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* FateWorseThanDeath: Being stuck in the circle for centuries without escape and only the pain of crossing it as her company, suffice to say being trapped was a horrid experience for the fiend.
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* MagicallyBindingContract: There is a magical effect when the boy agrees to a '''deal''' with the Fiend that echoes off the walls of the room. [[spoiler:Interestingly, the only such deals are to stay awhile in exchange for her cooking chestnuts; his freeing her he does without any supernatural binding.]]
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* MagicallyBindingContract: There is a magical effect when the boy agrees to a '''deal''' with the Fiend that echoes off the walls of the room. [[spoiler:Interestingly, the only such deals are to stay awhile in exchange for her cooking chestnuts; his chestnuts. The Boy freeing her he her, on the other hand? He does without any supernatural binding.that of his own free will.]]
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* AssholeVictim: [[spoiler:After they raped and killed her OnlyFriend (before The Boy), The Fiend reacted by turning ''a whole town'' into these.]]
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* AssholeVictim: [[spoiler:After they raped and killed her OnlyFriend (before The Boy), The Fiend reacted by turning ''a whole town'' a '''''whole town''''' into these.]]
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A short KineticNovel developed by dischan in UsefulNotes/RenPy. The website is [[http://junipersknot.dischan.org/ here]].
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A short KineticNovel developed by dischan.dischan in UsefulNotes/RenPy. The website is [[http://junipersknot.dischan.org/ here]].
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* AssholeVictim: [[spoiler:After they raped and killed her OnlyFriend (before The Boy), The Fiend reacted by turning ''a whole town'' into these.]]
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* EquivalentExchange: The rule of [[spoiler:the spell binding the fiend]] is of this type: [[spoiler:a life for a life.]]
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* PowerOfTrust: The boy invokes this when [[spoiler:planting the olive tree in the circle]], because even if he doesn't trust the fiend to [[spoiler:exchange lives with the tree instead of him]], ''checking'' would ruin her chances of being trustworthy.
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* MagicallyBindingContract: There is a magical effect when the boy agrees to a '''deal''' with the Fiend that echoes off the walls of the room. [[spoiler:Interestingly, the only such deals are to stay awhile in exchange for her cooking chestnuts; his freeing her he does without any supernatural binding.]]
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dischan. The website is [[http://junipersknot.dischan.org/ here]].
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* PointyEars: The fiend's ears are long and pointy, which made it necessary for her to hide them when she was among humans.
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* PointyEars: The fiend's ears are long and pointy, which made it necessary for her but she tells the boy that she usually didn't need to hide them when because, as long as she was among humans.filed down her horns, she'd be taken for a HalfHumanHybrid.
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* HornedHumanoid: The fiend's horns, like her PointyEars, is a another sign of her demonic heritage.
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* HornedHumanoid: The fiend's horns, like her PointyEars, is serve as a another sign of her demonic heritage.
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* HornedHumanoid: The fiend's horns, like her PointyEars, is a another sign of her demonic heritage.
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* TakeAThirdOption: Life must be given in order for the girl to escape from her prison. The boy has to either exchange places with her or leave her to her fate. He chooses to instead [[spoiler:plant a tree within the circle, thereby substituting the life of the tree for hers. It works]].
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* TakeAThirdOption: Life [[spoiler:Life must be given in order for the girl to escape from her prison. The boy has to either exchange places with her or leave her to her fate. He chooses to instead [[spoiler:plant plant a tree within the circle, thereby substituting the life of the tree for hers. It works]].
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* YouGottaHaveBlueHair: The fiend has blue-green hair.
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* BuryYourGays: When the men of the town found out one of their girls had been with the strange demon girl...
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* HideYourLesbians: When the men of the town found out one of their girls had been with the strange demon girl...
