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** Ransa's a yendon, which most liken to a bunny.
** Sal is likened to a salamander at times, and some of his description makes him appear like an axolotl.
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** Sal is likened to a salamander at times, and some of his description makes him appear like an axolotl.
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* GreaterScopeVillain: A certain creature is mentioned in the background as to whom Steam was created to opposite; a being who destroys entire timelines, but it plays no apparent role in the story of Sal and friends.
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* GreaterScopeVillain: A certain creature is mentioned in the background as to whom Steam was created to opposite; a being who destroys entire timelines, but it plays no apparent role in the story of Sal and friends.friends, [[spoiler:save the indication that it's responsible for the destruction of Mr. Hive's timeline.]]
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* CruelAndUnusualDeath: Mr. Hive specializes in these:
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* CruelAndUnusualDeath: Mr. Hive specializes in these:CruelAndUnusualDeath:
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* AndTheAdventureContinues: [[spoiler:The last spoken word of the story is 'onward' as Sal leads the others to the planet Miirth, still adventuring across the Kinematic Envelope and questing for news of his family.]]
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* AndTheAdventureContinues: [[spoiler:The last spoken word of the story is 'onward' as Sal leads the others to the planet Miirth, still adventuring across the Kinematic Envelope crossing back into Sal's timeline and questing for news of his family.]]
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* AndTheAdventureContinues: [[spoiler:The last spoken word of the story is 'onward' as Sal leads the others to the planet Miirth, still adventuring across the Kinematic Envelope and questing for news of his family.]]
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* MassiveNumberedSiblings: Sal has only about five hundred brothers and sisters.
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* MassiveNumberedSiblings: Sal [[spoiler:Sal has only about five hundred brothers and sisters.]]
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* SympathyForTheDevil: While he ultimately condemns Mr. Hive as a victim of his own decisions, Sal still pities him for [[spoiler:the loss of his timeline.]] Even Mr. Hive seems passingly aware of the abomination he's come at times:
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* SympathyForTheDevil: While he ultimately condemns Mr. Hive as a victim of his own decisions, Sal still pities him for [[spoiler:the loss of his timeline.]] Even Mr. Hive seems passingly aware of the abomination he's come become at times:
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-->"What a dreadful word that is, isn't it? 'Once.' Yes... ''Once'' I could have been like you. ''Once'', I could have offered you my hand in friendship. ''Once'', I could have [[spoiler:returned to my timeline]], before all this madness happened..but only that once. And...never again."
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-->"What a dreadful word that is, isn't it? 'Once.' Yes... ''Once'' I could have been like you. ''Once'', I could have offered you my hand in friendship. ''Once'', I could have [[spoiler:returned to my timeline]], before all this madness happened..happened...but only that once. And...never again."
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* SympathyForTheDevil: While he ultimately condemns Mr. Hive as a victim of his own decisions, Sal still pities him for [[spoiler:the loss of his timeline.]] Even Mr. Hive seems passingly aware of the abomination he's come at times:
-->"What a dreadful word that is, isn't it? 'Once.' Yes... ''Once'' I could have been like you. ''Once'', I could have offered you my hand in friendship. ''Once'', I could have [[spoiler:returned to my timeline]], before all this madness happened..but only that once. And...never again."
-->"What a dreadful word that is, isn't it? 'Once.' Yes... ''Once'' I could have been like you. ''Once'', I could have offered you my hand in friendship. ''Once'', I could have [[spoiler:returned to my timeline]], before all this madness happened..but only that once. And...never again."
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** [[spoiler:Feyf gives her life to stop Mr. Hive, impaling him and making sure his vaunted Skycavity smashes into a chronautilid.]]
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** [[spoiler:Feyf gives her life to stop Mr. Hive, impaling him and making sure his vaunted Skycavity Vanity Rail smashes into a chronautilid.]]
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* DefiantToTheEnd:
** [[spoiler:When Croque is set upon by Hive's flies, all he does is laugh until the end.]]
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* DefiantToTheEnd:
**DefiantToTheEnd: [[spoiler:When Croque is set upon by Hive's flies, all he does is laugh until the end.]]
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* MadeOfIron: [[spoiler:[[DownplayedTrope He's very much worse for the wear afterwards]], but Mr. Hive survives getting hit head-on by a ''flying train'' and the ensuing hundred-story drop.]]
