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* HeWhoFightsMonsters: Makoto used to be a lot closer to her canon personality, but by the time the story starts she's become the dictator of Shujin in all but name.
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* PurelyAestheticGlasses: Akira's fake glasses becomes a plot point, since Ryuji and Makoto see them as validation for Akira [[BitchInSheepsClothing being a delinquent trying to hide his true nature]].
* RedAndBlackAndEvilAllOver: Makoto's predominately black Shujin uniform features a lot more red than it does in ''Persona 5'', red buttons and a read hairband, highlighting a more aggressive personality.
* RedAndBlackAndEvilAllOver: Makoto's predominately black Shujin uniform features a lot more red than it does in ''Persona 5'', red buttons and a read hairband, highlighting a more aggressive personality.
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* PurelyAestheticGlasses: Akira's fake glasses becomes become a plot point, point since Ryuji and Makoto see them as validation for Akira [[BitchInSheepsClothing being a delinquent trying to hide his true nature]].
* RedAndBlackAndEvilAllOver: Makoto's predominately black Shujin uniform features a lot more red than it does in ''Persona 5'', red buttons and aread red hairband, highlighting a more aggressive personality.
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** Since he didn't get talked out of it by the other Thieves, Akechi goes by "Karasu" instead of "Crow" inside the Metaverse.
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* BrokenPedestal: Shiho looked up to Makoto for exposing Kamoshida's crimes and is disheartened to see what she ended up becoming.
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* NicJobBreakingItHero: It's implied that Akira's attempt to persuade the Cognition of Makoto to let Ann escape her palace is what spurred her interest in him in the real world.
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* ControlFreak: Makoto rules Shujin Academy with an iron fist and expresses a desire to control every aspect of Akira's personal life, up to and including attempting to force him to quit a part-time job because it doesn't fit into her plan.
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* TakeAThirdOption: With Makoto using her ties to monopolize Akira's time, he's left in a tough spot. Either play along and never escape or risk ditching Makoto to travel to the Metaverse and get himself expelled. After bouncing off ideas with Arsene, Akira comes up with a way out. [[spoiler:By taking an official night job in LeBlanc for his guardian Sojiro, Akira has a valid excuse to not serve Makoto as her "apprentice" and she can't overturn it since Sojiro is in part Akira's parole officer]].
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* TakeAThirdOption: With Makoto using her ties to monopolize Akira's time, he's left in a tough spot. Either play along and never escape or risk ditching Makoto to travel to the Metaverse and get himself expelled. After bouncing off ideas with Arsene, Akira comes up with a way out. [[spoiler:By taking an official night job in LeBlanc [=LeBlanc=] for his guardian Sojiro, Akira has a valid excuse to not serve Makoto as her "apprentice" and she can't overturn it since Sojiro is in part Akira's parole officer]].
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* AbhorrentAdmirer: Makoto towards Akira. Unlike most cases, this comes down more to Makoto's personality more than anything else. She's thrown out several hints that she finds him attractive and ended up [[UnequalPairing abusing her position as Student Council President]] to blackmail him into spending time with her as "her apprentice."
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* AdaptationPersonalityChange: Although Akira was a HeroicMime in the game, he still JumpedAtTheCall when the opportunity arose. Here, Akira is portrayed more as a ReluctantHero.
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** Makoto Niijima [[BigBad for obvious reasons.]] In this work, she's overly embraced the IronLady persona she occasionally had in the game to the point of becoming a borderline-sadist.
** Although Akira was a HeroicMime in the game, he still JumpedAtTheCall when the opportunity arose. Here, Akira is portrayed moreas of a ReluctantHero.CowardlyLion, who takes more coaxing from both Arsene and Ann to get more involved.
** Makoto Niijima [[BigBad for obvious reasons.]] In this work, she's overly embraced the IronLady persona she occasionally had in the game to the point of becoming a borderline-sadist.
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* BlackAndWhiteInsanity: Makoto's views on justice; she deems anyone determined by the Justice System to be a criminal with 100% absolution. This causes some internal conflict with over how she views Akira due to both the holes in the story of how he was arrested and how his [[PiratesWhoDontDoAnything overall school records and grades contradicts his supposed delinquent status]]. Makoto takes this to assume he's been putting on an act the entire time.
