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* SituationalSexuality: Illogically {{averted}} - at one point, a concentration camp prisoner is executed for attempting to rape a guard, and the characters agree that automatically means he's gay.
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* SituationalSexuality: Illogically {{averted}} - at one point, a concentration camp prisoner is executed for attempting to rape a guard, and the characters agree that his target being male automatically means he's gay.
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* SituationalSexuality: Illogically {{averted}} - at one point, a concentration camp prisoner is executed for attempting to rape a guard, and the characters agree that automatically means he's gay.
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* ArtisticLicenseGeography: The street names in Berlin are awfully...not German. 'Augenstrasse' means 'eye street'. According to Google Maps, it doesn't exist. In fact, one street even has an English name - Stonewall.
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* ArtisticLicenseGeography: The street names in Berlin are awfully...not German. 'Augenstrasse' means 'eye street'. According to Google Maps, it doesn't exist. In fact, one street in the fic even has an bears the English name - Stonewall.
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* AerithAndBob: The names of the Kingdom Hearts characters are completely bizarre in Nazi Germany. Or just Germany in general. It's made worse by the author giving all the characters [[GratuitousGerman inexplicably German]] surnames.
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* AerithAndBob: The names of the Kingdom Hearts characters are completely bizarre in Nazi Germany. Or just Germany in general. It's made worse by the author giving all the characters [[GratuitousGerman inexplicably German]] surnames. Axel is probably the only character whose name fits the setting, and even then his is more of a Scandinavian name than a German one.
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* ArtisticLicenseGeography: The street names in Berlin are awfully...not German. 'Augenstrasse' means 'eye street'. According to Google Maps, it doesn't exist. In fact, one street even has an English name - Stonewall.
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Useful Notes/ pages are not tropes
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* HowDoIUsedTense: This fic has a lot of grammar mistakes. This line in particular stands out:
-->“Some people came in here and demanded that they saw the Führer. When Kairi said no, they opened fire.” Saix began.
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*** Speaking of Himmler, the author claimed that it made sense for Axel to be Himmler's son because the latter had "so many illegitimate children". Himmler only had a set of twins with no records of any other illegitimate children outside of those two.
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* KnowNothingKnowItAll: The author repeatedly claimed to be an expert on the subject of WW2, Nazi Germany. Despite this, she got a ''lot'' of stuff wrong, and did not even know if women were allowed into the SS. See ArtisticLicenseHistory, AnachronismStew, ArtisticLicenseGeography, and GratuitousGerman.
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* KnowNothingKnowItAll: The author repeatedly claimed to be an expert on the subject of WW2, [=WW2=], Nazi Germany. Despite this, she got a ''lot'' of stuff wrong, and did not even know if women were allowed into the SS. See ArtisticLicenseHistory, AnachronismStew, ArtisticLicenseGeography, and GratuitousGerman.
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* AdaptationalWimp: UsefulNotes/AdolfHitler is basically presented as [[WesternAnimation/TheSimpsons Mr. Burns]]. And his speeches are no longer the rousing, exciting, theatrical affairs they were in RealLife. Instead, they're demoted to boring.
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* AdaptationalWimp: UsefulNotes/AdolfHitler is basically presented as [[WesternAnimation/TheSimpsons Mr. Burns]]. And his speeches are no longer the rousing, exciting, theatrical affairs they were in RealLife. Instead, they're demoted to boring.
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* PoliticallyCorrectHistory: Roxas and Axel hold ''amazingly'' modern views on Hitler, the Nazis, and the Holocaust.
** According to this fic, the ''Holocaust'' happened "because people don't understand".
** According to this fic, the ''Holocaust'' happened "because people don't understand".
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** According to this fic, the ''Holocaust'' happened "because people don't understand".
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* KnowNothingKnowItAll: The author repeatedly claimed to be an expert on the subject of WW2, Nazi Germany. Despite this, she got a ''lot'' of stuff wrong, and did not even know if women were allowed into the SS. See ArtisticLicenseHistory, AnachronismStew, ArtisticLicenseGeography, and GratuitousGerman.
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* WhatHappenedToTheMouse: Where did Larxene go after she complained about their being too many people to experiment on?
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* WhatHappenedToTheMouse: Where did Larxene go after she complained about their there being too many people to experiment on?
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Not really heroism, to be honest.
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* AdaptationalHeroism: AdaptationalWimp: UsefulNotes/AdolfHitler is basically presented as [[WesternAnimation/TheSimpsons Mr. Burns]]. And his speeches are no longer the rousing, exciting, theatrical affairs they were in RealLife. Instead, they're demoted to boring.
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* AnachronismStew: Despite taking place in the 1930s/40s, the fic asserts that Roxas watched Christmas specials during Christmas. The first Christmas special didn't air on television until late in the 1950s.
