History Fanfic / MyBravePonyStarfleetNemesis

* ObliviousToHisOwnDescription: In "The Queen of Zebrica", a [[FantasticRacism Starfleet officer dismisses the zebras as arrogant]]. [[DeadpanSnarker Maud]] sarcastically remarks that it must be difficult dealing with people who "think they're so much better than you for no reason" to which the officer responds postively, [[SarcasmBlind thinking that Maud was agreeing with him]].

** "Artie's Choice", Rainbow Dash gives a brief one to [[TautologicalTemplar Starla and Starfleet as a whole for acting like they're the heroes and the Equestrians are the villains when it was Starfleet who invaded Equestria and forced it under Starfleet's rule]].

** [[spoiler:When Luna goads Celesto in dealing her several fatal blows in front of many cameras, she says, "Smile, your majesty. You’re on Series/CandidCamera."]]

** [[spoiler:"Twilight" to Artie: "Why didn't you save me?" It's enough that Artie pulls a HeelFaceTurn.]]

** Starla cannot fathom why Lightning would have feelings for Twilight because of the [[FantasticRacism beliefs]] [[VirtueIsWeakness Starfleet]] ingrains into the Space Ponies. [[PsychologicalProjection She also refuses to believe that Twilight was genuinely nice and good]].

%%** "Artie's Choice"

** Starla cannot fathom why Lightning would have feelings for Twilight because of the [[FantasticRacism beliefs]] [[VirtueIsWeakness Starfleet]] ingrains into the Space Ponies.

* {{Expy}}: Major Cerise Wonder is based slightly off of General Mustang. She even has a Havoc at her side.

* KickTheSonOfABitch: [[spoiler:Rhymey (who is heavily disliked both InUniverse and out) is killed by one of the Sentinels in trying to defend Sentinel Three from him.]]

** In "Gilded Hero", Lightning Dawn says some words to Starla Shine that mirror what [[WesternAnimation/TeenTitans Terra said to Beast Boy in]] [[Recap/TeenTitansS5E13ThingsChange "Things Change"]].

** ''Couples Therapy''; [[spoiler:"Twilight Sparkle"]] says this line regarding her motivations.
--->[[spoiler:'''"Twilight"''': Behold. The Insecto Armada, the dark lord Titan's gift; the instrument for the destruction of Starfleet and the liberation of the galaxy.]]

* ArmorPiercingSlap:
** Lightning delivers one to Rhymey when he tries to force Fluttershy to leave her friends' tea party.
** Starlight Glimmer has to do this to [[spoiler:Fluttershy to break her out of her dazed state following Rhymey's demise so that she can tell her to run or Starfleet will kill her in the wake of the aforementioned death.]]

** Starfleet as a whole seems to be this; they are capable of conquering worlds and possess an untold number of loyal soldiers and weaponry, but their FantasticRacism has led them to underestimate their enemies and even inspire numerous characters in the story to rebel against them. They are also completely inflexible and their unwillingness to adapt their strategies is heavily exploited by their enemies.

* TheCaligula: Grand Ruler. In fact, WordOfGod claims that his portrayal in the story was partly inspired by the TropeNamer.

** {{Deconstructed}} with Starfleet; the fact that they need to call out phrases to use their attacks and ''summon their weapons'' leaves them wide open for enemy attack.

* DecoyProtagonist: Sort of. Eve, who is ostensibly the true protagonist of the story, debuts in the fic's seventh chapter, while the rest of the story largely revolves around Lightning Dawn, the Elements of Harmony, Sunset Shimmer, and Starlight Glimmer. WordOfGod explained that this is because [[WritingByTheSeatOfYourPants he didn't plan the story out in detail before he started writing it]].

* HighlyConspicuousUniform: Starfleet's ridiculous ''Franchise/PowerRangers''-esque bodysuits; keep in mind Starfleet are supposed to be soldiers. [[spoiler:This is {{Deconstructed}} when they are in a forest fighting caribou and they can easily spot the Space Ponies while keeping themselves out of view of Starfleet.]]

** Rainbow Dash has issues with Starfleet's visors in that they offer no protection for the eyes and pointlessly tell her if an [[Franchise/DragonBall enemy's power level]] [[MemeticMutation is over 9000]]. After all, it doesn't matter how strong an opponent is; if innocent lives are at stake, she will fight foes regardless of their power.

** ''Couples Therapy''; [[spoiler:Twilight Sparkle]] says this line regarding her motivations.
--->[[spoiler:'''Twilight Sparkle''': Behold. The Insecto Armada, the dark lord Titan's gift; the instrument for the destruction of Starfleet and the liberation of the galaxy.]]

