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** When Morgan complains that Klingon bloodwine tastes horrible, Tovan tr'Khev tells her that "the ale here tastes like a mugato peed in battery acid." Slight tweak of a line from the ''Series/{{Castle}}'' episode "[[Recap/CastleS1E4HellHathNoFury Hell Hath No Fury]]".
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** When Morgan complains that Klingon bloodwine tastes horrible, Tovan tr'Khev tells her that "the ale here tastes like a mugato peed in battery acid." Slight tweak of a line from the ''Series/{{Castle}}'' ''Series/{{Castle|2009}}'' episode "[[Recap/CastleS1E4HellHathNoFury Hell Hath No Fury]]".
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** D'trel's rant in part 1 borrows lines from Creator/BrandonSanderson's ''Literature/TheWayOfKings'' and ''Literature/WordsOfRadiance''.
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** D'trel's rant in part 1 borrows lines from Creator/BrandonSanderson's ''Literature/TheWayOfKings'' ''Literature/TheWayOfKings2010'' and ''Literature/WordsOfRadiance''.
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Tropers/StarSword had proposed a prompt to finish a storyline that Cryptic Studios [[AbortedArc started but never finished]]. Unsatisfied with the vague WordOfGod explanation of the current status of the Romulan Star Empire after the kidnapping of Empress Sela, he and worffan collaborated on a geopolitical/military thriller to formally end the storyline. Praetor Velal of the Romulan Star Empire contacts the Romulan Republic, asking for a summit to discuss an end to hostilities and recognition of the Republic's right to exist. Things get off to a rocky start, and ''Rahaen'Enriov'' D'trel ir'Aehallah tr'Rihannsu (worffan's recurring Romulan character) and ''Khre'Riov'' Morgaiah ir'Sheratan t'Thavrau (from ''Fanfic/LegacyOfChRihan'') have to step in, bending their skills as warriors to work for peace.
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Tropers/StarSword had proposed a prompt to finish a storyline that Cryptic Studios Creator/CrypticStudios [[AbortedArc started but never finished]]. Unsatisfied with the vague WordOfGod explanation of the current status of the Romulan Star Empire after the kidnapping of Empress Sela, he and worffan collaborated on a geopolitical/military thriller to formally end the storyline. Praetor Velal of the Romulan Star Empire contacts the Romulan Republic, asking for a summit to discuss an end to hostilities and recognition of the Republic's right to exist. Things get off to a rocky start, and ''Rahaen'Enriov'' D'trel ir'Aehallah tr'Rihannsu (worffan's recurring Romulan character) and ''Khre'Riov'' Morgaiah ir'Sheratan t'Thavrau (from ''Fanfic/LegacyOfChRihan'') have to step in, bending their skills as warriors to work for peace.
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** To the ''Series/StargateSG1'' episode "[[Recap/StargateSG1S3E3FairGame Fair Game]]" in the InMediaRes opening when Jaleh explains how the negotiations went south early:
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''[[http://sto-forum.perfectworld.com/showthread.php?p=20409881#post20409881 Peace Forged in Fire]]'' ([[ForeignLanguageTitle original Romulan language title]]: ''Saith Daehpahr hrrafv Llaiirevha'') is a ''VideoGame/StarTrekOnline'' fanfic by Tropers/StarSword and worffan101, written for [[http://sto-forum.perfectworld.com/showthread.php?t=1267581 Unofficial Literary Challenge #4: The Return of the Revenge of the Unofficial LC of DOOOOOMMMMMM!!!!!]] on the ''STO'' forums.
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* FantasticReligiousWeirdness: Jaleh Khoroushi mentions she stopped bothering to keep ''halal'' on deployment years ago. She's a Starfleet liaison to a Romulan ship.
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* FantasticReligiousWeirdness: Jaleh Khoroushi mentions she stopped bothering to keep ''halal'' on deployment years ago. She's a Starfleet liaison to a Romulan ship. (The author's notes admitted that this was Tropers/StarSword's way of [[ArtisticLicenseReligion covering up for forgetting]] in "Fanfic/AenrhienVailiuri" that observant Muslims do not drink alcohol.)
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* BroadStrokes: Some sacrifices have to be made to do {{crossover}}s with Worffan101's character D'trel, since all Romulan {{Player Character}}s have the same basic {{backstory}}. Among other things Tovan tr'Khev's presence in some of D'trel's past adventures is ignored in favor of him being assigned to Morgan's ship, and it's indicated that Morgan and D'trel didn't know each other before this story despite both having lived on Virinat.
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** {{Exploited}} by Colonel Merik, who intentionally provokes D'trel into {{Berserker}} mode by speaking fondly of two other Tal'Shiar, one of them being [[CompleteMonster Hakeev]]. [[spoiler:He was luring her in so he could trap and kill her, though he underestimated how much gun Velal had brought along.]]
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** {{Exploited}} by Colonel Merik, who intentionally provokes D'trel into {{Berserker}} mode by speaking fondly of two other Tal'Shiar, one of them being [[CompleteMonster Hakeev]].Hakeev. [[spoiler:He was luring her in so he could trap and kill her, though he underestimated how much gun Velal had brought along.]]