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A notorious little fic, ''If I Was Your Nazi'' takes Organization XIII from ''Franchise/KingdomHearts'' and rudely shoves them into the Holocaust... ''without'' giving up their DracoInLeatherPants status. Roxas and Axel run around being horrified by the Holocaust yet never doing anything about it, while other characters from the game pop in and out at seemingly random intervals to do nothing of much importance. In fact, WWII Germany feels a ''lot'' like an average American high school...Horribly offensive to just about everyone who had any part in the Second World War, combined with absolutely awful {{beige prose}} and characters so {{out of character}} it's unbelievable, it's worth a read if you can make it through the first three chapters without throwing something at the screen.
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A notorious little fic, ''If I Was Your Nazi'' takes Organization XIII from ''Franchise/KingdomHearts'' and rudely shoves them into the Holocaust... ''without'' giving up their DracoInLeatherPants status. Roxas and Axel run around being horrified by the Holocaust yet never doing anything about it, while other characters from the game pop in and out at seemingly random intervals to do nothing of much importance. In fact, WWII Germany feels a ''lot'' like an average American high school...Horribly offensive to just about everyone who had any part in the Second World War, combined with absolutely awful {{beige prose}} and characters so {{out of character}} it's unbelievable, it's worth a read if you can make it through the first three chapters without throwing something at the screen.
almost has to be seen to be believed.
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After about fourteen chapters, the author abandoned the project, and, under much scorn, finally pulled it from Fanfiction.net. The ''Snakes on a Sora'' Livejournal still holds [[http://snakesonasora.livejournal.com/tag/if%20i%20was%20your%20nazi a sporking of it]], however, and the WebVideo/TheFanFictionCritic did a hilarious review.
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After about fourteen chapters, the author abandoned the project, and, under much scorn, finally pulled it from Fanfiction.net. The Despite this, the ''Snakes on a Sora'' Livejournal still holds [[http://snakesonasora.livejournal.com/tag/if%20i%20was%20your%20nazi a an abridged sporking of it]], however, Project A.F.T.E.R. has [[http://www.projectafterforums.com/index.php?showtopic=2171 an unabridged sporking of it]], and the WebVideo/TheFanFictionCritic did a hilarious review.
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** During the Second World War, the First World War was called the 'Great War', not WW1.
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* TheThemeParkVersion: The story takes place in the theme park versions of WorldWarTwo and Nazi Germany. And sometimes, it's so inaccurate that even the ''theme park'' wouldn't let it in.
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After about fourteen chapters, the author abandoned the project, and, under much scorn, finally pulled it from Fanfiction.net. The ''Snakes on a Sora'' Livejournal still holds [[http://snakesonasora.livejournal.com/tag/if%20i%20was%20your%20nazi a sporking of it]], however, and the {{The Fanfiction Critic}} did a hilarious review.
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After about fourteen chapters, the author abandoned the project, and, under much scorn, finally pulled it from Fanfiction.net. The ''Snakes on a Sora'' Livejournal still holds [[http://snakesonasora.livejournal.com/tag/if%20i%20was%20your%20nazi a sporking of it]], however, and the {{The Fanfiction Critic}} WebVideo/TheFanFictionCritic did a hilarious review.
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* FelonyMisdemeanor: Himmler attempting to matchmake Rikku and Axel is treated as some heinous crime. Especially ridiculous because Himmler, being ''Himmler'', offered ''plenty'' of horrendous shit if the author wanted to villainize him.
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* WhatHappenedToTheMouse: Where did Larxene go after she complained about the lack of people to experiment on?
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** In chapter three, Axel claimed that Himmler's sister helped raise him. Himmler didn't have any sisters.
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** In chapter three, Axel claimed that Himmler's sister helped raise him. Himmler did have two brothers, but he didn't have any sisters.sisters.
** In the last chapter, Roxas is upset with all of the {{Christmas Special}}s that are on TV. There were no Christmas specials in the 1940s and there wouldn't be any until the late fifties to early sixties. (Ironically, one of the earliest ones is [[http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/From_All_of_Us_to_All_of_You a Disney one]].)
** In the last chapter, Roxas is upset with all of the {{Christmas Special}}s that are on TV. There were no Christmas specials in the 1940s and there wouldn't be any until the late fifties to early sixties. (Ironically, one of the earliest ones is [[http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/From_All_of_Us_to_All_of_You a Disney one]].)
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** In chapter three, Axel claimed that Himmler's sister helped raise him. Himmler didn't have any sisters.
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* NoBisexuals: A classic example; Axel mentions having had crushes on some girls in grade school. Immediately afterward, he states that being in love with another boy automatically makes him gay. The fact that the author claims to be bisexual isn't helping matters.
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...Well, except that their part-time job is in the SS. Did we forget to mention this is WorldWarII Germany and the Holocaust is in full swing?
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* HandWave: How did Roxas make it into the SS despite the fact that he is Jewish? Hitler overlooked his background just because he's the "ideal German". How can Axel be Himmler's son? Himmler has "so many illegitimate children", as the author put it, and he's just one of them.
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* {{Hypocrite}}: After removing the fic, the author made a note on her account accusing everyone who criticized her of "being too sensitive" while simultaneously whining about all the criticism she's getting.
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* WhatHappenedToTheMouse: Where did Larxene go after she complained about the lack of people to experiment on?
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