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* SensibleHeroesSkimpyVillains: Julia and her friends dress in long shorts, pants, or long skirts; Amara by contrast wears "a black tank top, very small, pale blue shorts that did a great job in showing off her legs, and tall brown boots." Averted later on, as later chapters have Amara ditch the shorts and wear long jeans instead.
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* SensibleHeroesSkimpyVillains: Julia and her friends dress in long shorts, pants, or long skirts; Amara by contrast wears "a black tank top, very small, pale blue shorts that did a great job in showing off her legs, and tall brown boots." Averted later on, as later Later chapters have Amara ditch the shorts in favor of jeans, but they are still described as being tighter and wear long jeans instead.more form-fitting than those the other characters wear.
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* SensibleHeroesSkimpyVillains: Julia and her friends dress in long shorts, pants, or long skirts; Amara by contrast wears "a black tank top, very small, pale blue shorts that did a great job in showing off her legs, and tall brown boots."" Averted later on, as later chapters have Amara ditch the shorts and wear long jeans instead.
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* SensibleHeroesSkimpyVillains: Julia and her friends dress in long shorts, pants, or long skirts; Amara by contrast wears "a black tank top, very small, pale blue shorts that did a great job in showing off her legs, and tall brown boots."
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* CheckpointCharlie: In the games, players travel to Kanto from Johto with relative ease, using Surf to cross the water and simply walk in. In the fic, the children have to take a ferry across the water, then are met with a tall black wall with two armed soldiers standing on either side of a metal gate. The children have to show their PokeDexes, IDs, and get a quick background check, then wait for the soldiers to unlock the door and allow them in. It's also mentioned by both Kassia and Perrine that non-Trainers crossing the border must show passports and paperwork, and the background check is to make sure they aren't criminals or planning to smuggle contraband into the region.
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* CheckpointCharlie: In the games, players travel to Kanto from Johto with relative ease, using Surf to cross the water and simply walk in. In the fic, the children have to take a ferry across the water, then are met with a tall black wall with two armed soldiers standing on either side of a metal gate. The children have to show their PokeDexes, IDs, [=IDs=], and get a quick background check, then wait for the soldiers to unlock the door and allow them in. It's also mentioned by both Kassia and Perrine that non-Trainers crossing the border must show passports and paperwork, and the background check is to make sure they aren't criminals or planning to smuggle contraband into the region.
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* OrwellianRetcon: In response to critique from readers, the author rewrote some early chapters, added new scenes, and added new chapters portraying the Parisa parents in a more favorable light[[note]] such as having given ''both'' their daughters secret bank accounts where in the original release, it was only Julia[[/note]] and loving their kids when it matters most.
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* OrwellianRetcon: In response to critique from readers, the author rewrote some early chapters, added new scenes, and added new chapters portraying the Parisa parents in a more favorable light[[note]] such as having given ''both'' their daughters secret bank accounts where in the original release, it was only Julia[[/note]] and loving their kids when it matters most.showing more positive interactions with Amara.
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** Invoked: at least part of Amara's problems stem from her belief that Kassia and Truman care more about Julia than her, which isn't true, as the Parisa parents love both their daughters equally.
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** Invoked: at least part of Amara's problems stem from her belief that Kassia and Truman care more about Julia than her, which isn't true, as the Parisa parents love both their daughters equally.true.
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* SelfInsertFic: Julia is an openly admitted self-insert of the author, bearing the same first name, same appearance (as a child), being autistic and bullied in school, and both having an older sister with whom they have trouble relating to.
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* BeautyIsNeverTarnished: Zigzagged; Julia, Caiseal, and Perrine pick up a moderate amount of dirt from their travels and not always having access to a shower, however they're far better off and cleaner than Amara. Amara accumulates a ''lot'' more dirt and grime through her own travels, to the point where she catches her reflection and notes her hair is clumpy and covered in filth, and she "[looks like she] got tan paint poured all over [her]."
** Amara later notes this about her reflection. Crosses over with BeautyEqualsGoodness, as the main trio remain cute throughout.
--> However, seeing this new face stare back at her...it was almost surreal. Frightening, even. Where had this new person come from? Her blue eyes were still the pale shade of blue they had always been, but Amara began to notice other things had changed as well. Her chin had grown out some, looking more pronounced than it was before. Her fingernails had grown longer and sharper, even though they hadn't been manicured for some time. Her face looked like a stretched out oval, and even her chest began to develop. As a result, her brand new tank top had gotten tighter around the chest. But she didn't mind. She liked tight clothes. One of her eyes was bigger than the other.
