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Because of Swiftkill's infamous reputation as the "green-eyed devil", she's soon captured by the Inarians and sentenced to death in their tar pits before the intervention of their leader, Zephyr. When she runs off upon release and gets followed by Cricket, who seeks to help Inaria, the two of them end up going on a journey that leads them first to the deserts of the Shadeless pack, and eventually the territory of the notorious Rubicunds, where a past that Swiftkill would prefer to leave behind lies in wait...
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Because of Swiftkill's infamous reputation as the "green-eyed devil", she's soon captured by the Inarians and sentenced to death in their tar pits before the intervention of their leader, Zephyr. When she runs off upon release and gets followed by Cricket, who seeks to help Inaria, the two of them end up going on a journey that leads them first to the deserts of the Shadeless pack, and eventually the territory of the notorious Rubicunds, Rubicund faction, where a past that Swiftkill would prefer to leave behind lies in wait...
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Because of Swiftkill's infamous reputation as the "green-eyed devil", she's soon captured by the Inarians and sentenced to death in their tar pits before the intervention of their leader, Zephyr. When she runs off upon release and ends up being followed by Cricket, who seeks to help Inaria, the two of them end up going on a journey that leads them first to the deserts of the Shadeless pack, and eventually the territory of the notorious Rubicunds, where a past that Swiftkill would prefer to leave behind lies in wait...
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Because of Swiftkill's infamous reputation as the "green-eyed devil", she's soon captured by the Inarians and sentenced to death in their tar pits before the intervention of their leader, Zephyr. When she runs off upon release and ends up being gets followed by Cricket, who seeks to help Inaria, the two of them end up going on a journey that leads them first to the deserts of the Shadeless pack, and eventually the territory of the notorious Rubicunds, where a past that Swiftkill would prefer to leave behind lies in wait...
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Years ago, when great mammoths roamed the earth, and true civilization had yet to be born, a battle took place between the Stoneclaws, a clan of [[AlwaysChaoticEvil warlike saber-toothed cats]], and the [[AlwaysLawfulGood peaceful, unprepared dire wolves]] of Inaria.
The Stoneclaws won by a landslide. The alpha and beta male wolves were killed, along with almost half of Inaria's forces.
Desperate, widowed and with her young in peril, alpha female Whitewind's only hope is the Blackbloods: huge, powerful wolves who used to guard Inaria before they were exiled because of a misunderstanding over their leader, Swiftkill.
It is currently under a reboot. The reboot can be [[http://kayfedewa.deviantart.com/gallery/60096548/BBA-2016-Comic-Pages read here.]] The old comic can be [[http://kayfedewa.deviantart.com/gallery/252259/BBA-Classic-Comic-Pages read here.]]
The Stoneclaws won by a landslide. The alpha and beta male wolves were killed, along with almost half of Inaria's forces.
Desperate, widowed and with her young in peril, alpha female Whitewind's only hope is the Blackbloods: huge, powerful wolves who used to guard Inaria before they were exiled because of a misunderstanding over their leader, Swiftkill.
It is currently under a reboot. The reboot can be [[http://kayfedewa.deviantart.com/gallery/60096548/BBA-2016-Comic-Pages read here.]] The old comic can be [[http://kayfedewa.deviantart.com/gallery/252259/BBA-Classic-Comic-Pages read here.]]
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The Stoneclaws won by a landslide. The alpha and beta male wolves were killed, along with almost half of Inaria's forces.
Desperate, widowed and with her young in peril, alpha female Whitewind's only hope is the Blackbloods: huge, powerful wolves who used to guard
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* BreadEggsBreadedEggs: Cricket tries to warn Swiftkill not to go into Shadeless territory by saying, "They're legendary bandits! Cannibals! Cannibal bandits!"
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An indie {{fantasy}} comic book, a {{Xenofiction}} of animals of the prehistoric Pleistocene epoch.
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An indie {{fantasy}} comic book, a {{Xenofiction}} of animals of the prehistoric Pleistocene epoch.
epoch by Kay Fedewa.