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* DoubleStandardRapeFemaleOnMale: Averted. While it hasn't progressed to the point of genuine rape yet, Makoto develops a habit of touching Akira in ways that clearly make him feel very uncomfortable.
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* NoSenseOfPersonalSpace: Makoto, when it comes to Akira. In Chapter 13 it becomes apparent that she's using her "mentorship" of him as an excuse to be around him and experiment with touching him.
* NoSocialSkills: [[DownplayedTrope Downplayed]] with Makoto since it comes more into play with how she deals with romance. There's been several hints that she's attracted to Akira, but her method of dealing with this attraction has been to blackmail him into spending time with her and then [[NoSenseOfPersonalSpace invading his personal space]], poking him and playing with his hair. She's acting like a little kid experiencing a crush for the first time rather than a teenager.
* NoSocialSkills: [[DownplayedTrope Downplayed]] with Makoto since it comes more into play with how she deals with romance. There's been several hints that she's attracted to Akira, but her method of dealing with this attraction has been to blackmail him into spending time with her and then [[NoSenseOfPersonalSpace invading his personal space]], poking him and playing with his hair. She's acting like a little kid experiencing a crush for the first time rather than a teenager.
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* VillainWithGoodPublicity: Makoto, despite being a tyrant and ruling the school through fear and intimidation, essentially has a sterling reputation at school.
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* JapaneseDelinquent: Adverted by Ryuji. His hair is still black and he wears his uniform properly, since Makoto has been grooming him into a proper student by her standards.
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* AdaptationalHeroism: Akechi [[spoiler:rejects Yaldabaoth and]] becomes a good guy in this fic. The author has explicitly expressed that he has no intention of subverting this.
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* AdaptationalHeroism: Akechi [[spoiler:rejects The Traitor, [[spoiler:Goro Akechi, rejects Yaldabaoth and]] becomes a good guy in this fic. The author has explicitly expressed that he has no intention of subverting this.
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* AdaptationalWimp: Although Akira was a HeroicMime in the game, he still did JumpedAtTheCall when the opportunity arose. Here, Akira is portrayed more as a ReluctantHero.
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* {{Blackmail}}: The students believe Makoto is somehow blackmailing Principle Kobayakawa to ensure her power over the school.
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* BigDamnHeroes: Makoto tries to force Akira to come to her apartment, which cannot possibly end well. Fortunately, Akechi appears and tells her he and Sae are working there before anything uncouth can happen.
* {{Blackmail}}: The students believe Makoto is somehow blackmailingPrinciple Principal Kobayakawa to ensure her power over the school.
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* DoubleStandardRapeFemaleOnMale: Averted. While it hasn't progressed to the point of genuine rape yet, Makoto develops a habit of touching Akira in ways that clearly make him feel very uncomfortable.
* TheDragon: Ryuji is the ground-level enforcer of Makoto's will in Shujin.
* TheDragon: Ryuji is the ground-level enforcer of Makoto's will in Shujin.
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* PressStartToGameOver: How [[spoiler:Igor and Yaldabaoth's "game" went down. Akechi rebelled against him and helped to defeat him before Igor even had a chance to put his own player on the board.]]
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* PressStartToGameOver: How [[spoiler:Igor and Yaldabaoth's "game" went down. Akechi rebelled against him Yaldabaoth and helped to defeat him before Igor even had a chance to put his own player on the board.]]
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-->'''Akira:''' Yes, well, as intimidating as the mighty steel undergods that you city people worship are to a country bumpkin such as myself, I found that I only had to sacrifice two of my three favorite cows to be granted swift passage to your mighty halls of learning.
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* AdaptationalHeroism: Akechi rejects Yaldabaoth and becomes a good guy in this fic. The author has explicitly expressed that he has no intention of subverting this.
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* AdaptationalHeroism: Akechi rejects [[spoiler:rejects Yaldabaoth and and]] becomes a good guy in this fic. The author has explicitly expressed that he has no intention of subverting this.
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* {{Yandere}}: Implied to be the case with Makoto towards Akira. Makoto drops several hints, both in person and her shadow in her Palace, that she finds him attractive. Of course, since this version of Makoto is a ''sociopath'' her ways of showing affection is quite twisted.
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* EdgyBackwardsChairSitting: Ryuji initially sits in his chair this way when offered a seat, but Makoto reminds him that's not how he should sit so he corrects himself.
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* InSeriesNickname: Ryuji likes to call Makoto "Miss Prez".