--> In short, Amara was in an ugly state of her life, as most teenagers liked to describe it.
** Amara later notes this about her reflection. Crosses over with BeautyEqualsGoodness, as the main trio remain cute throughout.
--> However, seeing this new face stare back at her...it was almost surreal. Frightening, even. Where had this new person come from? Her blue eyes were still the pale shade of blue they had always been, but Amara began to notice other things had changed as well. Her chin had grown out some, looking more pronounced than it was before. Her fingernails had grown longer and sharper, even though they hadn't been manicured for some time. Her face looked like a stretched out oval, and even her chest began to develop. As a result, her brand new tank top had gotten tighter around the chest. But she didn't mind. She liked tight clothes. One of her eyes was bigger than the other.
--> In short, Amara was in an ugly state of her life, as most teenagers liked to describe it.
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* DramaQueen: Although everyone took her seriously at first, they began to think of Amara as this, due to her [[spoiler: still grieving her friend’s death after several years.]]
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* DramaQueen: Although everyone took her seriously at first, they began begin to think of Amara as this, due to her [[spoiler: still grieving her friend’s death after several years.]]]]
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* ExcessiveMourning: Amara was once a NiceGirl until the death of her best friend Chanel during an incident with a rampaging Gyarados. However, she expresses this grief by becoming a BrattyTeenageDaughter with a hatred of all Pokemon, which spirals into her running away from home and going on a Pokemon journey despite being blacklisted as a Trainer. Along the way, she ends up building up an impressive rap sheet, which includes stealing a Totodile from Professor Elm's lab, physically and verbally abusing Pokemon regularly, forcing her Pokemon to directly attack humans, and assaulting Gym Leaders to steal Gym Badges. She only comes to her senses when she discovers that [[spoiler: Pokemon Hunter J was behind said Gyarados rampage the whole time, and thus all of her anger towards her family, friends, and Pokemon was completely unfounded, upon which Amara breaks down in TearsOfRemorse and turns herself in to the police]].
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* ExcessiveMourning: Amara was once a NiceGirl until the death of her best friend Chanel during an incident with a rampaging Gyarados. However, Still in the ‘Anger’ phase, she expresses this grief by becoming a BrattyTeenageDaughter with a hatred of all Pokemon, which spirals into culminates in her running away from home and going on a Pokemon journey despite being blacklisted as a Trainer. Along the way, she ends up building up an impressive rap sheet, which includes stealing a Totodile from Professor Elm's lab, physically and verbally abusing Pokemon regularly, forcing her Pokemon to directly attack humans, and assaulting Gym Leaders to steal Gym Badges. She only comes to her senses stops when she discovers that [[spoiler: Pokemon Hunter J was behind said Gyarados rampage the whole time, and thus all of her anger towards her family, friends, and Pokemon was completely unfounded, upon which unfounded. After J’s defeat, Amara breaks down in TearsOfRemorse and turns herself in to the police]].police.]]
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* FriendlessBackground: Because of her autism and ability to talk to Pokémon, Julia grew up without making any friends because kids would bully her or never liked her. This resulted in her low self-esteem and lack of self-confidence, as she grew up believing what everyone said about her despite her parents' reassurance.
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* FriendlessBackground: Because of her autism and ability to talk to Pokémon, Julia grew up without making any friends because kids would bully her or never liked her.her, or believed she was faking her ability to understand Pokémon for attention. This resulted in her low self-esteem and lack of self-confidence, as she grew up believing what everyone said about her despite her parents' reassurance.
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* HateAtFirstSight: In the fourth bonus chapter, Lakeisha hated Julia from the beginning, all based on everything Kirsten told her about her, and because Julia cheated off her test. She continues to hate her even after Julia apologizes, months after the fact. Thankfully, she grows out of it.
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* HateAtFirstSight: In the fourth bonus chapter, Lakeisha hated Julia from the beginning, all based on everything Kirsten told her about her, and because Julia cheated off her test. test one year prior when they were in the fifth grade. When Lakeisha caught her cheating, Julia pleaded with the teacher that she didn’t know what she was doing was cheating or that it was wrong, which only amplified Lakeisha’s feelings of ire. She continues to hate her even after Julia apologizes, even months after the fact.fact, feeling she only apologized to get out of trouble. Thankfully, she grows out of it.
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* DramaQueen: Although everyone took her seriously at first, they began to think of Amara as this, especially when she was saddened about [[spoiler: her friend's death.]]
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* DramaQueen: Although everyone took her seriously at first, they began to think of Amara as this, especially when she was saddened about due to her [[spoiler: still grieving her friend's death.]]friend’s death after several years.]]
