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** Trixie Lulamoon willingly worked for Nightmare Moon in contrast to the Shadowbolts who were brainwashed and crazy and she was the one who killed Spike in the first place. [[spoiler: Subverted however, after Nightmare Moon's defeat]].
** While Prince Blueblood was no peach in the original series, he's even worse here. [[spoiler: He was a mole for Nightmare Moon and was more than willing to sell out his own Family and kingdom if it meant that he would get to have the throne]].
** While Prince Blueblood was no peach in the original series, he's even worse here. [[spoiler: He was a mole for Nightmare Moon and was more than willing to sell out his own Family and kingdom if it meant that he would get to have the throne]].
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** Trixie Lulamoon willingly worked for Nightmare Moon in contrast to the Shadowbolts who were brainwashed and crazy and she was the one who killed Spike in the first place. [[spoiler: Subverted [[spoiler:Subverted however, after Nightmare Moon's defeat]].
** While Prince Blueblood was no peach in the original series, he's even worse here.[[spoiler: He [[spoiler:He was a mole for Nightmare Moon and was more than willing to sell out his own Family and kingdom if it meant that he would get to have the throne]].
** While Prince Blueblood was no peach in the original series, he's even worse here.
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* AssholeVictim: Grogar. [[spoiler:Grogar.]] See KickTheSonofABitch KickTheSonOfABitch for more details.
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* EvilPowerVacuum: Even though our heroes have finally taken down the Legion of Doom for good, in the epilogue Bahamut warns Spike that, sooner or later, other dark forces will take their place. And it ends with Tempest Shadow informing the Storm King of Tirek's demise.
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* EvilPowerVacuum: Even [[spoiler:Even though our heroes have finally taken down the Legion of Doom for good, in the epilogue Bahamut warns Spike that, sooner or later, other dark forces will take their place. And it ends with Tempest Shadow informing the Storm King of Tirek's demise.]]
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* HoistByHisOwnPetard: Grogar turned Spike into a giant berserker in an attempt to take control of him, to say that it backfired on the old goat would be an understatement.
* KickTheSonOfABitch: A kaiju-sized, rage-induced Spike grabs Grogar and squeezed the life out of the necromancer until he popped, leaving nothing but blood on Spike's claw. As gruesome as his death was however, bear in mind that he was a smug snake who killed Stone's parents while using some very underhanded tactics, raised said father as an undead pawn to attack innocent villages and making him aware of what he's doing but can't do anything about it, and tried to make Spike feel despair in an insane attempt to take control of him so he could use the power of the Dragon King to overthrow Tirek, which causes Spike to turn into a giant berserker in the first place. Needless to say, his death was very deserving.
* KickTheSonOfABitch: A kaiju-sized, rage-induced Spike grabs Grogar and squeezed the life out of the necromancer until he popped, leaving nothing but blood on Spike's claw. As gruesome as his death was however, bear in mind that he was a smug snake who killed Stone's parents while using some very underhanded tactics, raised said father as an undead pawn to attack innocent villages and making him aware of what he's doing but can't do anything about it, and tried to make Spike feel despair in an insane attempt to take control of him so he could use the power of the Dragon King to overthrow Tirek, which causes Spike to turn into a giant berserker in the first place. Needless to say, his death was very deserving.
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* HoistByHisOwnPetard: Grogar turned [[spoiler:turned Spike into a giant berserker in an attempt to take control of him, him,]] to say that it backfired on the old goat would be an understatement.
* KickTheSonOfABitch:A [[spoiler:A kaiju-sized, rage-induced Spike grabs Grogar and squeezed the life out of the necromancer until he popped, leaving nothing but blood on Spike's claw. As gruesome as his death was however, bear in mind that he he: was a smug snake SmugSnake who killed Stone's parents while using some very underhanded tactics, tactics; raised said father as an undead pawn to attack innocent villages and making him aware of what he's doing but can't unable to do anything about it, it; and tried to make Spike feel despair in an insane attempt to take control of him so he could use the power of the Dragon King to overthrow Tirek, which causes Spike to turn into a giant berserker in the first place. Needless to say, his death was very deserving.]]