* {{Irony}}: Many years after the demon girl buried her partner, she found that an ugly olive tree had grown over her grave. She tore it to pieces, but left the roots alone so as to not disturb her deceased friend. Since olive trees are strong, it just grew back uglier. In the end, what saves her from her prison is [[spoiler:an olive tree that is planted within the magic circle as her place.]]
* {{Irony}}: Many years after the demon girl buried her partner, she found that an ugly olive tree had grown over her grave. She tore it to pieces, but left the roots alone so as to not disturb her deceased friend. Since olive trees are strong, it just grew back uglier. In the end, what saves her from her prison is [[spoiler:an olive tree that is planted within the magic circle as her place.]]
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* {{Irony}}: Many years after the demon girl buried her partner, she found that an ugly olive tree had grown over her grave. She tore it to pieces, but left the roots alone so as to not disturb her deceased friend. Since olive trees are strong, it just grew back uglier. In the end, what saves her from her prison is[[spoiler: an olive tree that is planted within the magic circle as her place.]]
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* HideYourLesbians: When the men of the town found out one of their girls had been with Fiend...
the strange demon girl...
* {{Irony}}: Many years after the demon girl buried her partner, she found that an ugly olive tree had grown over her grave. She tore it to pieces, but left the roots alone so as to not disturb her deceased friend. Since olive trees are strong, it just grew back uglier. In the end, what saves her from her prisonis[[spoiler: an is [[spoiler:an olive tree that is planted within the magic circle as her place.]]
* {{Irony}}: Many years after the demon girl buried her partner, she found that an ugly olive tree had grown over her grave. She tore it to pieces, but left the roots alone so as to not disturb her deceased friend. Since olive trees are strong, it just grew back uglier. In the end, what saves her from her prison
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* NoodleIncident: The fiend has done man things, killed many people, destroyed many towns, but she claims none of that is why she was trapped within the circle. We never learn why and how she ended up there.
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* NoodleIncident: The fiend has done man many things, killed many people, destroyed many towns, but she claims none of that is why she was trapped within the circle. We never learn why and how she ended up there.
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* RapeAndRevenge: The men of the Fiend's village beat and raped her female friend until the last of the light escaped her eyes. Her revenge involved razing the village to the ground.
* RapeAsDrama: When the demon girl was still able to wander the world freely, she was close to another girl and often took her to watch the stars. [[spoiler:The girl ended up getting raped and beaten in the hands of angry men, who soon met a very bloody end at the hands of the demon girl - along with the rest of their town.]]
* RoaringRampageOfRevenge: When Fiend discovered [[spoiler: the beaten, raped body of her friend,]] she killed everyone in the town - men, women, children.
* RapeAsDrama: When the demon girl was still able to wander the world freely, she was close to another girl and often took her to watch the stars. [[spoiler:The girl ended up getting raped and beaten in the hands of angry men, who soon met a very bloody end at the hands of the demon girl - along with the rest of their town.]]
* RoaringRampageOfRevenge: When Fiend discovered [[spoiler: the beaten, raped body of her friend,]] she killed everyone in the town - men, women, children.
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ground]].
* RapeAsDrama: When the demon girl was still able to wander the world freely, she was close to another girl and often took her to watch the stars. [[spoiler:The girl ended up getting raped and beatenin to death at the hands of angry men, who soon met a very bloody end at the hands of the demon girl - along with the rest of their town.]]
* RoaringRampageOfRevenge: When the Fiend discovered [[spoiler: the beaten, raped body of her friend,]] she killed everyone in the town - men, women, children.
* RapeAsDrama: When the demon girl was still able to wander the world freely, she was close to another girl and often took her to watch the stars. [[spoiler:The girl ended up getting raped and beaten
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* RapeAndRevenge: The men of the Fiend's village beat and raped her female friend until the last of the light escaped her eyes. Her revenge involved razing the village to the ground.
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* TheSleepless: Fiend was trapped in a magic circle and cursed with never being able to sleep. For ''untold centuries.'' Seeing the boy sleep awakens some unpleasant feelings.
