The Most Horrifying Moments from Your Work

I'd probably be somewhat taken aback myself.

Same here. I LOVE Gorn in fiction, but in real life? Eww.

I've seen pictures of a man bisected in a motorcycle crash.

It was strangely fascinating.

Gorn is always lulzy in fiction but not in real life.

Lol wut?

So is it's cousin, violence.

Apparently he got sandwiched between his motorcycle and a semitrailer at high speeds and it split his body in two. His intestines were sort of stretched between the two halves. It kinda made it look like he was still connected.

... Wow, I just realized how creepy it is when I talk so casually about this.

Correct.

It becomes especially disturbing when you think that this poor guy had friends and a family.

edited 20th May '11 6:59:02 AM by AdeptusAlpharius

Yeah...I mean, if you were talking about how if somebody ate someone's liver while cooking it and feeding it to his family...in fiction, it would be fine, but talking a gruesome things in real life so casually....no.

I'm something of a hypocrite (pretty sure that's not it, but can't come up with any better...) because while I cringe at someone getting paper cut (although I find it hilarious time to time) and feel really sorry who hurt themselves in general....in my fic, The Hero is 'disturbingly regularly gets his body mutilated, blown apart, tortured, rinse and repeat. Also, like I said earlier, cannibalism is very frequent in my work.

Random Question: A doll made out of stitched body parts of corpses is something qualifies as scary, isn't it? Apparently I don't: I find them to be Creepy Awesome.

I think I've run into a serious problem with writing horror. On the one hand, there are things that don't easily scare me but do scare lots of other people (particularly Body Horror.) This means I can easily write those things, but I need to show them to other people before I can determine whether they're scary or simply Nightmare Retardant. On the other hand, there are things that easily scare me (particularly Stockholm Syndrome), but if I have difficulty even reading them, I'm certainly not going to try and write them.

For some reason, I refuse to let my main characters go without experiencing a bunch of horror...

• in my Whateley Universe stories, my Author Avatar character, Verity gets MindRaped, almost real raped, and generally is the one who winds up suffering, partially because hir backstory gives hir a martyr complex.
• in my Unit 88 stories, perspective character Jason/Jada Jordan watches his first love Ashley get killed right in front of him, BECAUSE she saved HIM from it, then minutes later the bad guy blows himself up and even though the dead girlfriend's wife Tamara (it's a OT3 situation) saves Jason and Ashley's body (Tamara and Ashley are nano-powered superhuman special agents), the explosion rips into Jason's face, burning it and his upper neck, and the shrapnel destroys his eyes.
  • it warrants mention that Ashley doesn't actually die, her mind-body link is severed and she experiences And I Must Scream until she's put into a brand new body.
• later, after Jason is healed by getting changed into an agent (a female one, by accident), Jada gets poisoned and tased within minutes of each other, then the bad guy who did it sprays her with acid and intends on cremating and crushing her; she gets out of the acid bath, but is caught in an explosion that cauterizes her eyes shut and forces a kidnapped fellow agent Zoe to use a plain metal knife (because a laser knife, which they carry, would seal the wound even more) to cut her eyes back open. Then Jada gets shot 3 times point blank before ripping the bad guy's scrotum off.

That's just from the first 2 backstory episodes. Jason's PRE-story backstory involves a skin allergy that gets triggered by an unlikely combination of condom made from X material, female condom made of Y material, and a heat liquid in both; the reaction spreads through his whole bloodstream and causes searing pain for hours (and it's not even fatal, which makes the pain worse).

I can probably inflict more horrors as the Unit 88 stories progress. (shrug)

edited 21st May '11 11:12:29 PM by Metalitia

My two Arch-Enemy characters are in Chained Heat for several weeks by a guy until one of them goes crazy when her boyfriend is pushed into a Pit (containing spears). It Got Worse from there onwards.

edited 22nd May '11 3:46:23 AM by sabrina_diamond

The Unit 88 story sounds a bit like Metal Gear Solid meets Ranma One Half. The Groin Attack part made me lol.

edited 22nd May '11 5:13:04 AM by AdeptusAlpharius

I have seen a site with a lot of pics of dead people, and some when I did research on genocide to prove that they were really killed.

