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* DestructiveSaviour: Discussed in Chapter 9.
-->'''Hypno-Joe:''' So, what new laws do you think we should make for our perfect world?
-->'''Gru:''' Oh, I don't know, maybe get someone to fix my door?
-->''Gru directs Hypno Joe to the open doorway that Devan tore the door off its hinges from earlier.''
-->'''Hypno-Joe:''' Devoted Devan breaks a lot of things in his entrances, I've noticed. I wish he wouldn't do that.
-->'''Gru:''' Me, too,. I mean, someone's gotta pay for the damages. Those people who think it's "cool" have been watching too many superhero movies.
-->'''Hypno-Joe:''' [''chuckles''] You're funny.
-->'''Hypno-Joe:''' So, what new laws do you think we should make for our perfect world?
-->'''Gru:''' Oh, I don't know, maybe get someone to fix my door?
-->''Gru directs Hypno Joe to the open doorway that Devan tore the door off its hinges from earlier.''
-->'''Hypno-Joe:''' Devoted Devan breaks a lot of things in his entrances, I've noticed. I wish he wouldn't do that.
-->'''Gru:''' Me, too,. I mean, someone's gotta pay for the damages. Those people who think it's "cool" have been watching too many superhero movies.
-->'''Hypno-Joe:''' [''chuckles''] You're funny.
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* GreatBigBookOfEverything: It's said that Hypno-Joe learned his hypnotic skills from the Big Book of Hypnotism, which he aquired at Villain Con.
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* GreatBigBookOfEverything: It's said that Hypno-Joe learned his hypnotic skills from the Big Book of Hypnotism, which he aquired acquired at Villain Con.
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* ImmuneToMindControl: Hypno-Joe cannot control Devan, since he's strong enough to resist hypnotic powers. AVL agents, likewise, are given mental protection as per standard protocol. [[spoiler:Ironically, that protection does not apply to the lead director.]]
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* NoSell: Hypno-Joe cannot control Devan, since he's strong enough to resist hypnotic powers. AVL agents, likewise, are given mental protection as per standard protocol. [[spoiler:Ironically, that protection does not apply to the lead director.]]
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* TracedArtwork: Most of the illustrations are traced drawings of characters from the ''Despicable Me'' franchise in various poses, both from the movie series and from various promotional material.
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* GreatBigBookOfEverything: It's said that Hypno-Joe learned his hypnotic skills from the Big Book of Hypnotism, which he aquired at Villain Con.
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* ICantLookGesture: Agnes covers her eyes as [[spoiler:Gru almost falls to his death]] in Chapter 14.
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* TheCavalryArrivesLate: Dru arrives at the end of the story to [[spoiler:wake the girls up from Hypno-Joe's spell]], only to find out that it already happened.
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As if that wasn't enough, Alex falls in love with Margo and makes it his sworn duty to win over her heart, awakening Gru's OverprotectiveDad instincts. Even worse, the infamous supervillain Hypno-Joe escapes from prison and, believing Gru's repentance is a cover too, wants to persuade him into take over the world with him--with Susan as his mindless puppet wife.
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As if that wasn't enough, Alex falls in love with Margo and makes it his sworn duty to win over her heart, awakening Gru's OverprotectiveDad instincts. Even worse, the infamous supervillain Hypno-Joe escapes from prison and, believing Gru's repentance is a cover too, wants to persuade him into take taking over the world with him--with Susan as his mindless puppet wife.
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** To [[Creator/IlluminationEntertainment Illumination's]] other movies. There are brief mentions of [[WesternAnimation/TheLorax both]] Creator/DrSeuss [[WesternAnimation/TheGrinch2018 movies]] in Chapter 4, ''Film/{{Hop}}'' in Chapter 5, and the upcoming ''Franchise/{{Shrek}}'' reboot in Chapter 18. Also, in Chapter 11, Margo wins a plush of [[WesternAnimation/TheSecretLifeOfPets2 Captain Snowball]] in a crane game, and the girls watch ''{{WesternAnimation/Sing}}'' in Chapter 15.
