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** Becomes FunnyAneurysmMoment when you find out about her old school....
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** Becomes FunnyAneurysmMoment HarsherInHindsight when you find out about her old school....
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-->'''Nazuna:''' I saw on TV the other day, than women like you spoil men! You're too kind to Onii-chan, he takes advantage of that and he'll turn into a [[{{Neet}} NEET]]!
-->'''Luna:''' Shi... Shinobu-san won't become a NEET!
-->'''Nazuna:''' You can't tell! What will you do if Onii-chan becomes a NEET because of you?!
-->'''Luna:''' If that happens then I'll take responsibility and feed him!!!
-->'''Shinobu:''' ...Just how pathetic do you two think I am?
-->'''Luna:''' Shi... Shinobu-san won't become a NEET!
-->'''Nazuna:''' You can't tell! What will you do if Onii-chan becomes a NEET because of you?!
-->'''Luna:''' If that happens then I'll take responsibility and feed him!!!
-->'''Shinobu:''' ...Just how pathetic do you two think I am?
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-->'''Nazuna:''' I saw on TV the other day, than women like you spoil men! You're too kind to Onii-chan, he takes advantage of that and he'll turn into a [[{{Neet}} NEET]]!
-->'''Luna:'''NEET]]!\\
'''Luna:''' Shi... Shinobu-san won't become aNEET!
-->'''Nazuna:'''NEET!\\
'''Nazuna:''' You can't tell! What will you do if Onii-chan becomes a NEET because ofyou?!
-->'''Luna:'''you?!\\
'''Luna:''' If that happens then I'll take responsibility and feedhim!!!
-->'''Shinobu:''' ...him!!!\\
'''Shinobu:''' ...Just how pathetic do you two think I am?
-->'''Luna:'''
'''Luna:''' Shi... Shinobu-san won't become a
-->'''Nazuna:'''
'''Nazuna:''' You can't tell! What will you do if Onii-chan becomes a NEET because of
-->'''Luna:'''
'''Luna:''' If that happens then I'll take responsibility and feed
-->'''Shinobu:''' ...
'''Shinobu:''' ...Just how pathetic do you two think I am?
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-->'''Random Person (probably Shinobu/Elni)''': Hey Machina, do X (something embarrasing)
-->'''Machina''': *does X*
-->[[BeatPanel *beat*]]
-->'''Machina''': What did you just make me do!?!?
-->'''Machina''': *does X*
-->[[BeatPanel *beat*]]
-->'''Machina''': What did you just make me do!?!?
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-->'''Random Person (probably Shinobu/Elni)''': Hey Machina, do X (something embarrasing)
-->'''Machina''':embarrasing)\\
'''Machina''': *doesX*
-->[[BeatPanel *beat*]]
-->'''Machina''':X*\\
[[BeatPanel *beat*]]\\
'''Machina''': What did you just make me do!?!?
-->'''Machina''':
'''Machina''': *does
-->[[BeatPanel *beat*]]
-->'''Machina''':
[[BeatPanel *beat*]]\\
'''Machina''': What did you just make me do!?!?
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--->'''Machina:''' Nice one, Shinobu! Now SPANK!
--->'''Shinobu:''' Take that! You dirty pig!
--->''*Shinobu spanks Machina's butt*''
--->'''Machina:''' (surprised) Yaaahhh! (delighted) I could get used to- (enraged) NO I CAN'T! STOP MESSING AROUND AND HIT THE MAID!
--->'''Shinobu:''' (with a straight, serious face) I'm sorry, I'm a gentleman. I cannot do something so uncivilised.
--->'''Machina:''' '''HOW DARE YOU SAY THAT RIGHT AFTER SMACKING ME?! IF YOU DON'T HURRY UP AND DO IT, I'LL BE SMACKING YOUR BUTT INSTEAD!!'''
--->'''Shinobu:''' Take that! You dirty pig!
--->''*Shinobu spanks Machina's butt*''
--->'''Machina:''' (surprised) Yaaahhh! (delighted) I could get used to- (enraged) NO I CAN'T! STOP MESSING AROUND AND HIT THE MAID!
--->'''Shinobu:''' (with a straight, serious face) I'm sorry, I'm a gentleman. I cannot do something so uncivilised.
--->'''Machina:''' '''HOW DARE YOU SAY THAT RIGHT AFTER SMACKING ME?! IF YOU DON'T HURRY UP AND DO IT, I'LL BE SMACKING YOUR BUTT INSTEAD!!'''
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--->'''Machina:''' Nice one, Shinobu! Now SPANK!
--->'''Shinobu:'''SPANK!\\
'''Shinobu:''' Take that! You dirtypig!