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* ChekhovsGun: The Vanity Rail has numerous examples:
** Feyf's bunny plush [[spoiler:turns out to have a hidden hand-spike Sal uses to finish off Papa Sugar in a pinch.]]
** Subverted with the ''actual'' gun, which is focused on at the start of the chapter and busted out at the end--whereupon it promptly fails to fire due to its age.
** Feyf's bunny plush [[spoiler:turns out to have a hidden hand-spike Sal uses to finish off Papa Sugar in a pinch.]]
** Subverted with the ''actual'' gun, which is focused on at the start of the chapter and busted out at the end--whereupon it promptly fails to fire due to its age.
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* ChekhovsGun: ChekhovsGun:
** The Vanity Rail has numerous examples:
** *** Feyf's bunny plush [[spoiler:turns out to have a hidden hand-spike Sal uses to finish off Papa Sugar in a pinch.]]
** *** [[spoiler:The flute, [[{{Foreshadowing}} the one item in the Vanity Rail Sal remembers the name of]], turns out to be the final key between Sal and his own past.]]
*** Subverted with the ''actual'' gun, which is focused on at the start of the chapter and busted out at the end--whereupon it promptly fails to fire due to itsage.age.
** Ramus mentions that when chronautilids die, it results in a fascinating natural event called a "big bang," which creates an entire new timeline from all the Steam the dying chronautilid consumed being released all at once. [[spoiler:This is ''exactly'' how Feyf and Mr. Hive end up kicking it in the end, when Feyf rams the Vanity Rail directly into a chronautilid to trigger the big bang.]]
** The Vanity Rail has numerous examples:
*** Subverted with the ''actual'' gun, which is focused on at the start of the chapter and busted out at the end--whereupon it promptly fails to fire due to its
** Ramus mentions that when chronautilids die, it results in a fascinating natural event called a "big bang," which creates an entire new timeline from all the Steam the dying chronautilid consumed being released all at once. [[spoiler:This is ''exactly'' how Feyf and Mr. Hive end up kicking it in the end, when Feyf rams the Vanity Rail directly into a chronautilid to trigger the big bang.]]
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* DealWithTheDevil: Mr. Hive is happy to offer bargains and alliances, but you do so at your peril with the rotting monster.
* DefiantToTheEnd: [[spoiler:When Croque is set upon by Hive's flies, all he does is laugh until the end.]]
* DefiantToTheEnd: [[spoiler:When Croque is set upon by Hive's flies, all he does is laugh until the end.]]
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* DealWithTheDevil: Mr. Hive is happy to offer bargains and alliances, but you do so at your peril with the rotting monster.
monster. [[spoiler:Ironically enough, Mr. Hive essentially made one with the rot-flies to find his timeline, musing that he "sold his soul to the Kinematic Envelope" to get where he is now.]]
*DefiantToTheEnd: DefiantToTheEnd:
** [[spoiler:When Croque is set upon by Hive's flies, all he does is laugh until the end.]]
* DespairEventHorizon: [[spoiler:What started Mr. Hive's downfall into villainy, by his own admission: when Mr. Hive finally found his own timeline again, only to find it destroyed, he entered a "perfect, defining moment of despair" that left nothing for him but a one-way plunge far, far downward from there.]]
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** [[spoiler:When Croque is set upon by Hive's flies, all he does is laugh until the end.]]
* DespairEventHorizon: [[spoiler:What started Mr. Hive's downfall into villainy, by his own admission: when Mr. Hive finally found his own timeline again, only to find it destroyed, he entered a "perfect, defining moment of despair" that left nothing for him but a one-way plunge far, far downward from there.]]
* DieLaughing: [[spoiler:Both Croque and Feyf, though in different circumstances, both give their lives to screw over Mr. Hive and spend their last moments laughing their asses off over it:]]
-->(in chapter 4) [[spoiler:''Croque said nothing. He just laughed and laughed as the rot-flies engulfed him.'']]
-->(in chapter 12) [[spoiler:''Feyf said nothing else. She just laughed and laughed, until the chronoengine hit the chronautilid head-on and the engine finally exploded.'']]