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* TheEndOrIsIt: Spike and the girls have finally defeated Tirek, The last member of Legion of Doom, for good and peace is restored. However, in the last chapter Bahamut warns Spike that there are other dark forces out there and the last shot we see is the Storm King planning his own invasion of Equestria upon hearing Tirek's death.
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* TheEndOrIsIt: Spike [[spoiler:Spike and the girls have finally defeated Tirek, The the last member of Legion of Doom, LegionOfDoom, for good and peace is restored. However, in the last chapter Bahamut warns Spike that there are other dark forces out there and the last shot we see is the Storm King planning his own invasion of Equestria upon hearing Tirek's death.]]
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* KicktheSonofaBitch: A kaiju-sized, rage-induced Spike grabs Grogar and squeezed the life out of the necromancer until he popped, leaving nothing but blood on Spike's claw. As gruesome as his death was however, bear in mind that he was a smug snake who killed Stone's parents while using some very underhanded tactics, raised said father as an undead pawn to attack innocent villages and making him aware of what he's doing but can't do anything about it, and tried to make Spike feel despair in an insane attempt to take control of him so he could use the power of the Dragon King to overthrow Tirek, which causes Spike to turn into a giant berserker in the first place. Needless to say, his death was very deserving.
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* KicktheSonofaBitch: KickTheSonOfABitch: A kaiju-sized, rage-induced Spike grabs Grogar and squeezed the life out of the necromancer until he popped, leaving nothing but blood on Spike's claw. As gruesome as his death was however, bear in mind that he was a smug snake who killed Stone's parents while using some very underhanded tactics, raised said father as an undead pawn to attack innocent villages and making him aware of what he's doing but can't do anything about it, and tried to make Spike feel despair in an insane attempt to take control of him so he could use the power of the Dragon King to overthrow Tirek, which causes Spike to turn into a giant berserker in the first place. Needless to say, his death was very deserving.
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** Trixie Lulamoon willingly worked for Nightmare Moon in contrast to the Shadowbolts who were brainwashed and crazy and she was the one who killed Spike in the first place. [[spoiler: Subverted however, after Nightmare Moon's defeat]].
** While Prince Blueblood was no peach in the original series, he's even worse here. [[spoiler: He was a mole for Nightmare Moon and was more than willing to sell out his own Family and kingdom if it meant that he would get to have the throne]].
** Trixie Lulamoon willingly worked for Nightmare Moon in contrast to the Shadowbolts who were brainwashed and crazy and she was the one who killed Spike in the first place. [[spoiler: Subverted however, after Nightmare Moon's defeat]].
** While Prince Blueblood was no peach in the original series, he's even worse here. [[spoiler: He was a mole for Nightmare Moon and was more than willing to sell out his own Family and kingdom if it meant that he would get to have the throne]].
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* ArcVillain: The villains for the original fic are mostly comprise of members from the Legion of Doom:
** Chapters 1 to 17 has Nightmare and her codragons, Trixie and Descent.
** 19 to 20 has a lamia named Camille.
** 21 to 27 has Queen Chrysalis with a brainwashed Sunset Shimmer serving as her heavy.
** 31 to 33 has [[spoiler:Nightmare Rarity]].
** 34 to 46 has King Sombra.
** 47 and onward has Lord Tirek and his codragons, Grogar and Katrina.
** So far in Harem Legion, only the Storm King and his commander, Tempest Shadow has appeared. But it is heavily implied that there are other villains lying and waiting.
** Chapters 1 to 17 has Nightmare and her codragons, Trixie and Descent.
** 19 to 20 has a lamia named Camille.
** 21 to 27 has Queen Chrysalis with a brainwashed Sunset Shimmer serving as her heavy.
** 31 to 33 has [[spoiler:Nightmare Rarity]].
** 34 to 46 has King Sombra.
** 47 and onward has Lord Tirek and his codragons, Grogar and Katrina.
** So far in Harem Legion, only the Storm King and his commander, Tempest Shadow has appeared. But it is heavily implied that there are other villains lying and waiting.
