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** [[spoiler:After facing her Shadow and gain a Persona, Makoto found letters from her deceased father meant for her 18th birthday, this prompted a full HeelRealization for Makoto as she cried at how far she had fallen and away from her father's initial hopes of her.]]
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** [[spoiler:After facing her Shadow and gain gaining a Persona, Makoto found finds letters from her deceased father meant for her 18th birthday, this prompted prompts a full HeelRealization for Makoto as she cried at cries about how far she had has fallen and away from her father's initial hopes of her.]]
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* MyGodWhatHaveIDone: Ryuji can't help but feel guilty for punching Akira when he was laying down the law per Makoto's instructions. Makoto plays her part to ease Ryuji's sense of guilt and convince him that he did the right thing.
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* MyGodWhatHaveIDone: MyGodWhatHaveIDone:
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** [[spoiler:After facing her Shadow and gain a Persona, Makoto found letters from her deceased father meant for her 18th birthday, this prompted a full HeelRealization for Makoto as she cried at how far she had fallen and away from her father's initial hopes of her.]]
** Ryuji can't help but feel guilty for punching Akira when he was laying down the law per Makoto's instructions. Makoto plays her part to ease Ryuji's sense of guilt and convince him that he did the right
** [[spoiler:After facing her Shadow and gain a Persona, Makoto found letters from her deceased father meant for her 18th birthday, this prompted a full HeelRealization for Makoto as she cried at how far she had fallen and away from her father's initial hopes of her.]]
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* YouDirtyRat: Makoto's cognition of Mishima is a rat with Mishima's face and a high pitched voice, reflecting how she sees him as a spineless lackey who worked for Kamoshida, willingly or not.
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* YouDirtyRat: Makoto's cognition of Mishima is a rat with Mishima's face and a high pitched voice, reflecting how she sees him as a spineless lackey who worked for Kamoshida, willingly or not.not.
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* BoomerangBigot: Makoto displays something of a [[FemaleMisogynist misogynistic streak]] towards those engages, or she ''believes'' engages in sexual activities. She ends up snidely SlutShaming both Ann and Kawakami. The irony here being her complete lack of respect towards Akira's boundaries.
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* BoomerangBigot: Makoto displays something of a [[FemaleMisogynist misogynistic streak]] towards those engages, who engage, or she ''believes'' engages in sexual activities. She ends up snidely SlutShaming both Ann and Kawakami. The irony here being her complete lack of respect towards Akira's boundaries.
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* AdaptationalContextChange: In ''Persona 5'', Morgana gave the CodeName Joker to the Wild Card because his power to call multiple personas made him the team's ace-in-the-hole. In ''The Evil Queen'', Karasu gave the code name to Akira as an IronicName, citing that it's the perfect cover for someone as dour and serious as him.
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* AdaptationalContextChange: In ''Persona 5'', Morgana gave the CodeName Joker to the Wild Card because his power to call multiple personas made him the team's ace-in-the-hole. In ''The Evil Queen'', Karasu gave gives the code name to Akira as an IronicName, citing that it's the perfect cover for someone as dour and serious as him.
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* AdaptationalContextChange: In ''Persona 5'', Morgana gave the CodeName Joker to the Wild Card because his power to call multiple personas made him the team's ace-in-the-hole. In ''The Evil Queen'', Karasu gave the code name to Akira as an IronicName, citing that it's the perfect cover for someone as dour and serious as him.
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** When [[spoiler:Akechi]] first enters the Velvet Room, it's the form of the Persona 4 limo. Igor notes that he hadn't had time to "re-decorate".
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** When [[spoiler:Akechi]] first enters the Velvet Room, it's the form of the Persona 4 ''Persona 4'' limo. Igor notes that he hadn't had time to "re-decorate".
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* DoubleStandardRapeFemaleOnMale: Averted. [[spoiler:When Makoto forces herself on Akira and blackmails him into spending her birthday with her (with intent to have sex with him implied)]], it is treated with all the horror it deserves [[spoiler: and Ann is so disgusted that she functions on pure rage to avenge Akira for the next few days.]]. Later on, [[spoiler:during their confrontation in the Metaverse, Akira]] actually brings this up and asks her if her actions would be okay if she was a man and he was a woman.