-->(in chapter 4) [[spoiler:''Croque said nothing. He just laughed and laughed as the rot-flies engulfed him.'']]
-->(in chapter 12) [[spoiler:''Feyf said nothing else. She just laughed and laughed, until the chronoengine hit the chronautilid head-on and the engine finally exploded.'']]
* DyingMomentOfAwesome: [[spoiler:Feyf's final sacrifice entails her driving Mr. Hive's chronomotive into a chronautilid with herself and Mr. Hive still on it. The resulting "big bang" is a TechnicolorDeath that can be seen for thousands of kilometers away and ultimately creates an ''entire new timeline'' from all the Steam released in the process.]]
* EvilCounterpart: As the story goes on, it becomes increasingly obvious Mr. Hive is one to Sal. [[spoiler:Like Sal, Mr. Hive was once a "naive little nobody" who saw the butterflies and tried to follow them back to his own timeline. ''Unlike'' Sal, Mr. Hive made rash, self-afflicting decisions to help find his timeline, giving his very being over to the rot-flies to track it, only to find his timeline utterly destroyed. Mr. Hive notes that the only thing that truly separates him and Sal is "time and choice", representing an image of what Sal could become if he made the wrong decisions--decisions Sal ultimately decides he'll never make in his final ShutUpHannibal moment.]]
* FreudianExcuseIsNoExcuse: [[spoiler:Mr. Hive, like Sal, spent a seeming eternity trying to find his timeline, only to ultimately find it in ruins. Sal genuinely pities Mr. Hive, but still notes that doesn't give him the right to kill and manipulate so many innocent people.]]
* GoodIsNotSoft: Quine is easily the sweetest character in the story, cares endlessly for her friends, and delivers the most brutal ''coup de grâce'' in the story [[spoiler:when she rips Rudely off his chronofreighter and tosses him into the awaiting jaws of a gigantic eel.]]
* {{Hypocrite}}: [[spoiler:Mr. Hive's home timeline was destroyed and the consequences of his past decisions--infusing himself with the rot-flies--ensured Mr. Hive wouldn't ever be able to cross out of the Kinematic Envelope again, providing the impetus for his StrawNihilist behavior as he peddles to everyone else with the butterflies that returning to their own timelines is impossible. Except Mr. Hive knows ''full well'' there are other, non-destroyed timelines, and he's stockpiling on stolen Steam to escape the consequences of his own actions and rejoin a timeline anyway.]]
* JustDesserts: [[spoiler:Rudely gets a ''particularly'' bloody instance of this, when Quine throws him to the jaws of an anguillotine which bites so hard Rudely essentially explodes into blood.]]
* VillainTeamUp: Kindly and Rudely make an alliance with the wicked Mr. Hive.
* VillainousBreakdown: [[spoiler:Mr. Hive grows increasingly impatient throughout the story, and by the time he's nearly bisected by Soot's chronodiesel, he's a delirious mess in a state of TranquilFury who utterly refuses to believe his time is up even when his guts are literally hanging out of his suit, and he finally attempts to (ineffectually) beg for his life when Feyf finally has him cornered and at her mercy.]]
* VillainousBreakdown: [[spoiler:Mr. Hive grows increasingly impatient throughout the story, and by the time he's nearly bisected by Soot's chronodiesel, he's a delirious mess in a state of TranquilFury who utterly refuses to believe his time is up even when his guts are literally hanging out of his suit, and he finally attempts to (ineffectually) beg for his life when Feyf finally has him cornered and at her mercy.]]
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* {{Determinator}}: For all Sal goes through, he steadfastly refuses to consider backing down.
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** [[spoiler:Feyf gives her life to stop Mr. Hive, impaling him and making sure his vaunted Skycavity smashes into a Chronautolid.]]
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** Kindly, one half of the vicious duo, The Gentlemen, is a pleasant and kind-seeming reptilian xeno. It masks that he's a heartless, vicious sadist who loves torture and murder.
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** Kindly, one half of the vicious duo, The Gentlemen, due "the gentlemen," is a pleasant and kind-seeming reptilian xeno. It masks that he's a heartless, vicious sadist who loves torture and murder.
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* HostageSituation: [[spoiler:In Chapter 1, the Gentlemen manage to take Ramus hostage, dragging him back to Hive.]]