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** The ch'R ''Maens'' detects a tachyon burst, which in ''Fanfic/RedFireRedPlanet'' [[spoiler:was a sign of a cloaked warship dropping to sublight]].
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* DopeSlap: The tactical officer of the ch'R ''Maens'' does this to the sensor officer after he tries to laugh off a tachyon burst.
-->'''Subcommander t'Ihaimehn:''' Better wake the ''leih''.\\
'''Sensor Officer:''' That could mean any number of things, rekkhai. ''(DopeSlap)'' Ow!\\
'''t'Ihaimehn:''' Yes, 'any number of things', and most of the list consists of things I would not wish to face without ''Riov'' t'Khellian on the bridge.
-->'''Subcommander t'Ihaimehn:''' Better wake the ''leih''.\\
'''Sensor Officer:''' That could mean any number of things, rekkhai. ''(DopeSlap)'' Ow!\\
'''t'Ihaimehn:''' Yes, 'any number of things', and most of the list consists of things I would not wish to face without ''Riov'' t'Khellian on the bridge.
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* UpThroughTheRanks: The narration in part 2 mentions in passing that Jaleh Khoroushi used to be a chief petty officer (specifically a quartermaster).
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* ThemeNaming: Several of the Romulan ships are named after the {{Generation Ship}}s that took the Romulans to Romulus in ''Literature/{{Rihannsu}}: The Romulan Way''. Among them are the three leads' ships--D'trel's ''Kholhr'' (''Vengeance''), Morgan's ''Aen'rhien'' (''Bloodwing''), and Velal's ''Eyhon Eludet'eri'' (''Lost Road'')--as well as the RedShirt ships ''Delevhas'' (''Shield'') and ''Eyiv s'Rea'' (''Rea's Helm'').
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* UpThroughTheRanks: The narration in part 2 mentions in passing that Jaleh Khoroushi used to be a chief petty officer (specifically a quartermaster).
* VehicularThemeNaming: Several of the Romulan ships are named after the {{Generation Ship}}s that took the Romulans to Romulus in ''Literature/{{Rihannsu}}: The Romulan Way''. Among them are the three leads' ships--D'trel's ''Kholhr'' (''Vengeance''), Morgan's ''Aen'rhien'' (''Bloodwing''), and Velal's ''Eyhon Eludet'eri'' (''Lost Road'')--as well as the RedShirt ships ''Delevhas'' (''Shield'') and ''Eyiv s'Rea'' (''Rea's Helm'').
* VehicularThemeNaming: Several of the Romulan ships are named after the {{Generation Ship}}s that took the Romulans to Romulus in ''Literature/{{Rihannsu}}: The Romulan Way''. Among them are the three leads' ships--D'trel's ''Kholhr'' (''Vengeance''), Morgan's ''Aen'rhien'' (''Bloodwing''), and Velal's ''Eyhon Eludet'eri'' (''Lost Road'')--as well as the RedShirt ships ''Delevhas'' (''Shield'') and ''Eyiv s'Rea'' (''Rea's Helm'').
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--> '''''Deihu'' Hannam t'Hei''': How long will it take to reach Khitomer, ''Khre’Riov''?
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--> '''''Deihu'' Hannam t'Hei''': How long will it take to reach Khitomer, ''Khre’Riov''?
'''Morgan:''' Four days, five hours, as the [[labelnote:mogai]]crow[[/labelnote]] flies.
--> '''''Deihu'' Hannam t'Hei''': How long will it take to reach Khitomer, ''Khre’Riov''?
'''Morgan:''' Four days, five hours, as the [[labelnote:mogai]]crow[[/labelnote]] flies.
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* RammingAlwaysWorks: {{Justified}}. Velal's flagship ch'R ''Eyhon Ehludet'eri'', [[spoiler:a ''Scimitar''-class]], casually runs over a much smaller ''T'varo''-class that simply explodes on contact with the ''Eyhon'''s navigational shields. It's a bit like hitting a bass boat with an aircraft carrier. ROADKILL!
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* RedOniBlueOni: D'trel is the red oni to Morgan's blue. D'trel doesn't like Velal and has diametrically opposed political views, and runs on UnstoppableRage in battle, while Morgan is a more traditionalist Romulan, shares a friendly drink with Velal to hold the negotiations together, and has a much calmer, more rational fighting style. Also visible in their ship choices: D'trel's ''Kholhr'' is a GlassCannon[=/=]FragileSpeedster ''T'varo''-class light warbird, while Morgan captains a MightyGlacier ''D'deridex''-class battlecruiser.
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** To the ''Series/StargateSG1'' episode "[[Recap/StargateSG1S3E3FairGame Fair Game]]" in the InMediaRes opening when Jaleh explains how the negotiations went south early:
--->"Well, apparently we said hello, insulted each other, and broke for recess.
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* BloodKnight: PlayedForLaughs when Koren arrives to discover that she's missed the battle entirely.
