General Writer's Block thread

Whoo! I was wondering why it hadn't been updated in so long.

Well, this will be my first post on the General Writer's Block thread. Apologies for anything if put it in an inappropriate thread.

I require a proofreader here for my rewrite for Theriomorph Chronicles called Theriomorph Chronicles: Subhuman published in FictionPress recently after two months of writing it.

What I need here is to point out of the mistakes, inconsistencies, character errors, plot holes and other goofs inside the story. I also need someone to point out the prose and dialogue so I can improve on the quality of it.

Finally, I need someone to summarize the personalities of the characters so that I can try to create a foundations for the characters. Right now, I have work to do and edit the work page for it.

This is the FictionPress link to the story.

Theriomorph Chronicles: Subhuman

Hey there guys, I uploaded the in-progress manuscript of The Crocodile God to Inkitt and I also entered it in the site's current contest. Check it out on my profile and throw it some likes, please!

https://www.inkitt.com/jamielegaspi

How about my post above? Does anybody want to critique the first chapter?

I recommend checking out Uncle Drunkie's Writer/Critic Dating Service or The Constructive Criticism Thread for critiques.

Hi, everyone! I haven't posted here before (mainly because I didn't realize this forum existed), but I was hoping someone could help me with a scenario I'm probably overthinking. The two main characters are going on their first date. Keith wanted to get Addie flowers, but wanted to make it more personal than just generic roses. Since she named her D&D character Belladonna (please don't judge me), he wanted to get her flowers that reflect that. I did research and found that petunias are part of the same family, but here's my question: should he do the same research i did, or should he just ask someone else to help him? Sorry for the wall of text. Thanks for any opinions you can give me on this silly problem!

Personally I'd love if he did research. "I tried to get you belladonna, but it's kind of poisonous and I couldn't find any nearby, so I got you petunias because they're technically in the same family" is Adorkable as hell.

Oh, good. That's what I was going for, then the little critic in my head started telling me, "no, that's creepy, that's not adorkable." Thanks for helping tell that little voice to shut up!

Ha, Good one.

I am trying to avoid the Idiot Ball with my story.

You see, it have a conflict between Two big Sides fighting against each other, one of those sides is mean to be morally superior to the other one and eventually, the good side win.

And then they are are attacked for the Big Bad, whose Evil Plan included rising a strike against the survivors of the war somehow, the losing side had a way to stop said plan but it involved a lot of death that would have resulted in the same or even more misery in the long term.

Basically, the Evil Plan of said villain was using her cult of Nihilistic/Extinctionists to mess with a war between those sides and drag as many entities as possible, including entities that had nothing to with it before summoning a Eldritch Abomination that forces all of them to join against it.

Only to fake her own death, most of her cult believes that they are working for the last shot when they are actually just setting the Step 2 out of 3. She and the top members are planning to take advantage of the fallout of the war because they are all cases of a One-Man Army in some way.

I want to find a way of why the characters dont do anything to exterminate the cult of Omnicidal Maniac s that exist for centuries and is know for pretty much everyone as The Dreaded.

Because they believe that they are gone, that they already destroyed them. Something that is clearly NOT the case for the audience.

The characters come back to their war after they have deal with their Enemy Mine ignoring that said enemy actually is still alive.

edited 11th Apr '18 9:15:41 PM by KazuyaProta

Ok so i need some serious help for a portfolio assignment for class and i unfortunately am not good at writing.

Thank you, Troper, for visiting Writer's Block. While we can't do your homework for you, we can certainly point you in a direction that may help!

What's your specific question?

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Sorry for the passive-aggressive tone. The situation kind of called for it. We are happy to help, though!

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edited 18th Apr '18 9:22:08 PM by AwSamWeston

well, my question was

a lot of people are comparing my bug warrior idea to big bad beetleborgs and it's getting pretty....insulting? wouldn't say that since people like to compare ideas alot....but i don't get the comparison.

I understand that, its annoying when people start seeing references when you werent intending them.

You could just say that you did it only because Bugs are cool, said the truth.

I'm writing a fairly lightweight story at the moment, it's a diary fic. I've got an idea of how the character's voice needs to be, but I keep making the chapters too long or making the character more melodramatic or flowery than they need to be. Does anyone have any tips about keeping things fairly short and concise without the story turning into "I went here and did a thing, then I went here and did a thing, and then I went home goodnight diary"?

How does one write Cult of Personality as a Reconstructed Trope?

As a rule, if you're reconstructing a trope you have to deconstruct it first.

So first we have to decide: what does a Deconstruction of Cult of Personality look like?

Has anyone here tried to portray in one of their stories, the concept of Tough Love as something negative?

I think that some works already have do that

So, how can a female character have agency when she's in the middle of a love triangle?

That's a thing that I'm not sure of myself. The only thing that comes to my mind is suffering a Lonely at the Top effect because of everyone giving them the Like a God to Me treatment.

That's not a very sensible question. A female character can have agency in any situation. In a Love Triangle, the easiest way to do this is to acknowledge that she ultimately has the right to choose for herself (including choosing neither). The biggest problem comes when you make the female subordinate to the male suitors, so that it's their actions that ultimately "win her affection" or some such, as if she's a prize to be carried away. Just... don't ever do that.

edited 22nd May '18 5:43:03 AM by Fighteer

Another form of agency a woman in a love triangle could have is to be a Bitch in Sheep's Clothing knowingly and deliberately leading the guys on as they complete for her affection.

Hi, a bit off topic, but I would like to "poach" a writer from here (you guys know your stuff) to do a small commission. What's the proper way I can do that?

edited 28th May '18 12:07:55 PM by EriekD

Okay, so this is a bit of an odd question.

So, for a Show Within a Show type thing, I was thinking about having a parody of Super Sentai with a goofy cause, like Gekisou Sentai Carranger had Traffic Safety. I'm having trouble thinking of such a cause, though. Any ideas?