Trope Description Improvement Drive

I for one would encourage you to do that. It's the sort of description we have way too much of. Takes forever to get to the point, has one of those "So you've got a Planet of Hats and..." setups that are almost never clear, concise, OR witty, etc.

Jet-a-Reeno!

When there's space in the trs, I'll make a thread about it. This is one of those cases where the description is unsalvageable.

Just post a draft here. You will be waiting months for a TRS thread and well that is what this thread is for anyway.

Sparkling and glittering! Jan-Ken-Pon!

I rewrote the description of Tag-Along Actor when I realized it duplicated my YKTTW, but haven't gotten much of a response there. Then I realized this thread existed, so I thought it would be good to bring it up here. The expanded description is at Sandbox.Tag Along Actor.

edited 3rd Oct '11 5:41:27 PM by AmyJade

Like it.

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Leaning on the Fourth Wall.... the trope is written as an example and I really cant tell heads or tails of it.

I cant even tell if this is an example or not.... (or this◊)

edited 5th Oct '11 12:28:52 AM by Raso

Sparkling and glittering! Jan-Ken-Pon!

It is both Painting the Fourth Wall*

and Breaking the Fourth Wall, but not Leaning on the Fourth Wall. Leaning on the Fourth Wall is like a fake-out—it sounds like it should shatter the fourth wall, but it actually makes sense in the in-universe context. The scene gets a double meaning for the audience as if they had broken the fourth wall, but the fourth wall remains intact. Fourth Wall Psych is closely related.

Speaking of which, Speech Bubbles is a complete mess.

edited 5th Oct '11 12:14:22 AM by troacctid

Rhymes with "Protracted."

Oh... seriously both of those need to be thrown out and started from scratch.

Sparkling and glittering! Jan-Ken-Pon!

Freud Was Right

Another case where a trope description does everything but describe the trope (If it even is a trope)

Since I've not gotten any negative comments re: Tag-Along Actor, I've gone ahead and transplanted the sandboxed version to the main trope page.

Took a crack at Freud Was Right. Deleted the long meandering paragraph, bolded the "everything is about sex" line and deleted most of the Freud tangent.

Sandboxed Speech Bubbles, mostly by copying over the useful bits from the primary entry. Suggest copying the other one over to SelfDemonstrating.Speech Bubbles or simply deleting it. Approval?

edited 5th Oct '11 10:45:02 PM by Deboss

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^ That looks good. Suggest that the Self-Demonstrating version should be altered somehow to look more like speech bubbles rather than just text in different colors, if it's going to be kept.

Hm, I can start doing it right now.

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Check SelfDemonstrating.Speech Bubbles. I think it would work better as an image, but I'm stuck with what I got.

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Freud Was Right reads better but there's still no clear definition and unless there's was a change in it's definition after it's launch in the ykttw it's still a subtrope of Everyone Is Jesus in Purgatory, which is YMMV.

I'm not sure what it really is. It could just be a YMMV, but I thought it was something similar to Lampshaded Double Entendre.

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Beauty Equals Goodness

simple concept, unnecessarily long description. Seriously WTF happened to that description?

edited 9th Oct '11 1:20:55 PM by captainpat

I took a chainsaw in the Sandbox.Beauty Equals Goodness. It's not letting me save on the main page, so I just told a mod.

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Beauty Equals Goodness successfully chainsawed.

Losing the Team Spirit needs some help, I'll take a glance once I'm done here.

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Also, Sadist Teacher.

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I took a look at Sadist Teacher. Could maybe still use a few tweaks, but I fixed it up a bit and cut down the length.

"In the land of the insecure, the one-balled man is king." - Haven

Definite improvement.

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I think Ascend to a Higher Plane of Existence needs to be rewritten to take out the Put on a Bus implications, since that's how most people are using it—to talk about people ascending, whether it means they leave the story or not. That might be outside this thread's jurisdiction, though. Should I open a TRS?

Well, the trope has nothing to do with being Put on a Bus and is as you say, but the two can sometimes be used in conjunction. I don't think it merits a whole thread of its own. I'd just make the edits if I were you.

edited 12th Oct '11 11:01:56 PM by BooleanEarth

"In the land of the insecure, the one-balled man is king." - Haven

I made those edits.

Goal: Clear, Concise and Witty