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* MagnificentBitch: [[Characters/RWBYCinderFall Cinder Fall]] is Queen Salem's chief strategist, put in charge of ensuring her war with humanity begins. To that end, she manipulates the Claimed to earn their trust, whispering in Jaune's ear to attempt to [[TreacherousAdvisor trick him into war]]. Behind the scenes, she hires Dr. Merlot to trick the Schnees and Belladonnas into attempting to assassinate Jaune, utilizing her [[TheMole spies]] to ensure they go through with the plan; simultaneously, she raises public tensions against the Claimed by assassinating anti-Grimm speakers and advocating for war. [[spoiler:When her plan ultimately fails and she learns of how she was manipulated by Salem, she [[HeelFaceTurn turns against her former master]] and tells Jaune the truth of their "mother", ultimately dying while defeating Tyrian and [[SecretSecretKeeper taking the identity of the Summer Maiden to the grave]].]]
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* MagnificentBitch: MagnificentBastard: [[Characters/RWBYCinderFall Cinder Fall]] is Queen Salem's chief strategist, put in charge of ensuring her war with humanity begins. To that end, she manipulates the Claimed to earn their trust, whispering in Jaune's ear to attempt to [[TreacherousAdvisor trick him into war]]. Behind the scenes, she hires Dr. Merlot to trick the Schnees and Belladonnas into attempting to assassinate Jaune, utilizing her [[TheMole spies]] to ensure they go through with the plan; simultaneously, she raises public tensions against the Claimed by assassinating anti-Grimm speakers and advocating for war. [[spoiler:When her plan ultimately fails and she learns of how she was manipulated by Salem, she [[HeelFaceTurn turns against her former master]] and tells Jaune the truth of their "mother", ultimately dying while defeating Tyrian and [[SecretSecretKeeper taking the identity of the Summer Maiden to the grave]].]]
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* MagnificentBastard: [[Characters/RWBYCinderFall Cinder Fall]] is Queen Salem's chief strategist, put in charge of ensuring her war with humanity begins. To that end, she manipulates the Claimed to earn their trust, whispering in Jaune's ear to attempt to [[TreacherousAdvisor trick him into war]]. Behind the scenes, she hires Dr. Merlot to trick the Schnees and Belladonnas into attempting to assassinate Jaune, utilizing her [[TheMole spies]] to ensure they go through with the plan; simultaneously, she raises public tensions against the Claimed by assassinating anti-Grimm speakers and advocating for war. [[spoiler:When her plan ultimately fails and she learns of how she was manipulated by Salem, she [[HeelFaceTurn turns against her former master]] and tells Jaune the truth of their "mother", ultimately dying while defeating Tyrian and [[SecretSecretKeeper taking the identity of the Summer Maiden to the grave]].]]
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* MagnificentBastard: MagnificentBitch: [[Characters/RWBYCinderFall Cinder Fall]] is Queen Salem's chief strategist, put in charge of ensuring her war with humanity begins. To that end, she manipulates the Claimed to earn their trust, whispering in Jaune's ear to attempt to [[TreacherousAdvisor trick him into war]]. Behind the scenes, she hires Dr. Merlot to trick the Schnees and Belladonnas into attempting to assassinate Jaune, utilizing her [[TheMole spies]] to ensure they go through with the plan; simultaneously, she raises public tensions against the Claimed by assassinating anti-Grimm speakers and advocating for war. [[spoiler:When her plan ultimately fails and she learns of how she was manipulated by Salem, she [[HeelFaceTurn turns against her former master]] and tells Jaune the truth of their "mother", ultimately dying while defeating Tyrian and [[SecretSecretKeeper taking the identity of the Summer Maiden to the grave]].]]