-->'''Koren:''' Tal’Shiar scum! This is Koren, daughter of Grilka, Captain of the glorious IKS ''bortaS’qu''! You will—what the… What do you MEAN we missed out on a glorious battle? ARGH!!!!!! I haven’t seen any action since Qo’noS! Why does it ALWAYS take an impending apocalypse for me to get to kill things???\\
'''Brokosh:''' ''({{facepalm}})'' Koren, you damn fool, get back in formation.
-->'''Koren:''' Tal’Shiar scum! This is Koren, daughter of Grilka, Captain of the glorious IKS ''bortaS’qu''! You will—what the… What do you MEAN we missed out on a glorious battle? ARGH!!!!!! I haven’t seen any action since Qo’noS! Why does it ALWAYS take an impending apocalypse for me to get to kill things???\\
'''Brokosh:''' ''({{facepalm}})'' Koren, you damn fool, get back in formation.
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Tropers/StarSword had proposed a prompt to finish a storyline that Cryptic Studios [[AbortedArc started but never finished]]. Unsatisfied with the vague WordOfGod explanation of the current status of the Romulan Star Empire after the kidnapping of Empress Sela, he and worffan collaborated on a geopolitical/military thriller to formally end the storyline. Praetor Velal of the Romulan Star Empire contacts the Romulan Republic, asking for a summit to discuss an end to hostilities and recognition of the Republic's right to exist. Things get off to a rocky start, and ''Rahaen'Enriov'' D'trel ir'Aehallah tr'Rihannsu (worffan's recurring Romulan character) and ''Khre'Riov'' Morgaiah ir'Sheratan t'Thavrau (from ''Fanfic/LegacyOfChRihan'') have to step in, bending their skills as warriors to work for peace.
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Tropers/StarSword had proposed a prompt to finish a storyline that Cryptic Studios [[AbortedArc started but never finished]]. Unsatisfied with the vague WordOfGod explanation of the current status of the Romulan Star Empire after the kidnapping of Empress Sela, he and worffan collaborated on a geopolitical/military thriller to formally end the storyline. Praetor Velal of the Romulan Star Empire contacts the Romulan Republic, asking for a summit to discuss an end to hostilities and recognition of the Republic's right to exist. Things get off to a rocky start, and ''Rahaen'Enriov'' D'trel ir'Aehallah tr'Rihannsu (worffan's recurring Romulan character) and ''Khre'Riov'' Morgaiah ir'Sheratan t'Thavrau (from ''Fanfic/LegacyOfChRihan'') have to step in, bending their skills as warriors to work for peace.
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** {{Exploited}} by Colonel Merik, who intentionally provokes D'trel into {{Berserker}} mode by speaking fondly of two other Tal'Shiar, one of them being [[CompleteMonster Hakeev]]. [[spoiler:He was luring her in so he could trap and kill her, though he underestimated how much gun Velal had brought along.]]
** {{Subverted}} after Merik's ship is disabled. [[spoiler:He claims to have been one of the men who raped D'trel's lover Adani to death, to get her to destroy his ship to deny intelligence to the Republic and Empire. It backfires: D'trel decides death by exploding starship is too good for him and Merik is taken alive.]]
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''[[http://sto-forum.perfectworld.com/showthread.php?p=20409881#post20409881 Peace Forged in Fire]]'' ([[ForeignLanguageTitle original Romulan language title]]: ''Saith Daehpahr hrrafv Llaiirevha'') is a ''VideoGame/StarTrekOnline'' fanfic by Tropers/StarSword and worffan101, written for [[http://sto-forum.perfectworld.com/showthread.php?t=1267581 Unofficial Literary Challenge #4: The Return of the Revenge of the Unofficial LC of DOOOOOMMMMMM!!!!!]] on the ''STO'' forums.
Tropers/StarSword had proposed a prompt to finish a storyline that Cryptic Studios [[AbortedArc started but never finished]]. Unsatisfied with the vague WordOfGod explanation of the current status of the Romulan Star Empire after the kidnapping of Empress Sela, he and worffan collaborated on a geopolitical/military thriller to formally end the storyline. Praetor Velal of the Romulan Star Empire contacts the Romulan Republic, asking for a summit to discuss an end to hostilities and recognition of the Republic's right to exist. Things get off to a rocky start, and ''Rahaen'Enriov'' D'trel ir'Aehallah tr'Rihannsu (worffan's recurring Romulan character) and ''Khre'Riov'' Morgaiah ir'Sheratan t'Thavrau (from ''Fanfic/LegacyOfChRihan'') have to step in, bending their skills as warriors to work for peace.
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* AttackPatternAlpha: Attack patterns [[Literature/{{Rihannsu}} Tyrava]] Four, [[Series/StarTrekEnterprise Valdore]] Seven, [[Series/StarTrekDeepSpaceNine Velal]] Five, [[Film/StarTrekNemesis Shinzon]] Four, and [[Film/StarTrekNemesis Donatra]] Seven are mentioned.