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* ManipulativeBastard: Makoto has worked constantly to groom Ryuji into her personal attack dog, best demonstrated when she eases his consciences over punching Akira and convincing him he did the right thing.
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The fanfiction can be read [[http://archiveofourown.org/works/11533185/chapters/25891839 here]] at Archive of Our Own. '''WARNING!''' The fanfic has major endgame spoilers for ''Persona 5'', read at your own discretion. YouHaveBeenWarned.
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The fanfiction can be read [[http://archiveofourown.org/works/11533185/chapters/25891839 here]] at Archive of Our Own.''Website/ArchiveOfOurOwn''. '''WARNING!''' The fanfic has major endgame spoilers for ''Persona 5'', read at your own discretion. YouHaveBeenWarned.
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* AbsurdlySpaciousSewer: Karasu and Ann make their entrance into Makoto's Utopia by going through the sewer system. The sewer is very large and only clean water flows through. This reflects the mental nature of the Metaverse since Makoto would believe her Utopia produces no filth, but would adhere to the logic that a city needs a sewer system.
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* GiantWallOfWateryDoom: When trying to infiltrate the Palace through the sewers, Karasu and Ann have to quickly escape as the sewer is flooded and a large wall of water barrels down on them. [[spoiler:A cognition of Mishima saw the two and alerted the Shadows who flooded the sewers to flush them out and apprehend them]].
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* GodSaveUsFromTheQueen: Makoto is feared by the student body as the "Queen of Shujin Academy". Naturally, she is a literal queen within her Palace.
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* {{Protectorate}}: All of the Persona awakenings in the present day are triggered by the user's desire to protect someone else.
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* TakeMeInstead: When Makoto's Shadow tries to imprison Ann within her Palace, effectively erasing her from the real world without a trace, Akira pleads with Shadow Makoto to take him as her servant if she'll spare Ann. Makoto humors him, but violently rejects his offer, saying that as queen she can ''take'' whatever she wants and never has to settle for anything less.
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* AdaptedOut: Morgana doesn't appear in this story. [[spoiler:Since Yaldabaoth was destroyed early on, Igor never needed to create Morgana]].
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* GoshDarnItToHeck: Ryuji makes efforts to censor himself, unlike in ''Persona 5'' where he is SirSwearsALot. This is one of Makoto's interventions to try and make him a model student.
* GreatDetective: Goro Akechi is still a famous detective in this setting. He openly admits to Ann that he cheats by using the Metaverse to force a change of heart onto criminals, then works backwards from there to "catch" the criminal in the real world.
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* JapaneseDelinquent: Adverted by Ryuji. His hair is still black and he wears his uniform properly, since Makoto has been grooming him into a proper student by her standards.
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* NiceGuy: Ann and Shiho are instantly friendly with Akira on his first day and stick by his side regardless of the rumors or his criminal record.
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* ThatWasNotADream: [[spoiler:Shiho]] ends up in the Metaverse by being too close to the others as they enter, and initially thinks [[spoiler:she's]] dreaming. The delusion ends when a shockwave throws [[spoiler:her]] down and causes pain.
* VillainTakesAnInterest: Makoto slowly becomes more focused on Akira the longer he's at school. Concerned with the school's reputation, she takes it on herself to "rehabilitate" Akira to her standards of perfection. It's also been mentioned, through interactions with Makoto and her Shadow, that she finds Akira attractive, inviting all kinds of unfortunate implications.
* VillainTakesAnInterest: Makoto slowly becomes more focused on Akira the longer he's at school. Concerned with the school's reputation, she takes it on herself to "rehabilitate" Akira to her standards of perfection. It's also been mentioned, through interactions with Makoto and her Shadow, that she finds Akira attractive, inviting all kinds of unfortunate implications.
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* EpicFlail: [[spoiler:Shiho]]'s melee weapon as a Phantom Thief is a variation of a meteor hammer, a pair of spiked balls linked together by a long chain.
* EstablishingCharacterMoment: The first time we see Makoto, she is at a personal office desk in the student council room, cutting the drama club's budget because she felt that their choice to perform ''Theatre/OedipusRex'' was inappropriate for school.
* EstablishingCharacterMoment: The first time we see Makoto, she is at a personal office desk in the student council room, cutting the drama club's budget because she felt that their choice to perform ''Theatre/OedipusRex'' was inappropriate for school.
