Trope Description Improvement Drive:

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[up]I find it rather distracting as well. I don't understand why it was written that way in the first place - the trope isn't even about court cases.

Naked People Are Funny is an Infodump of massive proportions. If you have to scroll down to read the whole description, it's too long.
652 Ultimatum2nd Apr 2013 08:07:25 AM from The Amiga forest , Relationship Status: Owner of a lonely heart
653 Nohbody3rd Apr 2013 06:53:05 AM from Somewhere in Dixie , Relationship Status: Mu
Just zis guy
Arranged Marriage looks like it could use a trim, or at least shuffling some of the text off to Analysis.Arranged Marriage where detailed discussions of how the trope works would probably work better. Not sure about what to trim off, though, hence posting about it here.
654 SeptimusHeap4th Apr 2013 04:59:31 AM from Zurich, Switzerland , Relationship Status: Mu
A Wizard boy
Focus Group Ending does not seem to have an actual description at all.
Re Arranged Marriage: I started by putting all the bullet points and all the paragraphs about the ways various cultures do marriage and why arranged marriages happen in Real Life on the Analysis tab.

Does anyone see any additional changes that need to be made?

edited 5th Apr '13 4:29:24 AM by Catbert

656 Nohbody5th Apr 2013 04:30:50 AM from Somewhere in Dixie , Relationship Status: Mu
Just zis guy
Cat, looks good, but when removing that much text an edit reason pointing to where it's being put would be nice. Just FYI. smile

Something like "Moved to Analysis.Arranged Marriage" is fine, doesn't need to be complex or long-winded.

edited 5th Apr '13 4:31:45 AM by Nohbody

Dragon Writer
I don't like Trailers Always Spoil. The description makes you think it happens all the time, that's misleading.
[up] Well the name says the same thing.
Don't make me destroy you. @ Castle Series
659 Nohbody7th Apr 2013 12:21:38 PM from Somewhere in Dixie , Relationship Status: Mu
Just zis guy
Tropes with absolutes in the name (always, never, etc) have been a low-level issue on the wiki for as far as I can remember (which isn't, admittedly, all that far at times tongue ). It some times seems like they're magnets for nattery Not a Subversion Justifying Edits.
World's Smallest Violin: Description is 2/3s Example as a Thesis, and gets very deep into that. Last paragraph is where is starts talking about the trope.

PS. Is there a thread just for dealing with Example as a Thesis?

edited 8th Apr '13 2:31:29 AM by spacemarine50

661 SeptimusHeap8th Apr 2013 03:21:09 AM from Zurich, Switzerland , Relationship Status: Mu
A Wizard boy
No such thread at the moment, now.

I have no idea what World's Smallest Violin is about. That needs serious fixing.
Send it to TRS? If so, any other reasons beyond the Example as a Thesis problem?

edited 8th Apr '13 3:25:48 PM by spacemarine50

663 SeptimusHeap8th Apr 2013 03:37:16 PM from Zurich, Switzerland , Relationship Status: Mu
A Wizard boy
No reason to put it into TRS. It just needs the EAAT removed.
That leaves the last 2 paragraphs. And you were not sure what it means.
665 SeptimusHeap8th Apr 2013 11:27:09 PM from Zurich, Switzerland , Relationship Status: Mu
A Wizard boy
Mainly because of the meandering EAAT.
Cut the whole EAAT part edit what's left?
@ 647 - I have no problem with changing Straw Feminist from 'whose "feminism"' to 'whose take on "feminist ideology".' That sounds more clear.

I'd like to bring up Declaration of Protection. It has a narrow and confusing split between eight different variations. I don't see any reason to have the split at all.
@660: Example as a Thesis has been zapped. Any other edits to the description to make it better?
669 Ultimatum15th Apr 2013 11:32:06 AM from The Amiga forest , Relationship Status: Owner of a lonely heart
[up]I moved most of it to the Analysis page.
I agree about Feminine Women Can Cook. A lot of it looks like useful notes.

Edit: It does look better now.

edited 15th Apr '13 4:10:21 PM by lexicon

Seeking for Light
It's recently come to my attention that the description for Sixth Ranger is confusing people about what the trope actually is. (It's when a new member joins an established team, not about any given personality type.)

In order to clear up this confusion, I think the description would have to be totally re-written. Can that be done with feedback from this thread, or do I need a TRS for something like that? (The definition of the trope wouldn't be changed, although the change would contradict what's an apparently commonly held misconception of what the trope is.)
673 XFllo17th Apr 2013 01:59:44 AM from Prague , Relationship Status: Crazy Cat Lady
[up] I don't know the rules for that, that's probably something the mods would know or should decide. Personally I feel TRS discussions are taking a reaally long time. (Was it always this way? I've been a troper since summer and active in the forums let's say from winter so I wouldn't know.)

If you know what to do with it and if you're sure it's for the good of the trope, you should do it — at least I think. And I know you're maintaining the Five-Man Band, so you surely seem qualified. :-)
674 SeptimusHeap17th Apr 2013 02:04:40 AM from Zurich, Switzerland , Relationship Status: Mu
A Wizard boy
TRS discussions always take long, and I've been here since Nov 2011.
So what to do with Holy Child? It sounds like a Living MacGuffin only more specific.

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