* BerserkButton: D'trel's pathological hatred of the Tal'Shiar tends to make her go on [[RoaringRampageOfRevenge Roaring Rampages of Revenge]] at the mere mention of them in a positive light. First {{exploited}}, then {{subverted}}.
**{{Exploited}} by Colonel Merik, who intentionally provokes D'trel into {{Berserker}} mode by speaking fondly of two other Tal'Shiar, one of them being [[CompleteMonster Hakeev]]. [[spoiler:He was luring her in so he could trap and kill her, though he underestimated how much gun Velal had brought along.]]
**{{Subverted}} after Merik's ship is disabled. [[spoiler:He claims to have been one of the men who raped D'trel's lover Adani to death, to get her to destroy his ship to deny intelligence to the Republic and Empire. It backfires: D'trel decides death by exploding starship is too good for him and Merik is taken alive.]]
* CallBack:
** The Romulan Star Empire apparently fell into chaos (again) with the revelations that the Tal'Shiar were responsible for Hobus ("In Shadows" story arc) and Empress Sela's kidnapping by the Iconians (mission "Cutting the Cord"). Velal only recently restored order.
** There's roundabout explanations of Velal's backstory as the Romulan general who turned up in a couple episodes of ''Series/StarTrekDeepSpaceNine''. Among other things the destruction of the Romulan flagship IRW ''D'ridthau'' at Cardassia is mentioned (the ''Aen'rhien'', then an Imperial ship, apparently rescued the surviving crew).
* TheCameo: Brokosh (and Meromi Riyal, described but unnamed) from ''Fanfic/RedFireRedPlanet'' and Koren from the canon game arrive at the end.
* TheCavalry:
** Merik suckers D'trel and things look grim. [[spoiler:Then Velal's flagship, which had previously only been mentioned by name, decloaks. It's a ''Scimitar''-class.]]
** Also subverted. The Klingon Sixth Fleet that had been mentioned to be on its way turns up right ''after'' the battle. Starfleet and Republic reinforcements never even get there.
* TheDeadHaveNames: At the FadeToBlack, [[spoiler:Morgan reads off the names of all the crewmen, Republic and Imperial, who died in the fight against the Tal'Shiar]].
* EnemyMine: The Tal'Shiar's deceptions (and outright treason in attacking Imperial vessels in a FalseFlagOperation) convince Velal to join the Republic in fighting them. During the talks they also prepare command protocols for joint military operations against enemies like the Undine and Borg.
* {{Epigraph}}: Part 2 opens with the final verse and chorus of Music/{{Pink}}'s [[http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=yTCDVfMz15M "Try"]].
* FalseFlagOperation: The Tal'Shiar try to break up the talks by attacking an Imperial ship under Republic colors, but Jaleh [[SpottingTheThread sees through it right away]]: one of the warbirds' names they used belonged to a vessel that was destroyed fighting the Undine over Qo'noS. [[spoiler:They later attack the talks directly flying Republic colors, but the Republic had sent out an update three hours earlier for their IFF transponders that was missing from the fake ships.]]
* FantasticReligiousWeirdness: Jaleh Khoroushi mentions she stopped bothering to keep ''halal'' on deployment years ago. She's a Starfleet liaison to a Romulan ship.
* FantasticSlurs: "Hevam" for human and "Klivam" for Klingon, both derogatory terms from Rihan.
* ForeignLanguageTitle: ''Saith Daehpahr hrrafv Llaiirevha''. In a ConLang, no less.
* GratuitousForeignLanguage: So much Rihan that Tropers/StarSword [[http://sto-forum.perfectworld.com/showpost.php?p=20423171&postcount=20 provided a glossary]] when people complained. The intent was reportedly to emphasize that these weren't human characters.
* HeroicBastard: Morgan, apparently. Her mother never said who her father was, though Morgan suspects she was sparing a senator's ''mnhei'sahe''. (The Romulans care deeply about saving face.)
* ICannotSelfTerminate: [[spoiler:Merik tr'Kiell, because the final volleys from the ''Kholhr'' and ''Eyhon Eludet'eri'' knocked out his SelfDestructMechanism and took down the computers, and simply killing ''himself'' wouldn't keep large amounts of intel out of the hands of the enemy.]]
* ImADoctorNotAPlaceholder:
-->'''D'trel:''' How the ''Ariennye'' did I get into this, anyway? I’m a soldier, not a diplomat!
* IfIWantedYouDead: Velal uses this line when the traffic control guy at Khitomer decides to be an ObstructiveBureaucrat over Velal refusing to tell him what the Praetor of the Romulan Star Empire is doing in Klingon territory. (Morgan defuses the confrontation by threatening to get the Klingon High Council involved.)
-->'''Velal:''' If you wish, you may contact Governor Leskit’s office for the information for which you are cleared, but rest assured our mission here is peaceful.\\
'''Khitomer Control:''' Why should we believe you?\\
'''Velal:''' If our intent was otherwise, we would not be having this discussion and a third of this planet’s population would already be dead, [[FantasticSlurs Klivam]].