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* KicktheSonofaBitch: A kaiju-sized, rage-induced Spike grabs Grogar and squeezed the life out of the necromancer until he popped, leaving nothing but blood on Spike's claw. As gruesome as his death was however, bear in mind that he was a smug snake who killed Stone's parents while using some very underhanded tactics, raised said father as an undead pawn to attack innocent villages and making him aware of what he's doing but can't do anything about it, and tried to make Spike feel despair in an insane attempt to take control of him so he could use the power of the Dragon King to overthrow Tirek, which causes Spike to turn into a giant berserker in the first place. Needless to say, his death was very deserving.
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* CanonCharacterAllAlong: [[spoiler:Descent is actually a BrainwashedAndCrazy Flash Sentry.]]
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* CanonCharacterAllAlong: [[spoiler:Descent Descent is actually a [[spoiler:a BrainwashedAndCrazy Flash Sentry.]]
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* DirtyCoward: Nightmare Moon's mole mole, [[spoiler:Prince Blueblood]]. When the final battle against Nightmare Moon begins Moon's forces begin a battle this guy ends up hiding under a table. And [[spoiler:And when the heroes win, successfully purify Nightmare Moon, he tries to run away before anybody notices.away.]]
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* VillainExitStageLeft: A usual occurrence.
** Subverted with [[spoiler:Prince Blueblood]] he tries to escape after [[spoiler:Nightmare Moon's defeat]] but Spike catches him trying to sneak off.
** Subverted with [[spoiler:Prince Blueblood]] he tries to escape after [[spoiler:Nightmare Moon's defeat]] but Spike catches him trying to sneak off.
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* TheNameIsBondJamesBond: How Sunset Shimmer first introduces herself to Spike.
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* AbhorrentAdmirer: Any time Snips and Snails flirt with a girl they end up creeping her out.
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* NotWhatItLooksLike: When Stone Edge is first introduced he is found hiding in Spike's attic by Twilight and Spike and is subsequently attacked by them. Once he is given a chance to explain he tells them that he is Spike's mentor and admits that he DidntThinkThisThrough.
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* MagicPants: Spike lampshades how turning into a dragon somehow does not ruin his clothes, despite the fact he grows a tail every time he transforms.
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** Spike lampshades how turning into a dragon somehow does not ruin his clothes, despite the fact he grows a tail every time hetransforms.transforms.
** Averted in the fight with the lamia. Spike's clothes do not shrink with him when he's turned back into a child. Nor do they grow with him when he gets his adolescent aura back.
** Spike lampshades how turning into a dragon somehow does not ruin his clothes, despite the fact he grows a tail every time he
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* LaserGuidedAmnesia:
** Inflicted by Twilight upon Snips and Snails to ensure that they do not remember Spike mentioning Trixie.
** Inflicted by Nightmare Moon upon [[spoiler:Princess Luna]] in order to protect the identities of the LegionOfDoom.
** Inflicted by Twilight upon Snips and Snails to ensure that they do not remember Spike mentioning Trixie.
** Inflicted by Nightmare Moon upon [[spoiler:Princess Luna]] in order to protect the identities of the LegionOfDoom.
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* EasilyForgiven:
** After the defeat of Nightmare Moon [[spoiler:Trixie]] is sentenced with community service and [[spoiler:granted a role as Princess Luna's apprentice]] despite their admitted willingness in the EvilPlan and [[spoiler:murdering Spike at the beginning of the story.]]
** This is justified for [[spoiler:the Shadowbolts]] because they were BrainwashedAndCrazy.
** As a contrast with the above two, this is averted with [[spoiler:Prince Blueblood.]] Their role in Nightmare Moon's plan is given a full criminal punishment.
** After the defeat of Nightmare Moon [[spoiler:Trixie]] is sentenced with community service and [[spoiler:granted a role as Princess Luna's apprentice]] despite their admitted willingness in the EvilPlan and [[spoiler:murdering Spike at the beginning of the story.]]
** This is justified for [[spoiler:the Shadowbolts]] because they were BrainwashedAndCrazy.
** As a contrast with the above two, this is averted with [[spoiler:Prince Blueblood.]] Their role in Nightmare Moon's plan is given a full criminal punishment.
