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* AerithAndBob: In a world of Pencil Pushers, Hard Hitters, Fluttershys, Rainbow Dashs, Celestias, Twilight Sparkles, Big Macs, Raritys, Bon-Bons and Flywheels, a name like "Greg" looks really alien and awkward.
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* AerithAndBob: In a world of Pencil Pushers, Hard Hitters, Fluttershys, Rainbow Dashs, Celestias, Twilight Sparkles, Big Macs, Raritys, Bon-Bons and Flywheels, a name like "Greg" looks really alien and awkward. [[JustifiedTrope It's because he was named after a griffon who saved his father's life.]]
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* GoneHorriblyWrong: Caligo Manufacturing was working on a new industrial cloud formula, one that is much more resilient and almost impossible to disperse compared to normal clouds. It works so well, the tanks can't hold it and the whole mixture becomes a fog bank. The whole story circles around how plain hard it is to eliminate it by conventional means.
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* GoneHorriblyWrong: GoneHorriblyRight: Caligo Manufacturing was working on a new industrial cloud formula, one that is much more resilient and almost impossible to disperse compared to normal clouds. It works so well, the tanks can't hold it and the whole mixture becomes a fog bank. The whole story circles around how plain hard it is to eliminate it by conventional means.
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[[http://www.fimfiction.net/story/51991/flash-fog Flash Fog]] is a completed ''WesternAnimation/MyLittlePonyFriendshipIsMagic'' fanfic by [[http://www.fimfiction.net/user/Kwakerjak Kwakerjak]].
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-->'''Bon Bon:''': Lyra, even if the humans are friendly, which they won’t be, the fog is almost at Ponyville already. There’s no way to make all those preparations you’re talking about in time, unless you seriously think that several dozen new members are going to spontaneously appear in the next few hours.
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-->'''Bon Bon:''': Lyra, even if the humans are friendly, which they won’t won't be, the fog is almost at Ponyville already. There’s There's no way to make all those preparations you’re you're talking about in time, unless you seriously think that several dozen new members are going to spontaneously appear in the next few hours.
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'''Pinkie Pie''': Hi! Is this the meeting place for SPHERE?”\\
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'''Pinkie Pie''': Hi! Is this the meeting place for SPHERE?”\\SPHERE?"\\
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--> In fact, if Discord ever shows his face around here again, it might be a better idea to put you in charge.”\\
“Okay, now you’re just being silly.”
“Okay, now you’re just being silly.”
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--> In fact, if Discord ever shows his face around here again, it might be a better idea to put you in charge.”\\
“Okay,"\\
"Okay, nowyou’re you're just being silly.”"
“Okay,
"Okay, now
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* PunctuatedForEmphasis: “Well,” Applejack drawled, “the basic idea can be summed up in four words: Kill. It. With. Fire.”
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* PunctuatedForEmphasis: “Well,” "Well," Applejack drawled, “the "the basic idea can be summed up in four words: Kill. It. With. Fire.”"
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--> “But how do I bring up any sort of topic without it coming off as awkward?” Pencil Pusher said aloud.\\
“Well, for starters, you can try not talking to yourself in public,” a nearby stallion replied sarcastically.
“Well, for starters, you can try not talking to yourself in public,” a nearby stallion replied sarcastically.
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--> “But "But how do I bring up any sort of topic without it coming off as awkward?” awkward?" Pencil Pusher said aloud.\\
“Well, "Well, for starters, you can try not talking to yourself in public,” public," a nearby stallion replied sarcastically.
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-->''Whoa, that thing’s moving pretty fast. It’s kinda like a flash flood, only with fog instead of water. I guess that would make it... what, a flash fog, then?''
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-->''Whoa, that thing’s thing's moving pretty fast. It’s It's kinda like a flash flood, only with fog instead of water. I guess that would make it... what, a flash fog, then?''
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-->'''Mayor Mare''': Elected officials can’t afford to apologize for their opinions. Not if we want to be reelected, at least. They create openings for accusations of being wishy-washy.\\
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-->'''Mayor Mare''': Elected officials can’t can't afford to apologize for their opinions. Not if we want to be reelected, at least. They create openings for accusations of being wishy-washy.\\
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'''Mayor Mare''': (''groans'') Don’t remind me.
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'''Mayor Mare''': (''groans'') Don’t Don't remind me.
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** Averted with the LoveDoceahedron. As soon as Applejack hears about it, she decides to just straight up tell Fluttershy and Twilight what's going on because 1) Rarity is basing her plans on [[ThinksLikeARomanceNovel romance novels]], which as Applejack points out are filled with unrealistic drama to entertain the reader, and 2) they can't afford to be dealing with shenanigans in the middle of a crisis.
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** Averted with the LoveDoceahedron.LoveDodecahedron. As soon as Applejack hears about it, she decides to just straight up tell Fluttershy and Twilight what's going on because 1) Rarity is basing her plans on [[ThinksLikeARomanceNovel romance novels]], which as Applejack points out are filled with unrealistic drama to entertain the reader, and 2) they can't afford to be dealing with shenanigans in the middle of a crisis.
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** Averted with the LoveDoceahedron. As soon as Applejack hears about it, she decides to just straight up tell Fluttershy and Twilight what's going on because 1) Rarity is basing her plans on [[ThinksLikeARomanceNovel romance novels]], which as Applejack points out are filled with unrealistic drama to entertain the reader, and 2) they can't afford to be dealing with shenanigans in the middle of a crisis.
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Incorrect use of trope. There's nothing impossibe about being a fog specialist in the world of Friendship is Magic.
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* AchievementsInIgnorance: [[spoiler:Because the fog certification test was pass or fail rather than having a grade, Fluttershy legitimately ''was'' the area's licenced fog expert, despite only taking the test for a tax incentive and having no weather team experience.]]
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* RubeGoldbergDevice: The Cutie Mark Crusaders' human trap, which turns out to be so complicated that Sweetie Belle realizes that the trap is useless unless a human happens to stand still long enough to get caught in it.
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* RubeGoldbergDevice: The Cutie Mark Crusaders' human trap, which turns out to be so complicated that Sweetie Belle belatedly realizes that the trap is useless unless a human happens to stand still long enough to get caught in it.it (about five minutes), which admittedly is exactly what happened to Apple Bloom and Scootaloo.
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* AchievementsInIgnorance: [[spoiler:Because the fog certification test was pass or fail rather than having a grade, Fluttershy legitimately ''was'' the area's licenced fog expert, despite only taking the test for a tax incentive.]]
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* AchievementsInIgnorance: [[spoiler:Because the fog certification test was pass or fail rather than having a grade, Fluttershy legitimately ''was'' the area's licenced fog expert, despite only taking the test for a tax incentive.incentive and having no weather team experience.]]