* InterServiceRivalry: In a nod to ''Series/StarTrekTheNextGeneration'', Morgan mentions that when she was in the Romulan Imperial Fleet, the Tal'Shiar were the enemy almost as much as Starfleet or the Klingons.
* IrrationalHatred: {{Defied}}. Morgan avoids the problem of her tactical officer Sahuel t'Khnialmnae being ex-Tal'Shiar, against whom D'trel has a pathological hatred, by ordering her command crew to not mention Sahuel's "prior affiliations" in D'trel's hearing.
* MacrossMissileMassacre: From the Tal'Shiar flagship ''Sienov'', a ''Khnial''-class battlecruiser based on the same technology as the ''Narada'', using the weapons that blew away a fleet in ''Film/StarTrek2009''. They target Morgan's screening ships and destroy at least three.
* TheMainCharactersDoEverything: {{Justified}}. Morgan and D'trel take over the negotiations from the trained Republic diplomats because Praetor Velal, previously career military, doesn't respect the politicos.
* MilitaryMoonshiner: Morgan has a side business brewing Romulan ale, and Velal is very impressed at the quality of her product. She also mentions she had a vineyard on Virinat before the attack, and in another scene speaks hopefully of one day going back there.
* NoodleIncident: Sahuel t'Khnialmnae is apparently ex-Tal'Shiar, and was aboard the ''Aen'rhien'' when it killed hundreds of refugees in an unelaborated incident.
-->'''Sahuel:''' ''(tearfully)'' That was an accident! And I wasn't even on duty!
* NameFromAnotherSpecies: Min'tak'allan is a Ferasan who uses a Jem'Hadar name. This is explained in other material: Omek'ti'kallan declared him an honorary Jem'Hadar in the piece worffan wrote for [[http://sto-forum.perfectworld.com/showpost.php?p=17831531&postcount=16 Literary Challenge 65.3]].
* PragmaticHero[=/=]PragmaticVillainy: Velal seeks peace with the Republic not because he's seen the light, but because he no longer has the resources to continue fighting them.
* PrecisionFStrike: There's a fair amount of [[PardonMyKlingon untranslated Rihan swearing]] and [[ForeignCussWord a bit of Farsi]], but at one point Morgan tells her command crew that:
-->"... getting an armistice is critical to our national security, and that means our conduct is critical to our national security. If somebody ''fucks'' this up, this warbird will not be responsible."
* ReligiousBruiser: Omek'ti'kallan worships "Glorious Odo'Ital", a.k.a. Odo from ''Series/StarTrekDeepSpaceNine''. [[ProudWarriorRaceGuy He's a Jem'Hadar First.]] Do the math.
* ShoutOut:
** Sarsachen refers to a Republic intelligence source {{codename}}d [[Literature/JackRyan CARDINAL]].
** Omek'ti'kallan quotes the Twenty-Ninth Word of Odo'Ital as [[Webcomic/SchlockMercenary "The enemy of my enemy is my enemy’s enemy--no more, no less."]]
** One of Morgan's lines to her command crew when she briefs them:
--->"I don't care if they say [[Film/MontyPythonAndTheHolyGrail your mother was a fvai and your father smelled of eigen berries]], you will not throw the first punch."
** D'trel's rant in part 1 borrows lines from Creator/BrandonSanderson's ''Literature/TheWayOfKings'' and ''Literature/WordsOfRadiance''.
** When Morgan complains that Klingon bloodwine tastes horrible, Tovan tr'Khev tells her that "the ale here tastes like a mugato peed in battery acid." Slight tweak of a line from the ''Series/{{Castle}}'' episode "[[Recap/CastleS1E4HellHathNoFury Hell Hath No Fury]]".
* SourSupporter: {{Discussed}}. Morgan is a more traditionalist Romulan than D'trel, a Unificationist, and tells Velal that she thinks that Proconsul D'Tan is a [[WideEyedIdealist "naive idealist"]] and doesn't agree with his politics. But she follows him because whatever his faults, he's sincerely trying to help.
* SpottingTheThread: The Tal'Shiar goof up their attempts at {{False Flag Operation}}s to break up the talks.
** In the first case, [[spoiler:they use Republic IFF beacons while attacking an Imperial warbird. One of the ships they masquerade as was destroyed months earlier.]]
** In the second case, [[spoiler:they use Republic IFF beacons while attacking the talks directly. They're spotted early because Command sent out an IFF update in response to the previous attempt.]]
* StrikeMeDown[=/=]ThanatosGambit: Merik tries to provoke D'trel to kill him by ranting about how he helped rape her lover to death decades before. [[spoiler:It backfires: D'trel decides death by exploding starship is ''too merciful''. Daysnur later determines the intent was to deny intelligence to the enemy--the SelfDestructMechanism and computers had been knocked offline so he couldn't get rid of the data himself. Still disgusting.]]
* UpThroughTheRanks: The narration in part 2 mentions in passing that Jaleh Khoroushi used to be a chief petty officer (specifically a quartermaster).
