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** The Ropen in the Everfree Forest. Most works depict the Ropen as a [[RuleOfCool glowing pterodactyl]]. Not this one. In this one it's a gigantic, blind bat that glows a bright white light to lure prey in like an anglerfish. Worse still, since it can't see, Fluttershy can't use the stare on it.
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** The Ropen in the Everfree Forest. Most works depict the Ropen as a [[RuleOfCool glowing pterodactyl]]. Not this one. In this one it's a gigantic, blind bat that glows a bright white light to lure prey in like an anglerfish. Worse still, since it can't see, Fluttershy can't use the stare on it.
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** ''All'' of Checker's {{Villain Song}}s
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** Checker Monarch herself is a massive source of FridgeHorror. To the uninformed, she may seem like a stereotypical CartoonishSuperVillain, committing acts of cruelty simply ForTheEvulz. But then you do a little research and realise that since she's based on real-life sociopaths,''there are really people like her out there''.
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* MagnificentBitch: Checker Monarch hovers somewhere between this and SmugSnake. Despite her narcissism, she is ''still'' a DangerouslyGenreSavvy and effective [[TheChessmaster Chessmaster]] and despite being a normal unicorn, she is arguably an even bigger threat to the cast than even Discord was.
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* MagnificentBitch: Checker Monarch hovers somewhere between this and SmugSnake. Despite her narcissism, she is ''still'' a DangerouslyGenreSavvy and effective [[TheChessmaster Chessmaster]] and despite being a normal unicorn, she is arguably an even a bigger threat to the cast than even Discord ''[[RealityWarper Discord]]'' was.
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* FridgeHorror: As pointed in the ''AudioPlay/KPNYRadio'' episode about the fic, Checker uses a bees nest to attack Trixie at Cheerilee's school, meaning she ''knowingly'' allowed a class [[WouldHurtAChild full of foals]] to be stung by a swarm of bees, not caring if any were allergic or not.
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Reality warpers like any sort of overt magic users can not qualify as a Badass Normal.
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* MagnificentBitch: Checker Monarch hovers somewhere between this and SmugSnake. Despite her narcissism, she is ''still'' a DangerouslyGenreSavvy and effective [[TheChessmaster Chessmaster]] and despite being a normal unicorn, [[BadassNormal she is arguably an even bigger threat to the cast than even Discord was.]]
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* MagnificentBitch: Checker Monarch. Hovers somewhere between this and SmugSnake.
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* MagnificentBitch: Checker Monarch. Hovers Monarch hovers somewhere between this and SmugSnake.SmugSnake. Despite her narcissism, she is ''still'' a DangerouslyGenreSavvy and effective [[TheChessmaster Chessmaster]] and despite being a normal unicorn, [[BadassNormal she is arguably an even bigger threat to the cast than even Discord was.]]
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Word Of God says the lightning was intended to KILL Rainbow Dash
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** She actually gets ''worse'' after her VillainousBreakdown. First she tries to seriously hurt Rainbow Dash with lightning just because she didn't do as predicted in Checker's earlier plan, and then she carries out the second MoralEventHorizon listed below.
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** She actually gets ''worse'' after her VillainousBreakdown. First she tries to seriously hurt outright ''murder'' Rainbow Dash with lightning just because she didn't do as predicted in Checker's earlier plan, and then she carries out the second MoralEventHorizon listed below.
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* MagnificentBitch: Checker Monarch. And [[PrecisionFStrike fucking how]].
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* MagnificentBitch: Checker Monarch. And [[PrecisionFStrike fucking how]].Hovers somewhere between this and SmugSnake.
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* RescuedFromTheScrappyHeap: Some readers have admitted this story did this for Trixie in their eyes.
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* RescuedFromTheScrappyHeep: Some readers have admitted this story did this for Trixie in their eyes.
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* RescuedFromTheScrappyHeep: Some readers have admitted this story did this for Trixie in their eyes.
