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* AssPull: [[spoiler:The mayor appears all of twice before being revealed as the ManBehindTheMan.]]
* BrokenBase: ''Many'' readers were angered when [[spoiler:Sin declared that she was responsible for Kaiser Ryo's FaceHeelTurn]], which amounted to Occam Razor shoving his created villain into the only non-outside-influenced heel turn in the series.
** Trish ''smiling'' as her brother was absorbed by the Seal of Orichalcos led to another case, as while some fans viewed Patrick as irredeemable, others declared Trish a DesignatedHero. Occam Razor himself decided he'd gone too far (see AuthorsSavingThrow).
* BrokenBase: ''Many'' readers were angered when [[spoiler:Sin declared that she was responsible for Kaiser Ryo's FaceHeelTurn]], which amounted to Occam Razor shoving his created villain into the only non-outside-influenced heel turn in the series.
** Trish ''smiling'' as her brother was absorbed by the Seal of Orichalcos led to another case, as while some fans viewed Patrick as irredeemable, others declared Trish a DesignatedHero. Occam Razor himself decided he'd gone too far (see AuthorsSavingThrow).
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* AssPull: [[spoiler:The The mayor appears all of twice before being revealed as the ManBehindTheMan.]]
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** ''Many'' readers were angered when [[spoiler:Sin declared that she was responsible for Kaiser Ryo's FaceHeelTurn]], which amounted to Occam Razor shoving his created villain into the only non-outside-influenced heel turn in the series.
** Trish ''smiling'' as her brother was absorbed by the Seal of Orichalcos led to another case, as while some fans viewed Patrick as irredeemable, others declared Trish a DesignatedHero. Occam Razor himself decided he'd gone toofar (see AuthorsSavingThrow).far.
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** ''Many'' readers were angered when [[spoiler:Sin declared that she was responsible for Kaiser Ryo's FaceHeelTurn]], which amounted to Occam Razor shoving his created villain into the only non-outside-influenced heel turn in the series.
** Trish ''smiling'' as her brother was absorbed by the Seal of Orichalcos led to another case, as while some fans viewed Patrick as irredeemable, others declared Trish a DesignatedHero. Occam Razor himself decided he'd gone too
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* AuthorsSavingThrow: After Trish's final duel with her brother, she smiles and gloats as the Seal of Orichalcos takes him. A large fan outcry ensued as numerous readers argued this was ''far'' from heroic. A couple of chapters later, Critias lambasts Trish for taking pride in doing something like that to her own family and warns her that doing anything like that again will cost her his support - a scene ''not'' in the original outline, according to Occam Razor, but added only after he'd realized he was turning his heroine into a sociopath.
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* SalvagedStory: After Trish's final duel with her brother, she smiles and gloats as the Seal of Orichalcos takes him. A large fan outcry ensued as numerous readers argued this was ''far'' from heroic. A couple of chapters later, Critias lambasts Trish for taking pride in doing something like that to her own family and warns her that doing anything like that again will cost her his support - a scene ''not'' in the original outline, according to Occam Razor, but added only after he'd realized he was turning his heroine into a sociopath.
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* AccidentalInnuendo: "And believe me, she's no virgin!" This line (said by Jason about a Beast-deck-using villain) led more than one reader to reply in the comments, "How exactly do ''you'' know?"
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** Trish ''smiling'' as her brother was absorbed by the Seal of Orichalcos led to another case, as while some fans viewed Patrick as irredeemable, others declared Trish a DesignatedHero. Occam Razor himself decided he'd gone too far (see AuthorsSavingThrow).
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** Trish ''smiling'' as her brother was absorbed by the Seal of Orichalcos led to another case, as while some fans viewed Patrick as irredeemable, others declared Trish a DesignatedHero. Occam Razor himself decided he'd gone too far (see AuthorsSavingThrow).AuthorsSavingThrow).
* UnexpectedCharacter: While many of the Cameo characters might have come as little surprise, the Puppeteer of Death (who was actually an important villain in the fic) might have been much more unexpected. This obscure Yu-Gi-Oh character only appeared in the manga (he was replaced by Ghost Kaiba in the anime) and even to fans of the manga, wasn't the most memorable villain.
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* UnexpectedCharacter: While many of the Cameo characters might have come as little surprise, the Puppeteer of Death (who was actually an important villain in the fic) might have been much more unexpected. This obscure Yu-Gi-Oh character only appeared in the manga (he was replaced by Ghost Kaiba in the anime) and even to fans of the manga, wasn't the most memorable villain.
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The author Cyber Commander has changed his FFN username to Occam Razor, so using Cyber Commander as the author's name is no longer accurate
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* AuthorsSavingThrow: After Trish's final duel with her brother, she smiles and gloats as the Seal of Orichalcos takes him. A large fan outcry ensued as numerous readers argued this was ''far'' from heroic. A couple of chapters later, Critias lambasts Trish for taking pride in doing something like that to her own family and warns her that doing anything like that again will cost her his support - a scene ''not'' in the original outline, according to Cyber Commander, but added only after he'd realized he was turning his heroine into a sociopath.
