You should explain more considering I know nothing about the characters or your story.
SPATULA, Supporters of Page Altering To Urgently Lead to Amelioration (supports not going through TRS for tweaks and minor improvements.)"I wrote a pregnancy into all my other fics, I might as well do it in this one as well, even though it doesn't fit" is a crappy reason to force a pregnancy into a fic. Don't waste your energy on it.
...if you don’t love you’re dead, and if you do, they’ll kill you for it.This. If your plot doesn't call for pregnancy, don't try to force it in.
That's why I'm trying to make it fit. :/
Teens dress as Batman to catch pedophiles; cops not impressedWhy do you want pregnancy?
Read my stories!Procreation seems like the next logical step in "Guy seduces girl to help him take over the world." The guy in this case just happens to be an indistinct spectral machine-god.
Teens dress as Batman to catch pedophiles; cops not impressed...and this is the next logical step now? Seriously?
Question: Do you consider your incorporation of pregnancy as Author Appeal, or a Creator Thumbprint?
edited 3rd Nov '11 4:07:20 PM by chihuahua0
A little bit of Column A, a little bit of Column B, and then all tied together by Writer on Board.
Teens dress as Batman to catch pedophiles; cops not impressedPregnancy huh? Like broken-rape-then-pregnancy or happy pregnancy?
...a little brother should belong to his older sister, right? - Orimura ChifuyuCompletely disregarding whether this is a good idea or not, I really doubt a pregnancy is the only way to solve whatever problem your story has in order to advance the plot. I find when I beta for people they get hung up on thinking they need their characters to do something that they have to wrestle them into because it makes no valid sense, and then as I talk it over with them, they start to realize there are alternatives that both accomplish the same thing, are neither insensible nor convoluted, and improve their plot and story.
I think you should think about what you actually want the outcome to be at the core. This pregnancy is probably not the ultimate goal, the pregnancy is supposed to accomplish something else. I think you'll be able to figure out an alternative that way if instead of thinking "How do I get them pregnant?" and starting thinking "What do my characters want and what is a believable way they might attempt to achieve that?".
edited 3rd Nov '11 4:59:09 PM by NoirGrimoir
SPATULA, Supporters of Page Altering To Urgently Lead to Amelioration (supports not going through TRS for tweaks and minor improvements.)Uhh, what does it qualify as if she's happy about it, but mainly because magical rocks broke her mind and mentally conditioned her into being happy about it?
edited 3rd Nov '11 5:05:36 PM by Dragonzordasaurus
Teens dress as Batman to catch pedophiles; cops not impressed...not all one night stands will get you pregnant. And if you just said it doesn't work in the verse, why would it be a logical step?
Read my stories!You should have the man get pregnant.
TROPE SUBVERTED PEOPLE
TROPE SUBVERTED
LLLLOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOLLL
Forget the tropes until after you're done.Serah impregnates the fal'Cie that's controlling her?
That would be... unique.
Teens dress as Batman to catch pedophiles; cops not impressed^^In fan fiction, not really.
edited 3rd Nov '11 11:42:49 PM by joeyjojo
hashtagsarestupid@OP: I think you're trying way, way, way too hard to get attention.
A brighter future for a darker age.Sadly, I have to agree with Morven. If it doesn't fit he universe, then it really does seem like an attention-getting thing.
Well I guess I'll just go back to editing the Viper article, then.
Teens dress as Batman to catch pedophiles; cops not impressedI weep for humanity if this is what you seriously believe.
;—;
EDIT: Wait, are you really planning on having Serah be impregnated by a fal'cie?
Because that is all kinds of levels of wrong. L'cie are slaves by definition.
It qualifies as a very disturbing story about slavery.
I'm also having a hard-time fathoming why on earth a Fal'cie would want to impregnate a human being. Fal'cie are way above biology.
edited 4th Nov '11 11:16:37 AM by annebeeche
Banned entirely for telling FE that he was being rude and not contributing to the discussion. I shall watch down from the goon heavens.Just an idea.
edited 4th Nov '11 2:22:50 PM by Dragonzordasaurus
Teens dress as Batman to catch pedophiles; cops not impressedIf that's the sort of reaction you're going for, you're on the right track. :D
Banned entirely for telling FE that he was being rude and not contributing to the discussion. I shall watch down from the goon heavens.Your story... Doesn't make any sense whatsoever. Plot-wise, I mean.
Pardon me for asking, but why would Serah be willing to murder Snow? How would she be able to lift the sword? She was twig-like in the game.
I mean... What exactly are you trying to accomplish with the story?
I mean, it goes against the whole idea of what the Fal'Cie wanted to accomplish. They WOULDN'T want half human children, because not only do they see themselves as better than humans, and thus a half-breed would be unworthy, but it would go against the whole idea of them being Gods. It is imperative that people don't know their focus. The Fal'Cie operate on fear. It's sort of a statement about blind faith and religion in the game.
edited 4th Nov '11 4:10:20 PM by MrAHR
Read my stories!I don't get this either.
Apparently she's going to be mind-controlled by the fal'cie or something?
Banned entirely for telling FE that he was being rude and not contributing to the discussion. I shall watch down from the goon heavens.
This one.
I already did it for my Mai Hime fanfiction, my Tales of Phantasia fanfiction, my Fushigi Yuugi fanfiction, and my Ayashi no Ceres fanfiction, so I figured I might as well do it for my Final Fantasy fanfiction, too. The problem is I can't really think of a way to justify it since the biological conditions in this story are a little bit... uh, different.
Any suggestions?
p.s. It's not porn, dammit.
Teens dress as Batman to catch pedophiles; cops not impressed