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** HilariousInHindsight: In the same chapter, while Rainbow Dash is dismissing the idea of Trixie being nice, she makes a comment about [[Recap/MyLittlePonyFriendshipIsMagicS3E11KeepCalmAndFlutterOn Discord becoming a good guy]].
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* {{Shipping}}: None in the fic itself, but quite a few fans ship Trixie and Helping[=/=]Stage Hoof. Including [[http://holycross9.deviantart.com/art/MLP-Hilltop-Confession-344828697 this piece of]] RecursiveFanfiction.
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* MagnificentBitch: Checker Monarch. And [[PrecisionFStrike fucking how]].
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** [[http://youtu.be/MMsYpm67zY4 "Live Again"]], used as the ending theme with permission by the composers.
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* SelfishEvil: Checker Monarch, referred to as such by WordOfGod. Her worldview essentially boils down to "the strong rule the weak, I can [[ManipulativeBastard play everyone around me like pawns]]. Therefore; I am the strongest and ItsAllAboutMe."
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** Checker [[spoiler:''kills herself'' in a final attempt to destroy Ponyville]].
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* TearJerker: Paraderpy's cover art for [[http://paraderpy.deviantart.com/art/Nightmare-318673567 chapter 9]]. Also counts as NightmareFuel.
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* TearJerker: Paraderpy's cover art for [[http://paraderpy.deviantart.com/art/Nightmare-318673567 chapter 9]]. Also counts as NightmareFuel.NightmareFuel.
* TheWoobie: Trixie's life from the end of the Ursa Minor incident onwards ''suuuuuucks''.
* TheWoobie: Trixie's life from the end of the Ursa Minor incident onwards ''suuuuuucks''.
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** Checker [[spoiler:''kills herself'' in a final attempt to destroy Ponyville]].
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* NightmareFuel: The character of [[CompleteMonster Checker]] [[TheChessmaster Monarch]] is downright ''terrifying''. She's a powerful, cold, calculating and heartless [[TheSociopath sociopath]] who enjoys [[spoiler: [[MindRape Mind Raping]] ponies in their dreams]], and is utterly merciless in her attempts to ruin Trixie's life (made even worse by the fact that [[spoiler: Trixie is her sister]]). Just about everyone Checker runs into is terrified of her, including her own henchmen. Especially horrifying is when [[spoiler: she completely snaps at the end of chapter 9 and she plots revenge against Ponyville and Canterlot, as the red in the heart of her Cutie Mark runs off in the rain - revealing the heart to be black]]. What makes Checker so terrifying is that her behavior is based off of real-life sociopaths, so unlike characters like Discord and Chrysalis, ''there are really people like her out there''.
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* NightmareFuel: The character of [[CompleteMonster Checker]] [[TheChessmaster Monarch]] is downright ''terrifying''. She's a powerful, cold, calculating and heartless [[TheSociopath sociopath]] who enjoys [[spoiler: [[MindRape Mind Raping]] ponies in their dreams]], and is utterly merciless in her attempts to ruin Trixie's life (made even worse by the fact that [[spoiler: Trixie is her sister]]). Just about everyone Checker runs into is terrified of her, including her own henchmen. Especially horrifying is when [[spoiler: she completely snaps at the end of chapter 9 and she plots revenge against Ponyville and Canterlot, as the red in the heart of her Cutie Mark runs off in the rain - revealing the heart to be black]]. What makes Checker so terrifying is that her behavior is based off of real-life sociopaths, so unlike characters like Discord and Chrysalis, ''there are really people like her out there''.there''.
* TearJerker: Paraderpy's cover art for [[http://paraderpy.deviantart.com/art/Nightmare-318673567 chapter 9]]. Also counts as NightmareFuel.
* TearJerker: Paraderpy's cover art for [[http://paraderpy.deviantart.com/art/Nightmare-318673567 chapter 9]]. Also counts as NightmareFuel.