* TastesLikeFeet: According to Tovan tr'Khev, the ale at the Klingon bar where he meets Morgan "tastes like a mugato peed in battery acid."
* ThemeNaming: Several of the Romulan ships are named after the {{Generation Ship}}s that took the Romulans to Romulus in ''Literature/{{Rihannsu}}: The Romulan Way''. Among them are the three leads' ships--D'trel's ''Kholhr'' (''Vengeance''), Morgan's ''Aen'rhien'' (''Bloodwing''), and Velal's ''Eyhon Eludet'eri'' (''Lost Road'')--as well as the RedShirt ships ''Delevhas'' (''Shield'') and ''Eyiv s'Rea'' (''Rea's Helm'').
* ThereAreNoCoincidences: Morgan notes that the timing of the Tal'Shiar false-flag attack against ch'R ''Maens'' is more than a little coincidental. Tovan responds:
-->"I stopped believing in coincidence after I became a cop, Morgan. My guess? Somebody sprang a leak."
* ThreateningMediator: Velal tries to leave the talks after the faked Republic attack on an Imperial ship. Jaleh's response is to fire her phaser into the air and scream at him to sit down so he'll stay put long enough for her to look at the evidence.
* TokenHuman: Jaleh Khoroushi is the only human in the entire story.
* TokenReligiousTeammate: {{Downplayed}}. The Romulan characters tend to favor the Elements, which isn't an organized religion so much as an animistic spirituality. In contrast, Omek'ti'kallan worships Odo and frequently attributes maxims to him (one of them actually belonged to ''Webcomic/SchlockMercenary''), and Jaleh Khoroushi is a [[UsefulNotes/{{Islam}} Shiite]].
* UnfriendlyFire: D'trel's former CO Ameh ir'Tanat reportedly [[ThrownOutTheAirlock spaced]] their Tal'Shiar PoliticalOfficer and sent fake reports with his gear. Admiral tr'Kererek calls this "efficient".
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Tropers/StarSword had proposed a prompt to finish a storyline that Cryptic Studios [[AbortedArc started but never finished]]. Unsatisfied with the vague WordOfGod explanation of the current status of the Romulan Star Empire after the kidnapping of Empress Sela, he and worffan collaborated on a geopolitical/military thriller to formally end the storyline. Praetor Velal of the Romulan Star Empire contacts the Romulan Republic, asking for a summit to discuss an end to hostilities and recognition of the Republic's right to exist. Things get off to a rocky start, and ''Rahaen'Enriov'' D'trel ir'Aehallah tr'Rihannsu (worffan's recurring Romulan character) and ''Khre'Riov'' Morgaiah ir'Sheratan t'Thavrau (from ''Fanfic/LegacyOfChRihan'') have to step in, bending their skills as warriors to work for peace.
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!!Tropes:
* AttackPatternAlpha: Attack patterns [[Literature/{{Rihannsu}} Tyrava]] Four, [[Series/StarTrekEnterprise Valdore]] Seven, [[Series/StarTrekDeepSpaceNine Velal]] Five, [[Film/StarTrekNemesis Shinzon]] Four, and [[Film/StarTrekNemesis Donatra]] Seven are mentioned.
* BerserkButton: D'trel's pathological hatred of the Tal'Shiar tends to make her go on [[RoaringRampageOfRevenge Roaring Rampages of Revenge]] at the mere mention of them in a positive light. First {{exploited}}, then {{subverted}}.
**{{Exploited}} by Colonel Merik, who intentionally provokes D'trel into {{Berserker}} mode by speaking fondly of two other Tal'Shiar, one of them being [[CompleteMonster Hakeev]]. [[spoiler:He was luring her in so he could trap and kill her, though he underestimated how much gun Velal had brought along.]]
**{{Subverted}} after Merik's ship is disabled. [[spoiler:He claims to have been one of the men who raped D'trel's lover Adani to death, to get her to destroy his ship to deny intelligence to the Republic and Empire. It backfires: D'trel decides death by exploding starship is too good for him and Merik is taken alive.]]
* CallBack:
** The Romulan Star Empire apparently fell into chaos (again) with the revelations that the Tal'Shiar were responsible for Hobus ("In Shadows" story arc) and Empress Sela's kidnapping by the Iconians (mission "Cutting the Cord"). Velal only recently restored order.
** There's roundabout explanations of Velal's backstory as the Romulan general who turned up in a couple episodes of ''Series/StarTrekDeepSpaceNine''. Among other things the destruction of the Romulan flagship IRW ''D'ridthau'' at Cardassia is mentioned (the ''Aen'rhien'', then an Imperial ship, apparently rescued the surviving crew).
* TheCameo: Brokosh (and Meromi Riyal, described but unnamed) from ''Fanfic/RedFireRedPlanet'' and Koren from the canon game arrive at the end.
* TheCavalry:
** Merik suckers D'trel and things look grim. [[spoiler:Then Velal's flagship, which had previously only been mentioned by name, decloaks. It's a ''Scimitar''-class.]]
