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A TrollFic (hopefully) in the vein of MyImmortal, set in the Universe of TokyoMewMew. It's told from the perspective of the TheOjou Minto's twin sister, a blatant MarySue, who wears a variety of {{Stripperific}} “gothic” outfits to school, occasionally forgetting that her school has a uniform. She has managed, so far, to make every male who appears fall madly in love with her, even, in recent chapters, [[CharacterDerailment Aoyama]] [[JerkJock Masaya.]] She abuses everyone, and gets away with it because she's [[ScrewTheRulesImBeautiful prettier]] than the legging and polo shirt clad “preps.”
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She has managed, so far, to make every male who appears fall madly in love with her, even, in recent chapters, [[CharacterDerailment Aoyama]] [[JerkJock Masaya.]] She abuses everyone, and gets away with it because she's [[ScrewTheRulesImBeautiful prettier]] than the legging and polo shirt clad “preps.”
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[[caption-width-right:350: I tried to work with goth an emo customers, but there weren't many of them. The cafee was so pinku that goths didn't want to come..]]
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[[caption-width-right:350: I tried to work with goth an emo customers, but there weren't many of them. The cafee was so pinku that goths didn't want to come..Disclaimer: she wears nothing as modest as a frilly maids outfit during the fic .]]
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*PantyShot: showing up in the oddest of places
--> Instead he zapped me with a lazer and knocked me backwards and my underwear showed and stuff!
--> Instead he zapped me with a lazer and knocked me backwards and my underwear showed and stuff!
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**I think its supposed to be a TearJerker
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**In chapter ten, Kisshu screams "[[MyImmortal BECAUSE I LOVE HER]]"
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* XMeetsY: TokyoMewMew meets MyImmortal.
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-->There were lots of guys staring at my boobs which had gotten bigger sort of because I was wearing a relaly sexy dress. Even preppy guys were staring at my big boobs. "Hey there smexy!" Said a prep in an ugly yellow polo shirt. I ran up to him and ripped his head off by the hair and bashed his chest in with my boots which had really high hells. They got bloody so I went to get changed. But, in the girls' bathroom.
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-->There were lots of guys staring at my boobs which had gotten bigger sort of because I was wearing a relaly sexy dress. Even preppy guys were staring at my big boobs. "Hey there smexy!" Said a prep in an ugly yellow polo shirt. I ran up to him and ripped his head off by the hair and bashed his chest in with my boots which had really high hells. They got bloody so I went to get changed. But, in the girls' bathroom.
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* ElegantGothicLolita: subverted with a good case of DidNotDoTheResearch. What makes lolita fashion "Lolita" is that it is young-looking and classy...meaning not worn like this
-->"it was relly low cut and showed my boobs which were triple-d cup and really big. I was wearing a maid headdress because that was wht I wore with my work uniform and sexy fishnet thigh high socks which almost reaced the skirt but didnt quite cause it was really really short and sexy so you can see my garters.".
-->"it was relly low cut and showed my boobs which were triple-d cup and really big. I was wearing a maid headdress because that was wht I wore with my work uniform and sexy fishnet thigh high socks which almost reaced the skirt but didnt quite cause it was really really short and sexy so you can see my garters.".
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* ElegantGothicLolita: subverted with a good case of DidNotDoTheResearch. What makes lolita fashion "Lolita" is that it is young-looking and classy...meaning not worn like this
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--> I was wlaking home from school, in my blakc gothic lolita dress with purple lace and it was relly low cut and showed my boobs which were triple-d cup and reallybig. big. I was wearing a maid headdress because that was wht I wore with my work uniform and sexy fishnet thigh high socks which almost reaced the skirt but didnt quite cause it was really really short and and sexy so you can see my garters.". garters.. I was wearing eight-inch hells with skulls on them and a black lacy thong which showed sometimes because it was windy. The dress had sleeves which were like sleeves on a kimonno, and it had a corset on top with purple and red lace.
-->"I was walking throug school in a sexy new dress form hot toppic. It was gothic lolita like my other one execept this one didn't have straps and it had red lace and whas made of black satan and lots of gays and I had dark dark green lipstick and dark blue eyeshadow and my face was white as the moon. I was wearing thing high striped socks with a garter belt made of leather. I also had fishnet armwarmers and my hair was in two pigtails. I was very happy because it was Friday and soon school would not be there for a couple of days. There were lots of guys staring at my boobs which had gotten bigger sort of because I was wearing a relaly sexy dress. Even preppy guys were staring at my big boobs."