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* {{Gorn}}: No visual gorn, but the fiend gives very detailed descriptions with all the gory details on how she killed humans.
** Also the description of her hand being burned to the bone when she sticks it through the magical circle.
* [[spoiler:HideYourLesbians: When the men of the town found out one of their girls had been with Fiend...]]
** Also the description of her hand being burned to the bone when she sticks it through the magical circle.
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* {{Gorn}}: No visual gorn, but the fiend gives very detailed descriptions with all the gory details on how she killed humans.
** Alsohumans. There is also the description of her hand being burned to the bone when she sticks it through the magical circle.
*[[spoiler:HideYourLesbians: HideYourLesbians: When the men of the town found out one of their girls had been with Fiend...]]
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* {{Irony}}: Many years after the demon girl buried her partner, she found that an ugly olive tree had grown over her grave. She tore it to pieces, but left the roots alone so as to not disturb her deceased friend. Since olive trees are strong, it just grew back uglier. In the end, what saves her from her prison is an olive tree that is planted within the magic circle as her place.
* KillEmAll: When Fiend discovered the beaten, raped body of her friend, she killed everyone in the town - men, women, children.
* KillEmAll: When Fiend discovered the beaten, raped body of her friend, she killed everyone in the town - men, women, children.
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* {{Irony}}: Many years after the demon girl buried her partner, she found that an ugly olive tree had grown over her grave. She tore it to pieces, but left the roots alone so as to not disturb her deceased friend. Since olive trees are strong, it just grew back uglier. In the end, what saves her from her prison is is[[spoiler: an olive tree that is planted within the magic circle as her place.
place.]]
* KillEmAll: When Fiend discovered [[spoiler: the beaten, raped body of herfriend, friend,]] she killed everyone in the town - men, women, children.
* KillEmAll: When Fiend discovered [[spoiler: the beaten, raped body of her
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* NoNameGiven: Neither of the protagonists is given a name or any way to identify the other. They are just boy and girl.
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* RapeAsDrama: When the demon girl was still able to wander the world freely, she was close to another girl and often took her to watch the stars. The girl ended up getting raped and beaten in the hands of angry men, who soon met a very bloody end at the hands of the demon girl. Along with the rest of their town.
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* TakeAThirdOption: Life must be given in order for the girl to escape from her prison. The boy has to either exchange places with her or leave her to her fate. He chooses to instead plant a tree within the circle, thereby substituting the life of the tree for hers. It works.
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* TakeAThirdOption: Life must be given in order for the girl to escape from her prison. The boy has to either exchange places with her or leave her to her fate. He chooses to instead plant [[spoiler:plant a tree within the circle, thereby substituting the life of the tree for hers. It works.works]].
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* CrowningMomentOfHeartwarming: [[spoiler:When Fiend finally leaves the circle after untold centuries, she just collapses in the boy's arms and cries.]]
* CrowningMomentOfHeartwarming: [[spoiler:When Fiend finally leaves the circle after untold centuries, she just collapses in the boy's arms and cries.]]
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* CrowningMomentOfHeartwarming: [spoiler:When Fiend finally leaves the circle after untold centuries, she just collapses in the boy's arms and cries.]]
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A certain autumn morning, a young boy gets lost. Searching for his way home, he finds a strange girl with horns trapped within a magic circle underground. The girl, a powerful fiend who has been confined there for centuries, asks the boy to stay with her a little as he's the only person she has spoken to in a long time. And thus they begin telling each other stories...
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A certain autumn morning, a young boy gets lost. Searching for his way home, he finds a strange girl with horns trapped within a magic circle underground. The girl, a powerful fiend who has been confined there for centuries, asks the boy to stay with her a little as he's the only person she has spoken to in a long time. Reluctantly, the boy stays. And thus they begin telling each other stories...
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perspectives. It begins with the fiend's narration as she tries to convince the scared boy to talk to her, but shifts to the boy halfway through.