--->''*Shinobupig!\\
''*Shinobu spanks Machina'sbutt*''
--->'''Machina:'''butt*''\\
'''Machina:''' (surprised) Yaaahhh! (delighted) I could get used to- (enraged) NO I CAN'T! STOP MESSING AROUND AND HIT THEMAID!
--->'''Shinobu:'''MAID!\\
'''Shinobu:''' (with a straight, serious face) I'm sorry, I'm a gentleman. I cannot do something souncivilised.
--->'''Machina:'''uncivilised.\\
'''Machina:''' '''HOW DARE YOU SAY THAT RIGHT AFTER SMACKING ME?! IF YOU DON'T HURRY UP AND DO IT, I'LL BE SMACKING YOUR BUTT INSTEAD!!'''
--->'''Shinobu:'''
'''Shinobu:''' Take that! You dirty
--->''*Shinobu
''*Shinobu spanks Machina's
--->'''Machina:'''
'''Machina:''' (surprised) Yaaahhh! (delighted) I could get used to- (enraged) NO I CAN'T! STOP MESSING AROUND AND HIT THE
--->'''Shinobu:'''
'''Shinobu:''' (with a straight, serious face) I'm sorry, I'm a gentleman. I cannot do something so
--->'''Machina:'''
'''Machina:''' '''HOW DARE YOU SAY THAT RIGHT AFTER SMACKING ME?! IF YOU DON'T HURRY UP AND DO IT, I'LL BE SMACKING YOUR BUTT INSTEAD!!'''
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--->'''Tamaki:''' (in a threatening low voice) Who are you?
--->'''Shinobu:''' [[ShoutOut As you can see]], [[Anime/MobileSuitGundam a human.]]
--->'''Tamaki:''' In-Indeed. [[BeatPanel *beat*]] Wait, that wasn’t what I was asking!
--->'''Shinobu:''' [[ShoutOut As you can see]], [[Anime/MobileSuitGundam a human.]]
--->'''Tamaki:''' In-Indeed. [[BeatPanel *beat*]] Wait, that wasn’t what I was asking!
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--->'''Shinobu:'''
'''Shinobu:''' [[ShoutOut As you can see]], [[Anime/MobileSuitGundam a human.
--->'''Tamaki:'''
'''Tamaki:''' In-Indeed. [[BeatPanel *beat*]] Wait, that wasn’t what I was
----
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-->'''Nazuna:''' I saw on TV the other day, than women like you spoil men! You're too kind ot onii-chan, he takes advantage of that and he'll turn into a [[{{Neet}} NEET]]!
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-->'''Nazuna:''' I saw on TV the other day, than women like you spoil men! You're too kind ot onii-chan, to Onii-chan, he takes advantage of that and he'll turn into a [[{{Neet}} NEET]]!
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-->'''Nazuna:''' You can't tell! What will you do if onii-chan becomes a NEET because of you?!
-->'''Luna:''' If that happens then I'll take responsibility and feed him!
-->'''Luna:''' If that happens then I'll take responsibility and feed him!
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-->'''Nazuna:''' You can't tell! What will you do if onii-chan Onii-chan becomes a NEET because of you?!
-->'''Luna:''' If that happens then I'll take responsibility and feedhim!him!!!
-->'''Luna:''' If that happens then I'll take responsibility and feed
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* At the very start of the story, Shinobu wakes up to a naked girl in his bed. The normal MC reaction would be something along the lines of "OMG, boobs". Shinobu: a comical version of MyGodWhatHaveIDone? as the ''first thing that comes his mind'' is that he accidentally kidnapped a young girl while half-asleep.
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* At the very start of the story, Shinobu wakes up to a naked girl in his bed. The normal MC reaction would be something along the lines of "OMG, boobs". Shinobu: a comical version of MyGodWhatHaveIDone? MyGodWhatHaveIDone as the ''first thing that comes his mind'' is that he accidentally kidnapped a young girl while half-asleep.
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-->'''Shinobu:''' Just how pathetic do you two think I am?
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--->''Shinobu spanks Machina's butt''
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--->'''Random Person (probably Shinobu/Elni)''': Hey Machina, do X (something embarrasing)
--->'''Machina''': *does X*
--->[[BeatPanel *beat*]]
--->'''Machina''': What did you just make me do!?!?
--->'''Machina''': *does X*
--->[[BeatPanel *beat*]]
--->'''Machina''': What did you just make me do!?!?
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** Machina is a freaking ''goldmine'' of these delayed tsukkomis. An example from manga chapter 21[[labelnote:''context'']]Kaorun tricked everyone into playing the King game, Elni got the King and ordered #1 (Shinobu) to spank #4 (Kaorun)'s butt and rub it.[[/labelnote]]:
--->'''Machina:''' Nice one, Shinobu! Now SPANK!
--->'''Shinobu:''' Take that! You dirty pig!