%%* "Artie's Choice"

* KillEmAll: [[spoiler:Grand Ruler's plan for Friendship is Magic: because he never got to order the death of Twilight, he's using them as RevengeByProxy. However, Starlight Glimmer convinces him to spare Fluttershy - not because she has standards, but to [[PragmaticVillainy avoid damaging Rhymey's morale]].]]

%%* PyrrhicVillainy:

* SurprisinglyRealisticOutcome:
** Lightning Dawn genuinely helps some Equestrians from Starfleet members' harassment. However, he is not thanked for his efforts because the Equestrians have suffered from Starfleet's FantasticRacism (even Lightning used to behave this way until Twilight died) for some time and Lightning choosing to help now does not change that fact, automatically absolve him of his previous actions or make the Equestrians believe that his present actions are authentic.
** [[spoiler:Cheerwell takes care of her physically disabled son, Felix, by herself to keep him out of public view due to Grand Ruler's mandates on those with disabilities. Felix is still in danger of dying because he is not receiving proper treatment from a hospital.]]
** Starfleet are supposed to a militant group yet they give their soldiers brightly colored ''Franchise/PowerRangers''-esque uniforms and go to places such as thick forests. [[spoiler:Indeed, this goes about as well as you think it would when their enemy can blend in while Starfleet can't.]]
** [[spoiler:Applejack may be a more competent fighter than the Space Ponies and manages to knock down more than a few caribou, but the caribou are simply too numerous and well-equipped for her to take on.]]

** Another one from Grand Ruler where he manages to kick [[UpToEleven Twilight, Sunset, and Celestia simultaneously]] when he tells Celestia that she has replaced Twilight with Sunset. As Celestia notes, it demeans Twilight to suggest that she could be replaced, it demeans Sunset to suggest that she is just a replacement for Twilight, [[RuleOfThree and it demeans Celestia to suggest that she would ever forget about Twilight and replace her]].

* VirtueIsWeakness: Unlike the source material, Celesto and Starla believe that the virtues of friendship are weaknesses.

* AdultFear: [[spoiler:In "Lost Love", one of the members of Starfleet, Colonel Stern, has a son named Felix who has birth defects and must be kept confined to his house out of public view because of Grand Ruler's mandates of how those with disabilities must be [[DeadlyEuphemism "dealt with"]]. Also, due to having to keep their son out of the view of the public, Stern and his wife Cheerwell cannot get him proper treatment.]]

This is a HateFic by Scipio Smith, based on Creator/DakariKingMykan's imfamous ''Fanfic/MyBravePonyStarfleetMagic''. It can be read [[http://www.fimfiction.net/story/278960/my-brave-pony-starfleet-nemesis here]].

As ''[[FanFic/MyBravePonyStarfleetMagic Starfleet Magic]]'' has a sizable {{hatedom}}, {{deconstruction}}s and {{reconstruction}}s were inevitable. This is [[FanFic/StarfleetRedone one]] [[Fanfic/StarfleetMagicIsBelieving of]] [[FanFic/FallOfStarfleetRebirthOfFriendship four]].

It can be read [[http://www.fimfiction.net/story/278960/my-brave-pony-starfleet-nemesis here]].

* SurvivorsGuilt: Lightning Dawn suffers from this due to Twilight's death.

* SurvivorsGuilt: Lightning Dawn suffers from this due to Twilight's death.

* ConservationOfNinjitsu: [[spoiler:Averted. Applejack and Spike manage to do a better job than the Space Ponies at fighting the caribou that ambushed them, [[RealityEnsues however, it is still two versus an untold number of opponents who are too well equipped for Applejack and Spike to handle]].]]

* RealityEnsues:
** Lightning Dawn genuinely helps some Equestrians from Starfleet members' harassment. However, he is not thanked for his efforts because the Equestrians have suffered from Starfleet's FantasticRacism (even Lightning used to behave this way until Twilight died) for some time and Lightning choosing to help now does not change that fact, automatically absolve him of his previous actions or make the Equestrians believe that his present actions are authentic.
** [[spoiler:Cheerwell takes care of her physically disabled son, Felix, by herself to keep him out of public view due to Grand Ruler's mandates on those with disabilities. Felix is still in danger of dying because he is not receiving proper treatment from a hospital.]]
** Starfleet are supposed to a militant group yet they give their soldiers brightly colored ''Franchise/PowerRangers''-esque uniforms and go to places such as thick forests. [[spoiler:Indeed, this goes about as well as you think it would when their enemy can blend in while Starfleet can't.]]
** [[spoiler:Applejack may be a more competent fighter than the Space Ponies and manages to knock down more than a few caribou, but the caribou are simply too numerous and well-equipped for her to take on.]]