** Also subverted. The Klingon Sixth Fleet that had been mentioned to be on its way turns up right ''after'' the battle. Starfleet and Republic reinforcements never even get there.
* TheDeadHaveNames: At the FadeToBlack, [[spoiler:Morgan reads off the names of all the crewmen, Republic and Imperial, who died in the fight against the Tal'Shiar]].
* EnemyMine: The Tal'Shiar's deceptions (and outright treason in attacking Imperial vessels in a FalseFlagOperation) convince Velal to join the Republic in fighting them. During the talks they also prepare command protocols for joint military operations against enemies like the Undine and Borg.
* {{Epigraph}}: Part 2 opens with the final verse and chorus of Music/{{Pink}}'s [[http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=yTCDVfMz15M "Try"]].
* FalseFlagOperation: The Tal'Shiar try to break up the talks by attacking an Imperial ship under Republic colors, but Jaleh [[SpottingTheThread sees through it right away]]: one of the warbirds' names they used belonged to a vessel that was destroyed fighting the Undine over Qo'noS. [[spoiler:They later attack the talks directly flying Republic colors, but the Republic had sent out an update three hours earlier for their IFF transponders that was missing from the fake ships.]]
* FantasticReligiousWeirdness: Jaleh Khoroushi mentions she stopped bothering to keep ''halal'' on deployment years ago. She's a Starfleet liaison to a Romulan ship.
* FantasticSlurs: "Hevam" for human and "Klivam" for Klingon, both derogatory terms from Rihan.
* ForeignLanguageTitle: ''Saith Daehpahr hrrafv Llaiirevha''. In a ConLang, no less.
* GratuitousForeignLanguage: So much Rihan that Tropers/StarSword [[http://sto-forum.perfectworld.com/showpost.php?p=20423171&postcount=20 provided a glossary]] when people complained. The intent was reportedly to emphasize that these weren't human characters.
* HeroicBastard: Morgan, apparently. Her mother never said who her father was, though Morgan suspects she was sparing a senator's ''mnhei'sahe''. (The Romulans care deeply about saving face.)
* ICannotSelfTerminate: [[spoiler:Merik tr'Kiell, because the final volleys from the ''Kholhr'' and ''Eyhon Eludet'eri'' knocked out his SelfDestructMechanism and took down the computers, and simply killing ''himself'' wouldn't keep large amounts of intel out of the hands of the enemy.]]
* ImADoctorNotAPlaceholder:
-->'''D'trel:''' How the ''Ariennye'' did I get into this, anyway? I’m a soldier, not a diplomat!
* IfIWantedYouDead: Velal uses this line when the traffic control guy at Khitomer decides to be an ObstructiveBureaucrat over Velal refusing to tell him what the Praetor of the Romulan Star Empire is doing in Klingon territory. (Morgan defuses the confrontation by threatening to get the Klingon High Council involved.)
-->'''Velal:''' If you wish, you may contact Governor Leskit’s office for the information for which you are cleared, but rest assured our mission here is peaceful.\\
'''Khitomer Control:''' Why should we believe you?\\
'''Velal:''' If our intent was otherwise, we would not be having this discussion and a third of this planet’s population would already be dead, [[FantasticSlurs Klivam]].
* InterServiceRivalry: In a nod to ''Series/StarTrekTheNextGeneration'', Morgan mentions that when she was in the Romulan Imperial Fleet, the Tal'Shiar were the enemy almost as much as Starfleet or the Klingons.
* IrrationalHatred: {{Defied}}. Morgan avoids the problem of her tactical officer Sahuel t'Khnialmnae being ex-Tal'Shiar, against whom D'trel has a pathological hatred, by ordering her command crew to not mention Sahuel's "prior affiliations" in D'trel's hearing.
* MacrossMissileMassacre: From the Tal'Shiar flagship ''Sienov'', a ''Khnial''-class battlecruiser based on the same technology as the ''Narada'', using the weapons that blew away a fleet in ''Film/StarTrek2009''. They target Morgan's screening ships and destroy at least three.
* TheMainCharactersDoEverything: {{Justified}}. Morgan and D'trel take over the negotiations from the trained Republic diplomats because Praetor Velal, previously career military, doesn't respect the politicos.
* MilitaryMoonshiner: Morgan has a side business brewing Romulan ale, and Velal is very impressed at the quality of her product. She also mentions she had a vineyard on Virinat before the attack, and in another scene speaks hopefully of one day going back there.
* NoodleIncident: Sahuel t'Khnialmnae is apparently ex-Tal'Shiar, and was aboard the ''Aen'rhien'' when it killed hundreds of refugees in an unelaborated incident.
-->'''Sahuel:''' ''(tearfully)'' That was an accident! And I wasn't even on duty!
* NameFromAnotherSpecies: Min'tak'allan is a Ferasan who uses a Jem'Hadar name. This is explained in other material: Omek'ti'kallan declared him an honorary Jem'Hadar in the piece worffan wrote for [[http://sto-forum.perfectworld.com/showpost.php?p=17831531&postcount=16 Literary Challenge 65.3]].