* BrokenBase: ''Many'' readers were angered when [[spoiler:Sin declared that she was responsible for Kaiser Ryo's FaceHeelTurn]], which amounted to Cyber Commander shoving his created villain into the only non-outside-influenced heel turn in the series.
** Trish ''smiling'' as her brother was absorbed by the Seal of Orichalcos led to another case, as while some fans viewed Patrick as irredeemable, others declared Trish a DesignatedHero. Cyber Commander himself decided he'd gone too far (see AuthorsSavingThrow).
* BrokenBase: ''Many'' readers were angered when [[spoiler:Sin declared that she was responsible for Kaiser Ryo's FaceHeelTurn]], which amounted to Cyber Commander shoving his created villain into the only non-outside-influenced heel turn in the series.
** Trish ''smiling'' as her brother was absorbed by the Seal of Orichalcos led to another case, as while some fans viewed Patrick as irredeemable, others declared Trish a DesignatedHero. Cyber Commander himself decided he'd gone too far (see AuthorsSavingThrow).
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* AuthorsSavingThrow: After Trish's final duel with her brother, she smiles and gloats as the Seal of Orichalcos takes him. A large fan outcry ensued as numerous readers argued this was ''far'' from heroic. A couple of chapters later, Critias lambasts Trish for taking pride in doing something like that to her own family and warns her that doing anything like that again will cost her his support - a scene ''not'' in the original outline, according to Cyber Commander, Occam Razor, but added only after he'd realized he was turning his heroine into a sociopath.
* BrokenBase: ''Many'' readers were angered when [[spoiler:Sin declared that she was responsible for Kaiser Ryo's FaceHeelTurn]], which amounted toCyber Commander Occam Razor shoving his created villain into the only non-outside-influenced heel turn in the series.
** Trish ''smiling'' as her brother was absorbed by the Seal of Orichalcos led to another case, as while some fans viewed Patrick as irredeemable, others declared Trish a DesignatedHero.Cyber Commander Occam Razor himself decided he'd gone too far (see AuthorsSavingThrow).
* BrokenBase: ''Many'' readers were angered when [[spoiler:Sin declared that she was responsible for Kaiser Ryo's FaceHeelTurn]], which amounted to
** Trish ''smiling'' as her brother was absorbed by the Seal of Orichalcos led to another case, as while some fans viewed Patrick as irredeemable, others declared Trish a DesignatedHero.
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* AssPull: [[spoiler:The mayor appears all of twice before being revealed as the ManBehindTheMan]].
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* AssPull: [[spoiler:The mayor appears all of twice before being revealed as the ManBehindTheMan]].ManBehindTheMan.]]
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* BrokenBase: ''Many'' readers were angered when [[spoiler:Sin declared that she was responsible for Kaiser Ryo's FaceHeelTurn]], which amounted to Brian Corvello shoving his created villain into the only non-outside-influenced heel turn in the series.
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* AuthorsSavingThrow: After Trish's final duel with her brother, she smiles and gloats as the Seal of Orichalcos takes him. A large fan outcry ensued as numerous readers argued this was ''far'' from heroic. A couple of chapters later, Critias lambasts Trish for taking pride in doing something like that to her own family and warns her that doing anything like that again will cost her his support - a scene ''not'' in the original outline, according to Cyber Commander, but added only after he'd realized he was turning his heroine into a sociopath.
* BrokenBase: ''Many'' readers were angered when [[spoiler:Sin declared that she was responsible for Kaiser Ryo's FaceHeelTurn]], which amounted toBrian Corvello Cyber Commander shoving his created villain into the only non-outside-influenced heel turn in the series.series.
** Trish ''smiling'' as her brother was absorbed by the Seal of Orichalcos led to another case, as while some fans viewed Patrick as irredeemable, others declared Trish a DesignatedHero. Cyber Commander himself decided he'd gone too far (see AuthorsSavingThrow).
* BrokenBase: ''Many'' readers were angered when [[spoiler:Sin declared that she was responsible for Kaiser Ryo's FaceHeelTurn]], which amounted to
** Trish ''smiling'' as her brother was absorbed by the Seal of Orichalcos led to another case, as while some fans viewed Patrick as irredeemable, others declared Trish a DesignatedHero. Cyber Commander himself decided he'd gone too far (see AuthorsSavingThrow).
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* AssPull: [[spoiler:The mayor appears all of twice before being revealed as the ManBehindTheMan]].
*BrokenBase: ''Many'' readers were angered when [[spoiler:Sin declared that she was responsible for Kaiser Ryo's FaceHeelTurn]], which amounted to Brian Corvello shoving his created villain into the only non-outside-influenced heel turn in the series.
*BrokenBase: ''Many'' readers were angered when [[spoiler:Sin declared that she was responsible for Kaiser Ryo's FaceHeelTurn]], which amounted to Brian Corvello shoving his created villain into the only non-outside-influenced heel turn in the series.