--->''Shinobu spanks Machina's butt''
--->'''Machina:''' (surprised) Yaaahhh! (delighted) I could get used to- (enraged) NO I CAN'T! STOP MESSING AROUND AND HIT THE MAID!
--->'''Shinobu:''' (with a straight, serious face) I'm sorry, I'm a gentleman. I cannot do something so uncivilised.
--->'''Machina:''' '''HOW DARE YOU SAY THAT RIGHT AFTER SMACKING ME?! IF YOU DON'T HURRY UP AND DO IT, I'LL BE SMACKING YOUR BUTT INSTEAD!!'''
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* Chapter 9 features an argument between Nazuna and Luna:
-->'''Nazuna:''' I saw on TV the other day, than women like you spoil men! You're too kind ot onii-chan, he takes advantage of that and he'll turn into a [[{{Neet}} NEET]]!
-->'''Luna:''' Shi... Shinobu-san won't become a NEET!
-->'''Nazuna:''' You can't tell! What will you do if onii-chan becomes a NEET because of you?!
-->'''Luna:''' If that happens then I'll take responsibility and feed him!
-->'''Shinobu:''' Just how pathetic do you two think I am?
-->'''Nazuna:''' I saw on TV the other day, than women like you spoil men! You're too kind ot onii-chan, he takes advantage of that and he'll turn into a [[{{Neet}} NEET]]!
-->'''Luna:''' Shi... Shinobu-san won't become a NEET!
-->'''Nazuna:''' You can't tell! What will you do if onii-chan becomes a NEET because of you?!
-->'''Luna:''' If that happens then I'll take responsibility and feed him!
-->'''Shinobu:''' Just how pathetic do you two think I am?
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** Becomes HarsherInHindsight when you find out about her old school....
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** Becomes HarsherInHindsight FunnyAneurysmMoment when you find out about her old school....
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--->'''Machina''': What did you just make me do!?!?
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--->'''Machina''': What did you just make me do!?!?do!?!?
* When Shinobu first meets Tamaki and every single conversation with her:
--->'''Tamaki:''' (in a threatening low voice) Who are you?
--->'''Shinobu:''' [[ShoutOut As you can see]], [[Anime/MobileSuitGundam a human.]]
--->'''Tamaki:''' In-Indeed. [[BeatPanel *beat*]] Wait, that wasn’t what I was asking!
* When Shinobu first meets Tamaki and every single conversation with her:
--->'''Tamaki:''' (in a threatening low voice) Who are you?
--->'''Shinobu:''' [[ShoutOut As you can see]], [[Anime/MobileSuitGundam a human.]]
--->'''Tamaki:''' In-Indeed. [[BeatPanel *beat*]] Wait, that wasn’t what I was asking!
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--->'''Machina''': *does X
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--->'''Machina''': *does XX*
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* Minami [[spoiler: after her confession and rejection]] acts very similiar to a large and very friendly puppy, to the point that Shinobu swears he can see her tail wagging at one point.
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* Minami [[spoiler: after her confession and rejection]] acts very similiar similar to a large and very friendly puppy, to the point that Shinobu swears he can see her tail wagging at one point.
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[[AC:Shinobu]]
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* He has a tendency to play up his {{Delinquent}} image in front of his class, and then fall into depression when they believe him.
** On the other hand, Shinobu will sometimes sarcastically proclaim his greatness, expecting a retort, and instead the girls will promptly affirm it.
* Everything involving him cross-dressing, but most of all the fact that everyone who sees him falls head over heels for his female self. One of the customers at the school maid cafe proposes to him on site, despite knowing he's a boy.
* His "assistance" during the match between Kaoru and Hijiri: He tries to distract Kaoru by complimenting her boobs in the middle of the fight, and both combatants forget what they were doing to yell at him. Kaoru is flustered for probably the first time. Hijiri, on the other hand, is upset that Shinobu wasn't talking about her too.
* His general attitude is somewhere between DeadpanSnarker and TheGadfly.
** On the other hand, Shinobu will sometimes sarcastically proclaim his greatness, expecting a retort, and instead the girls will promptly affirm it.
* Everything involving him cross-dressing, but most of all the fact that everyone who sees him falls head over heels for his female self. One of the customers at the school maid cafe proposes to him on site, despite knowing he's a boy.
* His "assistance" during the match between Kaoru and Hijiri: He tries to distract Kaoru by complimenting her boobs in the middle of the fight, and both combatants forget what they were doing to yell at him. Kaoru is flustered for probably the first time. Hijiri, on the other hand, is upset that Shinobu wasn't talking about her too.
* His general attitude is somewhere between DeadpanSnarker and TheGadfly.
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* He Elni's first meeting with Shinobu has her stealing his hot dog and asking for more.