* PragmaticHero[=/=]PragmaticVillainy: Velal seeks peace with the Republic not because he's seen the light, but because he no longer has the resources to continue fighting them.
* PrecisionFStrike: There's a fair amount of [[PardonMyKlingon untranslated Rihan swearing]] and [[ForeignCussWord a bit of Farsi]], but at one point Morgan tells her command crew that:
-->"... getting an armistice is critical to our national security, and that means our conduct is critical to our national security. If somebody ''fucks'' this up, this warbird will not be responsible."
* ReligiousBruiser: Omek'ti'kallan worships "Glorious Odo'Ital", a.k.a. Odo from ''Series/StarTrekDeepSpaceNine''. [[ProudWarriorRaceGuy He's a Jem'Hadar First.]] Do the math.
* ShoutOut:
** Sarsachen refers to a Republic intelligence source {{codename}}d [[Literature/JackRyan CARDINAL]].
** Omek'ti'kallan quotes the Twenty-Ninth Word of Odo'Ital as [[Webcomic/SchlockMercenary "The enemy of my enemy is my enemy’s enemy--no more, no less."]]
** One of Morgan's lines to her command crew when she briefs them:
--->"I don't care if they say [[Film/MontyPythonAndTheHolyGrail your mother was a fvai and your father smelled of eigen berries]], you will not throw the first punch."
** D'trel's rant in part 1 borrows lines from Creator/BrandonSanderson's ''Literature/TheWayOfKings'' and ''Literature/WordsOfRadiance''.
** When Morgan complains that Klingon bloodwine tastes horrible, Tovan tr'Khev tells her that "the ale here tastes like a mugato peed in battery acid." Slight tweak of a line from the ''Series/{{Castle}}'' episode "[[Recap/CastleS1E4HellHathNoFury Hell Hath No Fury]]".
* SourSupporter: {{Discussed}}. Morgan is a more traditionalist Romulan than D'trel, a Unificationist, and tells Velal that she thinks that Proconsul D'Tan is a [[WideEyedIdealist "naive idealist"]] and doesn't agree with his politics. But she follows him because whatever his faults, he's sincerely trying to help.
* SpottingTheThread: The Tal'Shiar goof up their attempts at {{False Flag Operation}}s to break up the talks.
** In the first case, [[spoiler:they use Republic IFF beacons while attacking an Imperial warbird. One of the ships they masquerade as was destroyed months earlier.]]
** In the second case, [[spoiler:they use Republic IFF beacons while attacking the talks directly. They're spotted early because Command sent out an IFF update in response to the previous attempt.]]
* StrikeMeDown[=/=]ThanatosGambit: Merik tries to provoke D'trel to kill him by ranting about how he helped rape her lover to death decades before. [[spoiler:It backfires: D'trel decides death by exploding starship is ''too merciful''. Daysnur later determines the intent was to deny intelligence to the enemy--the SelfDestructMechanism and computers had been knocked offline so he couldn't get rid of the data himself. Still disgusting.]]
* UpThroughTheRanks: The narration in part 2 mentions in passing that Jaleh Khoroushi used to be a chief petty officer (specifically a quartermaster).
* TastesLikeFeet: According to Tovan tr'Khev, the ale at the Klingon bar where he meets Morgan "tastes like a mugato peed in battery acid."
* ThemeNaming: Several of the Romulan ships are named after the {{Generation Ship}}s that took the Romulans to Romulus in ''Literature/{{Rihannsu}}: The Romulan Way''. Among them are the three leads' ships--D'trel's ''Kholhr'' (''Vengeance''), Morgan's ''Aen'rhien'' (''Bloodwing''), and Velal's ''Eyhon Eludet'eri'' (''Lost Road'')--as well as the RedShirt ships ''Delevhas'' (''Shield'') and ''Eyiv s'Rea'' (''Rea's Helm'').
* ThereAreNoCoincidences: Morgan notes that the timing of the Tal'Shiar false-flag attack against ch'R ''Maens'' is more than a little coincidental. Tovan responds:
-->"I stopped believing in coincidence after I became a cop, Morgan. My guess? Somebody sprang a leak."
* ThreateningMediator: Velal tries to leave the talks after the faked Republic attack on an Imperial ship. Jaleh's response is to fire her phaser into the air and scream at him to sit down so he'll stay put long enough for her to look at the evidence.
* TokenHuman: Jaleh Khoroushi is the only human in the entire story.
* TokenReligiousTeammate: {{Downplayed}}. The Romulan characters tend to favor the Elements, which isn't an organized religion so much as an animistic spirituality. In contrast, Omek'ti'kallan worships Odo and frequently attributes maxims to him (one of them actually belonged to ''Webcomic/SchlockMercenary''), and Jaleh Khoroushi is a [[UsefulNotes/{{Islam}} Shiite]].
* UnfriendlyFire: D'trel's former CO Ameh ir'Tanat reportedly [[ThrownOutTheAirlock spaced]] their Tal'Shiar PoliticalOfficer and sent fake reports with his gear. Admiral tr'Kererek calls this "efficient".
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