Lost in Medias Res: A common complaint in the FanFiction.Net reviews is that the story is hard to follow, with the actual fact of what has happened not becoming clear until the end of Chapter 3. One of the few things the Updated Re-release changes is to make this clearer.
The concept of Death Eater points. If you torture enough captives, presumably you can send off for a commemorative pen.
Later in the same chapter, the following is very apt to make readers think of the many times characters are revealed in this way in My Immortal:
They were nearly at the doors of the great hall when all their carefully laid plans went tits up, [sic] neither Harry nor Hermione could believe who had caused it, Hannah Abbot!
Sirius decides that he needs to re-enter the dating game after seeing how happy Lupin is with Sprout. Unfortunately, his internal monologue phrases it like this:
Sirius was just going to have to do a Moony, he needed to get up off his arse and go for it.
Though its clear from context what Dumbledore played the werewolf card means, it still looks like he took a break from his evil scheming for a quick game of Magic: The Gathering.
Old Shame: To an extent. When he posted the first chapter of his reimagining Proud Parents, robst admitted the story is really showing its age and that is why he has chosen to rewrite it for a second time.