--> "ot out of bed and put on a lacy black tube top and leather tight pants and a sexy collar with spikes on it. My hair was so long that it was almost to my knees now. I put on black eyeliner really thick and loads of red eyeshadow. My lipstick was a deep, dark, blue. "
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--> I was wlaking home from school, in my blakc gothic lolita dress with purple lace and it was relly low cut and showed my boobs which were triple-d cup and really
-->"I was walking throug school in a sexy new dress form hot toppic. It was gothic lolita like my other one execept this one didn't have straps and it had red lace and whas made of black satan and lots of gays and I had dark dark green lipstick and dark blue eyeshadow and my face was white as the moon. I was wearing thing high striped socks with a garter belt made of leather. I also had fishnet armwarmers and my hair was in two pigtails. I was very happy because it was Friday and soon school would not be there for a couple of days. There were lots of guys staring at my boobs which had gotten bigger sort of because I was wearing a relaly sexy dress. Even preppy guys were staring at my big boobs."
--> "ot out of bed and put on a lacy black tube top and leather tight pants and a sexy collar with spikes on it. My hair was so long that it was almost to my knees now. I put on black eyeliner really thick and loads of red eyeshadow. My lipstick was a deep, dark, blue. "
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-->''"Hello. My name is Aizawa Sakura. I live in a big house in Tokyo and I have long hair and green eyes, and I wear fishnet pantyhose and I have an older twin sister named Minto. This is my story."''
-->--The fact that she describes herself based on her pantyhose should say a lot about what your getting yourself into by reading this.
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* ElegantGothicLolita: subverted with a good case of DidNotDoTheResearch. What makes lolita fashion "Lolita" is that it is young-looking and classy...meaning not worn like this "it this
-->"it was relly low cut and showed my boobs which were triple-d cup and really big. I was wearing a maid headdress because that was wht I wore with my work uniform and sexy fishnet thigh high socks which almost reaced the skirt but didnt quite cause it was really really short and sexy so you can see my garters.".
-->"it was relly low cut and showed my boobs which were triple-d cup and really big. I was wearing a maid headdress because that was wht I wore with my work uniform and sexy fishnet thigh high socks which almost reaced the skirt but didnt quite cause it was really really short and sexy so you can see my garters.".
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-->There were lots of guys staring at my boobs which had gotten bigger sort of because I was wearing a relaly sexy dress. Even preppy guys were staring at my big boobs.
"Hey there smexy!" Said a prep in an ugly yellow polo shirt. I ran up to him and ripped his head off by the hair and bashed his chest in with my boots which had really high hells. They got bloody so I went to get changed. But, in the girls' bathroom.
"Hey there smexy!" Said a prep in an ugly yellow polo shirt. I ran up to him and ripped his head off by the hair and bashed his chest in with my boots which had really high hells. They got bloody so I went to get changed. But, in the girls' bathroom.
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-->There were lots of guys staring at my boobs which had gotten bigger sort of because I was wearing a relaly sexy dress. Even preppy guys were staring at my big boobs. \n "Hey there smexy!" Said a prep in an ugly yellow polo shirt. I ran up to him and ripped his head off by the hair and bashed his chest in with my boots which had really high hells. They got bloody so I went to get changed. But, in the girls' bathroom.
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**ripping a boy's head off because he looked at her cleavage. I wish I was lying.
-->There were lots of guys staring at my boobs which had gotten bigger sort of because I was wearing a relaly sexy dress. Even preppy guys were staring at my big boobs.
"Hey there smexy!" Said a prep in an ugly yellow polo shirt. I ran up to him and ripped his head off by the hair and bashed his chest in with my boots which had really high hells. They got bloody so I went to get changed. But, in the girls' bathroom.
-->There were lots of guys staring at my boobs which had gotten bigger sort of because I was wearing a relaly sexy dress. Even preppy guys were staring at my big boobs.
"Hey there smexy!" Said a prep in an ugly yellow polo shirt. I ran up to him and ripped his head off by the hair and bashed his chest in with my boots which had really high hells. They got bloody so I went to get changed. But, in the girls' bathroom.
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[[caption-width-right:350: I tried to work with goth an emo customers, but there weren't many of them. The cafee was so pinku that goths didn't want to come..]]
[[caption-width-right:350: I tried to work with goth an emo customers, but there weren't many of them. The cafee was so pinku that goths didn't want to come..]]
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* AllOfTheOtherReindeer]: Painfully so...
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* AllOfTheOtherReindeer]: Painfully so...AllOfTheOtherReindeer: enforced...