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* ActionGirl: Swiftkill is an active fighter capable of effortlessly beating two hyenas at once. Bloodspill also counts, being able to take down a sabertooth.
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* ActionGirl: Swiftkill is an active fighter capable of effortlessly beating two hyenas at once. Bloodspill also counts, being able to take down a sabertooth.two saber-toothed tigers.
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* BigBrotherBully: Bloodspill was this to Swiftkill when they were pups.
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* BigBrotherBully: A female version. Bloodspill was this to her half-sister Swiftkill when they were pups.
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* HeinousHyena: Swiftkill's mother was eaten by a hyena years prior when she was still a puppy.
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* HeinousHyena: Swiftkill's mother was eaten by a hyena years prior when she was still a puppy.puppy, and two hyenas attempt to eat Cricket in the beginning before Swiftkill interferes. Their leader, the Queen of Thorns, sends her male harem after Swiftkill to kill her in revenge, and she only escapes by trespassing into Inaria.
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* TalkingAnimalTalkingAnimal: The characters are mostly talking wolves, with some hyenas and saber-toothed tigers thrown in.
* UnrelatedInTheAdaptation: The [[https://64.media.tumblr.com/e032c91f041bf39d77cc721d8bf69bbe/tumblr_p0v1eyWIUF1rl3ohpo5_1280.jpg appendix]] of the original comic listed Riptide (the old version of Sunstride) as Swiftkill and Bloodspill's cousin. In the reboot, he's part of a different pack called the Shadeless and doesn't seem to be related to either of them.
* UnrelatedInTheAdaptation: The [[https://64.media.tumblr.com/e032c91f041bf39d77cc721d8bf69bbe/tumblr_p0v1eyWIUF1rl3ohpo5_1280.jpg appendix]] of the original comic listed Riptide (the old version of Sunstride) as Swiftkill and Bloodspill's cousin. In the reboot, he's part of a different pack called the Shadeless and doesn't seem to be related to either of them.
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* SeldomSeenSpecies: The prehistoric hyenas and horse. See below:
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** The hyenas are based on a real, [[SeldomSeenSpecies obscure]] hyena genus (''Chasmaporthetes,'' also known as running hyenas) that actually lived in America alongside wolves at the time. Their designs are appropriately more doglike compared to living hyenas, as the genus is known as the "dog-like" hyenas. Their designs also resemble striped hyenas and brown hyenas, two real and still living hyena species that are only a tad less obscure.
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** The hyenas are based on a real, [[SeldomSeenSpecies obscure]] obscure] hyena genus (''Chasmaporthetes,'' also known as running hyenas) that actually lived in America alongside wolves at the time. Their designs are appropriately more doglike compared to living hyenas, as the genus is known as the "dog-like" hyenas. Their designs also resemble striped hyenas and brown hyenas, two real and still living hyena species that are only a tad less obscure.
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* LoadsAndLoadsOfCharacters
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* CanineConfusion: Most of the wolves have body proportions that look too thin for gray wolves, let alone dire wolves.
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This is the same kind of problem that led to Needs Wiki Magic Love being PRLC'd and moved to Pages Needing Wiki Magic; you're not supposed to pothole these in descriptions.
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** The character [[https://www.deviantart.com/kayfedewa/art/Character-Sheet-Heatstroke-733390693 Heatstroke]] may have been inspired by [[https://www.deviantart.com/kayfedewa/art/Yuff-Character-49939670 Yuff]], a coyote character that never got to appear in the original comic. They even have the same MismatchedEyes.
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** The character [[https://www.deviantart.com/kayfedewa/art/Character-Sheet-Heatstroke-733390693 Heatstroke]] may have been inspired by [[https://www.deviantart.com/kayfedewa/art/Yuff-Character-49939670 Yuff]], a coyote character that never got to appear in the original comic. They even have the same MismatchedEyes.SharedUnusualTrait of mismatched eyes.
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* ActionGirl: Swiftkill and Bloodspill.