* DrugsAreBad: Drugs are only shown or mentioned to show a dangerous neighborhood or as a sign of how far a character has fallen.
** A younger Perrine realizes she’s accidentally run away into a bad neighborhood when she sees graffiti on a building that reads “Buy crack and meth here” with an arrow pointing towards the basement.
** Amara is seen smoking with older teenagers [[spoiler: while grieving Chanel,]] with her old friend noting the cigarettes have pictures of pot leafs on them.
* DrugsAreBad: Drugs are only shown or mentioned to show a dangerous neighborhood or as a sign of how far a character has fallen.
** A younger Perrine realizes she’s accidentally run away into a bad neighborhood when she sees graffiti on a building that reads “Buy crack and meth here” with an arrow pointing towards the basement.
** Amara is seen smoking with older teenagers [[spoiler: while grieving Chanel,]] with her old friend noting the cigarettes have pictures of pot leafs on them.
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* CheckpointCharlie: In the games, players travel to Kanto from Johto with relative ease, using Surf to cross the water and simply walk in. In the fic, the children have to take a ferry across the water, then are met with a tall black wall with two armed soldiers standing on either side of a metal gate. The children have to show their PokeDexes, IDs, and get a quick background check, then wait for the soldiers to unlock the door and allow them in. It's also mentioned by both Kassia and Perrine that non-Trainers crossing the border must show passports and paperwork, and the background check is to make sure they aren't criminals or planning to smuggle contraband into the region.
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** Amara acts like a complete {{Jerkass}} towards everyone, even her own Pokémon, [[spoiler: because of the following: she feels her parents favor Julia over her, and her best friend was killed by a Gyarados, and she feels nobody around her is taking her friend's death and its effects on Amara seriously...although they are, she refuses any kind of help.]]
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*** When the police find the shack Amara is hiding in, they surround it with their guns drawn, have several police dog Pokemon as reinforcements, and one officer uses a megaphone to tell her "We have you surrounded! Come out with your hands up!" This is more in line to a drug bust or a hostage situation, rather than a runaway teen, even one who ''does'' have her name blacklisted from the League.
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** Chanel's father starves her, beats her, and is implied to sexually abuse her. After Kassia takes Chanel away from her home one night, it's discovered the abuse extends to the rest of the family as well, and they're all afraid of him.
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* BlackBestFriend: Amara's friend Chanel is a [[PosthumousCharacter posthumous example.]] She has very little identity outside of being "Amara's best friend who died tragically;" we finally get to see her properly in a WholeEpisodeFlashback and discover she lives in the poor neighborhood and has an abusive father, but this backstory still mainly revolves around how it makes ''Amara'' feel to see her friend in this situation, and how ''Kassia'' rescued Chanel, rather than Chanel and her family. Then she dies in a senseless tragedy and her memory only exists as fuel for Amara's own characterization.
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* BlandNameProduct: In a flashback, a younger Julia is seen buying a birthday present for Amara from a store called ''Gloria's Secret.'' Based on the description of the decor and products on display, it's an obvious counterpart to ''Victoria's Secret.''
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* OrwellianRetcon: In response to critique from readers, the author rewrote some early chapters, added new scenes, and added new chapters portraying the Parisa parents in a more favorable light[[note]] such as having given ''both'' their daughters secret bank accounts where in the original release, it was only Julia[[/note]] and loving their kids when it matters most.
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* AntiVillain: Amara. What makes her sympathetic is that she's largely lashing out in grief over the death of her best friend, but it's made clear in-universe that it does ''not'' excuse her actions, which include, but are not limited to, stealing a Totodile from Professor Elm's lab, physically and verbally abusing Pokemon regularly, forcing her Pokemon to directly attack humans, and generally being a complete {{Jerkass}} to everyone she comes in contact with.
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* AntiVillain: Amara. What makes her sympathetic is that she's a fifteen-year-old girl largely lashing out in grief over the death of her best friend, but it's made clear in-universe that it does ''not'' excuse her actions, which include, but are not limited to, stealing a Totodile from Professor Elm's lab, physically and verbally abusing Pokemon regularly, forcing her Pokemon to directly attack humans, and generally being a complete {{Jerkass}} to everyone she comes in contact with.
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* BaitAndSwitch: [[spoiler: Saoirse's death; she starts vomiting and seizing up after eating a chocolate cake, and [[FurryReminder initially it appears that the chocolate is what caused it, with her being a dog-like Pokemon.]] Nope; the truth is that she's had a hole in her heart all this time and it's finally become to much for her body to handle.]]