* KickTheDog:
** Ryuji brings Akira to the roof on his first day at school to explain that if he doesn't behave, he'll be in trouble. He emphasizes his point by punching Akira in the stomach hard enough to make him vomit.
** Makoto [[spoiler:breaks Akira's glasses after making him her "apprentice" with the principal's help]].
** Ryuji brings Akira to the roof on his first day at school to explain that if he doesn't behave, he'll be in trouble. He emphasizes his point by punching Akira in the stomach hard enough to make him vomit.
** Makoto [[spoiler:breaks Akira's glasses after making him her "apprentice" with the principal's help]].
* ShoePhone: [[spoiler:Shiho]]'s ranged weapon is a tube of lipstick that shoots bullets when twisted.
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* YouAreBetterThanYouThinkYouAre: Robin Hood gives this speech to Akechi in his awakening, [[spoiLer:convincing him to not give into Loki, but to become a true hero]].
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* YouAreBetterThanYouThinkYouAre: Robin Hood gives this speech to Akechi in his awakening, [[spoiLer:convincing [[spoiler:convincing him to not give into Loki, but to become a true hero]].
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* AxCrazy: Being MadeOfEvil, [[spoiler:Loki]] is most certainly violent and crazy, if the first words shouted out of his mouth didn't clue you in.
-->'''[[spoiler:Loki]]''': '''[[spoiler:KILL! KILL THEM ALL! MAKE THEM ALL SUFFER! BREAK THEIR MINDS AND SOULS!]]'''
-->'''[[spoiler:Loki]]''': '''[[spoiler:KILL! KILL THEM ALL! MAKE THEM ALL SUFFER! BREAK THEIR MINDS AND SOULS!]]'''
* CrapsaccharineWorld: Makoto's Palace is a beautiful utopian city that produces no filth, but is also a PoliceState ruled by a woman who would have you executed for the slightest bit of disconformity.
* LargeHam: Igor admits to having a flare for the dramatic. After redesigning the Velvet Room from a prison to a mental hospital, he has Caroline and Justine escort Akira to Igor on a gurney in a straight jacket and face mask a la [[Film/TheSilenceOfTheLambs Hannibal Lecter,]] simply for the theme of it all.
* SkewedPriorities: Arsene accuses Akira of this. Akira won't attempt to make a real change in the Metaverse, but was ready to fight Ryuji to keep him from breaking a first year's gaming handheld.
-->'''Arsene''': THIS is the great cause you will stand and fight for? A child’s toy? You would damn the whole school to a year’s worth of tyranny, but a single boy’s suffering drives you to heroism?
-->'''Arsene''': THIS is the great cause you will stand and fight for? A child’s toy? You would damn the whole school to a year’s worth of tyranny, but a single boy’s suffering drives you to heroism?
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* YouAreBetterThanYouThinkYouAre: Robin Hood gives this speech to Akechi in his awakening, [[spoier:convincing him to not give into Loki, but to become a true hero]].
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* AintTooProudToBeg: Akira proves this case to get his glasses back from Makoto, bowing as low as he can and addressing her as Makoto-Sama. [[spoiler:Makoto crushes the glasses even after enjoying Akira debasing himself for her]].
* ColdBloodedTorture: Shadow Makoto engages in this activity with Akira in their first meeting. This triggers Ann's Persona awakening.
* DeadpanSnarker: Akira usually has a sarcastic response to the madness he's facing in life. Being part of Akira, Arsene can be just as sarcastic.
* FaustianRebellion: [[spoiler:After being granted the power of a Persona, and some encouragement from Robin Hood, Akechi refuses Yaldabaoth's offer and uses his new power to help destroy the god of control]].
* FaustianRebellion: [[spoiler:After being granted the power of a Persona, and some encouragement from Robin Hood, Akechi refuses Yaldabaoth's offer and uses his new power to help destroy the god of control]].
* KnightTemplar: Makoto desires to create a utopia in Shujin Academy, but enforces her goals like a totalitarian dictator. While she has done real good in ousting Kamoshida, she and Ryuji have been causing nearly as much suffering as he did.
* MadeOfEvil: [[spoiler:Loki]] is described as such by Robin Hood, [[spoiler:being not Akechi's true self, but his madness made manifest]].
* MadeOfEvil: [[spoiler:Loki]] is described as such by Robin Hood, [[spoiler:being not Akechi's true self, but his madness made manifest]].
