Is there an issue? Send a MessageReason:
None
Changed line(s) 33,35 (click to see context) from:
* LampshadeHanging: Much of the second half lampshades absurd things about the story. For example, it's outright stated that it makes no sense for Pawnee to simultaneously be a girl and a town.
** Another example:
-->Minos looked solemn; he wasn’t even shitting, which is kind of his character's gimmick, so you could tell he meant business.
** Another example:
-->Minos looked solemn; he wasn’t even shitting, which is kind of his character's gimmick, so you could tell he meant business.
to:
* LampshadeHanging: Much of the second half lampshades absurd things about the story. For example, it's outright stated that it makes no sense for Pawnee to simultaneously be a girl and a town.
Numerous examples.
**Another example:
-->Minos''Minos looked solemn; he wasn’t even shitting, which is kind of his character's gimmick, so you could tell he meant business.''
** ''"I mean, how the fuck can someone even be simultaneously a city and a girl anyway?! It’s literally nonsensical."''
** ''“It’s so much better to be able to flat-out explain these things,” Jeanne said appreciatively. “No more of that opaque ‘tee-hee, do you get my obscure reference?’ nonsense.”''
**
-->Minos
** ''"I mean, how the fuck can someone even be simultaneously a city and a girl anyway?! It’s literally nonsensical."''
** ''“It’s so much better to be able to flat-out explain these things,” Jeanne said appreciatively. “No more of that opaque ‘tee-hee, do you get my obscure reference?’ nonsense.”''
Is there an issue? Send a MessageReason:
None
Changed line(s) 64 (click to see context) from:
-->Anna grinned. “I’m dyslexic.”[[note]]This was mentioned in chapter 2 in the section giving the backstory of the Pony Pals (a section present in all of the Pony Pals books) but not once more after that.[[/note]]
to:
-->Anna grinned. “I’m dyslexic.”[[note]]This was mentioned in chapter 2 in the section giving the backstory of the Pony Pals (a section present in all of the Pony Pals books) but not once more after that.that, until now.[[/note]]
Is there an issue? Send a MessageReason:
None
Changed line(s) 27 (click to see context) from:
* HypocriticalHumor: One section is presented in the form of a Platonic dialogue, where everything people say is presented as a dialogue transcript, but Acorn stubbornly refuses to play along with this format. The section ends like so:
to:
* HypocriticalHumor: Intentionally done by Acorn. One section is presented in the form of a Platonic dialogue, where everything people say is presented as a dialogue transcript, but Acorn stubbornly refuses to play along with this format. The section ends like so:
Is there an issue? Send a MessageReason:
None
Changed line(s) 62 (click to see context) from:
* WhamLine:
to:
* WhamLine:WhamLine: The very end of chapter 8.
Is there an issue? Send a MessageReason:
None
Added DiffLines:
* WhamLine:
-->“But why only you?” Dirk asked. “I killed and revived Minos too. Several times. And there were even more that I killed and left dead. What’s special about you?”
-->Anna grinned. “I’m dyslexic.”[[note]]This was mentioned in chapter 2 in the section giving the backstory of the Pony Pals (a section present in all of the Pony Pals books) but not once more after that.[[/note]]
-->“But why only you?” Dirk asked. “I killed and revived Minos too. Several times. And there were even more that I killed and left dead. What’s special about you?”
-->Anna grinned. “I’m dyslexic.”[[note]]This was mentioned in chapter 2 in the section giving the backstory of the Pony Pals (a section present in all of the Pony Pals books) but not once more after that.[[/note]]
Is there an issue? Send a MessageReason:
None
Added DiffLines:
* DudeNotFunny: Anna says this to Dirk about the RunningGag of Pawnee being a severe alcoholic.
Is there an issue? Send a MessageReason:
None
Changed line(s) 57 (click to see context) from:
* UnusuallyUninterestingSight: At one point, Acorn turns into a lion, but Anna only tells him to turn back into a pony. We can only assume she's accustomed to Acorn doing such weird things.
to:
* UnusuallyUninterestingSight: UnusuallyUninterestingSight:
** At one point, Acorn turns into a lion, but Anna only tells him to turn back into a pony. We can only assume she's accustomed to Acorn doing such weird things.