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* YouNoTakeCandle: Chanel slips into this speech a lot when she lives with her [[AbusiveParents abusive father]] in the poor neighborhood, saying things like "My dad don't give me no food no more," and "I don't wanna be beaten no more!" Interestingly, she loses this entirely when she's removed from his care and goes to live in the middle-class part of town.
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** Milly's mother in chapter 76. She is first heard scolding and deriding Milly over the phone and telling her to come straight home. At the end of the chapter it's revealed that her mother is incredibly controlling, forcibly kept her away from Pokemon and forbids her from seeing her friends and father, and Milly is essentially isolated with her. Her mother had given her one chance to get eight badges and battle at least one person in the League, and since Milly failed, she has to return home and give up her Pokemon, while kowtowing to whatever her mother says. And in the end, she has to return home to her.
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* ThreeAmigos: Julia is TheHero, Perrine is her friend who is the same gender, and Caiseal is the friend who is the opposite gender.
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* CigaretteBurns: Hunter J does this to Julia after Julia gets caught having infiltrated J's airship
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* SingleIssuePsychology: Defied in the Geraldine arc. When Julia catches Geraldine after freeing her from Team Rocket, she thinks caring for her and showering her with love and affection will make everything okay and fix all of her issues. Unfortunately, Geraldine, being a traumatized red Gyarados who was forcibly evolved, with said evolution being really painful, trapped in confinement, and experimented on, goes into BerserkerRage at random points and frequently has nightmares. When she nearly destroys Mahogany Town during a particularly bad episode, Julia is unable to do anything to stop her. Lance tells her Geraldine needs professional help and specialized therapy, something Julia can't give her. Julia accepts that he's right, and she gives Geraldine to Lance so he can send her to a facility that can help her with her issues. It's implied that it'll either be months or years before Julia can get Geraldine back.
* SoreLoser: In the first round of the Pokemon League, Caiseal faces off against and defeats a girl named Sarah Shaw. How does she react to her defeat, along with Caiseal trying to give her some words of encouragement? She slaps him, throws a tantrum, and threatens to sue him. Security is called in to take her out of the stadium kicking and screaming.
* SourSupporter: Caiseal starts off as this, not thinking highly of Julia and her idealism. Gradually thaws out later.
* SoreLoser: In the first round of the Pokemon League, Caiseal faces off against and defeats a girl named Sarah Shaw. How does she react to her defeat, along with Caiseal trying to give her some words of encouragement? She slaps him, throws a tantrum, and threatens to sue him. Security is called in to take her out of the stadium kicking and screaming.
* SourSupporter: Caiseal starts off as this, not thinking highly of Julia and her idealism. Gradually thaws out later.
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* SingleIssuePsychology: Defied in the Geraldine arc. When Julia catches Geraldine the red Gyarados after freeing her from Team Rocket, she thinks caring for her and showering her with love and affection will make everything okay and fix all of her issues. Unfortunately, Geraldine, Geraldine's trauma from being a traumatized red Gyarados who was forcibly forcefully evolved, with said evolution being really painful, trapped in confinement, confined, and experimented on, goes into on causes her to have frequent nightmares and have unpredictable bouts of BerserkerRage at random points and frequently has nightmares. When she nearly destroys Mahogany Town during a particularly bad episode, that Julia is unable to do anything to stop her. Lance tells her contain or stop. Julia eventually accepts that Geraldine needs professional help and specialized therapy, something Julia can't give her. Julia accepts that he's right, neither of which she can provide, and she gives Geraldine her to Lance so he her Gyarados can send her be sent to a facility that can help better equipped to address her with her issues. It's implied that it'll either be months or years before Julia can get Geraldine back.
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* SoreLoser: In the first round of the Pokemon League, Caiseal faces off against and defeats a girl named Sarah Shaw.How does she react Sarah responds to her defeat, along with the loss (and Caiseal trying to give her some words of encouragement? She slaps encouragement) by slapping him, throws throwing a tantrum, and threatens threatening to sue him. Security is called in to take her out of the stadium kicking and screaming.
* SourSupporter: Caiseal starts offas this, not thinking highly of Julia and her idealism. Gradually thaws out later.
* SoreLoser: In the first round of the Pokemon League, Caiseal faces off against and defeats a girl named Sarah Shaw.
* SourSupporter: Caiseal starts off
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* AuthorityEqualsAsskicking: The entire Goldenrod Radio Tower arc serves as this for the majority of the gym leaders, though they're still this even outside that particular arc.
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