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-->[[spoiler:'''Starlight Glimmer:''' So, let me get this straight, Professor. You made a bunch of soulless abominations of nature, gave them powers greater than those of ordinary ponies – even ordinary space ponies, let's be clear on what we're talking about here – gave one of them the form and likeness of a dead mare who is considered a hero by many, and then you let them out. And then you found that you couldn't control them and, in fact, never could. And now the off-switch has broken. Is there anything that I have just said that is factually incorrect?]]

-->[[spoiler:'''Starlight Glimmer:''' So, let me get this straight, Professor. You made a bunch of soulless abominations of nature, gave them powers greater than those of ordinary ponies – even ordinary space ponies, let's be clear on what we're talking about here – gave one of them the form and likeness of a dead mare who is considered a hero by many, and then you let them out. And then you found that you couldn't control them and, in fact, never could. And now the off-switch has broken. Is there anything that I have just said that is factually incorrect?]]

-->[[spoiler:'''Starlight Glimmer:''' So, let me get this straight, Professor. You made a bunch of soulless abominations of nature, gave them powers greater than those of ordinary ponies – even ordinary space ponies, let's be clear on what we're talking about here – gave one of them the form and likeness of a dead mare who is considered a hero by many, and then you let them out. And then you found that you couldn't control them and, in fact, never could. And now the off-switch has broken. Is there anything that I have just said that is factually incorrect?]]

-->'''Starla:''' Why? Just tell me that, why? Why did you choose her over me? I am a paragon of my race, I am the model and exemplar of all that a female of the space ponies ought to be, I am the benchmark of strength and the measuring-stick of fidelity. What does Twilight Sparkle have that I don’t? In what way could she possibly be superior to me?

-->[[spoiler:'''Starlight Glimmer:''' So, let me get this straight, Professor. You made a bunch of soulless abominations of nature, gave them powers greater than those of ordinary ponies – even ordinary space ponies, let’s be clear on what we’re talking about here – gave one of them the form and likeness of a dead mare who is considered a hero by many, and then you let them out. And then you found that you couldn’t control them and, in fact, never could. And now the off-switch has broken. Is there anything that I have just said that is factually incorrect?]]

-->'''Twilight Sparkle:''' Why are you so in love with death? What is it about the very idea of forgiveness that frustrates you?

* ItsTheSameSoItSucks: One of Rainbow Dash's InUniverse criticisms about the ''[[ShowWithinAShow Starfleet Magic]]'' TV show is that it is StrictlyFormula.

** [[spoiler:The Mane Five meeting Twilight and the latter's supposed FaceHeelTurn is a direct reference to Blue Team meeting a Rampant Cortana in ''VideoGame/Halo5Guardians''. The chapter title "Reunion" is also the same name of the level where said events occur.]]

** [[spoiler:In "Artie's Choice", Artie Bristles goes over that for supposed "heroes", Starfleet hardly does anything heroic. He also questions why he would risk everything to stop soldiers under his command from going on a suicide mission, but not do the same for Twilight Sparkle. As such, he betrays Starfleet in order to buy time for the Mane Five to get away, [[TheReasonYouSuckSpeech all the while calling out Starla out on all of the lives she's willing to throw away for the sake of her revenge]].]]

As ''[[FanFic/MyBravePonyStarfleetMagic Starfleet Magic]]'' has a sizable {{hatedom}}, {{deconstruction}}s and {{reconstruction}}s were inevitable. This is [[FanFic/StarfleetRedone one]] [[Fanfic/StarfleetMagicIsBelieving of]] [[FanFic/MykanTributeFallOfStarfleetRiseOfHarmony four]].

** The ShowWithinAShow ''Starfleet Magic'' is mentioned to have undergone some changes ever since the new writers took over, including the introduction of [[FanFic/MykanTributeFallOfStarfleetRiseOfHarmony two clones of Twilight]].

* ShowWithinAShow: ''Starfleet Magic'' turns out to be a TV show retelling an embellished version of actual events InUniverse. [[Fanfic/MykanTributeFallofStarfleetRiseOfHarmony It's apparently gotten a new writer who has made some serious revisions, such as portraying Starfleet in a less than favorable light (not that it's unjustified, mind you)]].

* TheyChangedItNowItSucks: InUniverse: Grand Ruler's opinion of ''Starfleet Magic'' under its [[Fanfic/MykanTributeFallOfStarfleetRiseOfHarmony new writer]]. [[DeconstructionFic Probably because it is no longer pro-Starfleet propaganda and instead portrays Starfleet as horrible as they actually are]].

** [[spoiler:"Twilight" to Artie: "Why didn't you save me?"]]