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* MagnificentBastard: [[Characters/RWBYCinderFall Cinder Fall]] is Queen Salem's chief strategist, put in charge of ensuring her war with humanity begins. To that end, she manipulates the Claimed to earn their trust, whispering in Jaune's ear to attempt to [[TreacherousAdvisor trick him into war]]. Behind the scenes, she hires Dr. Merlot to trick the Schnees and Belladonnas into attempting to assassinate Jaune, utilizing her [[TheMole spies]] to ensure they go through with the plan; simultaneously, she raises public tensions against the Claimed by assassinating anti-Grimm speakers and advocating for war. [[spoiler:When her plan ultimately fails and she learns of how she was manipulated by Salem, she [[HeelFaceTurn turns against her former master]] and tells Jaune the truth of their "mother", ultimately dying while defeating Tyrian and [[SecretSecretKeeper taking the identity of the Summer Maiden to the grave]].]]
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* FunnyAneurysmMoment: Jaune's fear of the dark is PlayedForLaughs at first, since he still sleeps with a night light and it allows Blake to sabotage it so that she could comfort him. With the later reveal that [[spoiler:his fear of the dark comes from The Hole that Salem would imprison him in whenever he acted up, Blake's actions come across as one of the most horrible and manipulative things anyone does across the entire story]].
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** Jaune's fear of the dark is PlayedForLaughs at first, since he still sleeps with a night light and it allows Blake to sabotage it so that she could comfort him. With the later reveal that [[spoiler:his fear of the dark comes from The Hole that Salem would imprison him in whenever he acted up, Blake's actions come across as one of the most horrible and manipulative things anyone does across the entirestory]].story]].
** Every heartwarming or funny moment involving the Claimed's relationship with Salem falls into this when it's revealed that [[spoiler:she never cared about them at all, purposefully manipulating and torturing them their entire lives so that they would want nothing more than to destroy humanity - and that Jaune was going to be one of her sacrifices in that endeavor]].
** Jaune's fear of the dark is PlayedForLaughs at first, since he still sleeps with a night light and it allows Blake to sabotage it so that she could comfort him. With the later reveal that [[spoiler:his fear of the dark comes from The Hole that Salem would imprison him in whenever he acted up, Blake's actions come across as one of the most horrible and manipulative things anyone does across the entire
** Every heartwarming or funny moment involving the Claimed's relationship with Salem falls into this when it's revealed that [[spoiler:she never cared about them at all, purposefully manipulating and torturing them their entire lives so that they would want nothing more than to destroy humanity - and that Jaune was going to be one of her sacrifices in that endeavor]].
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* AccidentalAesop: Jacques, Ghira, Winter, and Kali accidentally spread the message that losing a family member [[FreudianExcuseIsNoExcuse isn't an excuse]] to fall into vengeance.
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* AccidentalAesop: Jacques, Ghira, Winter, and Kali accidentally spread the message that losing a family member [[FreudianExcuseIsNoExcuse isn't an excuse]] acting on incomplete information will only make things worse - while they believe that Jaune's death could potentially return the rest of the Claimed to fall into vengeance.their normal selves, it's pretty much the exact opposite, and they almost doom the world because they put their trust in someone they really shouldn't have.
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* FunnyAneurysmMoment: Jaune's fear of the dark is PlayedForLaughs at first, since he still sleeps with a night light and it allows Blake to sabotage it so that she could comfort him. With the later reveal that [[spoiler:his fear of the dark comes from The Hole that Salem would imprison him in whenever he acted up, Blake's actions come across as one of the most horrible and manipulative things anyone does across the entire story]].
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* {{Adorkable}}: Jaune himself. Despite his status as Prince of the Grimm, he's just as dorky and awkward as he was in canon. Special mention goes to calling Arthur Watts so that he can illegally buy beer for a party.
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* {{Adorkable}}: Jaune himself. Despite his status as Prince of the Grimm, he's just as dorky and awkward as he was in canon. Special mention goes to calling Arthur Watts so that he can illegally buy beer for a party.party.
* TheyWastedAPerfectlyGoodPlot: When Ozpin and Ironwood officially turn on each other later on, the chapter is framed as if they're going to physically fight. A fight between Ozpin and Ironwood isn't seen in fan works very often, and the author is well known for their engaging fight scenes, leaving a lot of untapped potential for a fight like this. Unfortunately, if it happened at all, it happened off-page, and the next time we see them [[spoiler:Ironwood is peacefully resigning from his post]].