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** She actually gets ''worse'' after her VillainousBreakdown. First she tries to seriously hurt Rainbow Dash with lightning just because she didn't do as predicted in Checker's earlier plan, and then she carries out the second MoralEventHorizon listed below.
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* MoralEventHorizon: For many, Checker crosses it when she [[spoiler: {{Mind Rape}}s Rainbow Dash]]. And if you didn't hate her after that, you'll ''definitely'' hate her after she [[spoiler: forces Trixie to make a SadisticChoice that results in Trixie abandoning her new, happy life and being dumped in the desert]].
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* MoralEventHorizon: For many, Checker crosses it when she [[spoiler: {{Mind Rape}}s Rainbow Dash]]. Dash]].
** And if you didn't hate her after that, you'll ''definitely'' hate her after she [[spoiler: forces Trixie to make a SadisticChoice that results in Trixie abandoning her new, happy life and being dumped in thedesert]].desert -- and then decides to carry out the other part of the SadisticChoice anyway, purely out of spite]].
** And if you didn't hate her after that, you'll ''definitely'' hate her after she [[spoiler: forces Trixie to make a SadisticChoice that results in Trixie abandoning her new, happy life and being dumped in the
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* MoralEventHorizon: For many, Checker crosses it when she [[spoiler: {{Mind Rape}}s Rainbow Dash]].
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* MoralEventHorizon: For many, Checker crosses it when she [[spoiler: {{Mind Rape}}s Rainbow Dash]]. And if you didn't hate her after that, you'll ''definitely'' hate her after she [[spoiler: forces Trixie to make a SadisticChoice that results in Trixie abandoning her new, happy life and being dumped in the desert]].
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* GeniusBonus: [[BatOutOfHell The Ropen]] is an [[http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Ropen actual mythological beast from New Guinea]], but so obscure many readers will likely never have heard of it.
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* GeniusBonus: [[BatOutOfHell The Ropen]] is an [[http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Ropen actual mythological beast cryptid from New Guinea]], but so obscure many readers will likely never have heard of it. The author included it mainly to invoke this trope for fans of Cryptozoology who'd recognize it.
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* GeniusBonus: [[BatOutOfHell The Ropen]] is an [[http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Ropen actual mythological beast from New Guinea]], but so obscure many readers will likely never have heard of it.
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* MoralEventHorizon: For many, Checker crosses it when she [[spoiler: {{Mind Rape}}s Rainbow Dash]].
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* MoralEventHorizon: For many, Checker crosses it when she [[spoiler: {{Mind Rape}}s Rainbow Dash]].Dash]].
* NightmareFuel: The character of [[CompleteMonster Checker]] [[TheChessmaster Monarch]] is downright ''terrifying''. She's a powerful, cold, calculating and heartless [[TheSociopath sociopath]] who enjoys [[spoiler: [[MindRape Mind Raping]] ponies in their dreams]], and is utterly merciless in her attempts to ruin Trixie's life (made even worse by the fact that [[spoiler: Trixie is her sister]]). Just about everyone Checker runs into is terrified of her, including her own henchmen. Especially horrifying is when [[spoiler: she completely snaps at the end of chapter 9 and she plots revenge against Ponyville and Canterlot, as the red in the heart of her Cutie Mark runs off in the rain - revealing the heart to be black]]. What makes Checker so terrifying is that her behavior is based off of real-life sociopaths, so unlike characters like Discord and Chrysalis, ''there are really people like her out there''.