* MrExposition: Igor and Akechi both play exposition to explain to Akira and Ann why events are the way they are now.
* PurelyAestheticGlasses: Akira's fake glasses becomes a plot point, since Ryuji and Makoto see them as validation for Akira [[BitchInSheepsClothing being a delinquent trying to hide his true nature]].
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* YouAreBetterThanYouThinkYouAre: Robin Hood gives this speech to Akechi in his awakening, [[spoier:convincing him to not give into Loki, but to become a true hero]].
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. It is an AlternateUniverseFic in where, instead of Kamoshida, Makoto Niijima ruled over Shujin Academy to the point that she developed her own Palace. As the student council president, Makoto holds all the real power in Shujin as she tries to shape everything into a utopia of her design. With the arrival of Akira Kurusu, a young man convicted of a crime he didn't commit, she'll not stand for a delinquent troublemaker tarnishing Shujin's reputation. Akira, for his part, only wants to keep his head down until his probation is served, but life has other plans in store for him.
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* TheBrute: Ryuji is Makoto's enforcer, sent to muscle students who misbehave. He's regularly called Makoto's "attack dog", and even appears as such in Makoto's Palace.
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* AbsurdlyPowerfulStudentCouncil: Makoto and the student council make all the major decisions for Shujin Academy which earned Makoto the title of "queen". While there is a student council, it's clear Makoto holds all the power and they exist as a formality. This is all because of Makoto blackmailing the principal to let her have this much power.
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* CanisMajor: In Shadow Makoto's utopia, Ryuji appears as a giant black dog with Ryuji's face and sharp teeth. This reflects the real Makoto's cognition, proving she only sees Ryuji as her personal attack dog.
* CaptainCrash: Akira and Ann make their escape from Shadow Makoto by flying out of her tower with Arsene. However, they both [[OhCrap quickly find out]] that Arsene was never meant to carry passengers when he flies, resulting in a crash landing against a police car.
* CaptainCrash: Akira and Ann make their escape from Shadow Makoto by flying out of her tower with Arsene. However, they both [[OhCrap quickly find out]] that Arsene was never meant to carry passengers when he flies, resulting in a crash landing against a police car.
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* AGlassOfChianti: Igor is regularly seen drinking either red wine or white wine out of [[spoiler:the holy grail that was once Yaldabaoth]].
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* ScrewThisImOuttaHere: After surviving their accidental entry into Makoto's Palace, Akira refuses to enter again. Rather than risk his life for something as trivial as a high schooler on a power trip, he decides to leave Akechi and Ann to the deed without him. Arsene calls Akira out on his cowardice and tries to warn him that Makoto can only get worse if left alone.
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* {{Blackmail}}: The students believe Makoto is somehow blackmailing Principle Kobayakawa to ensure her power over the school.
* TheBrute: Ryuji is Makoto's enforcer, sent to muscle students who misbehave. He's regularly called Makoto's "attack dog", and even appears as such in Makoto's Palace.
* TheBrute: Ryuji is Makoto's enforcer, sent to muscle students who misbehave. He's regularly called Makoto's "attack dog", and even appears as such in Makoto's Palace.
* ForWantOfANail: There are a few key moments that are different than what they were in ''Persona 5'', drastically shifting events to what they are now.
** Makoto is able to learn from Shiho about Kamoshida's true nature and takes proactive steps to expose him early on and have him removed from the Academy.
** [[spoiler:Rather than attack and imprison Igor from the beginning, Yaldabaoth openly challenges Igor to his game to determine humanity's fate. When he tries to recruit Akechi to play his part, Akechi rebels and attacks Yaldabaoth, which leads to his failure and destruction at Igor's hands when he tries ''then'' to overpower him.]]
* HiddenDepths: It turns out Shiho loves spy movies, even once sneaking into Ann's house in the dark to cook her a proper meal.
* ManInWhite: Shadow Makoto wears a white suit with white heels and a tiara in her Palace.
** Makoto is able to learn from Shiho about Kamoshida's true nature and takes proactive steps to expose him early on and have him removed from the Academy.
** [[spoiler:Rather than attack and imprison Igor from the beginning, Yaldabaoth openly challenges Igor to his game to determine humanity's fate. When he tries to recruit Akechi to play his part, Akechi rebels and attacks Yaldabaoth, which leads to his failure and destruction at Igor's hands when he tries ''then'' to overpower him.]]
