Fanfic: MGLN Crisis

A Magical Girl Lyrical Nanoha fanfic written by Kaijo, who set out to write an action/adventure Continuation off the end of Magical Girl Lyrical Nanoha Season 3. The author wanted to see the lives of the cast continue into a whole new adventure that ties together past and present elements while keeping the Original Flavor.

One year after the end of Magical Girl Lyrical Nanoha StrikerS, an investigation by Fate and Teana uncovers a smuggling operation and Jail Scalietti's name comes up; this despite the fact that he's still in prison. At the same time, Yuuno is attacked by mysterious assailents at the site of his latest archeological exploration, and is knocked down into a darkened abyss. Also, Nanoha discovers Arisa and Suzuka have appeared on Mid-childa to train their magic; apparently hanging around Nanoha has finally triggered their linker cores.

While Fate and Teana investigate Jail and his new plan, Subaru and Arf search for Yuuno, and Arisa investigates her 'fangirlish' glee for mecha, Nanoha and the crew find themselves drawn into a plot with hidden layers that will push them all to their limits. From Fate's being forced to question her heritage, to Nanoha confronting her feelings; they and the rest of the cast deal with personal issues while facing the return of Jail and another old foe.

It's a story that, while having a few scattered humorous moments here and there, is primarily an action/adventure story with hidden plots in the style of season 3, but without all the filler training. Also includes a fair bit of romantic feelings.

The main story can be found here.

A continuation in Red Jewel Diaries that works more like an OVA series, having a mix of different themes for each chapter, and focusing on a few different characters each chapter. Humor, detective drama, romance, action/adventure... all the good stuff from before. You can find it here.

A seperate Lemon chapter where Nanoha, Fate, and Yunno consumate their relationship can be found here.