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* DoubleStandardRapeFemaleOnMale: Averted. [[spoiler:When Makoto forces herself on Akira and blackmails him into spending her birthday with her (with intent to have sex with him implied)]], it is treated with all the horror it deserves [[spoiler: and Ann is so disgusted that she functions on pure rage to avenge Akira for the next few days.]].days]]. Later on, [[spoiler:during their confrontation in the Metaverse, Akira]] actually brings this up and asks her if her actions would be okay if she was a man and he was a woman.
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-->'''Akechi''': I was hoping we would be able to avoid this.\\
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'''Ann''': You knew this was gonna happen!?\\
'''Akechi''': Well, it was certainly a possibility. [[spoiler:If you can’t steal a Treasure without attracting the Palace owner’s attention, they’ll transform into a monster and you have to fight them for it.]]\\
'''Ann''': So how often does that happen?\\
'''Akechi''': (''looking away from her shamefully'') In my experience? Every time.\\
'''Shiho''': And you didn’t think to warn us that this would happen!?\\
'''Akechi''': I thought we’d be able to avoid it this time!\\
'''Akira''': Based on what logic!?
'''Akechi''': Well, it was certainly a possibility. [[spoiler:If you can’t steal a Treasure without attracting the Palace owner’s attention, they’ll transform into a monster and you have to fight them for it.]]\\
'''Ann''': So how often does that happen?\\
'''Akechi''': (''looking away from her shamefully'') In my experience? Every time.\\
'''Shiho''': And you didn’t think to warn us that this would happen!?\\
'''Akechi''': I thought we’d be able to avoid it this time!\\
'''Akira''': Based on what logic!?
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* PaperThinDisguise: Neither Shadow Makoto nor [[spoiler:the real Makoto]] have any trouble identifying the Phantom Thieves through their disguises.
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* PaperThinDisguise: Neither Shadow Makoto nor [[spoiler:the real Makoto]] have any trouble identifying the Phantom Thieves Heroes through their disguises.
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* SailorEarth: The first original Phantom Hero, Russian (Shiho), follows the trends set by ''Persona 5''. Their Persona, Sonya, is based on [[https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Sonya_Golden_Hand Sonya Golden Hand]], a Russian con artist from the late 1800s.
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* SailorEarth: The first original Phantom Hero, Russian (Shiho), ([[spoiler:Shiho]]), follows the trends set by ''Persona 5''. Their Persona, Sonya, is based on [[https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Sonya_Golden_Hand Sonya Golden Hand]], a Russian con artist from the late 1800s.
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* DeconstructedCharacterArchetype: Makoto is this for the typical anime StudentCouncilPresident with an AbsurdlyPowerfulStudentCouncil in another way from her canon ''Persona 5'' self. Rather than not actually having as much power as anyone thinks she does, this Makoto actually ''does'' have complete authority over pretty much everyone, and the results are unnerving when the implications are made clear. Her IceQueen exterior and attempts to invoke GoodIsNotSoft akin to Mitsuru from ''Persona 3'' who also actually had an insane amount of power is shown to instead lead her to the path of BlackAndWhiteInsanity as she's so assured of her own moral goodness and authority that it ends up caving the way to making her a NotSoWellIntentionedExtremist and a petty tyrant. Having an ultra powerful and strict Student Council President thus makes Shujin a prison in Makoto's attempts at making it prim and proper, and she thus needs to be stopped.
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* DeconstructedCharacterArchetype: Makoto is this for the typical anime StudentCouncilPresident with an AbsurdlyPowerfulStudentCouncil in another way from her canon ''Persona 5'' self. Rather than not actually having as much power as anyone thinks she does, this Makoto actually ''does'' have complete authority over pretty much everyone, and the results are unnerving when the implications are made clear. Her IceQueen exterior and attempts to invoke GoodIsNotSoft akin to Mitsuru from ''Persona 3'' 3'', who also actually had an insane amount of power power, is shown to instead lead her to the path of BlackAndWhiteInsanity as she's so assured of her own moral goodness and authority that it ends up caving the way to making her a NotSoWellIntentionedExtremist and a petty tyrant. Having an ultra powerful and strict Student Council President thus makes Shujin a prison in Makoto's attempts at making it prim and proper, and she thus needs to be stopped.
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* EstablishingCharacterMoment: The first time we see Makoto, she is at a personal office desk in the student council room, cutting the drama club's budget because she felt that their choice to perform ''Theatre/OedipusRex'' was inappropriate for school.
