Poor Image: Or Was It A Dream

This image, while it works, is just long. I feel like it could just have panels 2, 5, and 8.

Edited by R3Ked on May 19th 2022 at 1:10:48 AM

Opening

We need one more panel for clarity's sake, 2 + 4 + 5 + 8.

Maybe, but I think 2+3+5+8 would be better.

That's a good idea actually, but it raises the question of how we'd lay out the panels.

Source page (we may take a bit of time in case someone wants to propose other panels, there are more)

Cleaning.

Edited by Amonimus on May 19th 2022 at 9:57:21 PM

That's better.

That's pretty good.

from me. i can't really tell what's going on when it's truncated that far down. it looks like "a girl's painting, something explodes, she screams, now she's painting a demon"? with the extra context, panels 3 and 4 make it more clear what her dream actually was, and panel 7 makes it more clear it was a dream

Agreed. While I do agree that the current is unnecessarily long for the concept it's trying to illustrate, the suggestion just makes it more confusing and hard to follow.

Edited by Mahoxy on May 22nd 2022 at 10:23:29 AM

Agree. The current isn't good, but the shortened suggestion makes it worse (and 6 panels is still very long anyway)

Maybe we can look beyond the original source?

The Petri Dish (2/4)

Garfield (3/7)

I like the first one.

I'll go with The Petri Dish.

Edited by TheUnsquished on May 23rd 2022 at 4:49:10 PM

That one's much better.

Edited by Mahoxy on May 23rd 2022 at 1:53:24 PM

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