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* [[All of the other reindeer]]: Painfully so...
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* [[All of the other reindeer]]: AllOfTheOtherReindeer]: Painfully so...
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* Alloftheotherreindeer: [[All of the other reindeer]]: Painfully so...
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* ElegantGothicLolita: subverted with a good case of DidNotDoTheResearch. What makes lolita fashion "Lolita" is that it is young-looking and classy...meaning not worn like this "it was relly low cut and showed my boobs which were triple-d cup and really big. I was wearing a maid headdress because that was wht I wore with my work uniform and sexy fishnet thigh high socks which almost reaced the skirt but didnt quite cause it was really really short and sexy so you can see my garters.".
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* Alloftheotherreindeer: Painfully so...
-->"LOOK AT HER RED EYESHADOW EWWWW! AND SHE LIKES GOTH BANDS AND NOT PINK! WHY DOESN'T SHE LIKE JUSTIN BEIBER AND BRITENY SPEARS AND PREP SINGERS!! I HATE HER! SHE'S SO STUPID AND UGLY! WHY DOESN'T SHE JUST DIE BECAUSE GOTHS SHOULD DIE THATS WHAT THEY WANT TO DO AND SHE LIKES AMY LEE!" She said stupidly in a hi-pitched preppy voice."
-->"LOOK AT HER RED EYESHADOW EWWWW! AND SHE LIKES GOTH BANDS AND NOT PINK! WHY DOESN'T SHE LIKE JUSTIN BEIBER AND BRITENY SPEARS AND PREP SINGERS!! I HATE HER! SHE'S SO STUPID AND UGLY! WHY DOESN'T SHE JUST DIE BECAUSE GOTHS SHOULD DIE THATS WHAT THEY WANT TO DO AND SHE LIKES AMY LEE!" She said stupidly in a hi-pitched preppy voice."
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* ZettaiRyouiki: With fishnets and a not so elegant ElegantGothicLolita dress. [[[ThereIsNoKillLikeOverkill Yeah...]] The writing makes it closer to FanDisservice, though.
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* ZettaiRyouiki: With fishnets and a not so elegant ElegantGothicLolita dress. [[[ThereIsNoKillLikeOverkill [[ThereIsNoKillLikeOverkill Yeah...]] The writing makes it closer to FanDisservice, though.
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* ZettaiRyouiki: With fishnets and a not so elegant ElegantGothicLolita dress. [[[TheresNoKillLikeOverkill Yeah...]] The writing makes it closer to FanDisservice, though.
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* ZettaiRyouiki: With fishnets and a not so elegant ElegantGothicLolita dress. [[[TheresNoKillLikeOverkill [[[ThereIsNoKillLikeOverkill Yeah...]] The writing makes it closer to FanDisservice, though.
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* KimonoFanservice: Haruko wears a [[WomanInWhite white kimono]] all the time. It's been described as nearly falling off her shoulders and being extremely short.
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* YouKeepUsingThatWord: Haruko is wizened.wizened.
* ZettaiRyouiki: With fishnets and a not so elegant ElegantGothicLolita dress. [[[TheresNoKillLikeOverkill Yeah...]] The writing makes it closer to FanDisservice, though.
* ZettaiRyouiki: With fishnets and a not so elegant ElegantGothicLolita dress. [[[TheresNoKillLikeOverkill Yeah...]] The writing makes it closer to FanDisservice, though.
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* CostumePorn: [[StripperIffic Borders on real porn.]]
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* WhatDoYouMeanItWasntMadeOnDrugsParentalFavoritism: Sakura and Minto's parents seem to prefer the latter, to a comedic extent.
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* RichBitch: Minto.
* TheLibby: Almost every female character, according to Sakura. Ichigo dumps her friends for no reason, Minto steals boyfriends, Lindsay pulls hair... *etc*
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* TheLibby: Almost every female character, according to Sakura. Ichigo dumps her friends for no reason, Minto steals boyfriends, Lindsay pulls hair... *etc*
* WhatDoYouMeanItWasntMadeOnDrugs
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* MaybeMagicMaybeMundane: Haruko-chan. She has a mysterious past involving demons, she never wears the school uniform (like, EVER. Sakura wore it once.) and she doesn't seem to show much influence on the world around her, but WordOfGod said she wasn't just a figment of our heroine's imagination.
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* PurpleProse: Attempted on several occasions, but failed.failed.
* YouKeepUsingThatWord: Haruko is wizened.
* YouKeepUsingThatWord: Haruko is wizened.
