Can we trim the description?: Hollywood Hype Machine

The description seems unnecessarily long for something that should be a fairly straight forward concept.

I can trim this down by a couple paragraphs. Hold on.

EDIT: That's a little better. Don't know how much more I could trim without sacrificing large chunks of text. I think the description's quite good as is.

edited 17th Jul '11 8:17:10 PM by crazyrabbits

Well, it's better but it still looks pretty long. Personally almost everything after the second paragraph looks unnecessary.

I trimmed the description a bit more and I would not mind getting some feedback about whether or not my changes seemed to improve things.

edited 20th Jul '11 4:33:59 PM by LouieW

Wow, I was ready to be defensive of the description (I started the page, and I have a tendency to be long-winded), but it seems to have gathered steam over time and gotten even larger. The whole thing about actors leaving or getting on drugs could be trimmed as well. I'll take another crack at it.

I'm think about cutting the just about everything about after the second paragraph. It all seems so insubstantial.

edited 28th Sep '11 6:08:09 AM by captainpat

Alright, I did it. I moved the paragraphs to the analysis page. Thoughts?

Looks good. If there's no objections I think this can be locked.