seen a number of clues that challenge Herschel's accoint, Rowan comes to the realization that the Lightbringer Queen lied to him about history and switches to the Watu's side. He and Khanyisile team up to destroy the Light using arrows dipped in dragon venom and drive out the Lightbringers.

@tidalwave: Are they just puking blood and dying, or does anyone attack them? I mean, horror isn't my cup of tea, but why don't they just run away.

@judasmartel: Sounds neat, but you've given us next to nothing. Would you mind elaborating a little bit?

@Jabrosky: Subversion of expectations is cool and all, but your story sounds a bit too black and white for my liking. It's like both sides are pointing fingers at each other, and only one can be right. It sounds like your idea could work, but the morality could be fleshed out a bit more.

Sorry if I sounded rude. I didn't mean to be.

Once upon a time, a group of friends were dared to enter a robot factory who's employees suddenly went missing a short time ago. Inside the factory, they find the most odd thing; five activated robots: three of them "Fem-bots" (one with pink hair in pigtails, one with a yellow bob, and one with short brown hair) and the others a cat and dog. The pink-haired fem-bot tells them that they are time travelers, but since only their souls can time travel, they had to possess the robots. The Pink-haired one identifies as a girl, the brown haired one as a boy, and the yellow haired one considers him/herself intersex (at least in his/her fem-bot form). They end up gaining Magical Girl-like powers. The girl, who became known as Ion, gained powers based on the Western Zodiac. The intersex person, who became known as Olive, gained powers based on the Eastern Zodiac. The boy, who became known as Shikuro, gained powers based on Yin and Yang. The Cat became a mentor mascot named Nekoki, and the dog...well, he's mostly there to be Nekoki's buddy, but he became Inuki. Using these powers, they fight the minions of another time traveler in a fem-bot: a pirate who wants to suck the fun out of everything. Needless to say, the group of friends who found them became really confused about the whole situation.

And this now sounds kind of like a dream journal.

edited 31st Dec '12 9:20:52 AM by MaplePlatoon

I just noticed that most early basketball anime protagonists I know of play the Forward position, but the latest ones have protagonists playing the Guard position.

• Hanamichi Sakuragi plays Power Forward.
• Kazuhiko Aikawa plays Small Forward.
• The main protagonists of Ahiru No Sora, Cross Over, and Ro-Kyu-Bu are Shooting Guards.
• Kuroko Tetsuya has no officially listed position, but his skills in misdirection and passing the ball resembles that of a Point Guard.

So far, I have yet to encounter a protagonist who plays Center. Sakuragi could have been close enough, yet so far.

So my initial idea was to make a middle school or high school Gentle Giant protagonist who has issues with his/her size, primarily because it was not able to help him/her lead a normal life. Until s/he was discovered by the captain of their basketball varsity team who offers him/her the chance to become part of the team.

So s/he was trained by the team in the basics: dribbling, passing, rebounding, shooting, and shot-blocking. However, the tournament is fast approaching and s/he's still struggling to shoot the basketball consistently, so s/he was instead advised to focus exclusively on defense, particularly rebounding and shot-blocking, until s/he eventually masters his/her offensive skills.

Basically, I am visualizing the guy as a giant version of Ippo Makunochi: initially knows nothing about the sport, but he gets better through constant, proper training, and never worries about his performance in-game because he has complete faith in his coach's abilities.

I know I'm deviating from my previous post, but I'm leaving it for another post. So what do you think would be the difference if I made the Gentle Giant protagonist male or female?

edited 31st Dec '12 5:58:30 AM by judasmartel

I'm bored so I thought about a picture/ story book idea:

a kid ventures through a mysterious entrance and explores floor by floor, each a different setting as in one floor is a colorful library, another is filled with diff animals, another floor has diff environments, seasons and climates

the fun part is that the reader has to find a hidden picture, not in the same way as Waldo but more like an illusion/ creative depiction

Click here for an example [1]

edited 5th Jan '13 2:32:02 AM by SentaiToku

@judas

Probably no difference, unless you make the female one moe but even then, the males are to do so as well. I never really like sports anime so I've no opinion on the rest of your post.

@Sentai

That's an interesting idea. The real question is: are you able to draw or got someone to draw such books with that idea?

I'm just a teenager with a dream

I sometimes illustrate, though I know I'm amateurish

Then again, children's books don't have to be professional

It needs good and illustrative pictures

Unless you self publish, the publisher chooses the illustrator for you, so don't worry about your artistic ability.

'80s throwback crime movie. Cartel and Mafia antagonists, set in Miami, guns, drugs, car chases. Still needs developing.

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edited 20th Dec '13 3:43:55 PM by BestOf

You're making me want to steal that concept...but I must be faithful to my own story.

The question is whatever to show the semi-sociopathic student's point-of-view first before he dies or to keep the readers in the dark and basically make it a mystery where the protagonist is figuring out why he swapped bodies—with the discovery of Black Magic leading him to a race to stop his brother from doing the same.

edited 13th Jan '13 8:22:31 AM by chihuahua0

Oh, I'm going to keep readers in the dark, certainly. It's not often that I have an idea this good for mystery/intrigue.