Trust me, I have seen some graphic shit, a kid, no older than three, with a deadly wound on his head, a girl cyring among bodies, both from Darfur, and shit like that.

It is facisnating in a way for me, until it comes to genocide. But the point is the same. I do not think it is funny and hate when people do. The thing is I am honestly facinated with it, it is something we can't ever see, it would be like looking at the heart of God, or being near a star being eaten by a blackhole.

curiosity of something we can't normally experience or see, is very alluring. It isn't that they are dead or that they are hurt, that part sucks. The fact that you look at this and imagine if it was you, or someone you knew, and it gets much worse. But at the same time, it just puts SO much more gravity to the weight of it.

The human body, when I see soem of those, make me cringe, but I keep looking, because of what I see. I am both facinated and scared of it. It rebounds realizing the pain, but it gives you insight, insight into how delicate life is, how important. how cruel it can be.

Seeing the entirity of life, teh good, then go there, and see the bad, puts it into perspective.

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Writing scenes like this (only on a psychological instead of a physical level) give the same kindof knee jerk reaction, but in a different way, it is in a way when a character has a moral dilemma that forces people to THINK, what would I really do? Could I do this? I then think it is important to show people through the character, that good people can do bad thigns, and have the character do something bad right after doing the good thing, to vent, soemthing really bad, really, and that shows just how close to the moral event horizion they really were. Tehy scrape right against it.

THAT is a frightening place that I have been in one or two times in my life. The character doing something just a little whiles above teh horizion, is what makes you realize just how close they came.

Damn, I just spelled out the one scene I just wrote lol.

I don't think I understood your post.

I think he was talking about the bile fascination of gore and genocide and how at certain circumstances even the hero can act like a villain. See? Some things can be explained without writing half a novel.

edited 22nd May '11 12:00:45 PM by AdeptusAlpharius

From New Dawn Hollow Dusk:

• Garth's "Hold Still" moment: Garth, a Four Eyes, Zero Soul antagonist and general inhuman monster has essentially roped a hero's dejected love interest into being his pawn. Said girl is trapped in front of said hero by the power she herself gained from McGuffin given to her by Garth. He planned the whole thing out, by the way. So he tells her to hold still and, Slasher Smile intact, impales both of them to a wall. He then cuts them open just to see Matthew's reaction.

• The Seer's first appearance: rather than the optimistic adviser he is in the first part of the story, the Seer first appears as a ghoulish, red eyed specter who has a penchant for ruining lives. There is just something about that scene that is so off putting, so horribly wrong, that it falls squarely as HONF, even though I did not even intend for it to be that way.

• Mina's Snap: Matthew has a rather nice young woman always giving him lunch and gifts. He starts ignoring her in favor of some others, and then things start to go wrong in her home life. Horribly wrong. Hints are that The Seer is involved. She becomes a Stepford Smiler, and as things go along, she becomes more and more unstable until she sees Matthew on a date with Sorata. She goes right up to them and demands that Sorata leaves. Forever. And then she screams that she wishes Sorata would just die so her and Matthew could be together forever. Matthew chastises her for this, and her response? A long mad giggle that breaks into horrifying laughter.

I was talking about that even heroes, all heroes, can become villains, so can we, and its scary when we realize that through a work.

The other thing, I said while disturbing, is also fascinating on a thing of awe, if not for the fact that IT WAS A PERSON.

It's like when someone is drawn to a weird and scary creature... imagine if you could safely see a Rancor in real life, it's like that. the insides of people is so foreign, as it is not everyday you accidentally get your hand in a meat grinder.