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* HostageSituation: [[spoiler:In Chapter 1, 11, the Gentlemen gentlemen manage to take Ramus hostage, dragging him back to Hive.Ransa hostage.]]
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* KickTheDog: [[spoiler:Mr. Hive allows the Gentlemen and their comrades to go wild on Xemidas and kill large portions of the city just to [[IncrediblyLamePun let off some steam.]]]]
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* KickTheDog: [[spoiler:Mr. Hive allows the Gentlemen gentlemen and their comrades to go wild on Xemidas and kill large portions of the city just to [[IncrediblyLamePun let off some steam.]]]]
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* TheDogBitesBack: [[spoiler:After abuse and slavery from Hive, Feyf fights back against him and finally destroys him, making it clear she is through being afraid of him.]]
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* NiceGirl: Quine, in refreshing contrast to Ransa and Fitch, is nothing but earnestly cheerful and supportive of his friends.
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* MassiveNumberedSiblings: Sal has only about five hundred brothers and sisters.
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* AMillionIsAStatistic: Mr. Hive cares nothing about mass murder, viewing countless deaths as just a blip on the radar. [[spoiler:He threatens to raze Xemidas, saying nothing in the Kinematic Envelope will even notice, let alone care and time will march onward.]]
* ActualPacifist: The people of Xemidas have some weird beliefs, but their snail-based religion is a completely pacifistic one and the city's residents are hospitable folks who wouldn't harm a soul.
* ActualPacifist: The people of Xemidas have some weird beliefs, but their snail-based religion is a completely pacifistic one and the city's residents are hospitable folks who wouldn't harm a soul.
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* BewareTheNiceOnes: BewareTheNiceOnes:
** Sal is pretty reasonable, but threaten his friends and he will fight back or use lethal force [[spoiler:as he does on Papa Sugar.]]
** Quine might be the sweetest of the core four but when pushed she can be lethal. [[spoiler:She throws Rudely to his death in the jaws of a giant eel with only a growl of "mincemeat" when he clearly wants mercy.]]
** Sal is pretty reasonable, but threaten his friends and he will fight back or use lethal force [[spoiler:as he does on Papa Sugar.]]
** Quine might be the sweetest of the core four but when pushed she can be lethal. [[spoiler:She throws Rudely to his death in the jaws of a giant eel with only a growl of "mincemeat" when he clearly wants mercy.]]
** [[spoiler:Rudely is hurled to be shredded in the jaws of a massive eel, torn apart with only his shredded remains left.]]
* CutenessOverload: [[spoiler:Fitch being informed she may keep her visitor snail makes her explode in joy at the cute little thing, even flying into the air.]]
* CutenessOverload: [[spoiler:Fitch being informed she may keep her visitor snail makes her explode in joy at the cute little thing, even flying into the air.]]
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* FauxAffablyEvil: Mr. Hive is polite and pleasant, all part of his shtick as a roaming ConArtist who charms and tricks xenos who see the butterflies (i.e. those with excess Steam) into giving him their Steam. Beneath it, he's a sadistic and remorseless killer who's killed an indeterminate but lengthy amount of people via stealing their Steam.
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* FauxAffablyEvil: FauxAffablyEvil:
** Mr. Hive is polite and pleasant, all part of his shtick as a roaming ConArtist who charms and tricks xenos who see the butterflies (i.e. those with excess Steam) into giving him their Steam. Beneath it, he's a sadistic and remorseless killer who's killed an indeterminate but lengthy amount of people via stealing theirSteam.Steam.
** Kindly, one half of the vicious duo, The Gentlemen, is a pleasant and kind-seeming reptilian xeno. It masks that he's a heartless, vicious sadist who loves torture and murder.
** Mr. Hive is polite and pleasant, all part of his shtick as a roaming ConArtist who charms and tricks xenos who see the butterflies (i.e. those with excess Steam) into giving him their Steam. Beneath it, he's a sadistic and remorseless killer who's killed an indeterminate but lengthy amount of people via stealing their
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* ReasonableAuthorityFigure: Ruler of Xemidas, the Gastropope is a wise and benevolent leader who happily [[spoiler:allows Fitch to keep her visitor snail and gives the core four a reward for saving Xemidas. Maybe. He's a giant slug in a pope outfit, so he might be a wise ruler or the Xemidas cultists are just interpreting for him. But they think he's this anyways.]]