** At one point, Acorn turns into a lion, but Anna only tells him to turn back into a pony. We can only assume she's accustomed to Acorn doing such weird things.
Is there an issue? Send a MessageReason:
None
Changed line(s) 17 (click to see context) from:
-->“I bow down to you, o creator,” Minos said sarcastically.
to:
-->“I bow down to you, o creator,” O Creator,” Minos said sarcastically.
Is there an issue? Send a MessageReason:
None
Changed line(s) 52 (click to see context) from:
* StealthHiBye: After Betancourt, Minos, and Acorn cast their vote [[spoiler: whether to restore the book to its original form]], Dirk, who had previously left the story entirely, abruptly returns to the scene.
to:
* StealthHiBye: After Betancourt, Minos, and Acorn cast their vote for [[spoiler: whether to restore the book to its original form]], Dirk, who had previously left the story entirely, abruptly returns to the scene.
Is there an issue? Send a MessageReason:
None
Added DiffLines:
* HypocriticalHumor: One section is presented in the form of a Platonic dialogue, where everything people say is presented as a dialogue transcript, but Acorn stubbornly refuses to play along with this format. The section ends like so:
-->“Fine!” Minos huffed. “There. No more dialogue. Happy?”
-->Acorn: Very.
-->“You don’t have to be an asshole about it, Acorn,” Jeanne Betancourt said.
-->“Fine!” Minos huffed. “There. No more dialogue. Happy?”
-->Acorn: Very.
-->“You don’t have to be an asshole about it, Acorn,” Jeanne Betancourt said.
Is there an issue? Send a MessageReason:
None
* RobbingTheDead: At one point, Pam loots a sweatshirt from a corpse and plans on using it to smother the cat.
Changed line(s) 54 (click to see context) from:
* VagueAge: Although the Pony Pals are fifth grade students in the original book series, in the modified book they do things that suggest an older age: drinking alcohol, sexual advances, and using lots of profanity.
to:
* VagueAge: Although the Pony Pals are fifth grade students in the original book series, in the modified book they do things that suggest an older age: drinking alcohol, sexual advances, and using lots of profanity.profanity.
* WhatHappenedToTheMouse: Nearly happens to Pam's claim of knowing who Pawnee's "real father" is. Dirk lampshades it after Pawnee asks him who her real father is, saying that he "almost forgot about this subplot.
* WhatHappenedToTheMouse: Nearly happens to Pam's claim of knowing who Pawnee's "real father" is. Dirk lampshades it after Pawnee asks him who her real father is, saying that he "almost forgot about this subplot.
Is there an issue? Send a MessageReason:
None
Changed line(s) 9 (click to see context) from:
* AllGirlsLovePonies
to:
* AllGirlsLovePoniesAllGirlsLikePonies
Is there an issue? Send a MessageReason:
None
Added DiffLines:
* ABoyAndHisX: Anna and her pony Acorn.
Is there an issue? Send a MessageReason:
None
Added DiffLines:
* StealthHiBye: After Betancourt, Minos, and Acorn cast their vote [[spoiler: whether to restore the book to its original form]], Dirk, who had previously left the story entirely, abruptly returns to the scene.
Is there an issue? Send a MessageReason:
None
Changed line(s) 42 (click to see context) from:
* ShoutOut: The story is filled with intentionally obscure references to obscure works. A list of all references can be found [[http://detective-pony.tumblr.com/credits here]]. Later on, these references become a plot point.
to:
* ShoutOut: The story is filled with intentionally obscure references to obscure works.works of fiction. A list of all references can be found [[http://detective-pony.tumblr.com/credits here]]. Later on, these references become a plot point.
Is there an issue? Send a MessageReason:
None
Added DiffLines:
* CharlieAndTheChocolateParody: At one point, Dirk fantasizes about a version of the story where psychology is the chocolate factory and he is Charlie.
Is there an issue? Send a MessageReason:
None
Added DiffLines:
* TheyKilledKenny: The cat is killed only to promptly come back to life four times in the story.
