The Most Horrifying Moments from Your Work

Post 39.

Ooooh, the mastermind of The Fear Mythos! I think that he has the most advantages here, because he, ya know, actually more or less, albeit unofficially, published his work.

edited 17th May '11 4:40:47 AM by dRoy

XD ...but i'm the mastermind of The Fear Mythos...

edited 17th May '11 4:43:17 AM by cutewithoutthe

Oh. OH! Please, pardon my Critical Research Failure DX

It's alright. It's mostly a team effort anyway~

I love my team.

Alliterator, Lizard Bite, Jordo, Allan, Visitor, Parakus, Timelessness,

you guys are awesome.

You should check the gushes thread more~ ;D

edited 17th May '11 4:48:02 AM by cutewithoutthe

The scene during which my amnesiac main character gets his memories back. He's shown a photo of a child, dressed in military garb and surrounded by many other soldiers. The boy's expression is dull, lifeless. Then he sees something. The boy's hair color is the same as his. His eyes are the same color. There's a large bandage on the left side of his face, right where the protagonist has a thin scar.

This triggers full freakout mode and everything goes black. An images pops up in front of him, like a television is being turned on. It features that same boy, killing a small company of soldiers with his mind. Then another scene appears. The boy sits at a table with a large cake in front of him, shaking. Someone pats him on the back and tells him not to be afraid, that he's being rewarded for doing a good job. He refuses to eat the cake. This plays out over and over again as more screens blink into existence. In each consecutive screen, the killing gets more brutal and the celebration grows ever more elaborate. Eventually the boy starts eating the cake as more and more people die.

A thousand screens like this blink into existence, all saying the same thing. "You've done well." Finally, all the screens start to play one giant image. It's the little boy, sitting in front of the cake, surrounded by balloons and the men from his squad. They're cheering for him, urging him to eat. The boy, for the first time, cracks a thin smile. The protagonist screams.

edited 17th May '11 3:52:41 PM by KSPAM

My Villain Protagonist looking down at the chicken he's cutting up for his lunch tomorrow, closing his eyes and then opening them to find the chicken was really his friend and she's still alive and talking to him. It turns out to be a nightmare, induced by a black morality villain, and the nightmare theme was fore shadowed in the last chapter but still horrific for my poor MC.

Worst part is The nightmares aren't controlled, they just bring the victims greatest fears to the surface of the mind in the form of an illusion.

This is actually a theme with illusion users in my world. The first illusion he was put it was meant to reveal is deepest desires...so He was impaled and left to bleed out...then he pulled 180 and had a De Terminator moment because he realized he was just running from his past instead of trying to make things right.

Running away seems to be a central theme in hindsight.

edited 17th May '11 4:44:30 PM by Vyctorian

Lol, it somehow reminds me of an episode of Malcolm In The Middle when Reese had this nightmare about being tried in an animal court.

Additionally to "You have done well" the screens should have said "Achievement Unlocked: Best birthday party ever!"

edited 17th May '11 6:00:10 PM by AdeptusAlpharius

I have lots, but there are a few scenes that take the cake. Not sure if I can say, though, due to massive spoilers, but one qualifies as what may be the most uncomfortable My Name Is Inigo Montoya moment ever.

The main character's death (which concludes the story) involves being Mind Rape'd into a Happy Place/Black Bug Room where their daily routine has been reduced to purely mechanical levels. They live through several days in this environment, and it gets even simpler and even more obviously fake every day they go through it (as the Starfish Alien dissolves their mind), but they never object because of the aforementioned Mind Rape.

In very first few chapters, a deranged serial murdering assasin hunts down the main female character and she, being in the downtown, hides within the crowd then to a backalley. The killer very loudly announces that if she doesn't show up, he will starts to randomly massacre people around him, which people just treats as some loony's rambling. She doesn't buy it so she stays hidden. After counting to ten seconds,

He proceeds to do just so, starting with slitting a girl's throat. Mayhem ensues as he literally starts to grab anyone close enough to him and stabs or slashes the living hell out of him/her. The police shows up, but even with a multiple bullets in his body and half dozen officers dead, he just keeps slaughtering, all the while humming Ode to Joy.

cute and d'Roy, you guys just made my night. ;w; I haven't even gotten to the truly HONF parts of Jordan Eats yet. Though I'm not sure how I (even unofficially) published my work. o_o

Remaining on-topic, I think two other stories in Me and My Family of Friends deserve mentions. "The Stalker" deals with the protagonist in some strange building, unsure of how she got there. There's a TV displaying a faint image past all the static, paintings on the wall that weren't there before, a faint noise past all the static that turns out to be approaching footsteps, and then we have the stalker, himself!