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** To [[Creator/IlluminationEntertainment Illumination's]] other movies. There are brief mentions of [[WesternAnimation/TheLorax both]] Creator/DrSeuss [[WesternAnimation/TheGrinch2018 movies]] in Chapter 4, ''Film/{{Hop}}'' in Chapter 5, and the upcoming ''Franchise/{{Shrek}}'' reboot in Chapter 18. Also, in Chapter 11, Margo wins a plush of [[WesternAnimation/TheSecretLifeOfPets2 Captain Snowball]] in a crane game, and the girls watch ''{{WesternAnimation/Sing}}'' in Chapter 15.
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* TranquilizerDart: Susan gets knocked out with this in Chapter 9 upon running into Hypno-Joe.
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* TranquilizerDart: TranquillizerDart: Susan gets knocked out with this in Chapter 9 upon running into Hypno-Joe.
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* VersusTitle: ''Despicable VERSUS Devoted''.
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* AffectionateNickname: Susan sometimes called Devan "Devvy".
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* ATragedyOfImpulsiveness: When the girls [[spoiler:are turned into supervillains, thanks to Hypno-Joe]], Alex sneaks into the Gru house and [[spoiler:unfreezes the block of ice Gru trapped them in to prevent them from causing trouble to see if he can make them remember who they are]]. This gets him captured.
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* CassandraTruth: No matter how many times the other characters try to convince him that Gru is no longer a supervillain, Devan remains unconvinced. He does finally realize... [[spoiler:after almost getting him killed]].
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* JerkassToOne: Devan is a well-respected hero who gets along well with just about everyone he meets, but is absolutely ruthless to Gru.
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* EvilParentsWantGoodKids: ''Formerly'' evil parents in Gru's case. The story makes it clear that as part of leaving his felonious past behind, he wants to raise his girls to be good. [[spoiler:Unfortunately for him, Hypno-Joe has other ideas.]]
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--->[[Series/TheOffice "NOOO GOD! NO GOD PLEASE NO!!!"]]
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* ThereWasADoor: Devoted Devan's first confrontation with Hypno-Joe begins with him bursting through the ceiling in his lair.
-->'''Hypno-Joe:''' There's a door here, you know.
-->'''Hypno-Joe:''' There's a door here, you know.
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* AffectionHatingKid: Edith, naturally, is grossed out by Margo and Alex's relationship.
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* BoysHaveCooties: Edith, naturally, is grossed out by Margo and Alex's relationship.
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* ObviouslyEvl: Hypno-Joe. The narration in his first scene--where he's hypnotizing Susan to fall in love with him, mind you--describes his appearance to be "looking like a cliche supervillain from a melodramatic silent movie".
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->'''Alex:''' Why didn't you punch the jerk in the face?
->'''Margo:''' My dad says I shouldn't resort to violence because it's not ladylike, or something like that.
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* FightingBackIsWrong: Chapter 6 gives us this exchange between Margo and Alex when they were talking about [[WesternAnimation/DespicableMe2 the Antonio incident]].
->'''Alex:''' Why didn't you punch the jerk in the face?
->'''Margo:''' My dad says I shouldn't resort to violence because it's not ladylike, or something like that.
->'''Alex:''' Why didn't you punch the jerk in the face?
->'''Margo:''' My dad says I shouldn't resort to violence because it's not ladylike, or something like that.
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The story was in production for many months before it was finally finished on November 10th 2019. On February 8th 2020, Kyle [[https://www.deviantart.com/manapsart/gallery/72221862/despicable-vs-devoted re-released the story on [=DeviantArt=]]], adding illustrations to each chapter, as well as a title page (pictured) and concept art of the original characters.
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The story was in production the works for many months before it was finally finished on November 10th 2019. On February 8th 2020, Kyle [[https://www.deviantart.com/manapsart/gallery/72221862/despicable-vs-devoted re-released the story on [=DeviantArt=]]], adding illustrations to each chapter, as well as a title page (pictured) and concept art of the original characters.
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* NoCelebritiesWereHarmed: Devoted Devan's face was meant to resemble that of Creator/WilliamShatner. Considering his over-the-top personality, it's not hard to see the resemblance.
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[[caption-width-right:350:Which is worse? Gru's villainous past coming back to haunt him, or his eldest daughter finding love?]]
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* StrongFamilyResemblance: Hypno-Joe has green eyes and a SinisterSchnoz, [[spoiler:just like Scarlet Overkill, whom he is related to]].