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* EstablishingCharacterMoment: The first time we see Makoto, she is at a personal office desk in the student council room, room cutting the drama club's budget because she felt that their choice to perform ''Theatre/OedipusRex'' ''Theatre/OedipusTheKing'' was inappropriate for school.school, demonstrating how {{Absurdly Powerful|Student Council}} she is and how she abuses her power to uphold her own standards of decency.
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* AbusiveParents: Sadly, Ryuji's father as in canon. [[spoiler:Kamoshida uses this to provoke Ryuji into attacking him, as in the game, but Makoto manages to rescue him at the last minute]].
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* AbusiveParents: Sadly, Ryuji's father was as abusive to him as he is in canon. [[spoiler:Kamoshida uses this to provoke Ryuji into attacking him, as in the game, but Makoto manages to rescue him at the last minute]].
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* AdaptationalHeroism: The Traitor, [[spoiler:Goro Akechi, rejects Yaldabaoth and]] becomes a good guy in this fic. The author has explicitly expressed that he has no intention of subverting this.
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* AdaptationalHeroism: The Traitor, [[spoiler:Goro Akechi, rejects Yaldabaoth and]] Yaldabaoth]] and becomes a good guy in this fic. The author has explicitly expressed that he has no intention of subverting this.
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* AdaptationDeviation: Mostly averted with Ann, who stands out as the only aspect of the Phantom Thieves from the main game that this trope ''doesn't'' really apply to. While she's not entirely the same since Shiho doesn't undergo her extreme abuse under Kamoshida, Ann's personality, characterization and role in the team are largely unchanged. When one considers that Akira now has a set personality, Makoto and Ryuji are antagonists, [[spoiler: Shiho gains a Persona, Akechi is a genuinely heroic leader]], and the rest of the Phantom Thieves don't appear, Ann escapes unscathed from having any major deviations done to her.
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* AdaptationDeviation: Mostly averted with Ann, who stands out as the only aspect of the Phantom Thieves from the main game that this trope ''doesn't'' really apply to. While she's not entirely the same since Shiho doesn't undergo her extreme abuse under Kamoshida, Ann's personality, characterization characterization, and role in the team are largely unchanged. When one considers that Akira now has a set personality, Makoto and Ryuji are antagonists, [[spoiler: Shiho gains a Persona, Akechi is a genuinely heroic leader]], and the rest of the Phantom Thieves don't appear, Ann escapes unscathed from having any major deviations done to her.
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* AbusiveParents: Sadly, Ryuji's father as in canon. [[spoiler:Kamoshida uses this to provoke Ryuji into attacking him, as in the game, but Makoto manages to rescue him at the last minute]].
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* BigBrotherWorship: Makoto looks up to Sae as a role model and guardian. There are hints to their canon strained relationship, like Makoto's nervousness when she thought of asking Sae for permission to go on a trip with Eiko, but otherwise Makoto admires Sae. To reflect this, there's a statue of Sae as Lady Justice (holding a scale and sword) in Makoto's palace.
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* FirstNameBasis:
** All of the Phantom Thieves call each other by their first names upon becoming friends, which is especially meaningful for Akechi, who notes that no one ever uses his first name.
** Rather creepily, Akira is referred to as "Akira-Chan" by Makoto, and when she forces him to come to her apartment, she also makes him call her by her first name.
* FriendlessBackground: Akechi admits that no one has ever called him their friend, and is overjoyed when Akira does so, to the point of trying to hug him.
** All of the Phantom Thieves call each other by their first names upon becoming friends, which is especially meaningful for Akechi, who notes that no one ever uses his first name.
** Rather creepily, Akira is referred to as "Akira-Chan" by Makoto, and when she forces him to come to her apartment, she also makes him call her by her first name.
* FriendlessBackground: Akechi admits that no one has ever called him their friend, and is overjoyed when Akira does so, to the point of trying to hug him.
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* LastNameBasis:
** Akechi admits that almost everyone just calls him Akechi, to the point that being called by his first name "Goro" stuns him at first. After they become friends, Ann, Akira, and Shiho all switch to calling him Goro, but the narration still refers to him as Akechi.
