If you want to avert UI, try and make sure to show traits in more than one person, and have them come out in different ways.
Also, homophobia and racism are KINDA...against the rules ish, to a certain extent, so for future references, you don't need that disclaimer.
Read my stories!I honestly don't know what you're concerned about; you've got a diverse cast that doesn't align with any stereotypes that I'm familiar with. In particular, I wouldn't worry about someone being the only person of that race; your cast is finite and there can't be a large representation of every possible demographic. (If it was "the only woman" or "the only minority at all," that might be a problem, but obviously it isn't.)
If you're leaning towards anything it's Five-Token Band, but even that is hardly ever a problem, in and of itself.
My rule of thumb is, if you're a little squeamish about something you're writing, chances are that some people are going to be offended. I don't really see anything wrong with any of those names, but if you do, someone else probably will. Just food for thought.
Do loafing!
Thanks for the critiques!
I also just forgot that Maya is part Filipino so Kev's not the only Asian in the cast. ^_^'
I think CJ is worried the characters' traits may have unfortunate implications, not their names.
edited 20th Aug '12 10:42:54 PM by MorwenEdhelwen
The road goes ever on. -TolkienThe unfortunate implications lie in the fact that an objectification of homosexuals is your Magnum Opus.
If you find the text above offensive, don't look at it.@thelostcup: Can you explain where you saw "objectification of homosexuals" in CJ's post?
The road goes ever on. -Tolkienedited 21st Aug '12 6:48:26 PM by Collen
Gave them our reactions, our explosions, all that was ours For graphs of passion and charts of stars...
....what?
Everything is Possible. But some things are more Probable than others. JEBAGEDDON 2016I'm kind of unsure about some stuff that I think may be Unfortunate Implications too.
Would it be okay if I shared these things I'm concerned about?
edited 21st Aug '12 11:52:09 PM by NickTheSwing
Actually, that's the sort of thing I'd call "objectification of homosexuals". So yeah, I'd call that a negative trait, although I have trouble seeing how often it'd really crop up in the story.
Enjoying something / thinking it's attractive does not make it objectification. It can be, but not necessarily.
Read my stories!If you feel unsure about something, the best is to slightly tweak it.
One of my antagonists/deutagonist (Like...Prince Zuko from Avatar the Last Airbender...) is partly from the Middle-East, but I avoid stereotypes and subvert them by not caring.
"Life is eternal; and love is immortal; and death is only a horizon; and a horizon is nothing save the limit of our sight." - R. W. RaymondWow...I didn't think anyone cared about this post anymore...
Well, for starters:
1. No, Joseph isn't overtly perverted, he's just a guy . He usually just blushes and stares/nosebleeds when it happens but nothing bad.
2. I'm worried more about traits, tbh, but Kevin and Lydia's last names do have me a bit worried.
3. I think thelostcup meant the fact that it's a yaoi series. I disagree with his/her opinion but I respect it and won't argue with them. That's how flame wars usually start. To be frank I don't think it'll be my Magnum Opus anymore...I'll still work on it but I recently got an interesting idea that I think would be somewhat easier to publish first. I might make a page for it but I'll have to brainstorm it first.
4. @Nick The Swing. I think that would be a good idea.
edited 4th Sep '12 6:40:38 PM by CJCroen1393
...never mind.
edited 27th Sep '12 3:33:16 PM by NickTheSwing
My first conversation!
So my Magnum Opus is supposed to be a shonen ai novel known as Crushed. It's been bugging me for a while, but there are a few characters I have that I fear might have a lot of Unfortunate Implications to their name. They are Joseph Williams, Kevin Chang, and Lydia Rodriguez.
JOSEPH WILLIAMS:
KEVIN CHANG:
LYDIA RODRIGUEZ:
I'm also afraid that I've got characters trying too hard to avert UI:
I'm wondering if any of these are UI or trying too hard not to be UI. I want to make sure there are things I can improve on.
CONSTRUCTIVE CRITIQUES ONLY! NO "THIS WHOLE CONCEPT SOUNDS TERRIBLE, DON'T EVER WRITE IT!" AND NO RACISM OR HOMOPHOBIA!
edited 4th Mar '12 10:50:38 AM by CJCroen1393