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* "I don't have a clever idea...but I might have a stupid one."
** Cut to [[https://www.sleeplessdomain.com/comic/chapter-22-page-28 Kokoro sitting on Undine's shoulders]], as they prepare to use Undine's faster speed to get Kokoro close enough to the monster to punch it. Kokoro looks absolutely ''delighted'', while Undine just looks done with everything.
** When asked if she was too heavy, Undine merely says that Kokoro isn't heavy as long as she's transformed...and then points out that she also ''has'' been working out. Cue heart eyes and {{Crush Blush}}ing from Kokoro.
** Cut to [[https://www.sleeplessdomain.com/comic/chapter-22-page-28 Kokoro sitting on Undine's shoulders]], as they prepare to use Undine's faster speed to get Kokoro close enough to the monster to punch it. Kokoro looks absolutely ''delighted'', while Undine just looks done with everything.
** When asked if she was too heavy, Undine merely says that Kokoro isn't heavy as long as she's transformed...and then points out that she also ''has'' been working out. Cue heart eyes and {{Crush Blush}}ing from Kokoro.
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* This chapter includes an expy of [[WebAnimation/{{RWBY}} Penny]], after she was [[CosmicPlaything killed for the third time, for good, in her own series]]. The author confirmed on Discord that [[ImTakingHerHomeWithMe this was her adopting an incarnation of a character she adored that she thought needed a better home]]. In baby speak.
-->[[CutenessProximity Penny mine now]]
-->[[CutenessProximity Penny mine now]]
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* Kokoro dodging the question of how her grades are by hastily pointing out it was almost time to patrol.
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* To announce a hiatus, Cube shows a panel of the Club Bulletin Board at the school. Among the clubs: Soccer Club, where no powers are allowed, and Magi-Soccer Club, where powers are allowed. The latter's poster has the word "some" written on before "powers allowed!"
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* To announce a hiatus, Cube shows a panel of the Club Bulletin Board at the school. Among the clubs: Soccer Club, where no powers are allowed, and Magi-Soccer Club, where powers are allowed. The latter's poster has been amended -- the word "some" is written on before "powers allowed!"
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* To announce a hiatus, Cube shows a panel of the Club Bulletin Board at the school. Among the clubs: Soccer Club, where no powers are allowed, and Magi Soccer Club, where ''some'' powers are allowed.
** Magi-Soccer advertises itself as "As Fun As It Sounds!" Regular Soccer Club responds with "We Also Have Fun!"
** Magi-Soccer advertises itself as "As Fun As It Sounds!" Regular Soccer Club responds with "We Also Have Fun!"
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* To announce a hiatus, Cube shows a panel of the Club Bulletin Board at the school. Among the clubs: Soccer Club, where no powers are allowed, and Magi Soccer Magi-Soccer Club, where ''some'' powers are allowed.
allowed. The latter's poster has the word "some" written on before "powers allowed!"
** Magi-Soccer advertises itself as "As Fun As It Sounds!" Regular Soccer Club responds with "WeAlso Still Have Fun!"
** Magi-Soccer advertises itself as "As Fun As It Sounds!" Regular Soccer Club responds with "We
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** Of particular note: The Barrier pattern that Team Forte complains about is a Mondrian vomit of red, yellow, and blue, with white and black accents. Team Forte has four members, one of which is green-themed and notably absent from the shot. The remaining three are red-, yellow-, and blue-themed, with black-and-white trim.
-->'''Forte Keys:''' Don't you think it looks a bit... tacky?
-->'''Forte Keys:''' Don't you think it looks a bit... tacky?
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* Undine's grandmother had once been a magical girl herself. Undine's mom? Nope.
-->"I think my mom felt like she got skipped over. She's always seemed a bit self-conscious about it."
-->"I think my mom felt like she got skipped over. She's always seemed a bit self-conscious about it."
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* In 2018, the Sleepless Domain Discord ran a poll on the most and least popular characters. Mary Cagle [[http://www.sleeplessdomain.com/blog/character-poll-results drew a comic]] about the results. The 'chump zone' has most of Team Forte complaining that they got the least amount of votes (two votes), saying that they had barely any screen time and never got to show their music skills, while Forte Bass (the only one to get more than two votes) gives a VSign. Meanwhile, Cassidy (who also only got two votes) is not taking it well that Nico (a rat), Ms. Cable (Mary Cagle's AuthorAvatar), and Claire (Zoey's cousin, who was a ''write in vote'') got more votes than her.
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* In 2018, the Sleepless Domain Discord ran a poll on the most and least popular characters. Mary Cagle Creator/MaryCagle [[http://www.sleeplessdomain.com/blog/character-poll-results drew a comic]] about the results. The 'chump zone' has most of Team Forte complaining that they got the least amount of votes (two votes), saying that they had barely any screen time and never got to show their music skills, while Forte Bass (the only one to get more than two votes) gives a VSign. Meanwhile, Cassidy (who also only got two votes) is not taking it well that Nico (a rat), Ms. Cable (Mary Cagle's AuthorAvatar), and Claire (Zoey's cousin, who was a ''write in vote'') got more votes than her.
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* Also, Kokoro has a Team Forte poster in her room.
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* Also, Kokoro has a Team Forte poster in [[AltText I can't believe no one said Oh Big Stretch. Very rude!]]
* Kokoro's counterargument to Undine's worries about making things worse is to shove herroom.
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* When Kicks starts sniffing at Undine, this is Kokoro's thought:
-->''Go, my child! Distract her with your adorableness!''
* Kokoro's counterargument to Undine's worries about making things worse is to shove her
* When Kicks starts sniffing at Undine, this is Kokoro's thought:
-->''Go, my child! Distract her with your adorableness!''
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* Kicks's hunger overrides her shyness.
-->'''AltText:''' This is also how I am described at parties.
* Also, Kokoro has a Team Forte poster in her room.
* Kicks's hunger overrides her shyness.
-->'''AltText:''' This is also how I am described at parties.
* Also, Kokoro has a Team Forte poster in her room.