** After Akira [[spoiler:takes Makoto into her palace, he insists she stop calling him "Akira-Chan", and instead just refer to him as Kurusu]].
** Akechi admits that almost everyone just calls him Akechi, to the point that being called by his first name "Goro" stuns him at first. After they become friends, Ann, Akira, and Shiho all switch to calling him Goro, but the narration still refers to him as Akechi.
** After Akira [[spoiler:takes Makoto into her palace, he insists she stop calling him "Akira-Chan", and instead just refer to him as Kurusu]].
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* ParentalAbandonment: Ann's parents are almost never around, traveling in other countries for their jobs and leaving Ann alone at the apartment most of the time. She is clearly sad about it, with Shiho telling Akira and Akechi that it's a sore spot that they should not bring up.
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* Sadist: Makoto enjoys flaunting her power over others, but Shadow Makoto is even worse. When she captures Ann and Akechi, she plans to execute both publicly, telling the executer, Cognitive Shiho, to strangle Ann slowly because Makoto wants to enjoy it. [[spoiler:This ends up spurning Shiho's awakening]].
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* Sadist: {{Sadist}}: Makoto enjoys flaunting her power over others, but Shadow Makoto is even worse. When she captures Ann and Akechi, she plans to execute both publicly, telling the executer, executioner, Cognitive Shiho, to strangle Ann slowly because Makoto wants to enjoy it. [[spoiler:This ends up spurning Shiho's awakening]].
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* AmazonianBeauty: Makoto's Cognitive Shiho, who is described as being an Amazon by the real Shiho. She's very tall, almost twice the height of the real Shiho, and extremely strong.
* AntiVillain: Ryuji isn't a bad guy, but he feels he owes Makoto for getting rid of Kamoshida, even if he's grown increasingly wary of her.
* AntiVillain: Ryuji isn't a bad guy, but he feels he owes Makoto for getting rid of Kamoshida, even if he's grown increasingly wary of her.
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* AntiVillain: Ryuji isn't a bad guy, but he feels he owes Makoto for getting rid of Kamoshida, even if he's grown increasingly wary of her.
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* AntiVillain: Ryuji isn't a bad guy, but he feels he owes ApologeticAttacker: The Cognitive Shiho doesn't want to harm Ann, because Makoto for getting rid of Kamoshida, even if he's grown increasingly wary of her.knows that Shiho and Ann are friends in the real world. But Makoto is so warped that she believes no one can deny her, so the Cognitive Shiho still follows Makoto's orders to execute Ann, albeit while crying and with clear regret.
-->'''Cognitive Shiho:''' I’m sorry Ann. I want you to know that this brings me no pleasure.
-->'''Cognitive Shiho:''' I’m sorry Ann. I want you to know that this brings me no pleasure.
* BadLiar: Ann is simply a terrible liar. When Shiho catches Ann and Akira going off to explore the Metaverse, Ann tries to lie and Shiho sees right through her. Ann ends up just panicking and running away.
* BullyHunter: What Ryuji used to be, before Makoto turned him into her attack dog. He still wants to help people, it's just that Makoto convinced him that being her enforcer is the best way to do so, turning Ryuji from a bully hunter to just a straight-out bully.
-->'''Ann:''' Ryuji’s always been a short-tempered idiot meathead, but he also used to be really sweet. He’d get in some fights, but it was always to help somebody else out. He cared about people, and hated seeing them get bullied or taken advantage of.
-->'''Ann:''' Ryuji’s always been a short-tempered idiot meathead, but he also used to be really sweet. He’d get in some fights, but it was always to help somebody else out. He cared about people, and hated seeing them get bullied or taken advantage of.
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* EpicFlail: Russian's melee weapon as a Phantom Thief is a variation of a meteor hammer, a pair of spiked balls linked together by a long chain.
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* EpicFlail: Russian's melee weapon as a Phantom Thief Hero is a variation of a meteor hammer, a pair of spiked balls linked together by a long chain.
* ImplausibleDeniability: Shadow Makoto can immediately tell that Karasu is Akechi, but Akechi still tries to deny it.
-->'''Akechi:''' How do you know who I- I mean… You are mistaken, villain! I am the Phantom Hero Karasu!
-->'''Akechi:''' How do you know who I- I mean… You are mistaken, villain! I am the Phantom Hero Karasu!