It's like "holy shit is that what the inside of my arm looks like?!"

thing as well as

"if that happened to me... the feeling and shock of losing my arm, i'd puke and fucking freak"

and

"is that... bone? muscle? wtf why do people do these things?"

and

"this feels really surreal" and finally "And to think, I once almost got my hand caught in a meat grinder... this really makes me think about life in general and how one moment it is fine, the next ruined, and how right now so many people not that far away are dying, and i am here"

When I see a genocide picture I am more like

"evil bastards should answer for their crimes! fuck genocide! why does no one care?!"

does that make any sense? I DONT find it funny, but disturbing, fascinating, and heart wrenching all at the same time. unless it's genocide, then I find it make me angry that it's done on such a scale. Yet I can't stop myself from clicking it for some reason.

Anyway, this was a couple of posts back that it even came up.

I remember one of my lecturers showed us this awful picture on a slide, this guy who'd been sort of impaled with a telephone pole from hips to shoulder... he was still alive though, I think he lost the leg but was otherwise fine.

And then it turned out that what the lecturer really wanted to point out was that the leg in question was purple, and that implied that it was the veins that were damaged and not the arteries.... why did you need such a horrifying picture to demonstrate such a simple thing?

I did have a tearjerker scene floating around in my mind, about this guy viewing the body of his lover who'd been stuck in a burning building.

"I'd had half a thought that... I didn't know, that I'd hold his hand again. Kiss him goodbye. But this... thing... that they'd laid out on the sheet - its hands were blackened stubs. I couldn't kiss it. My stomach clenched at the thought, no matter how hard I tried to tell himself that this was my love, the same person I'd lain beside just last night - the thought of touching it made me sick to my stomach. I couldn't even bear to lay a hand on his wrist."

edited 23rd May '11 5:24:05 AM by LoniJay

I try to go for more psychological horror.

I think the one I like the most is when Jocelyn fails to save Amanda. And Amanda is slowly erased from history, meaning Jocelyn can no longer remember her. But the readers can~

I'm nearly up to writing this too~

@ Nick Da Man With Da Can (a few pages back)

Quit trying to pass off your kinks and fanservice as horrifying emotional drama. It just winds up being narm.

A burned corpse would probably fall apart, depending on how burned.

I knew this teacher, he had to clean up after some kids died in a fire, he worked for a morgue. He said they fell apart and chuckled and said he couldn't eat steak for two years, since the kids smelt like, well, steak.

Weird guy, also was in some biology classes in collage, and dentist one too. He's bisected an Amish boy before who died in an accident.

He was all like:

"Amazing, text book example of the body"

I was like:

"But didn't it weird you out that it was a person?"

and he was like:

"No, you just imagine it isn't a person. Anyway, amazing text book example. I mean, his brain was blistered up from the accident, but amazing text book example"

He also said this about another guy he did in collage:

"There was this one guy," chuckles loudly, "he was a smoker and a coal miner, his lungs were pitch black."

He was what I call "a lovable catholic". It seems there is this bad image of Catholics, but every single one I meet is just a huge, odd, and lovable personality (other people just think they are weird)

See, when I did study on human bodies, that's what bothered me the most. That they weren't really any different to a sheep or cow carcass at the butchers - that's obvious when you think about it, but coming face to face with it was a little confronting. They looked, to some extent, like food.

What do you mean, dude? Was that directed at me? There is no Fanservice in those instances.

I only write in spanish so I can't share by work with the other tropes, but the scariest thing I've written is a short story writen in second person (the narrator uses "you" as in "you walk in the darkness and trip on a chair you haven't noticed"), the story is about you waking up in a house and finding out pieces of bodies someone cook (and possibily eat), then you find out that the bodies aren't human... and neither are you.

It's heavily inspired by a point and click game I played a while ago, except there's nobody to save you.

Nick, don't worry, it wasn't directed at you. Although your exerpt might be filled with your kinks though

Too bad it's only in spanish, a 2nd person story would be interesting