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* FantasticRacism: Spike's first two trips to Equestria leave him feeling uncomfortable as a dragon among ponies. Prince Blueblood being openly racist doesn't help. Fortunately, he does end up proving himself to Equestria [[spoiler:by helping to defeat Nightmare Moon]].
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* FantasticRacism: Spike's first two trips to Equestria leave leaves him feeling uncomfortable as a dragon among ponies. Prince Blueblood being openly racist doesn't help. Fortunately, he does end up proving himself to Equestria [[spoiler:by helping to defeat Nightmare Moon]].
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* LoveInterestTraitor:
** Trixie Lulamoon. She is the girl who takes Spike on his first date and murders him at the beginning of the story.
** The Dazzlings. They seduce and brainwash Spike under Tirek's orders. [[spoiler:But they end up having a [[HeelFaceTurn change of heart.]]]]
* MagicPants: Spike lampshades how turning into a dragon somehow does not ruin hisclothes clothes, despite the fact he grows a tail every time he transforms.
** Trixie Lulamoon. She is the girl who takes Spike on his first date and murders him at the beginning of the story.
** The Dazzlings. They seduce and brainwash Spike under Tirek's orders. [[spoiler:But they end up having a [[HeelFaceTurn change of heart.]]]]
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* DirtyCoward: Nightmare Moon's mole [[spoiler:Prince Blueblood]]. When the final battle against Nightmare Moon begins this guy ends up hiding under a table. And when the heroes win, he tries to run away before anybody notices.
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* TheMole: Nightmare Moon is revealed to have one within Canterlot. [[spoiler:It's Prince Blueblood.]]
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* SpiritAdvisor: As Twilight mentions, the soul of the Dragon King Bahamut is contained within the Fire Ruby that healed Spike. Spike finds out later that Bahamut can talk to him, so Bahamut ends up as his mentor.
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* BigDamnHeroes: It's a pretty regular occurrence in this story for backup to arrive at opportune times.
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* HoistbyHisOwnPetard: Grogar turned Spike into a giant berserker in an attempt to take control of him, to say that it backfired on the old goat would be an understatement.
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* DidntThinkThisThrough: The Storm King honestly thought he could waltz into Canterlot and defeat the princesses and the other delegates. Cue one curb-stomping battle later...
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* CurbStompBattle: While Tempest and the Storm King putted put up a decent fight with Spike and Twilight, the rest of their troops...weren't as lucky as they got burnt, poisoned, hypnotized, etc.
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* TheEnd...OrIsIt?: Spike and the girls have finally defeated Tirek, The last member of Legion of Doom, for good and peace is restored. However, in the last chapter Bahamut warns Spike that there are other dark forces out there and the last shot we see is the Storm King planning his own invasion of Equestria upon hearing Tirek's death.
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* TheEnd...OrIsIt?: TheEndOrIsIt: Spike and the girls have finally defeated Tirek, The last member of Legion of Doom, for good and peace is restored. However, in the last chapter Bahamut warns Spike that there are other dark forces out there and the last shot we see is the Storm King planning his own invasion of Equestria upon hearing Tirek's death.
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* ShoutOut: The chapter "Dragon Breath" is a reference to the WesternAnimation/AmericanDragonJakeLong episode of the [[Recap/AmericanDragonJakeLongS01E02DragonBreath same name.]]
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* YouJustToldMe: During Rarity's OriginsEpisode she uses this to trick Spike into confessing his attraction to Twilight.
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* VitriolicBestBuds: Spike, Snips and Snails are this to each other. They regularly tease each other and as Spike gets more attention from women the other two grow increasingly jealous. Regardless, they consider each other to be the best of friends.
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* BrainwashedAndCrazy: A fair number of the main villains and MonstersOfTheWeek are this.
* CanonCharacterAllAlong: [[spoiler:Descent is actually a BrainwashedAndCrazy Flash Sentry.]]
* CanonCharacterAllAlong: [[spoiler:Descent is actually a BrainwashedAndCrazy Flash Sentry.]]
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