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* {{Gorn}}: No visual gorn, but the fiend gives very detailed descriptions with all the gory details on how she killed humans.
* NoodleIncident: The fiend has done man things, killed many people, destroyed many towns, but she claims none of that is why she was trapped within the circle. We never learn why and how she ended up there.
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A certain autumn morning, a young boy gets lost. Searching for his way home, he finds a strange girl with horns trapped within a magic circle underground. The girl, a powerful fiend who has been confined there for centuries, asks the boy to stay with her a little as he's the only person she has spoken to in a long time. And thus they begin telling each other stories...
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* GeometricMagic: The fiend cannot step outside her assigned circle without facing excruciating pain. The only way she can safely get out is if another life enters the circle to take her place.
* {{Irony}}: Many years after the demon girl buried her partner, she found that an ugly olive tree had grown over her grave. She tore it to pieces, but left the roots alone so as to not disturb her deceased friend. Since olive trees are strong, it just grew back uglier. In the end, what saves her from her prison is an olive tree that is planted within the magic circle as her place.
* NoNameGiven: Neither of the protagonists is given a name or any way to identify the other. They are just boy and girl.
* PointyEars: The fiend's ears are long and pointy, which made it necessary for her to hide them when she was among humans.
* PrecisionFStrike: When the boy falls asleep, the demon girl, bitter at her misfortune and inability to sleep or find peace, begins spouting almost incoherent profanities at him even though he can't hear her.
* RapeAsDrama: When the demon girl was still able to wander the world freely, she was close to another girl and often took her to watch the stars. The girl ended up getting raped and beaten in the hands of angry men, who soon met a very bloody end at the hands of the demon girl. Along with the rest of their town.
* SupernaturalGoldEyes: The demon girl has golden eyes as a sign of her nature as a fiend, which really stand out in contrast to the boy's comparatively plain ones.
* TakeAThirdOption: Life must be given in order for the girl to escape from her prison. The boy has to either exchange places with her or leave her to her fate. He chooses to instead plant a tree within the circle, thereby substituting the life of the tree for hers. It works.
A certain autumn morning, a young boy gets lost. Searching for his way home, he finds a strange girl with horns trapped within a magic circle underground. The girl, a powerful fiend who has been confined there for centuries, asks the boy to stay with her a little as he's the only person she has spoken to in a long time. And thus they begin telling each other stories...
The story is told from both the fiend's and the boy's perspectives.
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* GeometricMagic: The fiend cannot step outside her assigned circle without facing excruciating pain. The only way she can safely get out is if another life enters the circle to take her place.
* {{Irony}}: Many years after the demon girl buried her partner, she found that an ugly olive tree had grown over her grave. She tore it to pieces, but left the roots alone so as to not disturb her deceased friend. Since olive trees are strong, it just grew back uglier. In the end, what saves her from her prison is an olive tree that is planted within the magic circle as her place.
* NoNameGiven: Neither of the protagonists is given a name or any way to identify the other. They are just boy and girl.
* PointyEars: The fiend's ears are long and pointy, which made it necessary for her to hide them when she was among humans.
* PrecisionFStrike: When the boy falls asleep, the demon girl, bitter at her misfortune and inability to sleep or find peace, begins spouting almost incoherent profanities at him even though he can't hear her.
* RapeAsDrama: When the demon girl was still able to wander the world freely, she was close to another girl and often took her to watch the stars. The girl ended up getting raped and beaten in the hands of angry men, who soon met a very bloody end at the hands of the demon girl. Along with the rest of their town.
* SupernaturalGoldEyes: The demon girl has golden eyes as a sign of her nature as a fiend, which really stand out in contrast to the boy's comparatively plain ones.
* TakeAThirdOption: Life must be given in order for the girl to escape from her prison. The boy has to either exchange places with her or leave her to her fate. He chooses to instead plant a tree within the circle, thereby substituting the life of the tree for hers. It works.
