Trope Description Improvement Drive

They Call Me MISTER Tibbs! needs description trimming... and also clarification on what differentiates Friendly Address Privileges from it — or whether that trope is a Sub-Trope.

Isn't that form of job TRS work?

Also, someone turned Example as a Thesis into a Self Demonstrating Example. Keep or revert?

Depends. My impression is that if we can quickly determine that the problem is minor enough, we can address it here; else we delegate it to TRS.

And as for Example as a Thesis, I'm inclined to do both: Restore the original description while keeping the new one within a "Self-Demonstrating Example" folder for witty fun.

Wait, do we have a "Self-Demonstrating Example" namespace?

edited 13th Aug '12 9:17:36 AM by MarqFJA

Yes, at Self-Demonstrating Article.

STD Immunity needs help. The description is way too focused on porn.

Fast Eddie already dealt with it.

That's just a list. I mean something like SelfDemonstrating.Example As A Thesis.

EDIT: Oh? That page actually existed already. Maybe we should switch the current text with the new stuff?

edited 14th Aug '12 9:39:37 AM by MarqFJA

Explosive Overclocking is a mess. Permission to take a hacksaw to the parts that look like analysis?

I would suggest a bigger saw, but yes, I doubt you will get many complaints if you chopped parts off.

Fixed a little of it, but someone who understands the trope better could clean more of it.

Can we trim the description on Lampshade Hanging?

I axed a paragraph that looked superfluous to me, starting "Lampshade Hanging doesn't just apply to implausible plots...."

Since the previous paragraphs didn't really suggest that it did just apply to implausible plots, it seemed pretty safe to cut.

Thank you.

Goth is also a mess of a page.

Soap Opera has a few too many paragraphs of analysis.

Audience-Alienating Premise seems to have a little too much of a "these works would have done great if everyone could just look past the premise" tone, which is annoying in itself, and goes to mildly creepy given that some of the listed works were axed by the P5.

Re Soap Opera, it can safely be shipped off to Analysis.

Re Audience-Alienating Premise, I don't think the gushing is excessive there.

I disagree. The description seems to be trying very hard to beat it into readers' heads that these works are usually misjudged - that might be excessive in and of itself, but it's very jarring when you compare that to the general tone of the examples, which is much more evenhanded. I could buy a similar approach in the description, but as it stands there's only one sentence (the one about Squick) that even remotely sounds like it's not going down the "audiences should look past the premise" route.

The description for Lethal Chef looks rather long and scattered to me. I'll fix it myself, but mostly I just wanted a second opinion. Do other people think that description needs work?

Agreed.

I rewrote the description for Lethal Chef. If someone wants to look it over, and make sure it is acceptable, that would be great. I mostly want to make sure that my attempts at humor did not come at the expense of clarity.

Seems good and clear to me, and funny as well.

Weapons That Suck needs an overhaul. Less Trope Co, more trope.

Short Tank may need description/definition polishing, because I'm not sure what differentiates this as a Sub-Trope of Tomboy. For reference, here's the last TRS thread for it, which had been auto-closed by the expiry-bot.

There is some digression in the description of the types on Psychic Powers. Most of it seems to be there so people can fit in potholes.

I gave a good whack to Conveyor Belt o' Doom because it's not good to have a trope writeup that goes like "this happens when [blah blah blah] ... oh, and this also happens when [blah blah blah]".