* HiddenDepths: It turns out Shiho loves spy movies, even once sneaking into Ann's house in the dark to cook her a proper meal.
* ManInWhite: Shadow Makoto wears a white suit with white heels and a tiara in her Palace.
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* MyGodWhatHaveIDone: Ryuji can't help but feel guilty for punching Akira when he was laying down the law per Makoto's instructions. Makoto plays her part to ease Ryuji's sense of guilt and convince him that he did the right thing.
* NoIndoorVoice: All of [[spoiler:Loki's]] lines are screamed in a loud, distorted voice.
* SailorEarth: The first original Phantom Thief, [[spoiler:Shiho]], follows the trends set by ''Persona 5''. Their Persona, Sonya, is based on Sonya Golden Hand, a Russian con artist from the late1800s.1800s.
* SweetTooth: Ann, per the norm. Shiho is openly concerned about Ann's unbalanced diet.
* NoIndoorVoice: All of [[spoiler:Loki's]] lines are screamed in a loud, distorted voice.
* SailorEarth: The first original Phantom Thief, [[spoiler:Shiho]], follows the trends set by ''Persona 5''. Their Persona, Sonya, is based on Sonya Golden Hand, a Russian con artist from the late
* SweetTooth: Ann, per the norm. Shiho is openly concerned about Ann's unbalanced diet.
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"The Evil Queen" is a ''VideoGame/Persona5'' {{Fanfic}} written by [[http://archiveofourown.org/users/vivvav/pseuds/vivvav vivvav]]. It is an AlternateUniverseFic in where, instead of Kamoshida, Makoto Nijima ruled over Shujin Academy to the point that she developed her own Palace. As the student council president, Makoto holds all the real power in Shujin as she tries to shape everything into a utopia of her design. With the arrival of Akira Kurusu, a young man convicted of a crime he didn't commit, she'll not stand for a delinquent troublemaker tarnishing Shujin's reputation. Akira, for his part, only wants to keep his head down until his probation is served, but life has other plans in store for him.
The fanfiction can be read [[http://archiveofourown.org/works/11533185/chapters/25891839 here]] at Archive of Our Own. '''WARNING!''' The fanfic has major endgame spoilers for ''Persona 5'', read at your own discretion. YouHaveBeenWarned.
The fanfiction can be read [[http://archiveofourown.org/works/11533185/chapters/25891839 here]] at Archive of Our Own. '''WARNING!''' The fanfic has major endgame spoilers for ''Persona 5'', read at your own discretion. YouHaveBeenWarned.
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"The Evil Queen" is a ''VideoGame/Persona5'' {{Fanfic}} written by [[http://archiveofourown.org/users/vivvav/pseuds/vivvav vivvav]]. vivvav]] and published July 17, 2017.
. It is an AlternateUniverseFic in where, instead of Kamoshida, MakotoNijima Niijima ruled over Shujin Academy to the point that she developed her own Palace. As the student council president, Makoto holds all the real power in Shujin as she tries to shape everything into a utopia of her design. With the arrival of Akira Kurusu, a young man convicted of a crime he didn't commit, she'll not stand for a delinquent troublemaker tarnishing Shujin's reputation. Akira, for his part, only wants to keep his head down until his probation is served, but life has other plans in store for him.
The fanfiction can be read [[http://archiveofourown.org/works/11533185/chapters/25891839 here]] at Archive of Our Own. '''WARNING!''' The fanfic has major endgame spoilers for ''Persona 5'', read at your own discretion.YouHaveBeenWarned.YouHaveBeenWarned.
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!!Tropes found in The Evil Queen:
* AdaptationalBadass: In ''Persona 5'', Shiho was a BrokenBird under Kamoshida's hellish treatment. In this story, [[spoiler:she becomes a Persona user]].
* AdaptationalVillainy: The premise of the fanfic is that Makoto Niijima is now a dictator within Shujin Academy with her own Palace rather than a well meaning Phantom Thief. Likewise, Ryuji Sakamoto is now Makoto's enforcer, bullying and strong-arming students to follow the rules and Makoto's standards.
* TheConscience: Arsene is Akira's rebellious spirit and desire to do right made manifest. When Akira tries to [[ScrewThisImOuttaHere back out and stay uninvolved with the Metaverse]], Arsene is there to grill Akira about running away from making a difference for people.
