I shit you not. That is the title of the synopsis of the first three books.
Okay, don't want to spend too much time on this since the actual story is more important, but I'll go over the issues in this thing.
First of all, there are a metric fuckton of awkward wordings here, but I'll just give you my favorites.
Wow, the gems simile was totally... useless and awkwardly inserted.
The dragons were all alone in Alagaesia being badass for "ages uncounted" until
Wait, Paolini is acknowledging Helzvog's existence forreals now? Also, I think we all know that dwarves are stout and sturdy by default.
My God is that wording awkward and stupid.
Blah blah elves sail and they were stronger than the dwarves and the elves and the dragons nearly destroyed each other truce Dragon Riders created for thousands of years zzzzzz
It details Galbatorix's betrayal and—
HOLY SHIT. HE'S ACTUALLY COUNTING YEARS NOW.
Galby's reign: two-and-eighty 82 years
Saphira's egg stolen: Year 83
Years spent when Arya carried egg between elves and Varden: 25
I'll check its consistency later if I remember.
Second general complaint!
Then Eragon and Saphira fought the Rider and his red dragon. And they discovered the Rider was Murtagh, now bound to Galbatorix with oaths unbreakable. And the dragon was Thorn, second of the three eggs to hatch.
Paolini tried to make it feel epic by going all "Then" and "And" all the time and making the sentences really short, but it just came out really awkward. It sounds like my hyper Adult Child narrator if he lived in Medieval Stasis. That's not good.
Yeah, I'm pretty sure that anyone reading a liveblog of the fourth book will have a general idea of what happened in the other three, so I won't bother going through the rest of this. I covered all the major problems already. Namely, the style of this thing.
And you know, that's actually pretty important, even though this is a synopsis. It's the first thing that someone will see when they pick this up (before you say that no one reads the synopsis, I'd be surprised if no one wanted a recap of a three-doorstopper long series).
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Brisingr specifically said that Eragon's mother died while Brom was away chasing down Saphira's egg. If Arya has been carrying the egg around for 25 years, then Eragon's mother died at least that long ago.
Now remember that Eragon is supposed to be 15.