"Sunshine Valley" was my first conscious attempt at experimenting with the Uncanny Valley, and I'd say I did rather well. A badass hero on her way to save the world yet again, riding her epic mute unicorn down into the Sunshine Valley to kill the Lamia. But it's awfully foggy. And she's sure she hears.. an echo? Another unicorn rider? Somewhere just off in the distance. Then she meets the elf. Cute little guy. Like one of Santa's elves. Grinning from ear to ear. His mouth never moves, not even when he speaks. He says he'll lead her to his village, the village under attack from the Lamia. On the way, they pass by three statues of some.. mermaid.. thing. First statue is watching, curious. Second is calculating. Third looks like it has an idea. Finally, they reach the village. Our protagonist notices the town is oddly quiet. She can feel people watching her, hear them running out of view. She spies another mermaid-ish statue, smirking. Then she finds the leader of the village, who tells her the Lamia has been hard to kill ever since it absorbed that Weeping Angel. The statue behind her is now grinning from ear to ear.

I need to get back to work on those creepypasta.

edited 17th May '11 10:58:45 PM by DJay32

Too many shades of A Clockwork Orange, even if it's an homage.

Uhm, the song you are thinking about is Singing in the rain and Ode is used in too different of a context to be considered homage.

Whatsisface from Clockwork Orange sang all kinds of classical music. Though it does seem like every time someone playfully murders people while classical music plays somewhere, someone's always gonna say it's too Clockwork Orange-y.

Alex specifically likes (and later has an aversion to) Beethoven's Ninth Symphony, the last part of which is the Ode to Joy, used several times in the movie.

I know. But come on, EVERYONE knows that one, what with it being part of Small Reference Pools and all. Actually, I think Singing in the Rain would fit even more.

So true. The worst thing is that most of those people haven't even fucking watched the movie and still makes that kind of statements. It's kind of like Beam Me Up, Scotty! applied to character traits. I'm prepared for it anyways.

edited 18th May '11 1:06:02 AM by dRoy

Humming Ode to Joy while slaughtering innocents? Dammit! I knew that you can't trust these Eurocrats. >:(

Sorry, I didn't get your reference.

It's the anthem of the EU.

edited 18th May '11 5:12:42 AM by AdeptusAlpharius

Ah. Heehee. :D

Come to think of it you could use this for a dark political satire to troll a Eurosceptic audience (bonus points if they are British or from the far right). This mass murderer could be used to represent the European boogeyman. "Join the EU(SSR) and do as Bruxelles says or have your children slaughtered. We are the EU. Resistance is futile. Prepare to be assimilated."

edited 18th May '11 5:22:19 AM by AdeptusAlpharius

I don't know about you, but that's just something too compicate for my simple mind XD. He's just a hired killer who gets beaten early on but returns to join the heroes because, in his own words, why the hell not? He's actually one of the very few completely (physiologically, that is) normal characters that can fight against 'ridiculously superpowered beings that are so prevalent in my work.

Of course, he has no interest in forgiveness and atonement, but just in BLOODBLOODBLOOD! Apparently, some of my reviewers found him pretty sexy, for some reason. Maybe it's because I invoked Unkempt Beauty with him, because I demand everyone in my story be attractive, dammit! DX

edited 18th May '11 5:43:06 AM by dRoy

You know what this thread needs? Someone to go through each and every moment posted so far, and decide if these things are scary or not.

So you have a guy who is like '''MAIM! KILL! BURN! BLOOD FOR THE BLOOD GOD!!!''' and murders innocents just for the heck of it and he is the sanest person? And I thought things were bad in my setting where a Blood Knight berserker is by far the nicest person.

It's a matter of subjectivity. What's scary for others is Narmful to minors.

edited 18th May '11 6:53:57 AM by AdeptusAlpharius