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* MentorArchetype: Akira has three mentors through the story. Igor, the master of the Velvet Room, Arsene, his FightingSpirit, and Goro Akechi/Karasu, a veteran Phantom Thief.
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* MentorArchetype: Akira has three mentors through the story. Igor, the master of the Velvet Room, Arsene, his FightingSpirit, and Goro Akechi/Karasu, a veteran Phantom Thief.Hero.
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* SailorEarth: The first original Phantom Thief, Russian (Shiho), follows the trends set by ''Persona 5''. Their Persona, Sonya, is based on [[https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Sonya_Golden_Hand Sonya Golden Hand]], a Russian con artist from the late 1800s.
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* Sadist: Makoto enjoys flaunting her power over others, but Shadow Makoto is even worse. When she captures Ann and Akechi, she plans to execute both publicly, telling the executer, Cognitive Shiho, to strangle Ann slowly because Makoto wants to enjoy it. [[spoiler:This ends up spurning Shiho's awakening]].
* SailorEarth: The first original PhantomThief, Hero, Russian (Shiho), follows the trends set by ''Persona 5''. Their Persona, Sonya, is based on [[https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Sonya_Golden_Hand Sonya Golden Hand]], a Russian con artist from the late 1800s.
* SailorEarth: The first original Phantom
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* SweetTooth: Ann, per the norm. Shiho is openly concerned about Ann's unbalanced diet.
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* SweetTooth: SweetTooth:
** Ann, per the norm. During lunch with Akira and Shiho, all she eats is a flan. Shiho is openly concerned about Ann's unbalanceddiet.diet, and once even snuck into Ann's apartment to cook her a proper meal.
** Akechi as well. He is ecstatic when Ann gives him a piece of cake, and when the others stare at him he sheepishly admits that he usually doesn't eat many sweets even though he loves them.
** Ann, per the norm. During lunch with Akira and Shiho, all she eats is a flan. Shiho is openly concerned about Ann's unbalanced
** Akechi as well. He is ecstatic when Ann gives him a piece of cake, and when the others stare at him he sheepishly admits that he usually doesn't eat many sweets even though he loves them.
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* UsedToBeASweetKid: Akechi and Shiho say that Makoto used to be more compassionate. Chapters 11, 14, 15, and 16 detail how she went from the kind individual she was in canon to the KnightTemplar she is now.
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* UsedToBeASweetKid: UsedToBeASweetKid:
** Akechi and Shiho say that Makoto used to be more compassionate. Chapters 11, 14, 15, and 16 detail how she went from the kind individual she was in canon to the KnightTemplar she isnow.now.
** Ryuji used to be a sweet person, and a BullyHunter. Though she says that Ryuji "had always been rough and kind of a meathead", Ann still remembers how he always wanted to help people, and believes (correctly) that Ryuji still wants to help others, it's just that Makoto points him in the wrong directions.
** Akechi and Shiho say that Makoto used to be more compassionate. Chapters 11, 14, 15, and 16 detail how she went from the kind individual she was in canon to the KnightTemplar she is
** Ryuji used to be a sweet person, and a BullyHunter. Though she says that Ryuji "had always been rough and kind of a meathead", Ann still remembers how he always wanted to help people, and believes (correctly) that Ryuji still wants to help others, it's just that Makoto points him in the wrong directions.
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* WeUsedToBeFriends: It's clear Ann regrets her broken friendship with Ryuji. She notes that Ryuji used to be sweet and resents Makoto for "twisting" him. During her Persona awakening, Carmen even says that she should fight to prevent Akira from being twisted "like that other boy". Significantly, Ann still calls him Ryuji, while he almost always calls her by her surname.
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''[[http://archiveofourown.org/works/11533185/chapters/25891839 The Evil Queen]]'' is a completed ''VideoGame/Persona5'' {{Fanfic}} written by [[http://archiveofourown.org/users/vivvav/pseuds/vivvav vivvav]] and published July 17, 2017 on Website/ArchiveOfOurOwn
It is an AlternateUniverseFic in where, instead of Kamoshida, [[AdaptationalVillainy Makoto]] [[BigBad Niijima]] ruled over Shujin Academy to the point that she developed her own Palace. As the student council president, Makoto holds all the real power in Shujin as she tries to shape everything into a utopia of her design. With the arrival of Akira Kurusu, a young man convicted of a crime he didn't commit, she'll not stand for a delinquent troublemaker tarnishing Shujin's reputation. Akira, for his part, only wants to keep his head down until his probation is served, but life has other plans in store for him.