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It is currently under a reboot. The reboot can be read [[http://kayfedewa.deviantart.com/gallery/60096548/BBA-2016-Comic-Pages here]]; the old comic can be read [[http://kayfedewa.deviantart.com/gallery/252259/BBA-Classic-Comic-Pages here]].
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It is currently under a reboot. The reboot can be read [[http://kayfedewa.deviantart.com/gallery/60096548/BBA-2016-Comic-Pages here]]; the read here.]] The old comic can be read [[http://kayfedewa.deviantart.com/gallery/252259/BBA-Classic-Comic-Pages here]].
read here.]]
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* UnfortunateNames: It's hard for some people to read Rapier's name as anything other than rape-er.
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** A parody comic Lampshaded this by naming Rapier "Evilsoul."
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* ScienceMarchesOn: Unfortunately, recent DNA evidence has indicated that despite their very strong skeletal similarities, dire wolves were actually not true wolves at all and belong to their own genus, which in real-life has brought into question whether they could breed with gray wolves, like Swiftkill's mother did.
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* IntergenerationalFriendship: Swiftkill is a loner and isn't exactly fond of Cricket at first, but Cricket immediately latches on to her like she's a cool big sister, and Swiftkill was concerned enough about her safety to look for her after she wanders into very dangerous Rubicund territory.
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* IntergenerationalFriendship: Swiftkill is a loner and isn't exactly fond of Cricket at first, but Cricket immediately latches on to her like she's a cool big sister, and Swiftkill was is concerned enough about her safety to look for her after she wanders into very dangerous Rubicund territory.
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* MythologyGag: Swiftkill biting into a butterfly out of the air is highly reminiscent of how she and some of the other Blackbloods caught bats in the old comic. The bat-eating returns when the Shadeless decide to share dinner with Swiftkill.
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* MythologyGag: MythologyGag:
** Swiftkill biting into a butterfly out of the air is highly reminiscent of how she and some of the other Blackbloods caught bats in the old comic. The bat-eating returns when the Shadeless decide to share dinner with Swiftkill.
** Swiftkill biting into a butterfly out of the air is highly reminiscent of how she and some of the other Blackbloods caught bats in the old comic. The bat-eating returns when the Shadeless decide to share dinner with Swiftkill.
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* RelatedInTheAdaptation: Greyback and Whitewind/Zephyr are mates in the original, but are uncle and niece in the reboot instead.
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* RelatedInTheAdaptation: RelatedInTheAdaptation:
** Greyback and Whitewind/Zephyr are mates in the original, but are uncle and niece in the reboot instead.
** Greyback and Whitewind/Zephyr are mates in the original, but are uncle and niece in the reboot instead.
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* BigBrotherBully: Bloodspill was this to Swiftkill when they were pups.
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* RefusalOfTheCall: When Inaria sends for the Blackbloods to help them fight the Sabres, Swiftkill refuses to go, as does Bloodspill. The rest of the wolves, on the other hand, choose to go in the hope of regaining their honor and proving their loyalty to Inaria.
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An indie {{fantasy}} comic book, a {{Xenofiction}} of animals of the prehistoric Pleistocene epoch.
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** The character [[https://www.deviantart.com/kayfedewa/art/Character-Sheet-Heatstroke-733390693 Heatstroke]] may have been inspired by [[https://www.deviantart.com/kayfedewa/art/Yuff-Character-49939670 Yuff]], a coyote character that never got to appear in the original comic. They even have the same MismatchedEyes.
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** Swiftkill and Bloodspill are now half-sisters. They were full-blooded sisters in the original.
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** Apparently, the wilds of prehistoric America were filled with bright red, yellow and orange dire wolves. Some Inarian gray wolves have tints of even stranger colors like purple. [[TropesAreNotBad It works]], as the style and art is very beautiful and professional, and resembles an animated film.
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** Apparently, the wilds of prehistoric America were filled with bright red, yellow and orange dire wolves. Some Inarian gray wolves have tints of even stranger colors like purple. [[TropesAreNotBad [[Administrivia/TropesAreTools It works]], as the style and art is very beautiful and professional, and resembles an animated film.