Everybody Dies. The End.

edited 13th Jan '13 6:37:48 PM by porschelemans

Sooooo, this is an idea for a webcomic (i'm already doing one right now, but I plan to do this on the side with a different art style when my co-author works on the first one, and then switch back when it's my turn). The title is currently BL@CK. A teen of nondescript age, named John Doe, is walking home from school one day when some guy with dashing features and a snazzy tux pops outta nowhere, complete with a mic and audience. He calls himself "The Host" and tells John that he's now this weeks contestant on a game show (unnamed for now). He tells him that as per the rules of the game show, his life will be changed forever, and if he endures, he'll win "fabulous prizes". He then says that in order to play (John doesn't actually want to BTW), he must change his name. John refuses and The Host changes his name to @ (at) and says the game has started. Thing is, I haven't decided quite what the game entails, but I want it to be like a challenge a week (giant monsters, ninjas, board games), and an RPG-type level and loot system. As part of the "life changing", everybody John has ever known doesn't know who he is, and any traces of him have disappeared (photos, videos, everything in his room) except what he had on his person at the time. He meets other "players" who are in the same situation (name change, cut-contacts). And then stuff.

EDIT: Also, considering how difficult it would be for a teenager to survive with no resources such as parents, each contestant receives a card with some large sum of money on it, but there are rules to what you can buy (I'll have to think of consequences).

edited 28th Jan '13 1:59:07 PM by cexadono

Sounds realy cool. :o

I had an idle idea for a play off the Kid with the Remote to a Giant robot. Think Gigantor or Heroman. The difference being the 'robot' was a scout sent down by aliens to see if humans could serve as a food source...

Robot, Arrak, lands on the shores of a US city. (I used California). Arrak meets girl who is trying to help her nephew dying of cancer; robot uses advanced technology to remove cancerous tissue, and defies his orders labeling humans as unsuitable. Once his orders are received his body begins to break down.

In his final moments Arrak uses the cancerous tissue as a 'battery' and forms a smaller version of himself around it. He is forced to nearby sand to complete his 'new' body. Thus making it a hyper dense glass.

I have the pending name: Golem of Glass, Arrak.

I'm thinking Arrak can 'swallow' the boy and use him as a core. Perhaps making his body much larger by drawing in other materials (Glass being just one of them).

I wrote the 'pilot' as a short story here.

edited 28th Jan '13 2:11:49 PM by Dimanagul

@Jabrosky – Given the names, especially like "Sindisiwe" and "Volkish", it sounds like the Watu are indigenous South Africans and the Volkish are Dutch. The terms "Lightbringers" and "Darkhorde" sound like Eurocentric Mighty Whitey schools of thought on how they "civilized" the Africans. Was this intentional?

edited 28th Jan '13 3:21:38 PM by IuraCivium

@Dimangul: Sounds kinda heartwarming, with a bittersweet ending. I just might read it.

here's mine:

edited 30th Jan '13 3:54:09 AM by MorwenEdhelwen

A teenage monster girl trapped in an underground hive has always wanted to see the night sky because of a supernatural pull towards it that she doesn't understand. She eventually has enough of her family and abandons her hive, but the sky is clouded and she cannot see anything more than a few meters above her, hence, no stars. In her quest to find a way to clear the sky, she discovers that her world is After the End, and that she is actually the living embodiment of a night-sky star constellation.

Oooh, neat! o3o

oo concepts, lol how fun.

well while i am juggling more than a few stories, my current biggest project is (tentatively) titled: "Strings: The Life and Times of a Real Boy."

Basically, it's a sequel story to Pinnochio following his adolescent years as he faces discrimination from his peers and basically have an existential crisis. i'm trying to opt for a deconstruction feel for the whole thing but i'll probably just wait and see how it all comes together when i finish writing my first draft of it lol.

Here's the concept I'm working on. An aboriginal girl working in the prestigious Victorian police force, one of the top police forces in the world, the equivalent of New York or LAPD. That's a fact, they are one of the top elite police services. Part of the challenge for her is dealing with Indigenous youths who are criminals and their claims of being targeted because of their race.

Another is investigating the murder of a transsexual, dealing with delivering the death notice to the family, how the police deal with the unusual concept of the crime, trying to find his killers.

I want it to be as true to life as I can make it, there's a chase scene late in the novel where I really want to show the officer's involved attention to detail, picking up clues, proper procedure, how they speak on the radio, that sort of thing. Not only do I want to make the story good I want to make it accurate: the fallout in the event of a shooting for example, how the coroner conducts their business and what they find out in their investigation, how the top brass react to what is going on.

There's one scene that is a case of Reality Is Unrealistic where one of the officers confronts someone about the use of capsicum spray, then backs off when it's argued they have a gun and there's the issue of different officers having different views on it. I know from personal experience, this actually happened and I'm writing it into my story. The same as you might think suggesting restraint orders then being unable or unwilling to help or suggest that scaring people from certain areas rather than dealing with the problem is not what a police officer would do, but again these are events that have happened to me so as good as I think the police are and as much as I want to show the good side of them I want to accurately show they are fallible as well.

With that in mind, one thing I do want to try and do is make Jessie, my main character, not be a Mary Sue. She makes mistakes, she oversteps perhaps her authority on certain issues (trying to tear down the issue of race with aboriginal criminals for example,) there are times she does things that are not proper procedure but I want to do that in a way that presents her not as a Cowboy Cop but trying to do what she can to do her job, which she sees as trying to help others.

edited 2nd Feb '13 4:01:05 PM by tsstevens