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Nocturna Seeking for Light
Seeking for Light
Mar 16th 2013 at 10:25:28 AM

I got confused about which trope we were talking about rewriting the laconic for. XD The proposed one was for Laconic.Bishonen Line.

For Crystal Spires and Togas, how about: "A very highly advanced civilization will resemble an elegant ancient civilization (with technology added)."

edited 16th Mar '13 10:26:05 AM by Nocturna

m8e from Sweden Relationship Status: Wanna dance with somebody
Mar 16th 2013 at 10:50:47 AM

[up]x5 That might be to long for a laconic.

How about this for Bishōnen Line? (A little shorter.)
"The line where an evil creature evolves a more human form instead of getting increasingly monstrous."

edited 16th Mar '13 11:26:50 AM by m8e

Nocturna Seeking for Light
Seeking for Light
Mar 16th 2013 at 11:10:10 AM

[up] With grammar cleanup, that would work.

videogmer314 from that one place Relationship Status: Yes, I'm alone, but I'm alone and free
Mar 16th 2013 at 1:23:42 PM

[up] "The point at which an evil creature evolves into a more human form instead of getting increasingly monstrous." How does that look?

[up][up][up] That looks pretty good.

Madrugada Zzzzzzzzzz Relationship Status: In season
Zzzzzzzzzz
Mar 16th 2013 at 3:37:34 PM

Both of those work. I like the one for Crystal Spires and Togas better than what I just changed it to. I made the change not because I thought mine was particularly good, but because the old one was textbook-perfect BAD.

edited 16th Mar '13 3:37:43 PM by Madrugada

...if you don’t love you’re dead, and if you do, they’ll kill you for it.
Nocturna Seeking for Light
Seeking for Light
Mar 16th 2013 at 3:42:57 PM

Okay, I've made the changes.

Mar 18th 2013 at 9:18:14 AM

No suggestions for my issue? :P

Nocturna Seeking for Light
Seeking for Light
Mar 18th 2013 at 9:56:01 AM

Sorry. Was busy but then forgot. Also, that's a little more difficult...

Hm... Face Death with Dignity's laconic is pretty good already, so I don't really want to tinker with it. For Obi-Wan Moment, how about "A veteran character is peaceful and composed in their moment of death."?

Telcontar In uffish thought from England
In uffish thought
Apr 8th 2013 at 3:01:05 AM

Laconic.Fan Fiction Dot Net is completely false — the site is not like a wiki. I'm out of ideas for what to replace it with, though.

That was the amazing part. Things just keep going.
SeptimusHeap from Bern, Switzerland Relationship Status: Mu
Apr 8th 2013 at 3:20:07 AM

I personally lean towards cutlisting it. This sort of false laconics is exactly why they tend to attract misuse.

AnotherDuck No, the other one. from Stockholm Relationship Status: In season
No, the other one.
Apr 8th 2013 at 3:42:14 AM

The page quotation is the same. Cut that too?

Why not just something like, "The biggest fanfiction site there is," or something like that?

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SeptimusHeap from Bern, Switzerland Relationship Status: Mu
Apr 8th 2013 at 3:54:46 AM

Yes, cut the quote too.

That laconic would be a semi-duplicate of the first line of the description.

AnotherDuck No, the other one. from Stockholm Relationship Status: In season
No, the other one.
Apr 8th 2013 at 4:36:59 AM

"A website with more fanfiction than you can shake a pen at." ?

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Madrugada Zzzzzzzzzz Relationship Status: In season
Zzzzzzzzzz
Apr 8th 2013 at 4:42:54 AM

^^ So? If it's an accurate laconic description, it's an accurate laconic description. There's no need to cut the Laconic page just because the main page has a good succinct definition.

...if you don’t love you’re dead, and if you do, they’ll kill you for it.
SeptimusHeap from Bern, Switzerland Relationship Status: Mu
Apr 8th 2013 at 4:44:04 AM

Personally, I think yes. Especially since as-is the laconic is just wrong.

Telcontar In uffish thought from England
In uffish thought
Apr 8th 2013 at 4:44:38 AM

[up][up][up]That's good.

edited 8th Apr '13 4:45:05 AM by Telcontar

That was the amazing part. Things just keep going.
AnotherDuck No, the other one. from Stockholm Relationship Status: In season
No, the other one.
Apr 8th 2013 at 7:00:15 AM

Personally I think a trope description should start with what's more or less a laconic (introduce the concept before going into details, history, and other cruft), and if the laconic is the same, that's not a problem.

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Apr 10th 2013 at 5:21:54 PM

The current laconic for Magical Girl Warrior is "Badass Magical Girl." I'd like to swap in the first line of the description, "The intersection of Magical Girl with Super Hero(ine)." Anyone else behind that?

Nocturna Seeking for Light
Seeking for Light
Apr 10th 2013 at 5:47:45 PM

I'm fine with that.

AnotherDuck No, the other one. from Stockholm Relationship Status: In season
No, the other one.
Apr 11th 2013 at 5:38:00 AM

"The intersection of..." etc. isn't all that laconic.

Maybe "Magical Girl meets Super Heroine

edited 11th Apr '13 5:38:22 AM by Catbert

Madrugada Zzzzzzzzzz Relationship Status: In season
Zzzzzzzzzz
Apr 11th 2013 at 6:13:22 AM

"X Meets Y" isn't any clearer, and there's nothing not-laconic about "the intersection of...". "Laconic" means "concisely stated" not "The absolute minimum number of words you can use."

How about "A Magical Girl who is also a Super-Heroine." Although I hate that the only concise way to describe this trope is as "a combination of two others".

edited 11th Apr '13 6:15:59 AM by Madrugada

...if you don’t love you’re dead, and if you do, they’ll kill you for it.
Apr 11th 2013 at 6:25:34 AM

Defintions of Laconic:

From Laconic Wiki: Omitting needless words

From Merriam Webster Dictionary: Using or involving the use of a minimum of words : concise to the point of seeming rude or mysterious

Word Origin & History

"concise, abrupt," 1580s, from Gk. Lakonikos, from Lakon "person from Lakonia," the district around Sparta in southern Greece in ancient times, whose inhabitants were famously proud of their brevity of speech. When Philip of Macedon threatened them with, "If I enter Laconia, I will raze Sparta to the ground," the Spartans' reply was, "If."

The Laconic ideal would have one word, but it is hard enough coming up with a one word title. Whether you are saying "Intersection of" or "is also" both concepts could be summed up with "meets".

AnotherDuck No, the other one. from Stockholm Relationship Status: In season
No, the other one.
Apr 11th 2013 at 1:23:28 PM

Dictionary definitions does not help you win arguments.

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Apr 11th 2013 at 6:33:36 PM

Neither does arbitrarily declaring dictionaries off limits when discussing the meaning of a word.

At any rate, I see this as a simple discussion, not an argument to be won. No one is handing out "Laconic Description Improvement Thread" prizes.

edited 11th Apr '13 6:41:06 PM by Catbert


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