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It is currently under a reboot, with a new page coming out every week. The reboot can be read [[http://kayfedewa.deviantart.com/gallery/60096548/BBA-2016-Comic-Pages here]]; the old comic can be read [[http://kayfedewa.deviantart.com/gallery/252259/BBA-Classic-Comic-Pages here]].
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It is currently under a reboot, with a new page coming out every week.reboot. The reboot can be read [[http://kayfedewa.deviantart.com/gallery/60096548/BBA-2016-Comic-Pages here]]; the old comic can be read [[http://kayfedewa.deviantart.com/gallery/252259/BBA-Classic-Comic-Pages here]].
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Turns out they are related after all.
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** Greyback and Whitewind/Zephyr are mates in the original, but are uncle and niece in the reboot instead.
** Inverted. Swiftkill and Bloodspill are sisters in the old comic, but WordOfGod has stated that they aren't related in the reboot.
** Greyback and Whitewind/Zephyr are mates in the original, but are uncle and niece in the reboot instead.
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* RelatedInTheAdaptation:
** Inverted. Swiftkill and Bloodspill are sisters in the old comic, but WordOfGod has stated that they aren't related in the reboot.
**RelatedInTheAdaptation: Greyback and Whitewind/Zephyr are mates in the original, but are uncle and niece in the reboot instead.
** Inverted. Swiftkill and Bloodspill are sisters in the old comic, but WordOfGod has stated that they aren't related in the reboot.
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* GoodColorsEvilColors: Rapier, a villain, is black and white with red eyes. However, this was supposed to be averted later with [[spoiler: Bloodspill's son,]] a mostly black, somewhat evil looking wolf with red eyes.
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* RedAndBlackAndEvilAllOver: Rapier, a villain, is black and white with red eyes. However, this was supposed to be averted later with [[spoiler: Bloodspill's son,]] a mostly black, somewhat evil looking wolf with red eyes.
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* LukeNounverber: Swiftkill, Sunstride, Bloodspill, etc. Seems to be a common wolven name style.
* MythologyGag: Swiftkill biting into a butterfly out of the air is highly reminiscent of how she and some of the other Blackbloods caught bats in the old comic. The bat-eating returns when the Shadeless decide to share dinner with Swiftkill.
* MythologyGag: Swiftkill biting into a butterfly out of the air is highly reminiscent of how she and some of the other Blackbloods caught bats in the old comic. The bat-eating returns when the Shadeless decide to share dinner with Swiftkill.
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* MythologyGag: Swiftkill biting into a butterfly out of the air is highly reminiscent of how she and some of the other Blackbloods caught bats in the old comic. The bat-eating returns when the Shadeless decide to share dinner with Swiftkill.
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* LukeNounverber: Swiftkill, Sunstride, Bloodspill, etc. Seems to be a common wolven name style.
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* AnimalReligion: In the prologue, Swiftkill tells her dying mother that she prayed like she showed her to and asks if God is with her now. "God" then shows up, but it's a hellish hyena that eats her mother offscreen (and threatens to kill her as well unless she [[ForcedToWatch watches him do it]]. It's not clear whether the hyena really is something supernatural or if it's just a normal hyena that only appears demonic because we're seeing it through Swiftkill's perspective and is calling itself "god" to further break her.
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* AnimalReligion: In the prologue, Swiftkill tells her dying mother that she prayed like she showed her to and asks if God is with her now. "God" then shows up, but it's a hellish hyena that eats her mother offscreen (and threatens to kill her as well unless she [[ForcedToWatch watches him do it]]. ) It's not clear whether the hyena really is something supernatural or if it's just a normal hyena that only appears demonic because we're seeing it through Swiftkill's perspective and is calling itself "god" to further break her.
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* CallARabbitASmeerp: Rhinos are "Broudhorn," horses are "Equus." There's also "Fastcats," which appears to be serval-like cats.
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* CallARabbitASmeerp: Rhinos are "Broudhorn," "Broadhorn," horses are "Equus." There's also "Fastcats," which appears to be serval-like cats.