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** [[spoiler:Rudely is silently begging Quine not to throw him to his death. It doesn't work.]]
** [[spoiler:When the chips are down, Mr. Hive is caught dead to rights by Feyf and all but begging to be spared. She'd rather die with him than let him live in the end.]]
** [[spoiler:Rudely is silently begging Quine not to throw him to his death. It doesn't work.]]
** [[spoiler:When the chips are down, Mr. Hive is caught dead to rights by Feyf and all but begging to be spared. She'd rather die with him than let him live in the end.]]
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* BoomHeadshot: [[spoiler:Ramus fires off a javelin right into Kindly's skull, with no PrettyLittleHeadshots in effect.]]
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* HeroicSacrifice: HeroicSacrifice:
** [[spoiler:Feyf indicates Croque knew he was doomed either way, so he intentionally got himself thrown out of the Vanity Rail so he could come back and screw Mr. Hive over later so Feyf, Sal and the others can escape. The plan goes without a hitch--except for Croque's subsequent demise at the hands of the rot-flies.]]
** Xemidas believes the snails they make burgers out of heroically sacrifice their lives to cleanse the souls of the consumers. No word on how the snails actually think of it.
* HostageSituation: [[spoiler:In Chapter 1, the Gentlemen manage to take Ramus hostage, dragging him back to Hive.]]
** [[spoiler:Feyf indicates Croque knew he was doomed either way, so he intentionally got himself thrown out of the Vanity Rail so he could come back and screw Mr. Hive over later so Feyf, Sal and the others can escape. The plan goes without a hitch--except for Croque's subsequent demise at the hands of the rot-flies.]]
** Xemidas believes the snails they make burgers out of heroically sacrifice their lives to cleanse the souls of the consumers. No word on how the snails actually think of it.
* HostageSituation: [[spoiler:In Chapter 1, the Gentlemen manage to take Ramus hostage, dragging him back to Hive.]]
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* ShooOutTheClowns: Inverted. Soot, the most overtly comic character in the story, sticks around for his own amusement for a short while after bumping into the core four but buzzes off once he finds a chronodiesel that attracts his attention. [[spoiler:He's gone entirely for possibly the most lighthearted part of the story, and only returns the exact moment Mr. Hive is boring down on Xemidas itself.]]
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* AvengingTheVillain: Papa Sugar's pals want revenge on Sal and friends for helping the wicked slaver exit the mortal coil.
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* AvengingTheVillain: Papa Sugar's [[spoiler:Papa Sugar's]] pals want revenge on Sal and friends for helping the wicked slaver exit the mortal coil.
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* BodyCountCompetition: Kindly and Rudely decide a game of butchering innocents and to see who can wrack up the higher body count faster in Xemidas.
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* BodyCountCompetition: Kindly and Rudely decide a game of butchering innocents and to see who can wrack up the higher body count faster in Xemidas.[[spoiler:in Xemidas]].
** Taking out someone's Steam is no better a death, as it's analogous to ripping out a person's ''soul''. Mr. Hive never uses his Steam cane to accomplish this--on-page--but Feyf demonstrates the cane's effects on an unfortunate thug toward the end, resulting in him slowly crumbling away.
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* EvilDuo: The "gentlemen," two [[ReptilesAreAbhorrent reptilian]] enforcers for Countdown Town's mob that become recurring antagonists in the story. [[spoiler:Mr. Hive sweet-talks them into becoming his CoDragons at the end of the ninth chapter.]]
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* EvilDuo: The "gentlemen," two [[ReptilesAreAbhorrent reptilian]] enforcers for Countdown Town's mob that become recurring antagonists in the story. [[spoiler:Mr.Mr. Hive sweet-talks them into becoming his CoDragons at the end of the ninth chapter.]]
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** SixthRanger: Soot, the odd fellow who tags along the journey for reasons known only to him.
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** SixthRanger: Soot, the odd fellow who tags along the journey for reasons known only to him.him, then later Ramus, the [[RailEnthusiast Anorak]] Soot pays to look after them for a while.