It is an AlternateUniverseFic in where, instead of Kamoshida, [[AdaptationalVillainy Makoto]] [[BigBad Niijima]] ruled over Shujin Academy to the point that she developed her own Palace. As the student council president, Makoto holds all the real power in Shujin as she tries to shape everything into a utopia of her design. With the arrival of Akira Kurusu, a young man convicted of a crime he didn't commit, she'll not stand for a delinquent troublemaker tarnishing Shujin's reputation. Akira, for his part, only wants to keep his head down until his probation is served, but life has other plans in store for him.
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''[[http://archiveofourown.org/works/11533185/chapters/25891839 The Evil Queen]]'' is a completed ''VideoGame/Persona5'' {{Fanfic}} written by [[http://archiveofourown.org/users/vivvav/pseuds/vivvav vivvav]] and published July 17, 2017 on Website/ArchiveOfOurOwn
Website/ArchiveOfOurOwn.
It is an AlternateUniverseFic in where, instead of Kamoshida, [[AdaptationalVillainyMakoto]] [[BigBad Makoto Niijima]] ruled over Shujin Academy to the point that she developed her own Palace. As the student council president, Makoto holds all the real power in Shujin as she tries to shape everything into a utopia of her design. With the arrival of Akira Kurusu, a young man convicted of a crime he didn't commit, she'll not stand for a delinquent troublemaker tarnishing Shujin's reputation. Akira, for his part, only wants to keep his head down until his probation is served, but life has other plans in store for him.
It is an AlternateUniverseFic in where, instead of Kamoshida, [[AdaptationalVillainy
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This or these examples of Surprisingly Realistic Outcome seem to violate at least one of these rules, which disqualifies them: No character reactions (characters get angry, don't forgive, don't change their personality instantly, etc.); Too fantastical (depends on the properties of magic, powers, sci-fi tech, monsters, etc.); Not surprising (a character was warned about the outcome, it's used to provide Karma or An Aesop, or it simply follows normal conventions for this genre or medium); Plot happens (the example only describes an event, but not why audiences would expect a different, unrealistic outcome); Not an outcome (a character just explains why something wouldn't work as expected, or something is just an innate aspect of the setting or character that has a logical reason for being present); More of a Deconstruction (the event has major, lasting effects on the plot, make something more realistic, but not completely realistic, or a parody/fanwork applies realistic consequences to the events of a different work); or fits better under a different trope. See the trope's definition for more details. If you believe a removal was a mistake, please bring it up in the cleanup thread
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* SurprisinglyRealisticOutcome: In the end [[spoiler: Shadow Makoto is defeated and forces Makoto's reform, but it can't undo the physical, mental, and sexual abuse Akira had to endure. The ending thus makes it clear Joker will keep his distance from her as she tries to fix herself, with friendship or even the lightest of good terms out of the question. This is pretty much a natural and recommended action for people coming out of abusive relationships as it is still ill advised to be around your abuser even if they genuinely have reformed.]] This is also why [[spoiler: Joker and Makoto don't hook up despite AuthorAppeal of the ship.]]
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* RaceAgainstTheClock: Chapter 18, appropriately titled "Deadline", gives the Phantom Thieves 8 days to change Makoto's heart before [[spoiler:she either forces herself onto Akira as a birthday present to herself or gets Kawakami fired]].
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* TimedMission: Chapter 18, appropriately titled "Deadline", gives the Phantom Thieves 8 days to change Makoto's heart before [[spoiler:she either forces herself onto Akira as a birthday present to herself or gets Kawakami fired]].
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* AdaptationDeviation: Mostly averted with Ann, who stands out as the only aspect of the Phantom Thieves from the main game that this trope ''doesn't'' really apply to. While she's not entirely the same since Shiho doesn't undergo her extreme abuse under Kamoshida, Ann's personality, characterization and role in the team are largely unchanged. When one considers that Akira now has a set personality, Makoto and Ryuji are antagonists, [[spoiler: Shiho gains a Persona, Akechi is a genuinely heroic leader]], and the rest of the Phantom Thieves don't appear, Ann escapes unscathed from having any major deviations done to her.