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* MostCommonSuperpower: Sakura claims to have a "medium-sized" chest early on, but it seems to [[BreastExpansion change quite quickly]]...
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* DieForOurShip: Every pairing has been changed to Sakurax<i>INSERT NAME HERE</i>.
* FatBastard: Mr. Davidson. He's only mentioned in passing, but, yes.
* SadistTeacher: Mr. Davidson. Probably more.
* FatBastard: Mr. Davidson. He's only mentioned in passing, but, yes.
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* DieForOurShip: Every pairing has been changed to Sakurax<i>INSERT Sakurax INSERT NAME HERE</i>.
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* FatBastard: Mr. Davidson. He's only mentioned in passing, but, yes.
* SadistTeacher: Mr. Davidson. Probably more.
* FatBastard: Mr. Davidson.
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* ShoutOut: At the end of Chapter 7, many popular "Gothic" songs are referenced. Also, [[ThePrincessBride Inigo]] broke up with Aoyama. That probably wasn't intentional, though.
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* ShoutOut: At the end of Chapter 7, many popular "Gothic" songs are referenced. Also, [[ThePrincessBride Inigo]] broke up with Aoyama. Aoyama. That probably wasn't intentional, though.
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* AccidentalInnuendo: "And then, KISSHU CAME!"
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* DisproportionateRetribution: Violently killing hackers, even if offscreen, people?
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* DisproportionateRetribution: Violently killing hackers, even if offscreen, people?people?
* DieForOurShip: Every pairing has been changed to Sakurax<i>INSERT NAME HERE</i>.
* FatBastard: Mr. Davidson. He's only mentioned in passing, but, yes.
* SadistTeacher: Mr. Davidson. Probably more.
* GratuitousJapanese: Gratuitously.
* ShoutOut: At the end of Chapter 7, many popular "Gothic" songs are referenced. Also, [[ThePrincessBride Inigo]] broke up with Aoyama. That probably wasn't intentional, though.
* PurpleProse: Attempted on several occasions, but failed.
* DieForOurShip: Every pairing has been changed to Sakurax<i>INSERT NAME HERE</i>.
* FatBastard: Mr. Davidson. He's only mentioned in passing, but, yes.
* SadistTeacher: Mr. Davidson. Probably more.
* GratuitousJapanese: Gratuitously.
* ShoutOut: At the end of Chapter 7, many popular "Gothic" songs are referenced. Also, [[ThePrincessBride Inigo]] broke up with Aoyama. That probably wasn't intentional, though.
* PurpleProse: Attempted on several occasions, but failed.
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* BeigeProse: Frequently.
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* CharacterDerailment: EVERYONE, but especially [[ItsPronouncedTropay Mint/Minto.]] She changes from TheOjou into a flat out evil boyfriend-stealing [[TheLibby Libby.]]
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* CharacterDerailment: EVERYONE, but especially [[ItsPronouncedTropay Mint/Minto.]] She changes from TheOjou into a flat out evil boyfriend-stealing [[TheLibby Libby.]]]]
* DisproportionateRetribution: Violently killing hackers, even if offscreen, people?
* DisproportionateRetribution: Violently killing hackers, even if offscreen, people?
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!!Tropes Applying to This Totally Not a TrollFic work:
*AntiHero: Sakura Aizawa, who likes to kill hackers and perverts. Only those so far.
*BerserkButton: Being hit on by guys in yellow polo shirts.
*CharacterDerailment: EVERYONE, but especially [[ItsPronouncedTropay Mint/Minto.]] She changes from TheOjou into a flat out evil boyfriend-stealing [[TheLibby Libby.]]
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A TrollFic (hopefully) in the vein of MyImmortal, set in the Universe of TokyoMewMew.
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A TrollFic (hopefully) in the vein of MyImmortal, set in the Universe of TokyoMewMew. It's told from the perspective of the TheOjou Minto's twin sister, a blatant MarySue, who wears a variety of {{Stripperific}} “gothic” outfits to school, occasionally forgetting that her school has a uniform. She has managed, so far, to make every male who appears fall madly in love with her, even, in recent chapters, [[CharacterDerailment Aoyama]] [[JerkJock Masaya.]] She abuses everyone, and gets away with it because she's [[ScrewTheRulesImBeautiful prettier]] than the legging and polo shirt clad “preps.”
The First Chapter can be found here: http://xxxkawaiibloodygothx.deviantart.com/gallery/#/d2x7e5i
The First Chapter can be found here: http://xxxkawaiibloodygothx.deviantart.com/gallery/#/d2x7e5i