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* SpreeKiller: Kindly and Rudly go ''nuts'' in the city of Xemidas, obliterating portions of the city and going on a violent killing spree.
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* SpreeKiller: Kindly and Rudly Rudely go ''nuts'' in [[spoiler:in the city of Xemidas, obliterating portions of the city and going on a violent killing spree.]]
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* YouHaveOutlivedyourUsefulness: Invoked. Mr. Hive has a bit of a habit of pulling this on those around him or working with him. Kindly and Rudly are warned that it's only a matter of time until they run out of use to him and are introduced to his flesh-eating flies.
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* YouHaveOutlivedyourUsefulness: YouHaveOutlivedYourUsefulness: Invoked. Mr. Hive has a bit of a habit of pulling this on those around him or working with him. Kindly and Rudly Rudely are warned that it's only a matter of time until they run out of use to him and are introduced to his flesh-eating flies.
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* AvengingTheVillain: Papa Sugar's pals want revenge on Sal and friends for helping the wicked slaver exit the mortal coil.
* BodyCountCompetition: Kindly and Rudely decide a game of butchering innocents and to see who can wrack up the higher body count faster in Xemidas.
* KickTheDog: [[spoiler:Mr. Hive allows the Gentlemen and their comrades to go wild on Xemidas and kill large portions of the city just to [[IncrediblyLamePun let off some steam.]]]]
* MurderIsTheBestSolution: Kindly and Rudely don't respond to much by way of negotiation, simply preferring to slaughter whoever is trying to reason with them.
* SpreeKiller: Kindly and Rudly go ''nuts'' in the city of Xemidas, obliterating portions of the city and going on a violent killing spree.
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* SuperhumanTrafficking: In Countdown Town, anything is for sale, even people. And the more special the individual, the hgiher the price, with a thriving slave trade.
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* SuperhumanTrafficking: In Countdown Town, anything is for sale, even people. And the more special the individual, the hgiher higher the price, with a thriving slave trade.
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* YouOweMe: On taking a chance for Sal, Fitch remarks he "owes me a life of servitude for this!"
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* YouHaveOutlivedyourUsefulness: Invoked. Mr. Hive has a bit of a habit of pulling this on those around him or working with him. Kindly and Rudly are warned that it's only a matter of time until they run out of use to him and are introduced to his flesh-eating flies.
* YouOweMe: On taking a chance for Sal, Fitch remarks he "owes me a life of servitude forthis!"this!"
* YourSoulIsMine: When one villainous Xeno attacks, Feyf tears his very Steam out as a finisher.
* YouOweMe: On taking a chance for Sal, Fitch remarks he "owes me a life of servitude for
* YourSoulIsMine: When one villainous Xeno attacks, Feyf tears his very Steam out as a finisher.
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* SirSwearsALot: Ransa accounts for most of the story's cursing, responds to stress with {{Cluster F Bomb}}s and, aside from Feyf, is the only particularly foul-mouthed character to begin with.
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* SirSwearsALot: Ransa accounts Ransa, Feyf and Rudely seem to each account for most a third of the story's cursing, responds to stress with {{Cluster F Bomb}}s and, aside from Feyf, cursing. Feyf is the only particularly foul-mouthed character member of the party not to begin with.even ''try'' to bother to adhere to Xemidas' laws against obscene language.
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* UglyCute: Snails are not typically held as cuties....until you get to Xemidas and you see how adorable the little slugs in shells can be.
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* EldritchAbomination: Brother Dreiss speaks of a formless, infectious "entity" never seen onscreen that destroys entire timelines, his own included. Steam is mentioned to have been created as an antibody to such a horrific evil.
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* GirlsLoveStuffedAnimals: Fitch goes into a fit of CutenessProximity when around Xemidas' snails and ends up fawning over one of the stuffed ones when she's prohibited from touching the real ones.
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* GreaterScopeVillain: A certain creature is mentioned in the background as to whom Steam was created to opposite; a being who destroys entire timelines, but it plays no apparent role in the story of Sal and friends.
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* ImTakingHerHomeWithMe: Fitch adores her visitor snail from Xemidas so much she wants to keep it.
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* UglyCute: Snails are not typically held as cuties....until you get to Xemidas and you see how adorable the little slugs in shells can be.