Is there an issue? Send a MessageReason:
None
Added DiffLines:
* LeaningOnTheFourthWall: Anna says to Dirk's self-insert regarding Dirk (the author of the story rather than the character within Pony Pals): "Does thinking of yourself as a character in a story make you sleep easier at night?"
Is there an issue? Send a MessageReason:
None
Changed line(s) 40 (click to see context) from:
* ShoutOut: The story is filled with intentionally obscure references to obscure works. A list of all references can be found [[http://detective-pony.tumblr.com/credits here]].
to:
* ShoutOut: The story is filled with intentionally obscure references to obscure works. A list of all references can be found [[http://detective-pony.tumblr.com/credits here]]. Later on, these references become a plot point.
Is there an issue? Send a MessageReason:
None
Added DiffLines:
* {{Metafiction}}: The whole story is like this.
Is there an issue? Send a MessageReason:
None
Added DiffLines:
** Jeanne Betancourt is not weirded out by seeing Acorn speaking English, or seeing the Pony Pals swearing and accusing her of messing everything up.
Is there an issue? Send a MessageReason:
None
Added DiffLines:
* MotorMouth: Dirk's self-insert won't shut up about ancient Greek stuff.
Is there an issue? Send a MessageReason:
None
Changed line(s) 13 (click to see context) from:
* CatsAreMean: Minos is arguably the main antagonist of the story. He loves tormenting the Pony Pals and Acorn. [[spoiler: At one point he kills Anna and tells Acorn that he'll bring her back if he lets him take him to hell.]]
to:
* CatsAreMean: Minos is arguably the main antagonist of the first half of the story. He loves tormenting the Pony Pals and Acorn. [[spoiler: At one point he kills Anna and tells Acorn that he'll bring her back if he lets him take him to hell.]]
Is there an issue? Send a MessageReason:
None
Added DiffLines:
* {{Squee}}: Dirk's self-insert has something resembling one: he says "Yessss." in the last chapter when Jeanne Betancourt decides to make it a one-on-one dialogue about the book's nature.
Is there an issue? Send a MessageReason:
Spoiler tagging trope names in example lists is strictly forbidden, and spoiler tagging an example\'s entire text is strongly discouraged. See How To Write An Example and Spoiler Policy. Fixed Example Indentation.
Changed line(s) 8,9 (click to see context) from:
* [[spoiler: AmbiguousEnding: The story ends with Pawnee making her choice as to whether to restore the book to what it originally was, though it's left ambiguous which choice she makes.]]
** [[spoiler: The side story about Brandy and Dr. Crandal also ends like this. They both shoot the other with their respective guns, but only one of them is loaded; it's not stated which one is.]]
** [[spoiler: The side story about Brandy and Dr. Crandal also ends like this. They both shoot the other with their respective guns, but only one of them is loaded; it's not stated which one is.]]
to:
* [[spoiler: AmbiguousEnding: AmbiguousEnding:
** The story ends with Pawnee making her choiceas to whether to restore [[spoiler:restore the book to what it originally was, though it's left ambiguous which choice she makes.]]
was]], but her decision is not disclosed.
**[[spoiler: The side story about Brandy [[spoiler:Brandy and Dr. Crandal also Crandal]] ends like this. They both when they try to shoot the other with their respective guns, each other, but only one of them gun is loaded; it's not stated which one is.]]is not disclosed.
** The story ends with Pawnee making her choice
**
Is there an issue? Send a MessageReason:
None
Changed line(s) 8 (click to see context) from:
* AmbiguousEnding: [[spoiler: The story ends with Pawnee making her choice as to whether to restore the book to what it originally was, though it's left ambiguous which choice she makes.]]
to:
* [[spoiler: AmbiguousEnding: [[spoiler: The story ends with Pawnee making her choice as to whether to restore the book to what it originally was, though it's left ambiguous which choice she makes.]]
Is there an issue? Send a MessageReason:
None
Changed line(s) 26 (click to see context) from:
-->Minos looked solemn; he wasn’t even shitting, which is kind of his gimmick, so you could tell he meant business.
to:
-->Minos looked solemn; he wasn’t even shitting, which is kind of his character's gimmick, so you could tell he meant business.