* Luna's disastrous first attempts at house-keeping
* Shinobu has a tendency to play up his {{Delinquent}} image in front of his class, and then fall into depression when they believe him.
** On the other hand,Shinobu he will sometimes sarcastically proclaim his greatness, expecting a retort, and instead the girls will promptly affirm it.
* Kaouru is effectively the offspring of the {{Troll}} and TheGadfly with neither expression nor restraint.
* When Hijiri tries to exorcise Luna, Shinobu promptly threatens to spread rumors around school that she's a sword-wielding lunatic.
** Becomes HarsherInHindsight when you find out about her old school....
* Minami [[spoiler: after her confession and rejection]] acts very similiar to a large and very friendly puppy, to the point that Shinobu swears he can see her tail wagging at one point.
* Everything involvinghim Shinobu cross-dressing, but most of all the fact that everyone who sees him falls head over heels for his female self. One of the customers at the school maid cafe proposes to him on site, despite knowing he's a boy.
*His Shinobu's "assistance" during the match between Kaoru and Hijiri: He tries to distract Kaoru by complimenting her boobs in the middle of the fight, and both combatants forget what they were doing to yell at him. Kaoru is flustered for probably the first time. Hijiri, on the other hand, is upset that Shinobu wasn't talking about her too.
*His general attitude is somewhere between DeadpanSnarker Machina has a character trait of being tricked and TheGadfly.following along before realizing she was tricked halfway through. For example:
--->'''Random Person (probably Shinobu/Elni)''': Hey Machina, do X (something embarrasing)
--->'''Machina''': *does X
[[BeatPanel *beat*]]
--->'''Machina''': What did you just make me do!?!?
* Luna's disastrous first attempts at house-keeping
* Shinobu has a tendency to play up his {{Delinquent}} image in front of his class, and then fall into depression when they believe him.
** On the other hand,
* Kaouru is effectively the offspring of the {{Troll}} and TheGadfly with neither expression nor restraint.
* When Hijiri tries to exorcise Luna, Shinobu promptly threatens to spread rumors around school that she's a sword-wielding lunatic.
** Becomes HarsherInHindsight when you find out about her old school....
* Minami [[spoiler: after her confession and rejection]] acts very similiar to a large and very friendly puppy, to the point that Shinobu swears he can see her tail wagging at one point.
* Everything involving
*
*
--->'''Random Person (probably Shinobu/Elni)''': Hey Machina, do X (something embarrasing)
--->'''Machina''': *does X
[[BeatPanel *beat*]]
--->'''Machina''': What did you just make me do!?!?
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Oh so very many.
[[AC:Shinobu]]
* At the very start of the story, Shinobu wakes up to a naked girl in his bed. The normal MC reaction would be something along the lines of "OMG, boobs". Shinobu: a comical version of MyGodWhatHaveIDone? as the ''first thing that comes his mind'' is that he accidentally kidnapped a young girl while half-asleep.
* He has a tendency to play up his {{Delinquent}} image in front of his class, and then fall into depression when they believe him.
** On the other hand, Shinobu will sometimes sarcastically proclaim his greatness, expecting a retort, and instead the girls will promptly affirm it.
* Everything involving him cross-dressing, but most of all the fact that everyone who sees him falls head over heels for his female self. One of the customers at the school maid cafe proposes to him on site, despite knowing he's a boy.
* His "assistance" during the match between Kaoru and Hijiri: He tries to distract Kaoru by complimenting her boobs in the middle of the fight, and both combatants forget what they were doing to yell at him. Kaoru is flustered for probably the first time. Hijiri, on the other hand, is upset that Shinobu wasn't talking about her too.
* His general attitude is somewhere between DeadpanSnarker and TheGadfly.
[[AC:Shinobu]]
* At the very start of the story, Shinobu wakes up to a naked girl in his bed. The normal MC reaction would be something along the lines of "OMG, boobs". Shinobu: a comical version of MyGodWhatHaveIDone? as the ''first thing that comes his mind'' is that he accidentally kidnapped a young girl while half-asleep.
* He has a tendency to play up his {{Delinquent}} image in front of his class, and then fall into depression when they believe him.
** On the other hand, Shinobu will sometimes sarcastically proclaim his greatness, expecting a retort, and instead the girls will promptly affirm it.
* Everything involving him cross-dressing, but most of all the fact that everyone who sees him falls head over heels for his female self. One of the customers at the school maid cafe proposes to him on site, despite knowing he's a boy.
* His "assistance" during the match between Kaoru and Hijiri: He tries to distract Kaoru by complimenting her boobs in the middle of the fight, and both combatants forget what they were doing to yell at him. Kaoru is flustered for probably the first time. Hijiri, on the other hand, is upset that Shinobu wasn't talking about her too.
* His general attitude is somewhere between DeadpanSnarker and TheGadfly.