* FeetFirstIntroduction: Karasu is first introduced in the story by kicking his way out of a police car in Makoto's Palace.
* TheMentor: Akira has three mentors through the story. Igor, the master of the Velvet Room, Arsene, his GuardianEntity, and [=Goro Akechi/Karasu=], a veteran Phantom Thief.
* SailorEarth: The first original Phantom Thief, [[spoiler:Shiho]], follows the trends set by ''Persona 5''. Their Persona, Sonya, is based on Sonya Golden Hand, a Russian con artist from the late 1800s.
. It is an AlternateUniverseFic in where, instead of Kamoshida, Makoto
The fanfiction can be read [[http://archiveofourown.org/works/11533185/chapters/25891839 here]] at Archive of Our Own. '''WARNING!''' The fanfic has major endgame spoilers for ''Persona 5'', read at your own discretion.
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!!Tropes found in The Evil Queen:
* AdaptationalBadass: In ''Persona 5'', Shiho was a BrokenBird under Kamoshida's hellish treatment. In this story, [[spoiler:she becomes a Persona user]].
* AdaptationalVillainy: The premise of the fanfic is that Makoto Niijima is now a dictator within Shujin Academy with her own Palace rather than a well meaning Phantom Thief. Likewise, Ryuji Sakamoto is now Makoto's enforcer, bullying and strong-arming students to follow the rules and Makoto's standards.
* TheConscience: Arsene is Akira's rebellious spirit and desire to do right made manifest. When Akira tries to [[ScrewThisImOuttaHere back out and stay uninvolved with the Metaverse]], Arsene is there to grill Akira about running away from making a difference for people.
* FeetFirstIntroduction: Karasu is first introduced in the story by kicking his way out of a police car in Makoto's Palace.
* TheMentor: Akira has three mentors through the story. Igor, the master of the Velvet Room, Arsene, his GuardianEntity, and [=Goro Akechi/Karasu=], a veteran Phantom Thief.
* SailorEarth: The first original Phantom Thief, [[spoiler:Shiho]], follows the trends set by ''Persona 5''. Their Persona, Sonya, is based on Sonya Golden Hand, a Russian con artist from the late 1800s.
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->''"What if Shujin Academy was a nice place, free of corruption among the faculty? What if Mr. Kamoshida had long ago been exposed and ousted from the school? What if everything was nice and orderly? Not because that is the natural state of things, of course, but by somebody's design?''"
"The Evil Queen" is a ''VideoGame/Persona5'' {{Fanfic}} written by [[http://archiveofourown.org/users/vivvav/pseuds/vivvav vivvav]]. It is an AlternateUniverseFic in where, instead of Kamoshida, Makoto Nijima ruled over Shujin Academy to the point that she developed her own Palace. As the student council president, Makoto holds all the real power in Shujin as she tries to shape everything into a utopia of her design. With the arrival of Akira Kurusu, a young man convicted of a crime he didn't commit, she'll not stand for a delinquent troublemaker tarnishing Shujin's reputation. Akira, for his part, only wants to keep his head down until his probation is served, but life has other plans in store for him.
The fanfiction can be read [[http://archiveofourown.org/works/11533185/chapters/25891839 here]] at Archive of Our Own. '''WARNING!''' The fanfic has major endgame spoilers for ''Persona 5'', read at your own discretion. YouHaveBeenWarned.
"The Evil Queen" is a ''VideoGame/Persona5'' {{Fanfic}} written by [[http://archiveofourown.org/users/vivvav/pseuds/vivvav vivvav]]. It is an AlternateUniverseFic in where, instead of Kamoshida, Makoto Nijima ruled over Shujin Academy to the point that she developed her own Palace. As the student council president, Makoto holds all the real power in Shujin as she tries to shape everything into a utopia of her design. With the arrival of Akira Kurusu, a young man convicted of a crime he didn't commit, she'll not stand for a delinquent troublemaker tarnishing Shujin's reputation. Akira, for his part, only wants to keep his head down until his probation is served, but life has other plans in store for him.
The fanfiction can be read [[http://archiveofourown.org/works/11533185/chapters/25891839 here]] at Archive of Our Own. '''WARNING!''' The fanfic has major endgame spoilers for ''Persona 5'', read at your own discretion. YouHaveBeenWarned.