This fanfic provides examples of:
  • Absurdly Youthful Parent: Alicia's father was an aged up clone of Clyde Haralown. At most he was three when she was born.
  • Arson Murder And Life Saving: Hayate initially reprimands Arisa and Suzuka for taking the golem and entering combat, and silences their protests, but then congratulates them for their heroism.
  • Ascended Extra: Yuuno and Arf
  • An Axe to Grind: Jail, against all of magic and the society it powers.
  • Back from the Dead: Arf is brought back, although it is suggested that it may be a new version of her.
  • Batman Gambit: Precia gives data on the relic bombs to Jail, calculating that he'd eventually use them for his own ends and thus help free Al-Hazard from its dimensional prison.
  • Better to Die Than Be Killed Racquel poisons herself after meeting with Fate, before she can arrest her.
  • Boxed Crook: The imprisoned Numbers in one of the Red Jewel Diaries (the rest are free at the start of the story).
  • Brainwashed: Fate.
  • Breather Episode: There is exposition and plot development between fights, but there is also a bit of a lull in the middle of the fic. Of course, that's when it all goes to hell.
  • Cat Girl: Arisa remarks that Suzuka's barrier jacket makes her look like one (complete with a cat nose, ears and tail).
  • Chekhov's Gun: The ship that Chrono captured is used to find Jail's secret base. The classic "gun hanging on a wall" example is brought up in the author's notes.
  • Clone Degeneration: The Kyouya and Miyuki clones have about a year to live, according to Shamal.
  • Combining Mecha: To make his drones more threatening, Jail has a bunch of them fuse into a pair of giants to attack Clanagan.
  • Convenient Terminal Illness: The clones of Miyuki and Kyouya, according to Shamal, have about a year to live. They make a Heroic Sacrifice toward the end of the fic.
  • Crazy Enough to Work: Hayate comes up with a plan to have a shuttle protected by Yuuno's barrier to ride the beam of an Einherjar cannon through Al-Hazard's shield. It works.
    • Chrono also came up with the idea to bypass an enemy ship's AMF by teleporting through an energy beam they were firing, using it like a wire carrying electricity.
  • Deal with the Devil: Fate agrees to let Jail run tests on her to ensure Erio's safty.
  • Defeat Means Friendship: The author's reason behind Quatro's Heel-Face Turn, noting that she's the only person Nanoha defeated who didn't become friends with her.
  • Deliberate Values Dissonance: Subaru get's into an argument with Caro's village elder over whether or not it was right to exile her.
  • Evil Plan: Jail just wants to take over the world(well, more than one) and eliminate magic; is that so bad?
  • Excited Title! Two-Part Episode Name!: "Assault! The Golden City Beckons".
  • Fangirl: Arisa and mecha. And how!
    Arisa: Prepare the main gun! (squeals) I've always wanted to say that!
  • Face-Heel Turn: Some of the good guys appear to do this. Fate turns out to be brainwashed, while the Numbers have been replicated as "Type 14s".
  • From Bad to Worse: In chapter 17, Relic Bombs go off on Mid-Childa, denying the entire planet of magic. The author mentions the trope by name (well, the old name).
  • Heel-Face Turn: Quattro.
  • Heroic Sacrifice: Quite a few, including Lucino. Although she got better. Also, two of the old generals and The Kyoya and Miyuki clones.
  • Honor Before Reason: Fate notes that she could have easily apprehended Jail and the remaining Numbers instead of allowing herself to be experimented on in exchange for Erio's safety, but refuses to do so because she she promised to submit. She realizes her mistake after Jail reveals his ultimate plan, but at that point she's unarmed and Strapped to an Operating Table.
  • I Gave My Word: Precia takes the identity of Alicia's father to her grave. He was an aged up clone of Clyde Harlaown who made her promise that the real one would never find out.
  • I Have Your Wife: Jail manages to abduct Erio and Caro to use them as leverage against Fate.
  • I Want Grandkids: Amy suspects that Lindy went a bit further than most aspiring grandmothers would by swapping her birth control with sugar pills.
  • I Was Beaten by a Girl: In one chapter of Red Jewel Diaries, Vivio and Corona rescue Rio from some mobsters. It's mentioned that their therapy sessions lasted far longer than their prison sentences. Although, given the world they live in, it might of had more to do with the fact that they were nine years old.
  • Innocent Bystander: Only partially averted, as the citizens of Mid-Childa are evacuated to shelters; but that doesn't fully protect them as they are broken into during the attack and slowly kidnapped.
  • Insulted Awake: Signum, hoping to break Fate out of her Heroic BSOD, calls her a pitiful master to the recently deceased Arf, prompting an hours-long battle between them.
  • It Has Been an Honor: Twice in rapid succession. From Griffith to Chrono, and then Lucino to Griffith. In both cases, it is followed by More Expendable Than You.
  • Killed Off for Real: Quattro stabs Jail and Uno in the back when she performs her Heel-Face Turn. Precia and the Kyouya and Miyuki clones die when Al-Hazard is destroyed. Two of the Admirals sacrifice their lives during the Al-Hazard invasion
  • Living with the Villain: In "Red Jewel Diaries", Fate finds out that the person who knows the truth about her origins is an elderly fruit seller whose stall she frequents. Racquel admits that she moved to confirm Fate's identity and one day tell her the truth.
  • Luke, I Am Your Father: Jail to Fate. And boy does he pour it on thick!
    • Although a DNA test at the end reveals that he's lying and her father is Clyde Harlaown. More specifically, an aged up clone of him.
  • The Magic Goes Away: Jail's ultimate plan.
  • The Maiden Name Debate: A particularly complicated one for Fate Testarossa-Harlaown, especially considering the nature of the union.
    Fate: "If I took both your names, would that make me Fate Testarossa Harlaown Scrya Takamachi? Or perhaps Fate Testarossa Harlaown Takamachi Scrya? Fate Scrya Takamachi? Fate Takamachi Scrya? Hmm, I need to think about this..."
  • More Expendable Than You: Twice in a row. Chrono plans on staying on board the Claudia to fire off the Arc-en-ciel one more time but Griffith punches him in the face. Then when he's getting an unconscious Chrono into the last escape pod, Lucino pushes Griffith in as well (it later turns out that she survives). Both cases were preceded by the words It Has Been an Honor.
  • No Hugging, No Kissing: Averted. The one thing that keeps the story from being truly Original Flavor is the fact that this no longer applies.
  • Perfect Poison: Racquel's suicide method, which kills her before emergency services can arrive.
  • Right Hand Versus Left Hand: No one in the Bureau wants to tell Hayate who was behind the golem project, and an attempt is made to retrieve it by unknown forces when Jail attacks the city.
  • Sequel Hook: In the last chapter of the main fic, it is revealed that Alicia's father was apparently Clyde Harlaown, and this is expanded on in the Red Jewel Diaries.
  • Shrug of God: Whether Arf came back from the dead or was created again with scattered memories.
  • Spell My Name with an "S": Author seems to prefer "Raging Heart" over "Raising Heart", so it's more like "Spell my name without the S."
  • Stern Teacher: Arisa, teaching a class on fighting with staves in the last chapter.
  • The Reveal:
    • Nanoha discovers the mysterious masked man she's been fighting is her brother. Well, a clone of him, anyway.
    • Precia detailing that the temporary loss of magic was part of her plan to free Al-Hazard. She was just manipulating Jail.
    • Viewers find out it was all due to Precia's split personality.
  • Touched by Vorlons: Arisa and Suzuka's magical powers come from being around Nanoha.
  • Umbrella of Togetherness: Nanoha and Fate, in Chapter 16, in the wake of Arf sacrificing herself.
  • Undying Loyalty: Over the course of the story, Auris develops this for Hayate (even though she outranks her by the end). In that respect she's kind of a hybrid of her father and the Wolkenritter, someone who's willing to do morally questionable acts to see Hayate's idealistic dream come to fruition.
  • Unsorcerer: Jail mentions that he was created without a Linker Core to make him more focused on science. It plays into his ultimate goal of eliminating magic altogether.
  • Wham Line: Fate mentions Precia's split personality.
  • Why Am I Ticking?: Fate nearly becomes the victim of a living time bomb in the form of a cloned Alicia.
  • Xanatos Gambit: The heroes seemingly win, defeating Jail, but in doing so, he activates the relic bombs that wipe out magic from several different worlds, Mid-Childa included. Which was his goal all along, although it doesn't last.