* NightmareFuel: The character of [[CompleteMonster Checker]] [[TheChessmaster Monarch]] is downright ''terrifying''. She's a powerful, cold, calculating and heartless [[TheSociopath sociopath]] who enjoys [[spoiler: [[MindRape Mind Raping]] ponies in their dreams]], and is utterly merciless in her attempts to ruin Trixie's life (made even worse by the fact that [[spoiler: Trixie is her sister]]). Just about everyone Checker runs into is terrified of her, including her own henchmen. Especially horrifying is when [[spoiler: she completely snaps at the end of chapter 9 and she plots revenge against Ponyville and Canterlot, as the red in the heart of her Cutie Mark runs off in the rain - revealing the heart to be black]]. What makes Checker so terrifying is that her behavior is based off of real-life sociopaths, so unlike characters like Discord and Chrysalis, ''there are really people like her out there''.
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Just clarifying her motivations a bit more.
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* CompleteMonster: Checker Monarch has ''no'' redeeming qualities whatsoever, and there's the fact that her entire motivation for ruining Trixie's life is pure [[EvilIsPetty pettiness]].
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* CompleteMonster: Checker Monarch has ''no'' redeeming qualities whatsoever, and there's the fact that her entire motivation for ruining Trixie's life is pure [[EvilIsPetty pettiness]].pettiness]] and [[spoiler:[[GreenEyedMonster jealousy]]]].
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* MoralEvenHorizon: For many, Checker crosses it when she [[spoiler: {{Mind Rape}}s Rainbow Dash]].
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* CompleteMonster: Checker Monarch has ''no'' redeeming qualities whatsoever, and there's the fact that her entire motivation for ruining Trixie's life is pure [[EvilIsPetty pettiness]].
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* HarsherInHindsight: In the "Through New Eyes" chapter, Rainbow Dash experienced a nightmare where she messed up a flight test, crashed, and was mercilessly bullied by her classmates CircleOfShame style. [[Recap/MyLittlePonyFriendshipIsMagicS2E22HurricaneFluttershy Then an episode of the show aired]] showing a disturbingly similar scene happening to Fluttershy in a flashback. Even the ''author'' was freaked out by the simularity!
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* HarsherInHindsight: In the "Through New Eyes" chapter, Rainbow Dash experienced a nightmare where she messed up a flight test, crashed, and was mercilessly bullied by her classmates CircleOfShame style. [[Recap/MyLittlePonyFriendshipIsMagicS2E22HurricaneFluttershy Then an episode of the show aired]] showing a disturbingly similar scene happening to Fluttershy in a flashback. Even the ''author'' was freaked out by the simularity!similarity!
* MoralEvenHorizon: For many, Checker crosses it when she [[spoiler: {{Mind Rape}}s Rainbow Dash]].
* MoralEvenHorizon: For many, Checker crosses it when she [[spoiler: {{Mind Rape}}s Rainbow Dash]].
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Yes, I wrote it, but this was not intentional on my part in any way.
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* CrowningMusicOfAwesome: [[IAmBecomingSong "Through New Eyes"]]Eyes"]]
* HarsherInHindsight: In the "Through New Eyes" chapter, Rainbow Dash experienced a nightmare where she messed up a flight test, crashed, and was mercilessly bullied by her classmates CircleOfShame style. [[Recap/MyLittlePonyFriendshipIsMagicS2E22HurricaneFluttershy Then an episode of the show aired]] showing a disturbingly similar scene happening to Fluttershy in a flashback. Even the ''author'' was freaked out by the simularity!
* HarsherInHindsight: In the "Through New Eyes" chapter, Rainbow Dash experienced a nightmare where she messed up a flight test, crashed, and was mercilessly bullied by her classmates CircleOfShame style. [[Recap/MyLittlePonyFriendshipIsMagicS2E22HurricaneFluttershy Then an episode of the show aired]] showing a disturbingly similar scene happening to Fluttershy in a flashback. Even the ''author'' was freaked out by the simularity!
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Note, I am the author, but I\'m putting this here because I\'ve got a lot of comments praising the song and several readers told me it should go here.
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* CrowningMusicOfAwesome: [[IAmBecomingSong "Through New Eyes"]]
* CrowningMusicOfAwesome: [[IAmBecomingSong "Through New Eyes"]]