* TheyWastedAPerfectlyGoodPlot: When Ozpin and Ironwood officially turn on each other later on, the chapter is framed as if they're going to physically fight. A fight between Ozpin and Ironwood isn't seen in fan works very often, and the author is well known for their engaging fight scenes, leaving a lot of untapped potential for a fight like this. Unfortunately, if it happened at all, it happened off-page, and the next time we see them [[spoiler:Ironwood is peacefully resigning from his post]].
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* {{Adorkable}}: Jaune himself. Despite his status as Prince of the Grimm, he's just as dorky and awkward as he was in canon. Special mention goes to calling Arthur Watts so that he can illegally buy beer for a party.
* TearJerker: In their second meeting, Ozpin tells Jaune all about his past with Salem and mentions the fact that he used to have daughters with her. His face noticeably darkens when he talks about them, and Ozpin's speech concludes by telling Jaune that he's [[SoProudOfYou proud of the man that Jaune has become]] despite Salem's influence.
* TearJerker: In their second meeting, Ozpin tells Jaune all about his past with Salem and mentions the fact that he used to have daughters with her. His face noticeably darkens when he talks about them, and Ozpin's speech concludes by telling Jaune that he's [[SoProudOfYou proud of the man that Jaune has become]] despite Salem's influence.
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* {{Adorkable}}: Jaune himself. Despite his status as Prince of the Grimm, he's just as dorky and awkward as he was in canon. Special mention goes to calling Arthur Watts so that he can illegally buy beer for a party.
* TearJerker: In their second meeting, Ozpin tells Jaune all about his past with Salem and mentions the fact that he used to have daughters with her. His face noticeably darkens when he talks about them, and Ozpin's speech concludes by telling Jaune that he's [[SoProudOfYou proud of the man that Jaune has become]] despite Salem's influence.party.
* TearJerker: In their second meeting, Ozpin tells Jaune all about his past with Salem and mentions the fact that he used to have daughters with her. His face noticeably darkens when he talks about them, and Ozpin's speech concludes by telling Jaune that he's [[SoProudOfYou proud of the man that Jaune has become]] despite Salem's influence.
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* AccidentalAesop: Jacques, Ghira, Winter, and Kali accidentally spread the message that losing a family member doesn't [[FreudianExcuseIsNoExcuse mean that you get to do whatever you want]] in an attempt to make yourself feel better.
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* AccidentalAesop: Jacques, Ghira, Winter, and Kali accidentally spread the message that losing a family member doesn't member [[FreudianExcuseIsNoExcuse mean that you get isn't an excuse]] to do whatever you want]] in an attempt to make yourself feel better.fall into vengeance.
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* AccidentalAesop: Jacques, Ghira, Winter, and Kali accidentally spread the message that losing a family member doesn't [[FreudianExcuseIsNoExcuse mean that you get to do whatever you want]] in an attempt to make yourself feel better.
* {{Adorkable}}: Jaune himself. Despite his status as Prince of the Grimm, he's just as dorky and awkward as he was in canon. Special mention goes to calling Arthur Watts so that he can illegally buy beer for a party.
* TearJerker: In their second meeting, Ozpin tells Jaune all about his past with Salem and mentions the fact that he used to have daughters with her. His face noticeably darkens when he talks about them, and Ozpin's speech concludes by telling Jaune that he's [[SoProudOfYou proud of the man that Jaune has become]] despite Salem's influence.
* {{Adorkable}}: Jaune himself. Despite his status as Prince of the Grimm, he's just as dorky and awkward as he was in canon. Special mention goes to calling Arthur Watts so that he can illegally buy beer for a party.
* TearJerker: In their second meeting, Ozpin tells Jaune all about his past with Salem and mentions the fact that he used to have daughters with her. His face noticeably darkens when he talks about them, and Ozpin's speech concludes by telling Jaune that he's [[SoProudOfYou proud of the man that Jaune has become]] despite Salem's influence.
